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YO MAMA!

Ouch. Just spent an hour and some thinking how Kirsey may carry his writing instruments.  Did you know the Chinese had nickel ('German') silver during our Middle Ages?  It might work for pen nibs, but they would have to be wiped clean after use because acid can leach  the copper from it.  Electrum is probably too soft.

Might put up a photo later.

I've got notes worth about 2,500 words on healing the mountain.  It will take about seven hours to put them in usable form.  Amy, you won't be happy.  The power moments are understated.  (I don't think I'll have anything like Sil's transformation.)

But Kirsey will have a small dose of Adventure.

Has been tamed by her libido--

And just what would such a class include, I wonder?  That US speed limits are in MPH?  Not to pass a stopped school bus with its flashers on?  Not to order pizza away from a Really Major Metro Area?  To set a safety timer if you are foolish and determined enough to watch Reality TV?  Not to joke about football until three weeks after the SuperBowl and not to talk about Futbol at all?

Throw the yule log on, throw the yule log on, throw the yule log ... on Uncle John.

Oh, some forward background: Caneth is the only one who knows where Pike ended up.  He and Kirsey are the only ones who know what actually happened to Pike, and Melayne knows for sure that Pike is alive, though not where he is, or in what condition.

Likewise.

Atlantis

In a few months, you'll be pushing us along!  Each one of us has strengths and weaknesses.  You'll find yours.

In this case, you also have a natural scene break that provides a good chapter break.

Not every chapter needs to start on a cliffhanger.  But (for example) Jaylene's drop through the Sandfall (revealed as a trap) opens a whole new and unexpected topic.  By putting Tazar's trip first, you set an expectation that you break at the start of the next chapter--and the chapter break signals the reader that something different is coming.

In the Asking the Right Questions chapter, you end on a big question.  But the next chapter Erasing the Runes opens on preliminaries related to the questions, while the chapter as a whole is an action chapter.  The effect may be increased by the lack of a scene break after the "gritted his teeth" line.

If you move the preliminaries to the end of Asking the Right Questions you can move the questions down, pulling the issues back from Anver/Kat to the Jar.