24.
Waiting
I steel myself, bracing for Cillian Gant’s reaction. I’ve just reported what happened over the past twenty-four hours, starting with the ambush. This is the version Astrid and I worked on last night as we waited for our rescue party to arrive. I’m pretty sure I’ve stuck to the script, weaving in just enough true details for the story to sound plausible.
Unless the RTC scanner is broken, Gant couldn’t have heard our conversation in the tunnel last night. Why, then, does he look like he’s about to reach through the screen to rip off my head?
“First you make me wait for your transmission,” he hisses though clenched teeth, “and then you deliver this pathetic tale of incompetence! You had one mission! One…!”
He slams his fist down on the console, making me jump. “Mission! Deliver Miss Blake to the Aletheians. And what did you do?”
Fragging psycho. I avert my eyes, hoping he mistakes my hatred for fear.
“You let her escape and got captured yourself!”
“You’re right sir,” I say. “There’s no excuse for my failure.”
“It’s too late for apologies. All actions must have consequences.”
“But I deserve another chance!” When I stare into those cold gray eyes, I know right away I’ve let my mask slip. The bastard’s just caught a glimpse of my true feelings.
When he speaks again, his voice is as low and menacing as a ripper’s growl. “Are you thinking for yourself again, young brother? Have you forgotten where that path leads?”
Before I can reassure him I meant no disrespect, the screen flickers to a scene straight out of my nightmares. The girl lying on a cement floor must be my sister, even though it’s too dark to know for sure. Her legs are tucked into her chest and she’s twitching and whimpering like a wounded animal.
“Her greatest fear is being attacked by monsters,” Gant taunts off-screen. “Common phobia for a girl her age. Right now, she thinks five shadow rippers are tearing her apart.”
“No!” I lurch forward. “Stop this! Please!”
“Right now?” Gant reappears on the screen, palms raised in a gesture of helplessness. “I’m afraid that’s beyond my control. She still has thirty minutes left in this dream cycle. Given her young age, that’s the limit. Any longer and she’d probably never wake up.”
“You promised not to hurt her!” I cry. “That was the deal!”
“Correct. That was the deal, until you broke it by trying to deceive me.”
“No I didn’t!” I draw in a long breath, trying not to hyperventilate. Stay calm. He’ll only gain strength from your panic. “I swear I’m telling the truth, sir. I’d never lie to you.”
“Then let me get this straight.” Gant laces his fingers together. “I’m supposed to believe that you and Miss Blake were trapped during an ambush. Then, when the terrorists closed in, they captured you while letting the Prime Founder’s daughter escape. Do you think I’m a fool?”
“No, sir. Give me another chance.” How do I get this monster to tell me where he’s taken my sister? “Please. I won’t fail you again. Just don’t hurt her.”
“It’s too late for that, but she only has…” Gant checks his time stamp, earthworm lips wriggling into a smile. “Twenty-one minutes to go. She has a strong mind, Wil. She may even emerge without any permanent damage.”
“Where –” I clench my fists at my sides, imagining I’m crushing his windpipe. “Where have you taken her?”
“Somewhere safe and secure.”
So he’s moved her from Ag Set Three. But where? How do I get him to reveal where he’s taken her?
“What you just showed me could’ve been recorded earlier. How do I know she’s still alive?”
He answers me with a cruel laugh. “You don’t.”
“Then...” I force myself to meet his gaze. “I need proof. And your word that she won’t be harmed again.”
The corners of his mouth twitch. “You’re in no position to make demands, brother. How would you like me to unleash real rippers into her cell?”
“I can’t control your actions, sir,” I answer, holding my voice steady. “But I can control mine. So I feel I should warn you…”
Gant’s eyes narrow, daring me to continue.
I swallow the boulder in my throat and press on. “Hurting my sister won’t force my cooperation. It will do the opposite. Right now, the Aletheians think I’m on their side. They think I’m going to betray Astrid in exchange for my freedom. I’m a link you can’t replace.”
Gant’s reaction reminds me of a snake poised to strike: eyes fixed, head cocked to one side and frozen. I’m about to check the console to see if the vid feed’s been broken when he reaches up to remove his glasses.
“So disappointing.” He inspects one lens as if it’s a window to my soul. “Still trying to think for yourself.”
“I just need to know she’s okay. Just show me she’s still alive and I’ll do whatever you want.”
“Oh, she’s alive,” he taunts. “But I wouldn’t count on that lasting. Guests of the Crypts aren’t exactly known for their... longevity.”
The Crypts! My heart sinks. That’s the Prime Enforcer’s personal interrogation wing, located somewhere in the dark bowels of the Citadel. How in flames and ashes am I supposed to rescue my sister from there?
“Why are you doing this?” I say. “She’s just a child.”
“I’m not doing anything to her, Wil. You are! Defy me and you hurt her. Disappoint me and you hurt her. Fail me…” He gives me the kind of smile that belongs on a rotting corpse. “Well, you get the idea. I don’t think she’ll survive another one of your failures.”
I lower my head, taking a moment to process this bad news. There’s no way I’m rescuing my sister from the Crypts. She may as well be imprisoned on the moon.
“And if I deliver Astrid to the Aletheians?”
“Then…” He checks his glasses one last time before slipping them back on. “I’ll keep my word and release your sister. I’ll even forgive your recent insubordination. Consider this another chance, Wil.” His eyes bore into mine. “Your final chance.”
I force out a thank you, trying not to choke on the words as I promise he won’t be disappointed.
“I’m sure your sister will appreciate that news. When will you make contact with the Aletheians again?”
“Within a week,” I reply, thinking of the activated coin transmitter. What did Thea say? That an Aletheian named Rogue would come for us.
Hopefully, they're already on their way.
*
Where are those bleeding Aletheians?
Five days have passed since Astrid activated the coin transmitter – five days and still no word from Rogue. I’m starting to feel on edge, and I can tell from Astrid’s tense body language that I’m not the only one. What if they never got the signal? Then there’s another bleaker possibility: since we returned, the Enforcers have stepped up their raids on suspected Aletheian positions. Liv, Thea and Cael could have been injured or killed.
I need to start thinking up a plan B. Problem is, I can’t see any way out of York without the help of the Aletheians.
“Hey, Wilmington! The Commander wants to see you.”
I glance up to see Dax, wearing his trademark crooked grin. I’m in the rec room, sprawled out on the weight bench and Vin is grunting somewhere to my right. He’s the one who dragged me here at the crack of dawn, insisting I needed to start the day by venting some steam.
“Now?” I ask, pulling myself upright.
Dax yawns and rubs sleep from his eyes. “You still have time for breakfast. Sorry to interrupt your morning grunting session, but you’d better get moving.” He turns to Vin and clears his throat. “That includes you, Vineland! The boss wants to brief all newbies. Wouldn’t make him wait.”
Once he’s gone, Vin drops his free weights to the floor with a loud crash and turns to give me a “what-the-frag” look. “I’m supposed to take orders from someone who never shaves and wears his hair like that?”
I shrug. “May not look the part, but technically, he does outrank us.”
“Whatever. For the record, I don’t like him.”
“Give it time. He may grow on you.”
Vin frowns. “Yeah. Like a fungus.”
He’s got a point. I haven’t figured Dax out yet, and probably never will. One moment he comes across as pretty decent, and the next, he acts like a total idiot. Then again, it’s not like I plan on being around long enough to learn all the nuances of his personality.
I’m debating whether or not I have time for a shower when Astrid barges into the rec room, looking frazzled.
“I’ve got a headache,” she announces in a strained voice. Back in the tunnel, we came up with this sentence to signify an emergency, but I don’t need the cue; one look at her face and I know something bad just happened. Something really bad.
Vin gives me a puzzled look, but I don’t have time to explain. “I’ll meet you at the Commander’s office, okay?”
He frowns to let me know he resents being kept in the dark again.
“You can go to the canteen,” Astrid suggests with a forced smile. “Brenne and Ferro are waiting for you.”
“Right. See you in a few” He wipes the sweat off his face and arms, then slams the towel into a waste basket and leaves without another word. Damn. Not this again.
I turn to Astrid and mouth “What?” but she just shakes her head. Something’s definitely wrong; if she looked any paler, she’d need a blood transfusion.
I follow her into the hallway, speed-walking in silence down the stairs leading to sub-level D. When we reach the catacombs, she glances around to confirm we’re alone and then breaks into a jog. Minutes later, we’re back inside the generator room. She zigzags through the obstacle course of scalding pipes and machinery like she’s done this a thousand times, then waits impatiently for me by the generator core.
“We’re clear,” I say once I’ve checked the RTC scanner. When I glance up at Astrid again, I don’t like what I see. She’s crying, tears streaming down her cheeks.
“What happened?”
She backs away when I reach for her hand, shoulders heaving in silent sobs.
“Tell me, Astrid. It’ll be okay.”
“No.” She blinks away tears. “No it won’t! Gant just seized control of Founder’s City.”
Her words hit me like a lightning stick. “How –” Suddenly, it’s hard to breath.
“It doesn’t matter! Don’t you understand?” She rubs her eyes, looking like she’s trying to scour away reality. “The monster’s taken over!”
“We don’t know that. The High Founders won’t just accept Gant’s power grab. They’ll fight him.”
She shakes her head, lips pressed into a grim line. “No they won’t. The Council met him with open arms. It’s not like they had a choice. Once his army of Enforcers swept through Founder’s City, no one dared to stand up to him. They’ve already declared him the new Prime Founder.”
“How do you know all this?” I ask, hoping against all odds she’s gotten false information.
“Ferro.”
My heart sinks when she names her source. Ferro may be a lot of unpleasant things, but he’s no liar.
“His parents told him through the Link before Gant blocked all transmissions to York. They wanted to evacuate him, but he refused.”
“So is your dad…?”
She sniffs. “I have no idea. He could have escaped, but –”
“Then we’ll find him. Maybe the Aletheians will help us.”
“The Aletheians?” She stares at me like I’m a crazy person. “The Aletheians are done, Wil! Don’t you get that? Why do you think they haven’t come for us yet? Thea. Liv. Cael. They’re all either captured or dead!”
“We don’t know that for sure.”
“Yes we do. Do the math! Gant has over a half-million Enforcers. How do you fight numbers like that?”
“I… I don’t know.”
She wipes away a fresh stream of tears. “I was going to use the Aletheians to get to my father. I thought if we could warn him, he’d still have time to stop Gant. Then we could rescue your sister. But I’m too late.” She fights off another sob. “Dad may be dead already.”
I stare at this girl I’ve come to admire for her strength, wondering what to do next. I’m so used to seeing her in command that I don’t know how to react. What if her spirit’s broken? How will I fight Gant without her? There’s just no way...
Fortunately, my body knows what to do even if my brain doesn’t. I close the distance between us and hug her tightly, feeling her body stiffen and then relax as she buries her face against my chest. My fingers fan through her hair and I draw her closer, pressing my lips to the top of her head. She smells like lavender and tears.
“It’ll be all right,” I promise. “We’ll find a way.”
“But how?” She pulls away to meet my gaze and that’s when I see it: that defiant flash of blue I’ve grown to love. She’s not ready to give up. Not even close.
“I don’t know. We’ll –”
The generator room door explodes inward before I can finish my thought, flooding the room with light. Through the glare, I see the silhouettes of at least a dozen Enforcers rushing in. They surround us with their weapons drawn, boots pounding out an executioner’s drumroll.
It’s over. I hold my breath and brace for the first blow, but the Enforcers stop advancing.
Agonizing seconds pass before one figure saunters forward, like a High Founder taking a leisurely stroll. He’s less than a dozen feet away when I hear Astrid cursing under her breath.
She must recognize him too, because he’s looking right at her.
“Sorry, Sunshine,” Dax drawls, sounding like he’s anything but. “Tough break. Looks like the two of you are under arrest.”
***
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Hey Gray,
Well, the title of this chapter...waiting....is exactly what I have been doing...waiting for the next chapter!
I've gotta say I wasn't disappointed. I absolutely loved the ending. I felt the tension and the shock!!
I'm in the dark about what exactly is going on and I think that's a good thing. Why haven't the Aletheians contacted Wil and Astrid? Maybe they have been overtaken. Why are Wil and Astrid arrested? Was Gant "on" to Wil really...or just business as usual.
With so many questions, I think that tells you what a good job you've done with the plot and character development.
Don't wait so long to put up the next chapter.
I didn't see any blinding nits...maybe others will find some.
~Ann
Hey Gray!
Great chapter. Lots of tension, forward motion with the romance and the plot and a great hook at the end! I got nothing for you other than now you better get another chapter up because I’ve got to know what is happening. I almost though Rogue was Dax but now it looks like I might be wrong….or am I!
Bimmy
So Gant is tightening the noose and asserting his power. This is amusing because he shows all the signs of a psychotic: suspicion, seeing oneself as a Messiah, snappishness, odd beliefs, etc. His assertion that direction and purpose can only come from him is ego-maniacal, which will create exactly the kind of rebellion he seeks to avoid.
My only complaint about this chapter is that there is so much going on it is difficult to follow the plot.
Hey, Gray - Great ending! Our heroes look like they've bought the farm. Or have they? Is Dax really arresting them or...? Tune in next chapter!
Didn't spot any nits but do have some questions.
- "They wanted to evacuate him but he refused." Evacuate from York? To where?
- 'She must recognize him too, because he's looking right at her.' Why wouldn't they recognize him immediately? Is he wearing some kind of face shield?
Wil's task seems insurmountable at present, which makes this an exciting adventure. Good work!
Take care,
Jack
Some great details here - Gant looking like he's going to reach through the screen & rip off his head, rotting corpse smile.
Nits: ...he hisses [though] clenched teeth, (through). Some direct inner thoughts not italicized (might be a site glitch).
Anyway, great intrigue here and an awesome hook. Can't wait to read on!
So, to Gant the real crime is the very existence of a being of independent will and action? This drive to power is revealed (and not for the first time here) as a fundamental spiritual abyss. The logical way to proceed is for him to unthinkingly react to the depths of his own depravity and assume that if he ceases to gather power everyone else will do to him what he is doing to them--because they are evil. That the 'evil' he sees is the reflection of his own empty soul cannot occur to him.
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Now, I wait and see if that is the direction you're taking this in.
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Okay, now the reader will wonder whether Gant has out-foxed himself, with lower-level people crashing his scheme. Or some readers will. That's a great question, and a great dilemma: to outfox the local cops so you can run the FBI sting, all while keeping your nether end out of the slammer.
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Talk about multiple sources of despair.
Ah, Wil. *shakes head*
...He may even grow on you."
Vin frowns. "Yeah… like a fungus."
>Heh
Ok... looks like Gant doesn't need all that conniving to take over. He'll just overrunn the opposition. Fair enough. If he's smart he'll arrange to gt Astrid kidnapped now that he has her. Preferably losing about two dozen enforcers on the way so it looks real. That's 24 bodies when you got a million Enforcers and only 300 Alethians to stop you? ;)
-K
-K
Have we heard the title "Prime Evil One" before? Don't remember it - love it - fits Gant perfectly. Well, crap, this doesn't sound promising. But hey, call me stupid, I'm thinking Dax is going to save their butts. Betting he's a mole working for the Aletheians; at least that's what I'm hoping. Only question I have: "Did Dax get Vin, Brenne and Farroe?"
A very intense chapter from the get go, and if I were Wil I would absolutely NOT trust anything Gant tells him. I bet there is no sister, just someone stuck in the awful position of resembling Wil a tadbit. I hope Astrid shows him he has to base survival on getting themselves out of this, not rescuing a sister he doesn't even know he has. Astrid is betting her father is dead. She seems to think Perrin, Liv and Cael are dead too. Wondering how much they can trust Farroe? Maybe he isn't working with Gant, but then Gant could be working with his parents. That's why I asked if Dax had him.
Okay, for every question you answer, you dish out four more. LOL I'm so into this!
Flawless writing once again, wish I could get there. LOL On to the next chapter after the holidays.
Merry Christmas to your and yours, Gray. Be safe.
Sysan
Back to reading and reviewing after some time off for family gatherings. Hope you had a relaxing Christmas. I think you've made the right decision to get rid of the Gant POV chapters.
This is another great chapter, with a super hook at the end. Just when we think they'll get away to the Aletheians, everything is turned upside down. I don't know how you're going to get them out of this, but I look forward to reading it.
Cheers,
Don
Hey Gray,
Love the 'sunshine' line :).
Nice chapter. One question though, and this may be a dumb question. Astrid and Wil go off to the generator room. So far, they've done nothing to indicate that they're planning treason, unless they've been ratted out by the Aletheians, which I don't believe would happen. So, why are they being arrested? Couldn't they just be two hormonally charged teenagers who want some alone time? So, when Dax comes to arrest them, could he give some indication of how busted they really are? As I'm reading this, Dax summoned Wil to the Commander's office, looks like Wil is taking his sweet time getting there, so he could be in trouble for that, but Asrid is probably a very reasonable excuse for a young man to forget orders. (especially believable since they've been found being very cozy with one another).So..I can see him in trouble..by why under arrest?
I guess I'd like Dax to say something like, we got you now..your friends told us exactly where to find you..and then maybe he produces somebody who would be a traitor (and then, maybe in a twist, not be a traitor?). Does that make any sense?
And, the other question I have, (and this may be because I'm reading this in fragments and not as one novel), why is Gant so focused on Wil specifically? If he suspects that Wil isn't cooperating, couldn't he just kill him? And get another person to infiltrate on his behalf? What makes Wil so unique to this cause? What hold does Wil have? And maybe, in the Gant chapters, could we be reminded of Wil's unique power (not to make comparisons, but in the Hunger Games, the entire country collected around Katniss, so she became indispensable, in Harry Potter, Harry was The Chosen One,...so, I know Will comes from settlers, but what is his hold over Gant that say Vin, or anyone else can't do as well? (sorry if I'm being dense here, and maybe I have to go back and read an earlier chapter...if I do, just point me at it and I'll go reread it! Sorry.
That said, I love the character development and Wil's voice. I just feel like there's a certain something, some hook, that I'm not getting. Again, it could be my faulty reading...
Hey Gray,
So Dax shows his true colors. I bet his little act when he vouched for Wil and Astrid was orchestrated by Gant. And you have me thinking that the Fat Lady Has Just Sang. Let's see how you get our dynamic superheroes out of this jam.:) Wil is mature way beyond his years, thinking on his feet and always negotiating with Gant. That's a compliment, not a criticism. A superhero, a character trait you don't have to be a Young Adult to appreciate.
Why, then, does Gant look like he's about to reach through the sceen to rip off my head? ..to reach through the sceen and rip off my head?
How do/can I get this monster to tell me where he's taken my sister?
..earthworm lips wriggling to a smile. *love this image
..I plead, hating the submission/submissiveness in my voice.
Smelling lavender and tears. *smelling tears sounds off, seeing how his nose is nestled in her hair.
later gater
Didn’t find any nit in this chapter and looked again. Then I reread it to make sure. Still didn’t find anything, so I looked at the prior reviews and spotted the below nit mentioned. Checked and it’s still there. So I threw it in. Very good chapter with the beat beginning to pick up at the end with Wil and Astrid’s arrests. Didn’t see and thing wrong with the flow or the content, particularly any unnecessary tell. I’d say that after you fix the one nit it’s done. R.M.
{“First you make me wait for your transmission,” he hisses though/through clenched teeth}
I didn't find anything to nit pick. I'm beginning to think Dax might be Rogue. You would twist it like that.
I will say this: You write Wil so much better than Gant. Yes, Gray, your Gant chapters are missing something. I'm sure you'll find it. I think what comes across feels forced with him. Wil just rolls off like a natural aura.
Well, they could pretend they're having a little lovers' tryst. He did have his arms around her when they broke in.
We can only hope her dad is all right, and will be able to help them later on. But getting to the sister and rescuing her--that's another story.
Short, sweet and to the point--good writing. Lots of tension building. JP
Ann Everett