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Save the Last Dance for Me

Gouda

Question: should Connor show fear? It's come up a few times already, when he's faced with danger, and his reaction to date has been to pray without so much as a tremor in his voice. His faith keeps him calm when others panic, but he's less human as a result. A prime example is the prologue, where he's trying to keep demonic locusts with scorpion-like stingers at bay. The group is terrified, but he prays fearlessly. Even when his voice grows hoarse and he can't maintain the shield any longer, he simply says it's in God's hands now. Kind of makes him seem invincible, which is not necessarily the best trait for someone under constant attack.

Thoughts?
Dirk

Temple, you're missing a period after "reader".

I would if my health allowed (the Holy Land even more so). I just (re)discovered I own a large encyclopedia-style book of the Vatican, with tons of color photographs. Now I just have to whittle everything down to a few key elements and hope I can make them sound interesting. Fortunately, Connor's little buddy, Damiano, doesn't know much about Catholicism (I know the feeling), so he gets to ask all the newbie questions. I'm still trying to squeeze in an appearance by the Pope (he was supposed to lead the Papal Mass). I may have him appear at the window of the Apostolic Palace above St. Peter's Square, before the group goes inside the basilica.

Well, the Papal Mass is out. Not enough material online to do it justice. However, I did stumble on what I hope is a really good tourist guide for the Vatican, including St. Peter's Basilica, the Sistine Chapel, and the Vatican Museum. Throw in another miracle by Connor, and I should be good to go.

Just trying to add a little description.

Thanks
Dirk

The Exorcist!

Nuts. My scene about the orphans visiting St. Peter's Basilica is falling apart. The basilica and a Papal Mass are much more complicated than I had expected. Also, the city of Rome surrounding the basilica doesn't have the features I was hoping for. I was hoping to find an overpass nearby for Connor's next miracle. Failing that, a bridge over the Tiber River. They have the latter, but it's a hike to get there. A bit much for the younger orphans who are supposed to be in this scene. Also, there's no good excuse for going there. There's a castle there, but I don't want to dedicate page space for the boys to tour it.

Lake-Ellen returns? Cool. I better pick up my pace in Terrorcruise so I'm ready for her next sojourn. Thank you for your feedback.

Yes, that's the intent, but without hitting the reader over the head with it. I think even Catholic readers would get bored if I stop to show it every time it happens.

For the crossing/formula, my preference would be to show it a few times up front, then phase it out, then bring it back from time to time when I want to emphasize it. The feedback I got in chapter one when I tried to have Connor do it exactly as he should was to show it once (i.e., before the first prayer), then make it go away as fast as possible (that readers would just get it). The feedback I got when I tried to have Romano note to himself that that's how Connor always does it was even more negative, although that's probably ideal, but I have yet to come up with acceptable wording. I'll throw up an example tomorrow.

A more generic example would be saluting in a military story. If someone salutes their commander two or three times, would you assume they always do so even when not explicitly noted, or would you conclude the subordinate (or the author) forgot to do it. That's even more problematic if the person later salutes after getting chewed out for something unrelated.