Oh, if Camuir isn't willing to strike the death-blow, I'm sure Elen will be.

Pity Camuir will be denied the chance to redeem himself in mortal combat with the real villian.  By this time there are plenty who would be happy to settle for a tenth of him so long as they were assured the other nine-tenths were half as well taken care of.

I think there has to be some sense, some hint, that Elen's mother has a role in this.  You don't have to say what.  It might also help to give the mother's name, so that she's a real character in the reader's mind and the reader is primed to hear from her.

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How do you define 'that difficult'.  Hw do you weigh the development effort and possible inconvenience (to someone who hits the button accidentally, perhaps?) against the gain in time and preserved mental concentration of the users who benefit?

Of course, I still think that moving the 'negative' links under each of these posts to the side opposite the quote and edit buttons would be a good use of development (and testing) effort.

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But sometimes you read a work/chapter and let it rumble in the back of your mind, then come back to it.  I often do that.

If you don't want the review button, how about a link that takes us down to the place where the review buttons are?

Would it make sense to add enough detail to Onnen's mention that it becomes a teaser, suggesting that there are details to be unfolded?

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I have a new standard for my Academy.  See the last panel in this mad Mad science world.

But there's more.  I've been mulling it, and I'm not at all convinced that this is the birth of a hero.  This could be as great a hunger as the two that contend at Blossom.

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It also depends on your skill in appreciating the art.  Someone might say "Oh, not another piece of jazz/classical/rock," being unable to realize that the piece in question is extraordinary because he's blind within the genre.

Incidentally, 'great' things are often built of simple pieces.  I'm no musician, but I'm pretty sure that the striking Angel Chorus in =Jesus Christ, Superstar= is built on the reversal or a very standard concluding chord progression.  All of =Les Mis= is built on using the fourth instead of the fifth, and the emotional character of the interval in context becomes an allegory of sorts for the redemptive journey of Jean Valjean.

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Except that some people with those differences nevertheless lead responsible lives.

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Some writing is harder than other kinds.

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In the language of anthropology, both are considered 'mutilation'.  Ear piercing and tattoos are also considered mutilation for this definition.

A great deal of polemic mischief is done by deliberately conflating the specialty (anthro.) meaning with the general meaning.

Language can conceal a lot of specious argument.  C.S.Lewis makes a point of this towards the end of Out of the Silent Planet, inspired in part by his education with 'Kirkpatrick'.  See Surprised by Joy, if you don't mind a long read for a single point.

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No.  He followed his culture, but his culture is morally inferior to Western culture.  He believed himself in the right within that cultural framework.  But a stereotypical rapist knows that he is regarded as being wrong in his act, even if, like Saddam Hussein, he can defy that cultural authority.  Saddam, or Mao, held the power of force that allowed him to escape his culture's judgement, but those that do not have such power act in secrecy and try to escape the consequences.  The Hmong youth believed that culture would support and affirm his act.  He was mistaken.

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I don't know if I can.  If I can't do it in 2015, I might yet be able to do it in 2018.  And if I never can do it, there may well be authors who can.

To say that you can't do it does not mean it can't be done, nor does it reduce the value of the achievement for those who can.  As I recall, a fellow named Aesop had something to say about the question.

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Book 2, recently published Kirsey-Erevain (high chapter number).

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Are you saying that you cannot imagine-create a scene that will move you to tears, or that reading such a scene after you've written it will not still move you to tears?

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A clash, yes, but not of the same sort as the fellow who doesn't know how to use a western toilet.  That involves techne and things, not people and deep moral conviction.  We would not condemn someone who had a squat toilet installed in his home (except that it might not meet the sanitary plumbing standards).  But we would condemn, and do condemn, people who sell women as sex slaves in our midst (and I'm not speaking of truly voluntary prostitution, and yes, there are some who'd argue there's no such thing--but I think we can make the distinction).

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Dill Carver wrote:

A 1960’s racist differs from a 2015 or 1930’s racist?  Sexism has evolved into another type of sexism?  Sex offenders might approach the act of rape differently now that they have Rohypnol and handcuffs at their disposal, but the psyche of a rapist is now as it was in 200BC.

I'm not so sure about that.

There's a true story, a case out of the 1980's, when some hundreds or low thousands of Hmong people were quietly evacuated from Laos as refugees from the Communist takeover.  (The French called them Montiagnards, and I apologize for my poor spelling.)  They had many problems adjusting to American culture.  Some problems were mostly comic with a whiff of tragedy, like trying to grow rice in living room carpets.  Others were more severe.

One young man of the transplanted Hmong took a shine to an American girl and tried to get her interest.  She had no interest in him, so he did what he would have done back home in Laos: he got together with a bunch of his male friends and they kidnapped her.  They helped him rape her, in order to 'claim' her.

Not understanding their crime under Western culture and American law, they let everyone know what they did.  It was not difficult to convict them.

No rapist from within Western culture would advertise his act, or expect it to be approved by society.  He will know that his act is regarded as deeply wrong, even if he feels justified in it.

Social workers who were trying to help the Hmong assimilate approached the victim and she allowed them to explain things.  In what must surely represent a case for sainthood, she spoke at sentencing after the conviction and asked the judge to imposed a sentence recognizing  the moral and cultural ignorance, a sentence of mercy (which is often harder than simple leniency).

The Hmong culture fulfilled the first and indispensible requirement for a culture: it allowed the Hmong to survive through the centuries, as individuals and as a people.  And if we look carefully, we can find that things like the Stockholm Syndrome are likewise essential to survival of individuals and the human species when only that lowest of cultural requirements is filled.

I hope by this time you are screaming "WE KNOW BETTER!"  Yes, we do.  Not all cultures are equally good and moral, even though some 'lower' cultures may emphasize virtues that we have largely forgotten, or that we revile (the kind of courage necessary to challenge  and defeat a desperate food animal, for instance, or to defeat a neighboring clan's aggression).

Some cultures are better than others.  But all cultures face that indispensible first requirement of self-perpetuation.  A culture is not, and cannot be, a suicide pact.  The only cultures we know are the ones that survived long enough for us to see them, or to see their artifacts.

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Oh, please.  Only you consider superpowers inherently interesting.  B'sides, I'm giving away klooze

If Kha has been compromised, what about the earlier adventures, in which Kha's company averted disaster?

Oh, and if Kha finds he's been used, his wrath might bring down a god--or all of them.

Uh-huh.

Regarding the review: 'twas Lewellen, not Valharic, who spoke of breathing.

Working on the review.  Meanwhile, I'm wondering  ...

Kha has someone inside Behira's temple, feeding him information.  Could that leak also be leaking to the Enemy?  For that matter, might Kha himself have been open to the Enemy, at least until Sil shows up?  Or even after?

Is that why Zyrtec doesn't want Kha to see him when they are in Zyrtec's apartments?  Or is there another reason?

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See discussion here.

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You might also look up the story of 'Miss Tilly's orifice'.