When we return to the crew’s sleeping quarters, we find Liv waiting for us on the edge of a bunk. She’s casually dressed in a green tee and gray sweats with her copper hair pulled back in a ponytail. Thea scans the cabin, then asks where Astrid and Ferro have gone.
“Cael took them to the control deck,” she says, crossing her arms to accentuate well-toned muscles. “Guess you broke the news about Gant’s latest broadcast. The Princess insisted on seeing it for herself.”
“I’d like to see it too,” I say, eyes lifting to hers. “Can you take us there?”
“Of course she will,” Thea answers from behind us.
“Actually…” Liv holds up a white towel, “I was about to take a shower. Can’t you take them?”
“Your shower can wait,” Thea answers coolly. “I need to report to the Core.”
The Core? Vin, Brenne and I exchange confused looks. What does that mean?
“The Core is our command structure, where all decisions are made,” Thea says simply. “I’ll explain this later. Right now, you should join your friends. You need to see what we’re up against.”
Liv shrugs and hops off the cot, landing with the stealth and agility of a cat. As we follow her in silence, I can’t help but think that’s the perfect metaphor for what she’s become: a sleek and graceful creature who hisses and claws at your face whenever you try to approach. What in flames happened to her?
“Hey, um, Liv?” I call after her.
When she pauses to glance over her shoulder, I babble something about never getting the chance to thank her for saving our lives in Washton.
“Damn straight,” Vin echoes. “That was a ballsy move, throwing yourself right into the middle of a Fox Hunt. You could’ve been tagged by one of the other groups.”
“Yeah, right.” Liv laughs – a light, musical sound that makes me think of the green-eyed girl on the beach. “And the weather in Washton could’ve been sunny and eighty degrees.”
When she strides ahead of us, Vin grins and gives me a nudge. “Beautiful and sassy. Now I get why you’ve been having all those dreams about her.”
I turn to whack his arm but Brenne beats me to it. “He-llo. Girlfriend here,” she sings. “Inappropriate.”
“You know I’ve got this thing for redheads,” Vin teases, pulling her into a hug. “But don’t worry. She’s got nothing on you, baby.”
I roll my eyes and pretend to retch, then jog ahead to give them some privacy. I find Liv waiting for me at the next bulkhead, hands resting on her hips.
“I was only following orders, so don’t bother thanking me,” she says as she bends to twist open a hatch. When I try to help her, she waves me off. “And for the record, bringing you Stalkers along for the ride definitely wasn’t my idea. I would’ve left you in Washton.”
“Then why didn’t you?” I snap.
Liv must be surprised by the sudden anger in my voice, because she looks up at me with a frown. I can’t tell from her expression whether she’s annoyed or impressed.
“I mean…” I shrug. “No one forced you to help us, right? So why did you?”
“Because I trust Thea’s judgment,” she answers without hesitation. “And I’d follow her into hellfire if that’s where she asked me to go.”
Interesting. Guess she doesn’t hate all Sifters.
I’m about to ask how Thea earned her loyalty when she opens the hatch with a loud hydraulic hiss and then ducks into the next cabin. I wait for Vin and Brenne to catch up before following her onto a sloping metal catwalk. The curved walls expand outward as we climb, revealing a two-tiered space. I count five of Kobari’s men manning instruments on the upper level. We must be entering the control deck where we met the Captain and his crew yesterday. Or was that only hours ago?
I check my time stamp to learn that it’s after midnight, York time. We’ve been aboard the subnaut for twelve hours.
Low voices murmur up ahead. We follow Liv toward them, ducking under ducts, pipes and bundled arrays of wiring until we reach a smaller side chamber. The dim lighting in here flashes intermittently, like a fluorescent bulb about to burn out. I trace the source of the flickering to a vid screen mounted on the far wall. Four people sit watching it, their backs to us. Astrid, Ferro, Cael and Kobari.
“Here you are,” Liv announces with fake cheer. “Did we miss the show?”
Cael swivels around in his seat. “We were just about to watch it. Here… come closer.” He stands to make room for us. “The entire broadcast only runs ten minutes.”
We approach the screen, which goes dark for a few seconds before blinking back to life with the tri-colored symbol of Neoden: white Crystal, red Flame, black background. Cael turns up the audio until we hear the familiar opening chords of “Neoden Forever.”
After the Anthem has faded, the vid cuts to a shot of Cillian Gant. He’s standing behind the Prime Founder’s podium, flanked on both sides by the eight other members of the High Founder’s Council. Not surprisingly, Astrid’s father is missing. I recognize three of the faces: Chief Guardian Locke; Head Instructor Slate; and Ferro’s father, Chief Justice Rhone. I’m pretty sure Slate is new to the Council, which must mean he’s just been promoted to Chief Guardian. Doing the math, that would make Orwin Locke the new Prime Enforcer. But Ferro’s father… wasn’t he supposed to be one of Augustin Blake’s closest friends? What in flames is he doing standing next to Gant?
Astrid drops Ferro’s hand and turns to him, no doubt to ask this question, but her words are drowned out by the sound of Gant’s voice. Just hearing the evil bastard again churns my stomach.
“Fellow citizens of the Great Unity of Neoden,” he begins in a melodramatic voice. “I come to you now with a heavy heart. I wish I could spare you the pain of the truth, but that would be wrong. My people…” He holds out his hands, palms open. “We have been betrayed. We’ve been stabbed in the back by the very man who we loved and trusted above all others.”
As Gant lays out his case against Augustin Blake, Astrid absorbs his words in stunned silence, her eyes never leaving the screen. When he talks about the upcoming trial, she grips the sides of her chair like she’s bracing for a violent collision. Ferro wraps his arm around her but she doesn’t react. Doesn’t even look like she’s breathing.
This is how I felt when Gant forced me to witness the Pioneer kid’s incineration. When he made me watch as my sister writhed in agony.
When the screen fades to black, Ferro takes Astrid’s hand. “This is all false news. They must have altered the broadcast.”
“Yeah, right,” Liv fires back sarcastically. “Because we’ve got nothing better to do. Listen, Stalker: I know you’ve been brainwashed your whole life and all, or maybe you’re just plain stupid, but here’s a reality check: Gant is your enemy. We’re the ones who saved your necks… twice by my count.”
Astrid snorts. “You’d like us to believe that, wouldn’t you?”
“How many times do I have to tell you?” Liv answers through clenched teeth. “I don’t give a ripper’s ass what you believe, and if I had my way…” She turns to a grinning Kobari. “I’d ask the Captain over here to take us to the surface so you could swim your way home. And when you got there, guess what?”
Astrid glares at her, fists balled at her sides.
“Gant would throw your clueless ass in a cell with your dad and schedule a public father-daughter execution! He’d probably make the day a national holiday!”
I’m about to step between them but Cael beats me to it.
“Why don’t we take a break?” he suggests, placing his large hand on Astrid’s shoulder. I’m not sure who’s more shocked when she doesn’t pull away: Liv, Ferro or me. “I know this is a trying time for you,” he continues in a sympathetic voice. “Believe me, Miss Blake. We’ll try to help in any way we can.”
“You’re wasting your time,” Liv warns.
“No, I’m not.” He meets her gaze, his tone patient but firm. “Thea predicted all this would happen. She’s led us this far, and if she believes we only stand a chance against Gant if we join forces with the Loyalists, then that’s good enough for me.”
Loyalists? What in flames and ashes? Is he talking about us?
For once, Liv seems to have no clever answer. After a few tense beats of silence, she mutters something about needing to take a shower before stalking off.
Astrid turns to Cael once Lily has gone. “Your intel sources… Do they know where Gant has taken my father? Is he in the Crypts beneath the Citadel?”
He glances at Thea before answering, “No. He’s being held in the island fortress of Scilla.”
“Scilla Rock?” Ferro scoffs. “You’re lying! Scilla’s in the bleeding Eastern Territory!”
“That’s right,” Thea says, turning to Astrid. “Gant plotted his coup well. Your father’s allies would have to cross the Great Sea to free him. But there’s a flaw in his plan.” She and Cael exchange a knowing look. “We have friends near Scilla. In fact, that’s where we’re going.”
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Another great story. Liked the new insight into Liv; hope to see more of her. She seems just right.
Nits/suggestions:
<ducking under ducts, pipes and bundled arrays of wiring until we reach a smaller side chamber.> - might want to rearrange this so you don't have the similar sounding words so close together (ducks, ducts), although there is a nice alliteration there.
<No wonder Fahrenheit suddenly looks so pale. Astrid drops his hand and stares at him, eyes narrowing. His lips twitch with a response but before he can get out any words, Gant starts his speech.> - I was a little confused as to what was happening here.
<As Gant lays out his case against Augustin Blake, Astrid absorbs his words in stunned silence, her eyes never leaving the screen. When he talks about the upcoming trial, she grips the sides of her chair like she’s bracing for a violent collision. Farroe wraps his arm around her but she doesn’t react. Doesn’t even look like she’s breathing.> - this sounds like a reaction if she's hearing it for the first time, not the second. I'd think she'd be
(ten minutes late)
Did we miss the show
We were just about to watch it... The entire broadcast only runs ten minutes
>Dang commercial breaks ran longer than the show! Commercials are annoying even in a far-flung dystopian future
Farroe’s father, Chief Justice Rome
>Shouldn't that be "Rhone"?
I’m about to step between them but Cael beats me to it
>This is probably a good thing the way Wil tends to get beaten up
This reminds me of the ascension of Arcturus Mengsk. Now I wanna play HOTS again just to shoot him in the face and call him Gant.
-K
A good transitional chapter, which lays out the case for the conclusion that you presented for us. It is interesting to see Astrid's slow maturation and evolution out of the narrow channel that Neoden created for her and all the others her age. Tyrannies--as a rule--limit the possibilities for thinking, as thoughtful citizens limit their possibility for rule. No nits to report.
Comments & Concerns:
>>We’ve been aboard the subnaut for twelve hours.
Which would mean that the sub has been under battery drive all this time? That is quite surprising, as diesel-electric submarines had a limited duration of travel on electric motors. Then the submarine had to surface and operate on diesel power to recharge their batteries. You stipulated in an earlier chapter that this was a diesel-electric submarine, so I’m wondering why the operating rules don’t apply. In mitigation, however, this story does take place far in the future, so it is possible that the diesel-electric design has been supplemented by advanced technology. Lithium-ion batteries, for example, could definitely increase the sub’s range.
Hey Gray,
I'm fine with the way you have Liv written. Considering all they've been through, they should all have attitudes.
Now that I've read the chapters I missed, I may have to go back and re-read the next chapter!! My poor noggin' just can't stay on track sometimes.
Sorry y'all are having such cold weather. However, I'd sure enjoy some. It was 65 here today. Nice, but I do love cold weather, so I'm looking forward to next week when we're supposed to get some more.
Last year, it snowed on Christmas here. Such a rare thing...but I so loved it.
Stay warm and Happy 2014 to you and yours.
~Ann
Hey Gray,
I can't say that I like Liv yet, she's all hard edges. But, she comes across as real, the tough sassy girl who has had to fight for everything all her life, so naturally she'd be suspicious and intolerant of the privileged few. It's clear that they will have to earn her respect. Until they do, they'll be dogmeat, as far as she's concerned, but once they do, her loyalty, I suspect, will be fierce. It's sad that Wil has carried the torch for her all these years, just to come up against such a hard shell, but I'm assuming it will crack eventually. Other than her declaring her loyalty to Allie, I didn't see any other cracks. Yet. (except for her devotion to Cael, but that's a different matter, right?).
Otherwise, great chapter, the story is moving along at a great clip.
Simi
Yep, Liv was the biggest surprise in this chapter. I kind of expected the rest and you did a good job with pacing. I'd keep this chapter split from the last for that very reason.
So, what the heck is up with Liv. I'm guessing it has something to do with Wil not being there for her way back when. Whatever the reason, it is making me want to move into the next chapter which you so cleverly do in all of your chapters. Liv is not pissing me off or making me dislike her. I kind of get it. We'll see.
Vin also got my attention in this chapter - his humor is always a pleasure to behold. LOL The boy cracks me up when he gets rolling.
Oh, yeah, and Gant was every bit the prick I expected. What a peacock. And don't worry about disappointing me if you don't let Liv cut him up into little itty-bitty pieces and feed him to the rats in that frozen wasteland, hellhole Gant sent them too. I kind of leave my series hanging, too. Pisses some off, makes most jump into the next book to see what the heck happens. I'm good.
I'm about to wrap up mine BTW. Just one or two small chapters left before I dig and and make final adjustments before that final-final edit. LOL
Okay, nothing to pick at this time. See you back here real soon.
Susan
Hey, Gray - Liv's character is fine with me. We haven't learned her backstory yet, so the source of her relationship with Perrin and why she seems resentful of Wil and co. is unknown at this point. I don't see a problem here.
- "No one forced you to help us, right?" {This seemed off to me, because Liv had just said she had been under orders. I think the paragraph can be deleted without changing anything else.}
- ...grip the sides of her chair [like she's] (as if) bracing for a violent collision
Astrid is on board now, finally. Now what will be the game plan for bringing down the empire? You've set up the scenario well.
Take care,
Jack
Well, Liv is definitely unpleasant. I get the feeling she has her reasons, but I don't think you've laid them out yet. Maybe it's coming up.
My only nit to pick at is colons - my editor always makes me get rid of them for whatever reason so I thought I'd mention it.
Anyway - great tension here. Will read more soon.
Hey Gray,
Finally, Astrid sees the light...maybe:) She may just be playing Cael so she can save her father. I like the bio-luminous bulbs and want to know Liv's backstory. she definitely has a chip on her shoulder, and seemingly most of all for Astrid.
I trace the source of the flickering to the vid screen mounted on the far wall. Four people sit watching it, their backs to us./Four people are watching with their backs to us.
..the familiar opening chords of the Anthem/anthem.
A short, one scene chapter of less than 1700 words, but I didn’t find any nit with the exception of the below use of ‘tee.’ I’ve never seen T-shirt described as a tee. On the other hand, I’ve never seen T without ‘shirt,’ so I haven’t a clue if it’s right or wrong.
{She’s casually dressed in a green tee and gray sweats}
I also noted a number of italics to emphasis stress on specific words. I’ve never been a fan of italics, but I admit to being old fashioned in the conventions of writing.
All in all, a very good and interesting chapter. R.M.
Cael turns up the audio so we can here the familiar opening chords of the Anthem.
Hello, Gray. Been meaning to get back to your story... Liv is a firecracker, for sure. I don't know everything about her, but I sense that she's got quite a back story... I don't find her too mean, more wounded than anything else. We know that anger and rage are usually the result of big letdowns, fear, or frustration.
Now CG...he's easy to resent:-> And it's interesting regarding the bit about Ferro's dad...
Very intense chapter, Gray.
Peace,
Mike
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