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If you think the last example was bad, check out this one I just noticed in the chapter:

:-)

Nice catch. I've been encouraged recently to replace name references with pronouns, assuming no confusion. It didn't occur to me how it reads because I'm too close to this chapter.

Thanks
Dirk

The answer to your first question depends on whether you can make the chapter names important, such as a hook, a little misdirection, or foreshadowing (e.g., The Emperor's Fate). I would definitely include a chapter number, otherwise people have to remember what chapter name they were on when they last read from the book. Given that you probably have dozens of chapters, I would use Arabic.

Dune & God Emperor of Dune by Frank Herbert
The Heechee Saga by Frederik Pohl

I took a look at one of your chapters. They appear to be formatted like everyone else's, so formatting shouldn't be a problem, unless I've misunderstood something. Once you open a specific chapter here on the site for editing, an edit box appears around the text. That's when you use Chrome's Find feature to mark all of the text items that match your search. It actually looks inside the text box for all instances of the search words and highlights them so you can them quickly. Unfortunately, you then have to manually change each one, but you shouldn't have to reformat anything, unless it's to manually apply italics, bold, etc. I don't know of a find-and-replace feature, although I've never looked for one. For minor name changes, it should go relatively quickly.

If you're using Google Chrome, you can use its Find function to highlight all instances of a word in a chapter, then replace them one at a time.  You have to be in TNBW edit mode for your chapter. The other way is copy your new chapter from your manuscript into the same chapter here in the site. Use Ctrl-c to copy (eg from a Word document), open your site chapter in edit mode, hit ctrl-a in the text box to select the entire old version of the chapter, then ctrl-v to paste in the chapter from Word that contains all your changes. Then save it. Hope that makes sense.

LOL

My latest attempt. The reference to radar suggests he's scanning, which is confirmed the next time he speaks.

Technically, he might still be smelling a fart. :-)

While, technically, the words in concentration are a head-hop, i'm leaning increasingly to the idea that the words are a reasonable assumption by Romano, although not necessarily a guarantee that they're the correct assumption. It's not always possible to show without killing the pace, and I find "tell" words like seemed to, apparently, as if, etc. to just fill the sentences with words that add nothing to the scene, except to demonstrate to the world our understanding of how to avoid head-hops. I'd argue this particular case is clearer without the extra verbiage.

Oops. Misunderstood your last comment on first read. I'm trying to limit the body count, although I'm not doing very well. Alessandro was unplanned, as was the reverend mother, but both seemed obvious once I wrote the scenes. Since they're both destined for heaven, it's not so bad. The dead gravedigger evolved out of a prior version of scene 1.2 (murder of the first cardinal), but I decided it might be useful to keep him dead. Not sure yet.

Eek! I've introduced 21 named characters in 12 scenes. Some have only bit parts and then disappear, but still...