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The shares are a penny and ever so many are taken by Rothschild and Baring ....

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Things to convert to story are piling up.  Here's my latest note on Merran's (first?) side journey in B2: http://i1065.photobucket.com/albums/u394/njGreybeard/Merran-mission-B2_zpsqbbr8uuy.png
Extta credit if you spot my mental typos.

K. wrote:
njc wrote:
KHippolite wrote:

For example, in my stories, telepaths call themselves telepaths and muggles call them "tele-creepos". This latter term has appeared in derision occasionally, but it never really sees the light of say because I'm so rarely in the villains reference frame that it never gets firmly established.

Teeps and Creeps?

I've just formally stolen this

You can't steal what's freely offered.

2,054

(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Okay, I've got a few little scenes filled in under B2 Ch 29.  Only about 650 words.  I've got about 4000 more to add to fill that gap in.

I think putting the healing in the shadowbook would put too much in that particular trug.

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Those of us old enough to remember the Carter Administration will remember that Mistah Cartah had a no-count brother named Billy.  Someone paid him to allow them to call their product 'Billy Beer'.  (As I recall, it was a brewery that was even despised by college students.)

Anyhow, the joke goes that Mo Udall bought a can of the stuff, took one sip, and sent it off to be analyzed by the Department of Agriculture.  He got a letter from them a week later: Dear Mr. Udall, We are sorry to have to inform you that your horse has diabetes..

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Only if the roots are blond.

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In the opening of A Christmas Carol, the good Mr. Dickens offers a defense of the expression 'dead as a doornail'.  I would apply it here.

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

These aren't winged.  They are particularly nasty reptiles whose mouths sometimes glow at night because of the phosphorescent algae they pick up from swamp ponds.  The have bad breath, and worse flatulence.

Amy, another place you could mention Anver's surname is in the Council with Geron, when Anver is offered the school.

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Okay, I've got two scenes from Kirsey and Melayne in Sgolyabank (the lurymant world).

Elisheva, you won't like it, so let me say these dragons are not your dragons.  These dragons are in quote marks and you'll get a better picture of them from reading Book 1, Chapter 34 (Rite of Return).  The dragons are only a small part of the story there, but they are a major danger.

Worse, 'dinky' sounds almost like 'dinghy'.

If you have two chapters in the same title, only one (the last one, I think) will show up.

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Oh, the reason for a feldic or intermediate rock is because mafic rocks are usually dark.  I want a tan-to-orange rock.  I think granite, grandiorite, or dacite would work.  All are plutonic and found in dikes and sills; all can get the color range that I want.

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Oh.  You can see it, you can copy it.  I don't plan on wiping it.

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Free Body Diagrams are a lot  more basic than orbital mechanics.  I'vd never done OM, but I could derive the basics from the basics.   I could not demonstrate the stability of the LaGrange points (which speaks to your out-of-phase moons).  There are good Wikipedia articles on FBDs and LaGrange points, and I'd give pretty heavy odds on there being a good OM article out there.

Toper.

Given that purses are either bigger inside than outside or, for the very fashionable kind, much smaller inside than outside, you'll have to write that as either Sci Fi or Fantasy.

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Yee-Haw for Wikipedia!

Yee-haw for that fine arts education!

Yes, but can you draw a Free Body Diagram?

Getting to the point.

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Reaalized I was changing the geometry/geography of that mountain, so I've gone back to B1 =Fire and Water= to review it.  That peak is an igneous intrusion, plutonic, of granite or granite-like material.  Not mafic, I think.  I'm not sure what's in the hot chamber beneath.

I don't think you need to set the cutoff at 200 years.  WWII, or even WWI (100 years) will do, with room to spare.  The word 'role' entered English somewhere around then, I think.  C.S Lewis put the French hat on the 'o' when he used it.

Coloratura

Raiders is not  Temple.

But it is an icon for a brand of 'adventure' that consists of ever-faster motion, long before the approach to the climax.  What Amy has is adventure with mystery.  The reader needs time, not so much to solve the puzzle as to learn it well enough to understand the solution when it unrolls piece by piece.