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Netflix just notified me of a new upcoming series called Constantine, starring Keanu Reeves, which involves a deal between God and Satan. Winner take all. It's based on a long-running comic book series and a series of novels. I almost freaked. As far as I can tell from the trailer and Wikipedia, many important elements differ. TBD.

I got scene 4.1 down to 9.25 pages. I may be able to trim a little more if I lose the buses. I'm going to wait for more feedback before deciding what else to chop. The scene with Damiano blessing the Pope was meant to lead to Damiano receiving a small gold(en) cross to wear, similar to the one Inspector De Rosa wears. Unfortunately, that would easily require another half page. On the other hand, if I yank out all of the stuff relating to the Pope, I'd hit my page count but would lose the Yoda joke and Death Star comparison, which add some fun to a Catholic-heavy scene.

Yes. Connor's under repeated attack by demonic forces. It seems like the natural thing for the Church to do. Think of them like guards in a conventional story. However, since the characters interact with them, they need names. There will also be Vatican Swiss Guards in the next act; in their case, I'll only name the senior guard.

Heretic. :-)

The chapter from hell is up. The orphans tour the Vatican. Only the tour of St. Peter's Square and St. Peter's Basilica are shown since Romano and Connor leave the tour before it's over. Technically, Connor's already seen the Sistine Chapel, but I'll probably have him revisit it in the future as a place he goes to think.

Thank you, Ann. That's probably as close as I can get.

Thank you, all.
Dirk

I googled side hugs and it's different than what I have in mind. Imagine two people standing side-by-side to be photographed. One of them places his arm across the other person's shoulder, resting his hand next to the other person's neck. t's a friendly act, but not intimate. I'll see if I can find a picture.

Never mind. Found it.

I declined. I used to get such requests on Facebook from Russia all the time.

I found the ultimate resource for St. Peter's Basilica: http://stpetersbasilica.info. Full of pictures and endless info, and everything is hyperlinked. Could have saved myself over a week of research if I'd found it first. Unfortunately, it's taken two pages just to get inside Vatican City and describe the square. I'll probably have to trim the history behind the obelisk. The opening does include a brief glimpse of the Pope, though. Tentatively, I have eight stops inside the church, including Michaelangelo's Pieta and Pope John Paul II's tomb. The Sistine Chapel needs two pages. And Connor's next miracle also needs two. I want to keep the whole thing at eight pages or less. There definitely won't be room for the Vatican Museums.

It wasn't so much fear of death, but fear of suffering. He knew he would rise in three days. Scourging was so vicious, it could be fatal, even before they got you up on the cross.

I just read both. I prefer the existing prologue as an opening. The epilogue didn't really give me any clarity as it relates to the early chapters I read. I don't recall the second half of the prologue, where you show time repeating, but it helps. That being said, the prologue introduces too many "names" (not just characters) too quickly, so it's hard to puzzle out what you're trying to say. If you're going for a "Huh?", then you've succeeded. However, confusion doesn't draw me into a story. I put Dune down at least three times when trying to read it as a kid. Once I saw the movie, bad as it was, I tore through the book at warp speed, even though I didn't understand it all. To this day, I still don't understand some of Frank Herbert's musings in God Emperor of Dune.