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Jaylene already was killed, remember?

I wouldn't go all Sally Field yet.  It flows reasonably well, but I want to see how the next chapter opens before I complete my comments.

The problem is that Alina's introduction isn't that of a Big Bad.  It's the introduction of a Very Big Little Person, who can make life hell--or death--for the good guys.

Two books may have room for the detail, but how do you keep the story moving?

I need to take a closer look at Ch's 6, 7, and 8.

Let me think about this.  She already seen that Shogran uses them and throws them away.  And she's got her daughter in a special category of 'doesn't know her own strength'.  Oh, yes, she's definitely wearing blinders.

Nobody is ready yet to see the big picture.  That requires two things: Merran in Pike's Observatory and Kirsey with some very old library books.

Pike would probably have tried to raise the kid in his circle of friends at the Academy.  Someone there would have turned maternal and more-or-less taken him

Occasionally 'my sister, my brood', but most often just 'my sister'.

'my sister'?

That's for ponying up cash.  But the question is participating in points.

Followup: Alina is venal and selfish. She likes power, but her vision and ambition are too small to be Capital EEvil.  Make that clear.  Keep that clear.

Question: What -specifically- moves Alina to challenge the duel?

The thing is, I don't see it published at all, not even in your portfolio.  That leaves me thinking that you missed a step.

I'm assuming this is one chapter of a multi-chapter work.  In the edit pages, there are four that have a sequence ot four button-blocks at the top, with arrows between them, left to right: Basic Info ; Cover ; Content ; Publish  .

Publishing is on the last of these.  You can click on the button-block if you need to, to get to the page.
There is a heading, in yellow-gold: Publish Setup.  A little ways down there is a blue heading Publish Setup, with your current points total beneath it.

Choose who can see your content .......... ((Menu drop box.  Try  ONLY TO GROUP MEMBERS AND CONNECTIONS .))
With that set, you should see Choose Which Groups to Publish Your Content To ........ ((Vertical pile of check boxes.))

You should probably check all the groups, which should include Premium, Basic, and MedFantMagic.

There's a red button to update the settings.

Below that is a list of your chapters, with the button/menu in the sixth column.  The appearance changes when you publish each chapter.  (Actually, the Publish button might be in the fifth column.  I don't have anything unpublished now, so I can't see.)

Hope this helps.

What groups do you publish in?  It's for points if it's in a for-points group.  The which-groups settings are on the publish page and/or your profile page.   If you think you've skunked yourself by starting wrong, you'll have to bug Sol.

Be careful what you ask for!  My reviews are the sort of pile-on the NFL banned years ago.  But all you need to do is look at the chapters in question.  Ordinary reviews hang below; inline reviews are linked.

We can't make those judgements until time has passed.

The world is changing.  It's been changing since hunter-gatherers settled down to become farmers.  We can encourage people to treasure the old, including old arts and skills.  Maybe they do, maybe the change seems to be really better.

That judgement is for history.  All we can do is try to make it.