It just occurred to me that there is a great reason why Connor looks like his maternal grandfather at the same age. He doesn't just get his looks from his father (zombie De Rosa's DNA), he also gets them from his mother, who carries many of the same genes from the breeding program, only some generations removed. I was going to make her father the one who escaped from the breeding program, but that causes all kinds of potential problems. De Rosa saw the picture of Campagna's father at a young age, when he looked like Connor. If everyone in the breeding program looked alike (not quite twins, but close), then alarm bells should perhaps be going off in Satan's mind.

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Famous guest stars whose names you may know (from Gemini):

Zsa Zsa Gabor - she was great
Dick Martin - wow! I don't remember him on the show, and I'm too lazy to google
Don Rickles - annoying man
Phil Sillvers - fun episode where they put on a performance of Hamlet set to music from records/gramophone they brought with them on the 3-hour tour smile
Dick Sargent - I know the name, but that's it
Mickey Rooney

The rest of the top 25 list of names I don't recognize at all.

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Nyet. He would have just been born when the show first aired (1964). Whoever wrote/said that was probably referring to Kurt Russell. He appeared on the show as a guest star at the age of 13. He played a jungle boy who eventually goes up in a hot air balloon the professor had been making. He couldn't speak English, although the castaways had taught him a few simple words. I don't remember where he touched down, but when he was questioned, all he could say were things like boy and girl.

I am such a geek. smile

Minor post to move this up in the forum.

Quick edit to move this to the top of the forum.

Hi, finger. Welcome to the site. I sent you a "quickee" with some info you may find useful.

Moved the following from Amy's memoriam thread to here.

finger0126 wrote:

hello

Ending upon ending upon ending. smile After Christ crowns Connor the Lesser King, he will also give Connor the title of Unholy Shepherd. The reason? Connor will not only be responsible for ruling all those newly occupied planets, but, infinitely more important, he will be tasked with helping his "flock" (the mortal sinners) get to Heaven. That was always the purpose of the other planets, anyway (i.e. try again!), but this change will make him both king and shepherd. Since the demons will be eliminated (sent into the black hole or to some nasty world where humans will be forbidden to go), things won't be quite as evil the second time around (until the demons escape - book 4?). Although Connor, his mother, and Romano will be among the immortals, the mortal sinners won't be, so there'll always be a need for him and his descendants, who will be incredibly long-lived beings. He'll also be the Immortal Sinner, although I still have to come up with a reason to give him that third title.

It's the real reason God chose Connor for the great deeds he has to achieve -- to prepare him for all of the above in the "afterlife". smile

Of course, once someone defies God and goes to the planet of the demons, all Hell breaks loose. Literally, lol.

With the usual apology to Clement Clarke Moore, who spins in his grave every time I do one of these. smile

Twas the night before Christmas, and all through the site, trespassers keep coming, hawking wares left ‘n’ right.
First Dirk and now Bill, both armed with dark power, delete you we may, fake members we scour.

Sol held a contest, new users were added, but more we do need, our ranks must be padded.
Our grand Christmas wish, revamping the site, review-only members, could help us that might.

Marilyn’s posting her latest great tale, a story of critters, sweet angels who ail.
Evildoers beware, cause Mellie’s off leash, a rottweiler dog, turned Vince into quiche.

Jack just completed a thrilling new yarn, subplots-a-many, mob gangsters he’ll harm.
Already he found, a buyer to publish; so tale that he wove, won’t end in the rubbish.

Terry has paused his wild posting rate, taking a breather, to recuperate.
His fingers grew tired of typing so fast, review he still does, and nits he does blast.

Bill’s been a-posting, his latest fine story, an undersea thriller, so far nothing gory.
But something dark lurks, beneath the still water, I don’t yet know what, nor who it may slaughter.

Dirk is still working on two endless tales; many fine heroes, but too many males. Aside from that issue, one thing does remain, a forty-page chapter, must trim it again.

George is progressing, albeit slowly, his story of spirits, the West, and things holy.
In thanks for his feedback, a smart move he hopes, I’ll make him a Cath’lic, the first female pope.

K is reworking his novel again, draft seven of Laurie, he prays it will end.
In thanks for his comments, mistake though may be, cause Kay he became, femme fatale now is he.

New Jersey’s a ghost, we see him so little, but help out he does, his thumbs never twiddle.
Immortal I made him, believe it or not, his name’s an equation, a part of my plot.

Nathan’s been here since 2008, at last he’s my victim, of a poem this great.
His portfolio’s huge, from memoirs to fiction, bigfoot to sailboats, all with great diction.

Barry still visits, reworking his tale, “The Twelfth Moon” — a sci-fi, space rangers can’t fail!
A little bit gross it may yet become, but those were old drafts, new stuff has he spun.

Morag is writing fine horror times two, perhaps Jimmy Hoffa’s in two-forty-two.
This year I did learn, Scots speak crazy fast, with commas too slow, their patience won’t last.

Randy I’ll venture is blowing stuff up, blood he will spill, filling thy cup.
Vern’s always here, lurking about, portfolio full, fine tales — have no doubt.
Pam has returned, connections remade, as soon as you post, reviews we can trade.

Alan’s away, he comes and he goes, caring for loved ones, we miss him he knows.
Alan and Di, we wish you both well, the spirit of Christmas, within you shall dwell.
Lauren, whenever, drop by if you can, root for you we do, you’re part of our clan.
Elysse is off too, recovering now, a series of mishaps, so time we allow.
Bobbie is absent, though we know not where, we wish her fine health, this season take care.

And so as I finish this horrible poem, my thanks to you all, cause surely I owe ‘em.
More time did I waste on this very date, when really I’d hoped to re-cip-ro-cate. smile

Happy Holidays!
Dirk

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How about if I serve as nuncio from the Vatican to the USA?

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George FLC wrote:

I don't really know you much at all, but I know good news when I hear it. Congratulations!

George, meet Jack. Jack meet George.

Problem solved. smile

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jack the knife wrote:
Nathan B. Childs wrote:

Congratulations, Jack. How many published books does this make?

Thanks, Nathan! This will be my sixteenth, including three co-authored novels.

Wow!

Sol,

Marilyn noted this evening that the points math is still 5-to-1. We may have lost a newer member because of it.

Also, can you please give us an update on where things stand with recent bug reports? Are fixes still in progress, or are those on hold until you divide the site's workflow into reviewers-only and paying members?

Any ETA on any of these?

Thanks
Dirk

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Nailed it! Inspired by my original typo. Go figure.

...Since the lay public could barely pronounce tritrarium, much less spell it, some fool geologist with a poor understanding of human nature, suggested holding a contest to rename it. The winning entry was Starry McStarface. Horrified, geologists refused to accept the result. After considerable public outrage and endless lawsuits, the judge overseeing the matter, caught on a bad day and fed up with the stupidity of it all, unilaterally imposed a compromise: McRock.

I'm truly McDemented. Total waste of a day, but I love the result.

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Yes. I misread how you spelled it originally. I like yours better.

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I fooled around with Gemini, hunting for names that *do* suggest interstellar travel, the revised assumption being that these mineral stones have a formal name (atreidite? trirarium?), but are commonly known as (one of) galaxy grains, cosmic shards, nova nuggets, starstuff, or stellar stones, a name that evolved once they began to be used for powering stardrives. All five of those names have been used, of course. Galaxy grains are a snack in the Star Wars universe. Starstuff (star stuff) is typically associated with Carl Sagan, which could be a nice tribute.

In descending order, I like starstuff, nova nuggets, and galaxy grains. I just have to pick one and stop wasting time.

EDIT: I went with trirarium and nova nuggets. Although I prefer starstuff, it would make for too many repetitive references to stars in the names (e.g., stardrives powered by starstuff - nyet). Nova nuggets are formed during supernovas, hence their nova name.

Thanks for everyone's help. Now go out and see if you can find any deposits of the mineral. The galaxy awaits!

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Or joulestones may become a permanent part of the English language. smile  I could organize rock-hunting parties, where I send people out to hunt for those incredibly valuable energy stones, with a substantial reward for anyone who finds one. Put that on Facebook, and watch the fun. tongue  Better yet, hold the rock hunt on April 1.

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Kdot wrote:

Joulestones is overly accurate. They'd realistically be called (inaccurately) Wattstones

Wouldn't wattstones be just as overly accurate as joulestones?. These stones not only have a maximum energy storage capacity (expressed in joules), but also a rate at which energy can flow in/out of a given stone (in watts). You need both to fully specify the two properties of these stones.

Also, only joulestones have the play on words (jewel). My assumption is these minerals have to be processed to change them from gemstones into gems (jewels) to maximize their effectiveness as batteries.

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Great news, Jack. Congrats.

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George FLC wrote:

The first miner to find one picks it up and the heat from his hand starts a reaction and it begins to glow and become intensely hot. The miner calls it a handstar. Or perhaps handnova

The engineers that work on them can be called starlords (I could only find Star-Lords on the net). Novalord has been used.

Same issue as in one of my previous posts. These guys wouldn't be named for the stars since the stardrive has yet to be invented when the stones are found. I like the idea of the stones giving off energy, but it has to act like a battery, not like a radioactive substance. I could see it giving off electromagnetic energy that the stones absorbed naturally, perhaps from exposure to light and/or heat, including from the heat of entry in a planet's atmosphere

Interestingly, that means njc's joulestone deserves serious consideration, both for its reference to energy and its indirect reference to jewels. So, the mineral has to be processed to produce gems to maximize their potential as batteries, which was my preference anyway.

Going a step further, these stones could be rare remnants from planetary formation. I like the idea of it coming from certain asteroids/meteors that smack the planet and deliver the stuff to the Earth (and other planets), mostly from a star system's Oort Cloud and Kuiper Belt, both features of every star system. That means humans should not only be looking for the stuff on terrestrial planets but also in the cloud/belt (needles in a haystack).

Joulestones is my new favorite. smile

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I think I can leave out the reference to hyperbattery, although I still need to give a minimal description of what the stones do. I'll have to search my Word docs for any references to batteries.

In addition to the three x-stones I already mentioned, I also like njc's arcstone. I want to avoid names that tie it to powering stardrives (e.g., jumpstones) since stardrives won't exist when the mineral is first found and named.

Although energystones and powerstones are the obvious names I could (should?) use, they're rather simplistic/boring. I'm trying to decide if the stones should have a less obvious, more interesting name with a story behind it. I don't intend to go into those details, but the names could be more interesting. I imagine that whoever first finds this mineral notices some odd properties about it (related to energy?), and its name, which is probably chosen soon after it's found, could reflect those odd properties.

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George FLC wrote:

Let me suggest:
Fusolite (I have a hard time leaving fusion behind)
Heliogen (go a notch up on hydrogen)
Heliofuse
Tritarium (no long i's, long a, and emphasis on second syllable)

Thanks for those.

I was leaning toward firestones, using "fire" because these minerals (gems?) are used as hyperbatteries to store/release energy, mainly for stardrives. I'm also considering energystones and powerstones. Neither term is overused in the real world (energy stones are another name for healing stones, and power stones are used in some games, including as a way for players to unlock new abilities (powers)).

Any fusionish names won't work because the stones are charged using energy from either a neutrino annihilator (for big military ships) or a fusion generator (for smaller interstellar ships).

I like Trirarium too, although I still lean toward one of the stones above.

Preferences?
Dirk

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Requirements for the revised chapter(s):

- Joseph tells his parents everything; this is necessary, even if only in a brief flashback. His goal is to convince them Michael et al are real, to renounce the throne, and be permitted to leave to become a prophet.
- His parents commit him to the psych ward and (foolishly) give the shrinks free reign as long as they don't harm him. I was considering using just one shrink, but I need at least two for their conversation about the illegal drug, and three allows me to use the Goofus, Doofus, and Rufus joke.
- Cut Joseph off from outside help, even if the guards are a mere shouting distance away (for emergencies). Torture him psychologically (e.g., the forced nudity) and physically (e.g., the dangerous tests) to bring him as low as I can at this point in the story, including putting his life at risk (I intend to do more with the latter; might as well kill him, even though only briefly).
- Introduce Catherine, and flesh out her character (this wasn't originally my intention, but given how it worked out, I'm going to keep her).
- Give the reader more background on Archangel Syndrome. The conclusion is he has the "condition". The implication is that Apollo has it to.
- Have Joseph take steps to get himself freed from the ward. Most of this one is currently missing since he depends mostly on Catherine for the rescue. As I mentioned in my reply to your review, I'm sure I can find a way for him to trigger the MIND to raise the alarm (e.g., with something he swipes from the testing station and takes to his room for later, which could be a sharp instrument).
- Finally convince his mother that Michael et al are real and to allow him to proceed with his destiny. This was actually the main goal of the whole tri-chapter, much of the rest having been unplanned. I need to involve Michael and St. James in his rescue, though, because it further demonstrates their importance to his safety, life, and future.
- "Revenge" against the shrinks in causing them to strip at the end. He has no control over anything else that happens to them.

With some changes noted above, I think I can put more of the plot and outcome of this chapter in Joseph's hands. He can trigger his own rescue, perhaps by stabbing himself, but I can't fully eliminate him relying on others for the actual rescue since that's the role of the guards. Naturally, it's great for the shrinks (i.e., the antagonists) to have their own goals, which run counter to Joseph's.

I originally intended this tri-chapter as the end of novella one, but I now plan to end it right before the above all happens, ending instead with the two prior chapters, when Joseph and Apollo commit to their respective destinies. The only disadvantage is that neither chapter ends with a cliffhanger, although committing to their destinies is a pretty big deal in and of itself.

Better?
Dirk

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Moving Kdot's post here from the Connor thread:

Kdot wrote:

I'm not sure how self-reliant I should make Joseph for the tri-chapter. After all, he gets thrown into the nutward by his parents, so it isn't like he would be trying to escape. And the ward is surrounded by his guards, so he's always just a few steps from receiving help anyway

Hmm "self-reliant" wasn't the angle I was thinking. More agency would be welcome, but he doesn't need to pull a Laurie and charge 100 orderlies / armed security guards with little more than duct tape and a pair of scissors.

I feel my question is what the story is "About". Right now it's about the rise and fall of the doctors:

In the beginning, Dr G aspired to claim goal X.
Middle: In his pride, he shot to shortcut the righteous path and erred.
Crisis: He makes a decision to force his results. To clean up his mistake he lays a trap
Denoument: G is thwarted and dealt his punishment

As you may observe above, the 4-step story I wrote is not about Joseph; he merely happens to be in it. The stakes are light for him (and the danger relatively low if his guards are near). There is little he can win aside from his parent's recognition.

Michael even says this himself: "Nothing here really mattered except that Catherine came out as your friend" (My paraphrase of course)

You should file my question for later after you've reached the end, but I think it'll solve the length problem / thinning problem you're dealing with. If you can make this *about* Joseph, meaningful to him, a journey that transforms his greater journey, the length won't even be noticeable

I prefer last stand to last gamble/gambit in part because of Custer's Last Stand. My target audience of course knows/expects Satan will lose in the end, but I think the reason people read those end of the world stories is to see how. Although his last challenge is a key driver for the story, ultimately it's about Connor being able to overcome Satan's control over him (genetically programmed to obey daddy, raised to believe his father has been wronged, etc.) and ultimately triumph in the end, albeit as the Lesser King and the Unholy Shepherd (if Gandalf can have a billion names, why not two titles for Connor (in addition to Antichrist).