Monday evening, June 14, Greenwich Hospital
Jake
“How the hell…”
Al Greenbeck paces beside the conference table, looking very much like a caged animal. His gray eyes roam the sterile room, moving from floor, to wall, to door, back to floor again. Looking anywhere but in my direction.
“I don’t… I just don’t understand how this could have happened!”
An analytical mind, struggling to come to terms with the impossible.
Jean Clark should be alive right now, showing off her wrinkle-free forehead to her friends.
Instead, she’s been dead for just over seven hours, her body cooling three floors below us in the Greenwich Hospital morgue. Over the next few days, her death, already labeled suspicious, will be investigated more closely than the wreckage of a crashed commercial airliner. Toxicologists will test her blood for every poison known to man. Forensic pathologists will scrutinize the strips of her procerus and corrugator muscles, down to the cellular level. Every organ in her body will be weighed and measured, then thin-sliced for microscopic analysis.
The full investigation might take months to complete, but if there’s a cause of death to be found, then someone will find it. And then…
Someone will be blamed.
Greenbeck finally brings himself to look at me. “How did your meeting with the husband go?”
“As expected.” I blink hard, picturing the hellish expression on Roland Clark’s face when I met him an hour ago. It’s the kind of look that Jack Nicholson flashed his wife in ‘The Shining,’ right before he came after her with the axe.
“So he’s going to come after us?”
“No doubt.” I shrug, surprised by my own indifference. Somehow, a malpractice suit seems so banal given the events of the past few hours. “He pretty much called me a murderer.”
Greenbeck contemplates this for a moment before shaking his head. “No… the man’s a hotshot ambulance chaser, so he knows where the real money is. Even if he takes a shotgun approach, he won’t waste much time on you. If he’s smart, he’ll go straight to the top. He’ll go after Pulsar.”
“You’re probably right,” I say, noticing how “us” just became “you.”
Distancing himself already.
“So you think it was the Replacidin?”
Greenbeck shoots me a withering look. “Impossible! The drug has a flawless safety record. More likely than not, your patient had a cardiac event. Either that or anaphylaxis.”
“But her symptoms were –”
“Inconclusive. I read you report, Jake. All you described was a train wreck. No way of knowing yet why it happened. The only thing that’s clear to me…” His eyes lock with mine, narrowing into slits. “Is that you should have never treated her in the first place.”
The words hit me like a sucker punch. I’d expect this kind of reaction from Nina, but from Al?
“How could you say that? You and Nina recruited Mrs. Clark into the study,” I remind him through gritted teeth. “I did nothing wrong.”
“Yes…” Greenbeck presses his lips into a grim line, looking past me toward the door. “Well I suppose that’s going to be the purpose of this investigation.”
His hearing must be better than mine, because it takes me another few seconds to pick up the muffled sound of voices approaching.
“Al! So good to see you! If only it were under better circumstances.”
The effusive greeting comes from a petite, mature woman with a platinum-blonde bob and aggressively phony smile. She greets Greenbeck with quick air kisses to each cheek before turning to me. “And this must be Doctor Goodwin.”
We exchange a limp handshake as I read her Greenwich Hospital ID tag, which identifies her as “Barbara Arnsworth, Public Relations Liaison.” Impeccably dressed in a conservative tweed pencil skirt and blouse, she would fit right in down the road at the Greenwich Country Club. Four men and a woman trail behind her, all dressed in business attire.
“So,” Greenbeck motions to the entourage. “Looks like everyone’s here.”
“We’re still waiting for Doctor Roberts.” Arnsworth explains. “She’s en route from Farmington.”
“Roberts?” Greenbeck raises an eyebrow. “Why is the CME getting involved here?”
One of the suits – a short, heavy-set man with a receding hairline and beady, hostile eyes – steps forward to answer the question. “Because my client asked her to. Chief Medical Examiner Roberts will be personally leading the investigation into Jean Clark’s tragic death.”
Arnsworth bristles at the interruption. “Doctors Greenbeck, Goodwin,” she says, her nose crinkling with obvious distaste. “This is Charles Schlager. He’s an attorney representing Roland Clark – the husband of the deceased. He asked to be present at this meeting.”
“Of course,” Greenbeck says agreeably, shaking the man’s hand even as he looks right past him. “We’re glad to have you here, Mr. Schlager. So, Barbara… shall we finish the introductions?”
Taking her cue, Arnsworth runs through the names and titles of the remaining four faces gathered around us. To my left stand Greenwich PD Detectives Doug Popov and Sean Mackey, arms crossed, prominently displayed badges clipped to their belts. Right behind them are Bridget Allen and Kyle Fulsom – a pair of Barbie and Ken look-alikes who represent Pulsar Nanotechnologies. Since Pulsar’s headquarters are in Reston, Virginia, I can only assume they were airlifted here via corporate jet or helicopter, but neither one shows any outward sign of rushed travel. Like Arnsworth, they have a freshly pressed, polished look that screams 'public relations.'
We take our seats around the conference table, and for the next five minutes, I scroll through my iPhone menu, pretending to concentrate on the screen as I listen to the conversations buzzing around me. Detectives Popov and Mackey are going off on last night’s Yankees game (blown save in the ninth) and the team’s slower than usual start. I tune them out, trying to pick up snippets of the hushed conversation going on between Greenbeck, Arnsworth and the Pulsar reps.
I’m not the only one who’s listening. Clark’s lawyer has one ear pressed to his cell, but I can tell from his hungry expression that he’s taking in every word – words like “accident,” “anaphylaxis,” and “one in a million.”
They’re the kind of defensive words that would make even a novice ambulance chaser salivate.
The Connecticut State Chief Medical Examiner doesn’t keep us waiting long. After another set of introductions, Doctor Alice Roberts takes her place at the head of the conference table, shadowed by her administrative assistant – a young woman with doe-like eyes and an obvious admiration for her boss.
All eyes are on the CME as she settles into her seat. Medical Examiners are supposed to be shy, skittish personalities who prefer dealing with the dead rather than the living, but Roberts clearly shatters this stereotype. Looking at her now, I see an elegant, middle-aged African American woman with an almost regal air about her. Every detail, from her impeccably tailored gray pants suit to her tall stature, handsome facial features, flawless skin and silver-streaked hair commands respect.
As Arnsworth repeats the introductions, Roberts calmly surveys the faces around her – the captain at the helm of her new ship.
“Thank you all for gathering on such short notice,” she announces, looking right at me. “I don’t plan on keeping you for long this evening. We’re here mainly to establish a working relationship.”
“Yeah, well time’s not an issue,” Clark’s lawyer interrupts gruffly. “We’ll stay here as long as it takes.”
Roberts gives him a tight-lipped smile. “Perhaps time is irrelevant to you, Mr. Schlager, but I wouldn’t speak for the other people in this room.”
“Yeah,” Detective Popov chimes in. “We don’t bill by the hour.”
That earns enough chuckles to make Schlager’s face flush.
“Besides,” Roberts continues. “Let me be clear from the start: This investigation will take as long as it needs to take. I don’t work on a deadline, and we’re certainly not going to reach any conclusions today. So…” She turns to her assistant. “Jenna, shall we start recording?”
The assistant cues her boss by announcing the case number, date, time, and names and titles of everyone present.
Roberts takes a long sip of coffee before beginning: “The Office of the Chief Medical Examiner of the State of Connecticut has been called in to investigate the sudden, unexpected death of Jean Clark, Caucasian female, age fifty-nine. Doctor Goodwin?”
My heart leaps at the sudden mention of my name.
“I’ve reviewed your incident report. Correct me if I’m wrong, but your patient’s death occurred this morning at approximately ten a.m. during an experimental, office-based therapeutic procedure.”
“That’s right,” I answer hoarsely.
“And I see that no general anesthesia or IV sedation was used.” She glances up from her notes for confirmation. “What about local anesthesia?”
“Only a small amount of topical EMLA cream,” I say.
“And this procedure was cosmetic in nature, involving the injection of an experimental drug called Replacidin?”
“Yes. Mrs. Clark was enrolled in an ongoing, multi-center clinical trial called the Replacidin Efficacy and Safety Trial, or REST for short.”
Across the table, Pulsar Ken and Barbie both twitch at the mention of their drug. Pulsar Ken reaches for a thick binder, half-raising his hand for attention.
“Yes, Mr. Fulsom?”
“As requested, I have copies of the REST study protocol, drug specifications and safety data here for you to review,” he announces eagerly. “And please let me take this opportunity to say that Pulsar Nanotechnologies is deeply saddened by Mrs. Clark’s tragic death. We would like to offer our heart-felt condolences to her family.” Here, Fulsom attempts to make eye contact with Schlager, but all he gets is a contemptuous smirk.
“This is a traumatic day for all of us,” the Pulsar rep continues earnestly, turning back to Roberts. “Over ten years of clinical investigation and three thousand plus Replacidin treatments, this is the first incident of its kind. Of course, it goes without saying that you’ll have our full and eager cooperation.”
“That means open access to anything you need,” Pulsar Barbie chimes in. “24-7.”
Roberts gives her a nod, looking thoroughly unimpressed. “That’s good to know. I’ll certainly be taking you up on that offer, but for now...”
When she turns back toward me, her eyes may as well be spotlights.
“Let’s just start by hearing what Doctor Goodwin has to say.”
*****
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Hi Gray,
For me, this didn't drag at all. I thought the pace was fine. You also handled the intro of the new characters well and the dialogue sounded natural.
You know I'm not a big nitter when it comes to grammar and punctuation, but nothing jumped out at me, but I'm sure others will find something!!
The story continues to get better and holds my interest.
~Ann
Morning Gray,
I've wondered how these investigations were staged. Sounds almost like a criminal investigation, with everyone lawyered up. I'm now wondering how Jake will respond in his defense, or Pulsar's defense? As far as pace goes, what with this host of people to introduce at the conference, it had to drag a little for the sake of realism. Sounds like it was dragging a little for Jake, too.
I read you(r) report, Jake.
His hearing must be better than mine, because it takes me another few seconds to pick up the muffled sound of voices approaching./His hearing must be better than mine, because it took me a few seconds longer to pick up the sound of voices approaching. *does that line edit flow better?
We're still waiting for Doctor Roberts(,)" Arnsworth explains.
..impeccably tailored gray pants suit/pantsuit.
later, nathan
Heyyy...
After the awesomeness of ch 19, I couldn't stop there.
Excellent start. I expect Al to distance himself, and he does so, in perfect sleazy elegance. : )
I'm confused: why would the plaintiff's lawyer be allowed to be present at the meeting? I've never heard of such a thing.
"I see an elegant, middle-aged African American woman with an almost regal air about her. Every detail, from her impeccably tailored gray pants suit to her tall stature, handsome facial features, flawless skin and silver-streaked hair commands respect." >> Great description!
“We don’t bill by the hour.” >> Chances are, the lawyer is on a contingency fee. No hourly billings.
Other than the usual doctor-lawyer stuff, I see no bumps whatsoever.
Excellent pacing continues!
: )
Terri
Questions answered after read
The flow moves very smooth.
Not much I can comment on the entirety of the chapter. It is predictable, but it would have to be considering what just happened I the prior chapter.
Nothing I can add, subtract, nit or suggest.
Moving on to the next chapter!
Gray....It doesn't drag at all for me. I enjoyed the meeting and all the back thoughts and emotions. I thought that was very true to form. I like the formal, legal feel. It gave the story realism. My son is a lawyer and he tells me that many times in court he is playing games on his iphone because there is so much down-time. Apparently, real life is not CSI MIAMI.....lol I thought you brought the subtle tension of a trial, and the legality of the hearing very clear, and left us wanting more...Denise
I was utterly engrossed, there was no drag at all. I felt like every word, every sentence, every pause was necessary. I am absolutely aching for Jake, he's definitely going to be the fall-guy, I don't see how this can end well. Well, no matter how it ends, there's still a death, so there is no happy ending, maybe just Jake being allowed to move on with his life, which will never be the same.
This is such excellent writing.
Simi
In answer to your question flow seems fine.
One nit.
<The Connecticut State Chief Medical Examiner doesn’t keep us waiting long. [After another set of introductions, ]Doctor Alice Roberts takes her place at the head of the conference table, shadowed by her administrative assistant – a young woman with doe-like eyes and an obvious admiration for her boss.> I would delete the comment about introductions here. It's repeated a couple of paragraphs later. I would keep the second mention and dump this one.
I come away from this chapter with two messages. Al is just as big a jerk as we have come to expect, and Dr. Roberts is not going to put up with any crap.
One question: is it right that Greenback and associates and Pulsar Nanotechnologies are not represented by lawyers?
Overall, I think you handled the introduction of new circumstances/people quite well. The tension remains high and the pacing was spot on.
Where I had a little trouble was with questioning the potential realism a little.
Would this kind of meeting really be taking place with all the lawyers etc. on the same day? I can certainly buy that the staff of the medical facility would be having a meeting—even one that was on the record so to speak, but including all the others so quickly, to me, needs some sort of explanation for it to come off completely realistic. This is the kind of meeting I would expect to see several chapters from now.
One other thing that confused me in this chapter—you mentioned there was a hospital 3 floors below them. For some reason this was never clear to me, and in the last chapter during the code, someone was straining to hear the sirens of the EMS arriving. Why would there be sirens if the EMS personnel are coming from a lower floor of the building? Also, if there is a hospital below—why wouldn’t they have immediately moved the patient to the trauma unit below at the first inkling that she might be at risk for coding?
Also because I mentioned writer intrusion in the last chapter, I thought I might show you a good example of what I meant by that from this chapter.
Your narrative: Toxicologists will test her blood for every poison known to man. Forensic pathologists will scrutinize the strips of her procerus and corrugator muscles, down to the cellular level. Every organ in her body will be weighed and measured, then thin-sliced for microscopic analysis.
The first sentence is great. Readers will immediately understand that there will be LOTS of testing to determine cause of death. The rest feels like the writer sliding onto the page to flex their authority and educate the reader on the kinds of anticipated testing or procedures.
I’m not suggesting you can’t ever get specific—that would be boring. What I am suggesting is you should pick and choose those moments carefully. Extraneous detail has a zeroing in effect on the reader. YES, it is important for us to know that the testing will be extensive. But the information that carries the most significance to the reader in this instance isn’t the type or style of testing, it’s with the final result. That’s where the reader is actually invested because they want the answers about potential tampering, and/or Jake’s innocence.
So in that sense, wouldn’t it be wise to consider placing the greatest emphasis of detail on the areas where the reader is most heavily invested?
Just a thought.
Good Evening Gray,
I can't wait to see what Jake will tell the panel... And Al, he is just a slime bucket because he is going to try hanging Jake out to dry to save his hide; if it comes to that...
Flow was good, no dragging that I could see... Yes, the plot definitely thickens...!
Great job of keeping the interest going, Gray...
Happy Writing & Keep Smilin'... Jax
Hey, Gray - The chapter didn't drag at all. But I have a major problem with it, and that's the presence of Schlager at the meeting. For one, it seems to me he has no standing in the case, since no suit has been brought yet. And if it had been, even more reason not to discuss the case in front of him. And where is the hospital's Risk Management official - and the attorneys for the other parties of interest if Schlager is going to be there? And the presence of the cops during the preliminary medical inquiry, suggesting a possible criminal prosecution, didn't seem right to me under the circumstances. The CME leading the investigation before the postmortem exam has been performed would, if by anyone, be requested by Pulsar, or be Greenbeck, I would think, rather than an "interested" personal injury lawyer, who, as I've opined, has no real standing in the case and is actually a potential adversary. I'm sure the lawyers for Pulsar, Jake, Greenbeck, and the hospital would be appalled at Schlager's presence. Okay, here's who I'd have at the meeting: Jake, of course; Greenbeck; the hospital's Risk Management official, rather than a Public Relations Liaison.(Technically, Crain was pronounced dead at the hospital, and Jake presumably has staff privileges there, so the hospital is involved in the expected malpractice suit.); Pulsar representatives; the CME (but only via a special request through the local ME and/or hospital pathologists by either Pulsar or Greenbeck. Not Schlager, for the reasons given; no other lawyers representing the potential targets of a suit. Pending facts brought out by the investigation, they likely would not be involved at this stage in the game with no lawsuit filed. No cops; there's no hint of criminal wrongdoing - yet. And I don't think they would be all assembled only hours after the death - I'd make it the next day, at least.
No nits spotted in this chapter, which was fast-paced and tense despite its "sedentary" nature. But I wondered about Greenbeck's comment: "No...the man's a hotshot ambulance chaser..." Is Crain's husband also a personal injury lawyer?
Take care,
Jack
The chapter worked for me. I'm curious to know what went wrong. In the back of my mind I'm thinking about how the drug seemed clear in the vial before being injected, so I'm guessing this has something to do with it. Either way this is the conflict that is keeping me reading right now. That and seeing where the relationship with Brianna goes and Roy Caulder. My guess is they are all linked.
Hello, Gray. Excellent follow-up chapter. Nope, it definitely doesn't drag. You rounded out the characters exceedingly well, and the dialogue is ideal. I found it amusing that someone with the last name of Fulsom(one more letter and we have fulsome:-)would offer "heartfelt condolences to (Mrs. Clark's)family." And getting a sht-eting grin from Schlager had me snickering.
The chapter end with the CME high-beaming Jake is a perfect capping of the installment.
I wish I didn't have to head out here, soon, Gray...!! But I'll definitely be back for more...!!
Peace,
Mike
Thanks, Mike. When I got to this part of the story, I needed to step out of Jake's POV to advance the plot effectively. Hope that doesn't strike you as jarring or distracting, but I couldn't really find another way, without contorting Jake's POV beyond plausibility (e.g. having him listen in on conversations between other characters such as the CME, etc...).
Ann Everett