Yeah, but not all Catholics agree on Revelation being heavily symbolic, primarily because of the influence of Protestant interpretations online and in popular books, like the Left Behind series. Also, because Revelation isn't discussed much in Catholic churches. Some priests don't teach it because they think it's too scary for parishioners. And, since the Church has said little officially about how to interpret it, Catholics are free to speculate.

Oddly, I was watching a Catholic priest explain Revelation, and he discussed the 42 months as if they were literal, not figurative. Hmm. I haven't had the time to finish the video yet.

My comment that humans suck at interpreting the Bible (45,000 denominations), includes all Christians, not just Protestants, whose denominations are fruitful and multiply like bunnies. smile There are simply too many ways to interpret many of the verses (the four "senses" used by Catholics), so whose to know? I read many different study guides for Catholic and Protestant interpretations of Revelation while researching Connor. Although some agree on some things, they can still vary wildly. One author went so far as to suggest that cell phones (held up to the head, like a mark on the forehead) and credit cards/fingerprints (for buying) are the marks of the Beast.

And although Satan's goose may indeed be cooked, I wonder who came up with the idea that he can't turn back to the light. I mean, even Vader overcame his nasty side. And I have a trilogy with a kid who ultimately overcomes much of his destiny, but then everyone except me is reading Revelation incorrectly. tongue

The bet was made shortly after Satan read Revelation, so early in the second century.

With respect to your previous comments, God knows everything, God will win.

Here's the logic I've tentatively settled on (unless someone blows this up on me):

Like everything in the Bible, the version of Revelation we have has to be interpreted correctly. So, when God shows it to us, common sense says that the correct interpretation of the future currently in the Bible is: Satan and sinning humans, change your ways or Revelation is what will happen to you. It's God's final warning.

As a result, Satan knows he must do something else, otherwise his butt will burn. Rather than stop sinning and return to worshipping and serving God, Satan cooks up the challenge, which, if he succeeds, offers him a different way to escape the fire while simultaneously forcing God and the angels to leave Earth, so Satan can rule it. Since God has a greater purpose for the challenge, he accepts.

The prophets, too, realize that Revelation is a warning (as are many Bible stories), not to be read literally (e.g., prove your obedience to God by killing your son, unless an angel stays your hand), so they have no problem writing it the way they did, which was done under the guidance of the Holy Spirit.

Humans, being smart too, have enough intelligence that they can figure this out as well (hell, I did, and my brain's not exactly firing on all thrusters, lol). It's just that most humans suck at interpreting the Bible correctly (45,000 denominations and counting), so most Christians think Revelation is literally what will happen.

Many Catholics have begun to realize what God intended, and have changed their interpretation, including the fact that much of the wording in Revelation is figurative, not literal. They too realize God is saying: Satan and sinning humans, change your ways, or Revelation is what will happen to you.

One might ask why God didn't simply come right out and say the above words. Sometimes he does, sometimes he doesn't. He didn't, for example, include an explicit statement prior to the story of the Flood (sinning humans, changes your ways, or I'll drown you all). Similarly, in Genesis, in the story of Adam & Eve, he didn't say, sinning humans, don't disobey me (i.e., don't eat the fruit), or I'll punish you severely, although he does say that elsewhere. Tons of examples where God has decided to show, not tell. smile

Here, too, dual timelines are no longer needed.

>> I don't know if you have any other choice. God anticipated the bet and gave the prophecies
George, I'm not sure from your sentence which future you think God has to give the prophets. In order to avoid the causality loop, I believe God has to give the prophets the version of Revelation that we ourselves have in the real world, which, as I noted way above, is a valid version of the future, just not the one Satan chose. Of course, God knows when he gives the prophets the version of Revelation without a challenge, that it is not the version that will ultimately come to pass. Do you consider that lying?

Satan (De Rosa) can't, but Connor can. He's descended from both De Rosa (a recently killed member of the breeding program) and Campagna (unknowingly descended from an escaped member of the breeding program from centuries past), so he's actually more powerful than Satan, although I haven't figured out when the best time is to use that. His brawl with De Rosa inside St. Peter's Basilica in the middle of book two is interrupted when Connor collapses (Adam is trying to break through). Connor doesn't like reading the minds of people he cares about because he gets flooded with a lot of their private thoughts.

EDIT: I just figured out when to use it. smile During the aforementioned brawl, Connor allows his father to belt him in the face a few times before grabbing De Rosa's thrown fist midair with one hand and beginning to crush it. Surprises the hell out of Satan, after which Connor really lets him have it, right before Connor collapses.

I think loops in stories are great, especially unintended ones. But I'm not sure how this story would benefit from placing everything in a loop, other than an opening for sequels. smile The planned plot is already very complex (Connor carrying Adam's soul, Connor learning that he was bred to follow Satan, Dr. Lombardi is actually Eve in her glorified body, etc.). Also why would God allow that loop when he just took actions, per my previous post, to prevent a different one?

Current plan for book two:
- Apocalyptic events have begun (i.e., natural disasters, etc.)
- Connor is a badass; has twin Goth girlfriends with whom he regularly has sex; has concluded he's on the wrong side of history, but feels compelled to serve his father, even though he's still pissed off that he was conceived through rape
- Connor continues working to convert ever more Protestant churches to follow him; pushes Muslim leaders to convert as well; destroys several of their holy places, including the mosque on the Temple Mount, to force them to accept him; returns control of the Temple Mount to the Jews as a sign that he really is their Messiah
- Connor has begun experiencing symptoms of Adam awakening within him, which he doesn't understand and keeps hidden from Satan; those will get worse and worse
- Satan sends Connor's girlfriends away, so Connor ups the ante and takes a Protestant minister's 16-year-old son as a gay lover
- Bishop Romano is given the journal of a deceased geneticist, who in modern times, was responsible for Satan's ongoing breeding program
- Campagna invites Connor to a meal at her parents' home, where he meets a number of his relatives; he gets upset because everyone is being so nice to the "Antichrist"; he and his grandfather have a heart to heart on the balcony
- Romano arrives and shows Connor the journal, including entries about the gene in Connor that was bred specifically to compel him to do Satan's bidding
- Connor decides he wants out; their first stop is Campagna's regular church, where Romano hears his first real confession; he is baptized; they celebrate Mass; he receives instructions from the Holy Spirit to return to his father in preparation for what's to come
- He does so; finds his lover strangled in St. Peter's Square; confronts Satan; they have a huge supernatural fight in St. Peter's Basilica
- Connor collapses during the fight due to Adam's continued awakening; he's hospitalized; Satan summons Campagna because Connor seems near death and he's hoping she can save him; Connor recovers and returns to Satan
- Cardinal Nnamani continues to implement his holy vision to retake the Vatican "without violence" on the part of his followers; leads them to St. Peter's Square to confront the Unholy Trinity on the steps leading into St. Peter's Basilica
- all hell breaks loose; God uses Campagna to cleanse the Vatican of demons; Satan is severely burned/disfigured during the cleansing and disappears from the Vatican
- Adam awakens fully; the Holy Spirit arrives (same Black man as in book one) and uses his powers so Connor and Adam can meet face-to-face, even though they exist within the same body and share one soul
- More details TBD

- book three is equally busy, including Connor discovering and meeting his supernatural "cousins" from the breeding program, who still live deep in the jungle where they were bred; Apocalyptic disasters continue; the final confrontation between Satan's demons and Connor and his cousins at Megiddo; big-ass fight between Connor and Satan's lieutenant, who is actually many demons (10?) in one powerful genetically enhanced body; Christ returns
- lots more to the story, including the rescue mission, Connor's desire to free everyone from Hell, condemned sinners begin getting sucked into the Lake of Fire in vast numbers, where they "burn" for a time before transporting to other worlds to live/try again to make it to Heaven (this is akin to a loop, by the way)
- Connor/Adam given the chance to jump into the lake of fire and accept God's punishment on behalf of all mortal sinners, something Adam is too terrified to do, but Connor throws himself/Adam in; they burn until all that remains of them is the thought of "pain!"; finally, Connor/Adam are transported back to Megiddo, where Campagna, Romano, and others are waiting; Connor has a glorified body, making him immortal
- Connor and several of the main characters are taken to the top of a mountain by St. Michael, where they meet the Father; not sure if the mountain will be the same as the one where Moses went to receive the ten commandments; Connor and the others are told about the portal, the other worlds for sinners who didn't make it to Heaven this time around; Connor is told his punishment for trying to free all souls from Hell is to rule all of those worlds; Campagna and Romano decide to join him
- Satan eventually gets sucked into the lake of fire; he burns like Connor/Adam did; is transported to a small moon or large asteroid that is falling into the supermassive black hole at the center of the Milky Way
- Although I'm unlikely to live long enough to write any more books in the series (I still want to finish Archangel as a series of novellas), the ending to book three of Connor pretty much sets up an infinite number of potential sequels in which he rules the galaxy

Other than that, not much going on. smile  Now you probably see why I'd rather not add a loop to this story as well. smile

Are you referring to the loop I mentioned earlier but didn't explain? If so, it goes like this:

Assume John always knows and writes about what really will happen in the future. Since the challenge doesn't appear in Revelation, Satan will issue one. But, John should have foreseen that and mentioned it in Revelation, including the fact that Satan loses. Of course, as soon as Satan reads that, he knows not to issue the challenge, at least not that one. But if he doesn't issue it, then John would have written Revelation as we know it. And again, Satan would issue the challenge.

To prevent this loop, God prevents Satan from knowing his final fate. So, Satan would have issued the challenge and spent 2000 years preparing for it (breeding humans to produce superhuman Connor). Even though Satan no longer knows his fate, he has no choice but to proceed since winning is the only way he can escape the lake of fire.

He also no longer knows the fate of the Antichrist, the False Prophet, any of the demons, and all mortal sinners. If he did, that would give him too much information, from which he could probably guess his fate, and the loop would exist yet again.

So, God has to prevent Satan and us from knowing our fates. God is also more than willing to let Satan sweat over his ultimate fate.

Naturally, the fact that there are two possible futures, both equally valid, though only God knows which will come to pass, is really two timelines but without me having to even mention the word or describe the concept.

The only issue is whether Christians/Catholics will view God's actions as "lying" to the prophets. I say no because both timelines are equally valid, and either could come to pass based solely on Satan's decision about the challenge (naturally God knows in advance what Satan will decide, but that doesn't remove Satan's free will).

And God chooses to show the prophets the future that does not result in a causality loop, which also serves God's purpose with regard to the future rescue mission undertaken by Connor/Adam.

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Firestones

I'm doing this from memory, which is never a good thing, but for Catholics, the 1000 year period has been underway since shortly after Christ's death, when they developed the concept of the Eucharist. That is, to Catholics, the real presence of Christ on Earth.

It therefore follows that Satan is already in the bottomless pit, locked away. Naturally, that's not a physical pit, nor is there a physical chain around him. Since, figuratively speaking, his power is diminished in this period, what we see in the real world is his remaining influence.

I included the aforementioned chain in the first draft: the Christian cross around De Rosa's neck. It was secured around his neck by St. Michael at a moment when Satan was distracted. It's what causes his painful stigmata every time he kills a clergyman. That's what keeps him from killing more of them. The chain also prevents him from leaving his current (De Rosa) body.

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I decided a while ago that I'm going to rename atreidite, the mineral that acts as a hyperbattery to power stardrive jumps. While I intend to give some nod to Dune in this story, if I haven't already, atreidite is too obviously close to Atreides. I want something more creative.

The name should suggest its function (an incredibly powerful battery). My first alternative, which I immediately dismissed, was to call the mineral "abattery". :-)

I'm open to suggestions.
Dirk

I tell my doctor his pills make me stupid. tongue

I understand what you're saying, Terry, but the whole premise of the challenge is that things will not end the same way as originally prophesied by John and others. Since I insist that the Bible in my story remain inerrant, the question becomes, what's the best way to explain how that is possible? The alternate timeline is okay, but there is a lot of complexity to the concept if you think about it. The write-up for it is fairly straightforward for those who want to read at most a few paragraphs about how it works and move on.

But many readers these days are very savvy, and I don't want to publish something that is fatally flawed the moment you peek under the hood. If you do focus on it, then you have to think about things like: How many instances of me are there in the multiverse? Are we each distinct individuals, no more alike than twins, or are we connected on a deeper level? If the latter, how many souls are there for me? Is it just one that is somehow shared by all of us? I'd be okay with raising all those issues if that was the focus of the novels, but it's not. And there are many more issues beyond those above.

The other alternative I also considered right from the beginning was to sidestep multiple timelines (2 in this case) and have God give the prophets a vision of the future that is identical to our future. The latter would come true only if there was no challenge, which is the real world we live in. So, the Bible prophesies tell our future.

But the challenge changed that, which is a future God chose not to reveal in full. In part, it's to keep Satan from knowing his future. But mostly it's to prevent a crazy time loop. I'll skip the details for now.

As noted in my earlier posts, God wants Satan to issue the challenge, which is exactly what he eventually does. God's role in steering Satan to that chosen path amounted to having the prophets write the prophesies we see in the Bible, knowing that Satan would read and act on them in an attempt to prevent them from coming to pass. But the prophets and Satan are intelligent and have free will. They should have at least considered what will happen when Satan reads Revelation. The fact that they didn't doesn't change the fact that the outcome still required conscious decisions on their part. God knew what their decisions would be, but they made the choices.

While it's true that Satan really had no choice (lake of fire or mystery prize behind door #2), he made it far worse for himself. As mentioned in the ancient letter (written by Satan), demons and glorified humans have the ability to tolerate the Lake of Fire, although it still involves great suffering, but not so much that the punished beings can no longer contemplate their eternal punishment. After all, what's the point of a punishment if the condemned are in such searing agony that they are nothing more than tortured animals without even the ability to think anymore. Their whole existence would be reduced to one endless thought: agony!

Instead, Satan foolishly upped the ante by suggesting that if Satan won the challenge, God and the angels should return to the spirit realm and abandon Earth forever, leaving it to Satan to rule. God said okay, but if Satan loses, the temperature in the lake of fire will rise a thousandfold (oops). Since the challenge remained Satan's only escape from the lake, he had to accept.

And God has no need to fog Satan's mind.

I could ramble on, but I'm tired.

I've been mulling ways to eliminate dual timelines. It's a fairly complex issue, with plenty of plot holes no matter which way I slice it.

Rather than another timeline, which requires readers to wrap their minds around my 4th century explanation and ignore the plot holes, what if God gave the Bible prophets a vision of the future that is identical to what they eventually wrote down, yet that version would only come to pass if Satan did not issue the challenge?

In this way, the vision is true/correct, although the prophets, including John, and Satan will all misinterpret it as prophesying what will happen, rather than what could happen. This means the Bible remains inerrant. It is and remains the faithful word of God; it just has to be interpreted correctly.

While it could be argued that this is close to God lying, he gave all those prophets and Satan sufficient intelligence to question the prophecies, yet none of the prophets thought to consider what will happen when Satan reads Revelation. Even Satan should have questioned God's motives. As a result, Satan issued the challenge rather than suffer an eternity in the lake of fire.

That's exactly what God wants (and being omniscient he knows it will happen), but in addition to intelligence, God also gave those men (and Satan) free will, so the decisions (and the misinterpretations) were theirs to make. Just as God knows when someone will sin, it's still up to that person to make the decision that takes them down the dark path.

Had Satan seen how he was being manipulated and chosen not to issue a challenge, then the future prophesied in the Bible would actually come to pass, which leaves Satan back in the lake of fire. So, you see, technically, the "false" vision could have come true based solely on Satan's free will.

In this way, the Bible remains inerrant and I have no need to introduce an alternate timeline and everything that goes with it.

I wonder how long until this solution falls apart. smile

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That reminds me, in addition to the Bunny Divine news broadcast, which only lasts for a few paragraphs, I could write a real short story about the killing of Mama and many other mobsters, with Kay as the protagonist/assassin.

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Oh, he's definitely in it, the first time driving his old beat-up taxi trying to help Joseph & Paul escape the spaceport where they work as slaves, and the second time when he helps break the kids out of prison and drives them back to the spaceport in a limo to a waiting transport. The latter ride was completely uneventful, which is boring.

So, I intend to equip the limo with fantastic tech to fight off Caligula's forces pursuing Joseph. Since there have already been two chases in the story (the first where Mama's guards pursue Joseph, an escaped slave, and the second when Imperial forces pursue Apollo as he flees the planet), another chase probably wouldn't be that interesting, unless I can find something very unique to do. At this point, Leonardo is rich and powerful as he was hired by his Aunt Ma'am (Apollo's former governess and the Imperatrix's chief slayer) to help her run Mama's Little Shipping after Lady Kay kills Mama with a poison that causes his intestines to expand at the speed of sound, as described in my Bunny Divine short story.

Remember, in a market scene in one of the Indiana Jones films, where an Arab blocks Indiana's path and shows off his skills twirling a sword? Indiana pulls a gun and just shoots him. Problem solved. LoL. I'm trying to think of a way to do something similar using the limo tech, although much more involved than the scene with Indy. After all, these are Imperial forces in hot pursuit, not just a few guards from a criminal organization.

Details TBD.

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That's what embedded credit cards are for. smile  Add a few replicated copies of Galaxinet throughout the solar system (and the rest of settled space), and you're good to go. Anyplace in the galaxy you go, if they have a copy of Galaxinet, you won't be able to do much of anything until overdue bills are paid. Very basic food, clothes, shelter, and medical care might be exceptions, but your choices will be very restricted. Of course, none of this will make it into the book, and someone much smarter than me can figure out how to build banking and other services into a galactic database that only gets updated every 12 hours. Too bad the scarcity of atreidite for interstellar travel is holding up progress on that front. smile

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Good point. Maybe just an electronic document, signed by the Imperator, that grants Joseph and his companion safe passage off Earth. Of course, that document could be filed on Galaxinet by the Imperial bureaucracy, along with Joseph's DNA, so that if any official entity on Earth later scans his DNA, the Imperator's order pops up.

However, the surest way to bring society to a halt, even if only briefly, is some event that takes down the bureaucracy's electronic systems, such as a massive solar flare (greater than anything ever seen in our solar system) or simple sabotage, like a virus. How many times has our society been affected by massage outages of one huge firm or another? Naturally, as often as not, the latter outages are usually the result of some simple text "config" file being edited incorrectly. :-)

Besides, this still assumes I have Apollo and Joseph meet while he's on Earth. While it has the potential to be an interesting scene, I still struggle with having continued tension between the two of them. Perhaps there could be widespread rumors that Joseph's deceased mother was assassinated by the Imperium and that Nero was assassinated by agents from New Bethlehem. That would further force Apollo's hand to attack New Bethlehem, which he refuses before being overthrown.

A more interesting scene would be if Leonardo (the crazy taxi driver) breaks Joseph out of prison (he does eventually) just as the feds realize who Joseph is and go after him, with him just barely escaping from the planet. Of course, by then, Apollo has already been overthrown, replaced by Caligula, who would definitely want to capture Joseph. It would fix one weak scene after the breakout because there is no further chase involving Leonardo, this time driving a new limo. I could add seriously modern offensive and defensive capabilities to the limo, allowing Leonardo to kick serious ass. "Stronza, engage esplodere mode!"

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Do they need to meet (often)? No. I think the story works well enough without forcing them together. Although, as Amy observed years ago, it was pretty much two stories most of the way. In an earlier draft on which she commented, they had no interactions in acts 1 and 3, and virtually none in act 4. That was three quarters of the book. I think the Royals Forum fixed act 1 well enough. I don't know if there's much more I can do to bring them together (electronically or otherwise) in acts 3 & 4.

Although, after Joseph and Paul escape slavery and go to the palace in search of Apollo's assistance, instead of them being shot, I could have Joseph and Apollo meet again, but I then still need Joseph and Paul (or Joseph and Catherine) to end up in "Heaven", the nickname for the prison where Joseph and company end up, so named because of it's high mortality rate.

I can't see Apollo being angry enough at Joseph to throw them into that prison, so it would have to happen after a face to face meeting. I suppose they could leave the palace, perhaps with special Imperial identification to get them all the way back to New Bethlehem. Something goes wrong, and their IDs are lost or stolen.

Of course, all this is in addition to everything else that has to happen during the chapter in which Apollo and Joseph meet, which is fine since I have plenty of room to expand my chapters in novella form.

Not much opportunity for prolonged tension between them, though.

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Kdot wrote:

You mean publish here or Amazon?

On Amazon first, then elsewhere if it's worth the extra effort.

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Since it will probably take me a long time to finish cleaning up and publishing Archangel (since Connor v2 is the priority), I'm seriously considering publishing the first act of Archangel Syndrome as a longish novella (about 50K words) and putting that up as my first book. I would then take an occasional break from Connor (probably at the end of each act) to clean up and publish each subsequent act of Archangel as novellas 2-4, resulting in the following:

Novella 1 - the first act of Archangel. The two points in the first act where Joseph and Apollo commit to their destinies, determined that nothing will stop them, would be the end of this novella, give or take an epilogue/preview of novella 2. A trimmed version of Brain-Masters would then get punted to the beginning of novella 2. I could then restore to novella 1 one of my favorite deleted chapters (the one where Apollo is almost whipped to death at the Colosseum by Nero, after which Apollo has to undergo surgery without anesthesia).

Novella 2 - the entire second act of Archangel (the Young Leaders Conference), ending with the assassination of both Regent Mary and Nero. This act is currently rather short, even if I prepend a trimmed version of Brain-Masters to it, so it gives me the option to have the delegates visit Catholika and maybe one other planet. Depends on how much new material I care to write. Since the pope would be female, I have a few folks here I can choose as the pope (probably either Georgina or the Virgin Marilyn, both Protestants in real life). And I would definitely include a bit of crossover nonsense from the Connor books.

Novella 3 - the entire third act. Apollo is sworn in, is haunted by Nero (assuming the changes aren't too complex), up to where Apollo is overthrown and "hung" on New Bethlehem, including being accidentally decapitated as he is hung. Joseph accidentally ends up on a slaver ship, is enslaved on Earth, then imprisoned, then is rescued by Leonardo (the loonie taxi driver), and boards a transport for home, knowing an attack on New Bethlehem is now imminent.

Novella 4 - the fourth act of Archangel, consisting of the main battle and its aftermath, including the current epilogue, in which Joseph throws himself off a cliff, and Apollo concludes God is real and decides to build a Christian empire. I would reveal at the end of this novella the cause of the supernatural beings that plague Apollo and Joseph.

Beyond finally getting something published, an added advantage of doing this is I get enough room to flesh out each act of Archangel. In spite of cutting unnecessary chapters from act one about a year ago, by the time I fleshed out the rest of that act to what I consider an appropriate level of detail, I was back to a huge first act. I suspect the same will be true of subsequent acts, heading toward 200K total words. I always have the option at the end to put them together as one big book.

The main problem with these, I think, is that Joseph and Apollo don't meet at all in novellas 1 and 3, only in novella 2 and briefly at the end of novella 4. Naturally, they regularly interact via Galaxinet during novella 1 (via the Royals Forum, where they piss each other off).

Thoughts?
Dirk

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Hi Vern. Looking back at my received inline reviews for that year, I have none after April 1, 2021 until the system was restored in late 2023. And the contest ended April 30 of 2021, so the Great Hiccup caused the loss of everything sometime after April 1.

Sorry.

I have to admit, I'm a bit fuzzy about personal timelines vs. collective timelines. The Kelvin Timeline that JJ Abrams created for the Star Trek franchise, so he could change anything he wanted, is what I consider a collective timeline. I haven't watched anything new from Star Trek in many years, but I don't recall them ever discussing that there are infinite universes, and each decision by each person leads to another universe, which is what I call a personal timeline.

Tentatively, in my story, only God creates an alternate timeline and "moves" us there. Although I don't go into details in my 4th century document (already posted, by the way), it implies the original timeline has been abandoned. I couldn't do the challenge and also leave the characters, which technically includes us, on our original timeline since that breaks biblical inerrancy.

So, rather than God creating duplicate copies of us for the new timeline (which includes the challenge) while also leaving the original version of us in our real world timeline (where there is no challenge), I chose that he moved us there and abandoned the original timeline. That creates its own set of issues, though. While there may be only one of each of us in the multiverse that way (each with their own soul), somehow God recreated the whole universe (from the galaxies down to every non-human life form in existence) and put us there. What about all the microbes in and on our bodies, many of which we need to live? Did those move to? And the pet cat I was holding when God moved us? And every ape, even though some have almost the identical DNA as us? Etc.

Riddle me this: Since I use an alternate timeline in Rise of Connor, that is essentially an alternate universe. Now, it's easy to imagine God being beyond (outside of) all universes, but what about us? If there were other versions of us, then what soul do they have (not mine obviously)? It suggests that alternate universes aren't compatible with Christianity. The reason I realized this is that I'm considering rephrasing my story's "new path through time" to a "timeline in an alternate universe". Although the word timeline didn't exist back then, it could simply be a term first used and defined by the Holy Spirit in the information documented by my 4th-century hermit prophesying Christ returning as a child (a document written by Satan).

Currently, my writeup refers to the "original path through time" and the "new path through time", the latter having branched off the original the moment God accepted Satan's Last Challenge. I did this because I didn't want my characters to speculate about why events in their version of reality don't match the Bible in our real world, without having an explanation for it.

Although Satan wrote the answer to that question, he actually told some truth with regard to the challenge. They really are on an alternate timeline, there really is a challenge, but he lied when he "prophesied" that Christ will return as a child. The real challenge is about Connor (the Antichrist) choosing whom to "destroy" when the real Christ returns (Connor will throw the dagger at either Christ or Satan at that point).

So, my explanation of why the Bible is inerrant is because it was written for our real timeline, not the new/alternate timeline. However, both timelines originated from the same single timeline (ours, the only one that existed initially), and the new timeline didn't exist until the challenge became a reality. As a result, the story world has the same Bible as us, which only prophesies about our real future, not the story world's future. Once the characters realize they're no longer on the original timeline, the question of the Bible's inerrancy goes away.

It's interesting, though, that multiple universes with multiple copies of us appears impossible for Christianity. Either we have one soul per universe, or one soul across all universes. Both of them break Christianity.

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Thanks.

Just to clarify, when I was asking about act 1 vs act 2, I meant within the first book. Joseph's homeworld doesn't get destroyed until the end of the first book, which leaves a nice opening for a book 2 if there ever is one, although Joseph's fate at the end of book 1 is currently unknown. He jumps off the cliff wanting to know if Michael (or God) will save him. Fade to black....

At the beginning of book 2, I intended Joseph to crash onto a rocky shelf sticking out 10-20 feet below where he jumped from. So, technically, God saved him :-)

As noted in my previous post, both teenagers commit one chapter (each) prior to them leaving their home planets for the Young Leaders Conference. So, I could end the act after the commit or after they leave their planets.

In Star Wars, Luke commits after his aunt and uncle are killed, but he doesn't leave the planet until after they get to Mos Eisley, hire Solo, and blast their way off the planet. According to a couple of online sites about story structure, act 1 of Star Wars 4 ends when Luke tells Ben he wants to go with him to Alderaan and become a Jedi.

So, Apollo's & Joseph's commits are the end of act 1. The commits are far powerful moments anyway than each of their last chapters on their planets.

Thanks for your help.
Dirk

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Kdot, how many of your stories follow the traditional three-act story structure?

Star Wars, of course, follows it very closely. The story setup includes everything up to the murder of Luke's aunt and uncle. I haven't timed it in Star Wars, but the first act in three-act movies usually last about 30 minutes, which would be about 1/4 of Star Wars.

For my latest draft of Archangel Syndrome, I was trying to substantially reduce the length of the first act and was able to cut numerous chapters, but in fleshing out the rest of that act to what I consider a reasonable level of detail (including eventually cutting the length of the new "monster" chapter in half), I'm back up to about the same length (55,000 words, or 185 pages in a typical printed novel at 300 words per page).

Depending on which internet source you believe, a typical sci-fi story is 50,000-150,000 words or 80,000-120,000 words. I usually see the latter. For comparison, Dune is 190,000 words, Fellowship of the Rings (the longest of the LOTR books, albeit in the fantasy genre) is also 190,000 words, the first Harry Potter book is 75,000 words, and the longest Harry Potter book is 255,000 words.

I intend to self-publish, so I have some flexibility as to length, at least in terms of e-books, but the final printed book could easily be as long as Dune (about 600 pages using comparable words per page). Even if page count didn't affect the cost of the printed book, I suspect sci-fi readers would consider it very long.

What do you think? Too long? If I had to, I'm sure I could chop 25% from most of those opening chapters, but quite frankly, I don't want to. I already did that before fleshing out things I thought were needed. The monster chapter, where Joseph is thrown into the psych ward by his parents, is 10K words (though hopefully no more than 5-6K once I cut the hell out of it). But Joseph already decided to pursue his destiny (no matter what) after the cadet massacre, just as Apollo decided to pursue his destiny (no matter what) after the attack on New Bethlehem by psycho Dad.

Of course, neither of them leaves their respective planets for Neuer Mond until after Joseph is freed from the psych ward and Nero stages a phony assassination attempt (the one where Caligula's face is partially blown off and replaced by cyborg components), meaning one more chapter each before leaving.

What would you consider to be the end of act one/beginning of act two? Although the setting changes completely after those last two chapters, their decisions were made before those two chapters. This won't affect the overall story length, but I'm curious as to what you consider the dividing point.

In Star Wars, Luke didn't leave Tatooine until after they hired Han & Chewie and blasted their way out of Mos Eisley, meaning a few more chapters on the planet.

What do you think?

Thanks.
Dirk

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It means pinning a thread to the top of the forum, so it's always there, regardless of how many other threads are created or updated in the same forum. Have a look at topics in the Premium forum. A whole bunch of them are pinned there.

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Done.