Ferro backs away from the scanner, pupils swelling like two oil slicks. When he finally finds his voice, it’s hoarse with fear.
“They’re lying!” His head jerks toward Astrid. “I don’t have a chip! Don’t you see what’s happening? They’re trying to turn you against me!”
She just stands there frozen, gaze fixed on the blinking red scanner in Cael’s hand. When Ferro grabs her arm, she doesn’t try to pull away. Doesn’t try to comfort him. It’s her total lack of reaction that seems to push him over the edge. He starts to hyperventilate, his words coming out in frantic gasps.
“I – I swear they – they’re lying! You’ve got to believe me!”
His plea finally breaks her trance. “Please, Ferr,” she whispers, blinking away tears. “Just tell me the truth. Are you working for Gant?”
“How—” He gulps in a breath. “How could you even ask me that?”
Dax steps in to answer. “’Cause scanners don’t lie, Peacock. And that one says you messed with your collar.”
Before Ferro can reply, I catch movement behind him. Three of Kobari’s men, entering the cabin. The sight sends an unexpected ripple of fear through me. Why should I care what happens to Fahrenheit? If the situation were reversed, he’d be fixing a noose to hang me right about now.
Kobari’s men creep forward with lightning sticks drawn, like Fahrenheit’s about to make a run for it. Don’t they realize we’re in a fragging subnaut? I’m about to say something sarcastic to that effect when Astrid lunges in front of the approaching rebels. They hesitate, looking to Cael.
“Stand down,” he orders. “He’ll come without a fight.”
“Like hellfire I will!” Ferro shouts, regaining some of his bluster now that he’s standing behind Astrid. “It’s your bloody collar that failed! I’m innocent!”
“If that’s true…” Cael sidesteps Astrid to take his arm. “Then you’ll understand what we have to do next.”
*
Ferro didn’t know. The nagging suspicion won’t leave me. That’s why I felt the sudden urge to defend him: because when the scanner flashed red, I saw more than the fear of discovery in his eyes. I saw panic and… confusion.
Cael and Lily took him to the medical bay half an hour ago to deactivate his chip. The rest of us are back in the crew’s quarters, seated or lying on our bunks. All we can do now is wait for their report.
“Could the collar have malfunctioned?” Astrid asks, echoing my thoughts.
Thea looks up from her bunk, frowning as she considers the question. “Anything’s possible, but it’s highly unlikely. Cael inspected each device before we left York. He wouldn’t have missed any technical glitch.”
“But how would Ferro even know how to disable this thing?” I ask, touching my collar. The surface feels smooth and seamless, certainly not easy to penetrate. “It’s not like there’s a wire to cut.”
Thea nods to let me know it’s a good question. Something just doesn’t feel right. Would Ferro betray me and the Aletheians? In a heartbeat. But would he turn on Astrid? Guess we’ll have our answer soon enough.
Fortunately, Cael doesn’t keep us waiting long. As soon as he enters the cabin, Astrid jumps up to demand an update.
“Your friend is fine,” he reassures her, ducking and leaning against Thea’s bunk to avoid the low ceiling. “Sedated but comfortable. The chip extraction went smoothly.”
“And his collar?” Thea asks.
“Dead. Someone fried it in all the right places. We found pinpoint thermal damage in both the primary and auxiliary power coils. There’s no way that could’ve happened by accident.”
Thea blinks slowly, like she’s trying to absorb this bad news before moving on. “How do you think he did it?”
“The collar shows no outside markings, so my guess would be a pulsed microwave disruptor. Sophisticated units come as small as a thumbnail.” Cael’s eyes roam the cabin before settling on Astrid. “Easy enough to conceal.”
She arches her brows to challenge him. “And you found one on Ferro?”
“Not yet.”
“Then how do you know he’s responsible?”
“You tell me. I checked the collars before we left York, so the damage must have been done somewhere…” – He scans the cabin again – “…down here. It’s hard to imagine someone sneaking up on your friend to disable his collar without him knowing. Unless you have a better theory.”
Astrid opens her mouth to protest but then checks herself. Even she must realize there’s no good rebuttal. All the evidence points to the same conclusion. Ferro has been spying for Gant. No big shocker there, but how could he betray Astrid? And what must she be feeling now?
If she’s hurt, her expression gives away nothing. It’s as if she just slipped on a mask. Even her eyes look different – dark and unfathomable, like the ocean before a storm. When she asks to see Ferro’s chip, her voice sounds hollow. Stripped of emotion.
Cael holds out his hand, palm opening to reveal the implant. It’s so tiny we must crowd around to see it.
“Looks like a first gen,” Thea notes after inspecting the black speck.
“Upgraded, but yes. They used a simple subfascial insertion site.” Cael taps the back of his neck to show us where he found the chip. “Made for an easy extraction.”
Thea raises a brow. “And that’s all you found? No cortical implant?”
When Cael shakes his head, worry lines radiate from the corners of her eyes. “But that makes no sense. Why just tag him for location?”
Cael shrugs. “Maybe they didn’t have time to do an auditory interface.”
“Excuse me,” Astrid cuts in sharply, “but could you speak English for the rest of us? What in flames are you talking about?”
Cael faces her with a grin, like he’s impressed by her attitude. Guess that makes sense given his relationship with Lily. “Your friend’s chip only gave away our location. It didn’t have an audio feed.”
The news sounds too good to be true. “Then Gant doesn’t know we’re about to hit Scilla,” I point out, trying to contain my excitement. “That means we can still go ahead with our plan!”
Thea answers me with a soft sigh. “We went through this already, Wil. You and your friends aren’t soldiers.”
“I know, but –”
She holds up a hand. “This is not open to debate. I know it’s hard, but you need to trust us. We’re taking you somewhere safe.”
“Um, that might be a problem.”
The familiar voice belongs to Dax, who just strolled into the cabin with Lily trailing a few steps behind. One look at her clenched jaw and I know they’re bringing bad news.
When Thea asks what’s wrong, Lily just shakes her head.
“You’d better come with us,” Dax says. “The Captain wants to show you something.”
*
The control room bustles with activity. When Kobari sees our group approaching, he motions for us to join him. He and a crewmate are hunched over a glowing vid screen, their faces bathed in blue light.
On closer inspection of the screen, I notice at least four shades of blue, fanning out like the bands of a monochromatic rainbow: navy to the west, transitioning to cobalt, aquamarine and then turquoise to the far east. This must be a navigation display, with a color-coded contour map showing water depths. When Kobari scrolls upward to reveal a solid brown border, Astrid draws in a sharp breath behind me. She must recognize it too. We’re looking at the curved coastline of the Eastern Territory. We’ve already crossed the Great Sea.
“What’s our position?” Thea asks, eyes glued to the screen.
Kobari taps a lone yellow dot in the upper left corner, still in deep water.
“And these are all enemy ships?” Cael asks, pointing to a constellation of white blips to our south.
Kobari nods. “Destroyers.”
Now that they’ve drawn my attention to the pattern of dots, I notice they’re forming two parallel lines.
“Standard search and destroy formation,” Kobari notes with a grunt. “Here’s the vanguard...” He traces the closest line of ships, then drops his finger to a second line that’s further to our south. “And here’s the blockade. They can’t see us now, but they’re reacting to our last known position.”
“Blocking our path to the south.” Thea purses her lips and turns to Cael. “They know where we’re going.”
“Right,” Kobari confirms, “but it’s worse than that. Watch the vanguard.”
We watch in tense silence as the screen blinks. The change is barely perceptible, but a few of the blips in the vanguard formation shift north. Moving closer.
Thea sucks in a deep breath. “Like a net closing in on us.”
“More like a hook,” Cael says, leaning over the screen. He taps the right edge of the enemy formation, which ends abruptly. “What’s to stop us from cutting hard to the northeast and outflanking them here?” He points to a narrow channel of water that cuts between a peninsula and a large island to the south. “This is the Charybdian Strait, right?”
The Captain nods.
“Then if we loop around through the Medrean Sea…” He traces a path with his index finger that threads though the channel, then dips south. “We can still make landfall close to the rendez-vous site.”
Kobari shakes his head. “The Charybdian Strait is a war zone. You’ve got Sinovoss fighters in Charybdis to the north…” – He touches the boot-shaped peninsula, then drags his finger across the channel to the island – “and Scilla to the south. They’re in spitting distance, guns pounding each other night and day.”
“But can we make it through the channel?” Thea asks.
“Not a chance. It’s deep enough, but heavily mined.” Kobari touches the southern tip of Scilla. “Our best option is to land here and wait for evacuation.”
Someone whistles behind me and I turn to find Dax, wearing a bemused grin. “How about that?” he says, nudging my shoulder like we’ve just shared an inside joke. “Scilla Rock. Looks like you’re gonna need that combat training after all.”
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Hi Gray,
First of all, I'm sorry you didn't get a response for your last review on my story; I was trying to zoom in on my iPad and accidentally hit submit. Anyway, you were right on the money to call me on recycling a piece from Jake's POV to use for Lisa's without changing it. I'll go back and fix that.
Second, it's always great to get another chapter in this story. And you start with one of the best lines I've seen in a while:
<Farroe backs away from the scanner, pupils swelling like two oil slicks.> - so simple, yet so descriptive. Love it.
The rest of the story is just as good, with sharp prose and dialogue. To answer your question, the ending was easy to follow. I had no problems.
Please don't keep us waiting so long for the next installment.
Cheers,
Don
Hey, Gray - Excellent chapter. The suspense has been ramped up. My only question is how the submerged subnaut can get a bird's eye view of the harbor. A computer-generated view based on the sonar readings? That would work, I think. Farroe is in big trouble with Astrid, methinks, paving the way for Wil to move in? No nits spotted.
Take care,
Jack
Hi Gray,
Cael and Lily took him to the medical bay half an hour ago to inactivate <<<I'd always heard deactivate...so I looked this up and it means the same thing...so no nit there!!
Well, I've been waiting this entire story for Wil and Astrid to get together so maybe now they will!!
The discussion at the end sounded okay to me, so it's a yes vote from me.
So nice to be reading about your bunch.
~Ann
Sorry this took so long. I've been splitting time -and- playing hookey.
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Okay, we don't know that Farroe is the traiter. And since the presumed microwave zapper wasn't found, we have to assume that the real bad guy is still there--and may not even know that he's doing it, thanks to the possibility of some kind of mind control.
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Meanwhile, you've done a very credible job of forcing peoples' hands and letting Astrid & Co. go into danger and into their destiny.
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'coil' is one of those great tech words. You can always assume that there is one. The problem is that coils tend to be rugged devices. It's the things around them that are easy to damage. With reference to today's tech, you're more likely to damage the semiconductors driving a coil than you are to damage the coil itself. The only exceptions that come to mind are the coils in high-frequency loudspeakers.
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What's more, macro-sized coils are often the most repairable part of a circuit.
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'Driver' circuits and devices, on the other hand, will belong to whatever technology you have at hand, and every since we abandoned vacuum tubes, those 'active' devices tend to be delicate and vulnerable. 'Power coil drivers' will work nicely.
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If I'm down in this minutia, you've done pretty well with things.
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<<The control room hums with activity>> A minor cliche. It's not bad, especially since it's launching a scene, but it's not very descriptive either.
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So ... is the real trap at Meridia?
I'm just going to say it. I don't think Farroe is guilty. Don't ask me why. You know I've disliked the boy from the moment I met him. LOL But it just doesn't feel right. Maybe because it's a bit vague on how he could be wearing a chip without the crews knowledge.
Okay, with that said, I have questions. Wasn't a visual device planted in Astrid's eye, and one in Wil's neck or ear? Now, if this is the case, wouldn't ALL three go off the minute they put those collars on? If so, I need to know why they didn't detect Farroe's the same time they detected the others. Even a hint would stop me from obsessing throughout the rest of the book to find out, lol. Also if there are, or were, devices planted, wouldn't Gant have seen this whole thing going down on the day they were captured? I don't remember you mentioning that. I might be wrong.
I do remember underground when Cael an Liv cut the trace on Astrid and Wil's devices and the cave blocked it as well, but the collars are a bit of a stretch for me.
The other thing, even if Farroe is a spy for Gant, I don't think Astrid and Wil will hook up romantically. I think there's another connection that's going to keep this from happening. We'll see.
Great chapter, I felt like I was aboard, leaning over the screen with the rest of them. Not one nit.
Carry on. I want another chapter, man.
Susan
Can't believe I got caught up! I've been so slow lately! Well post more soon because I'm hooked.
Didn't see any nits to speak of. I'm really no help to you at all at this point. Just cheerleading. Go-fight-win!
Hoping to be more active on the site this summer - looking forward to seeing how this one ends!
Interesting chapter here, Graeme. Future action would appear to be submarine- based storyline, which is always exciting. For research purposes I would suggest that you watch "Das Boot", the absolute best submarine movie ever made.
Farroe's predicament is interesting, though I suspect he is an unwitting double-agent via a bit of telepathic brainwashing. Just my theory, though.
Great writing! No nits to report!
Lawrence
... took him to the medical bay half an hour ago to inactivate his chip
>deactivate?
Nothing really to nit here. Great pacing, good dialogue. I see I'm the only reviewer who's got Liv pegged as the bad guy. I sure hope Wil doesn't go and fall for her... she'll totally pull a Baroness on him (GI Joe reference)
-K
Hey Gray,
To be a traitor or not be a traitor. That is the question. Wil thinks or suspects Farroe is innocent, so I'll go along with our superhero.
Wouldn't they need to "neutralize" the chip implant? Or had that already been done. I wouldn't know that could be done; maybe a burst of microwave or a strong magnet? Just wondering, and thinking the chip was still transmitting. Another question, could the chip be functioning from inside the subnaut?
When Cael shakes his head, worry lines rediate from the corners of her eyes. *I assume "her" refers to Perrin, and according to my solitary text of good grammar, a pronoun should agree with the nearest proper noun. So it reads like Her refers to Cael.
later gater
Good chapter with the drama of Farroe being accused of being a traitor. Personally, I don’t buy it. I think he got framed by somebody. The interesting point is that the real traitor is willing to die. I don’t think Farroe would volunteer for the position of firing squad victim. But then, I could be wrong.
I didn’t find any nit for you, so I reread the chapter looking at punctuation and still didn’t find anything to really call an error. Well, then the question becomes, what happens next? Will they avoid the trap or is avoiding a trap actually the trap? Hopefully, we’ll know soon. R.M.
Thanks for the encouraging words and feedback, RM! Really enjoy your speculations, which shows me the plot has you thinking. Farroe's guilt is supposed to remain in question, as is the identity of any potential mole(s) / traitors. If I ever get to book two, that uncertainty will be resolved. Sorry for my prolonged absence from the site. Took a break for a while... Gray
So glad I get to read the rest of this one. I know how hard it is to describe a plan with maps, etc. You've done a nice job - I can picture the images on screen, not sure I see the 'flaw' mentioned - it just sounds like it's a 'race to the finish' type deal. But the end of chapter hook is great & I'm anxious to read on. Is this still a WIP or is it already published?
Hi SP! Alas, this is still a WIP that has definitely dragged on for me. I still really like the characters, but can't seem to get them to wrap up this first book, let alone start book two. Should take another 2-3 chapters, but I'm blocked for now, so I've been taking a break from writing for a while with the hope this will help me reboot. Hope all is well for you. I'll check the site to see what you've been up to. Happy holidays/ New Year! Gray
Hello, Gray. A lot going on! You consistently pull out all the proverbial stops. So Ferro might be looking good as a traitor, though what also impresses me is Wil's noticing his confusion along with the fear. On the same side as that, there's no cortical implant. So I guess I'm leaning toward Ferro being innocent...but I wouldn't bet much on it...
Heavy tension with the blockade and vanguard, and THAT promises some more "rock and roll"...where's Bon Jovi? :-) Wil and Astrid going to Meridia ratchets things up even more!
I'm still wondering about Echo...I'd love to single him out before he's revealed, lol!
Yet another chapter that deserves a SHOUT!!
Peace,
Mike
Don Chambers