Ouch. You've been a hero. Now they're asking you to elevate to Hero.
2,026 2016-02-19 09:42:53
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
2,027 2016-02-19 09:41:30
Re: KennedyMcF's thread (75 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
How to make them care? I think there may be several ways. With your PoV characters you have at least two things: involvement in the character's personal story and empathy for the character.
2,028 2016-02-19 02:00:07
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Have you written a gentle note to Sol?
2,029 2016-02-18 12:09:51
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Regarding 'Caneth'--I've gone for two-syllable names because I did not want to suggest that they came from large families. That creates backstory issues. But I can do it for one of them, using some variant on Carruthers, maybe Carrothin.
More thinking needed.
2,030 2016-02-18 11:48:11
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Janet, the chapter with Glaselle comes soon after Harsan and Glaselle leave Merran and Jamen on the road, after Glaselle gets her Atlas. I'm opening up a thread for that family.
The two kids are the kids that Shogran had. He's trying to get to the shack where he left them, under the effect of Merran's pain spell and the Barricade.
2,031 2016-02-18 04:57:18
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Well, they seem okay. I was afraid for a moment that the libretto to Wozzek had gotten switched in ...
2,032 2016-02-18 04:14:22
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Amy, I don't mind you using the name either way, though Slash and Tazar seem well provided for. I'll be thinking on this for a while.
2,033 2016-02-18 04:09:10
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Dey come from Brooklyn?
2,034 2016-02-17 20:51:48
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Working on Merran and Jamen getting those two waifs, and trying to get Shogran for interrogation. (Merran plans to use everything she learned fighting Erevain.) Not gonna go right, but I have to get the events laid out in detail. Then I have to rewrite it FOR detail, making sure all the pieces are in place, and make a polishing pass, before typing it up and editing it again in the process. 36 to 48 hours, mebbe.
2,035 2016-02-17 19:05:40
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
That's just it. I don't want someone who sounds like a thug ("I'm gonna veto dat. Hey Vito!). I want him to sound like he -could- be a little urbane.
2,036 2016-02-17 13:07:41
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
But a little coarser, maybe? Hmmm mmmm mmmm.
2,037 2016-02-17 10:04:02
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
On the subject of names, I let Merran and her parents fall out of the naming system. I should fix it.
Any opinions on Carreth or Carth instead of Caneth. (I need to get the 'r' in it, so that 'Merran' is derived from both her parent's names.)
2,038 2016-02-17 06:34:49
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I should have added, at the end of your review, "Wait 'til you hear The Rest of the Story."
(Engalt, I think.)
2,039 2016-02-16 04:24:41
Re: NorthernSkies or NS - Janet (213 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Can the need be linked to some damage related (overtly or covertly) to the villian?
2,040 2016-02-15 13:30:04
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I've taken most of the review comments on Breadcrumbs and Bacchanalia and integrated them. If anyone feels a need for a repub (for points) I'll do it, though I prefer not to (to keep the old comments visible).
2,041 2016-02-15 05:42:59
Re: NorthernSkies or NS - Janet (213 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I answered a couple of your questions in new review comment replies.
2,042 2016-02-14 13:40:44
Re: Joke's on you (52 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Dill Carver wrote:
After ... gags ... like this I like to recite parts of A Little Priest from Sweeney Todd. Squire on the fire? General, with or without ... his privates?
2,043 2016-02-14 05:15:03
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Not about writing ... but here's one for Amy's evaluation: https://pjmedia.com/parenting/2016/02/0 … epage=true
2,044 2016-02-12 11:43:18
Re: Joke's on you (52 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
A comic is not someone who says funny things.
A comic is someone who says things funny.
2,045 2016-02-12 10:27:32
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Well, I've got about 4+3/4 pages at about 700 words a page in (nearly) final form (finally). This is Melayne and (mostly) Kirsey fixing the mountain. You'll see there's little chance of Kirsey being the Deus ex Machina. Let's see if I can type it up Friday night.
2,046 2016-02-12 08:16:27
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Wait until you read that chapter about my version of a dragon. I'll hear you scream out here on the Jersey Shore.
2,047 2016-02-12 07:25:03
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
According to David Kahn's =The Codebreakers=, the last individual able to read heiroglyphics as his native writing probably died around AD 300. Not so very long ago.
Oh, I've read that the rebus-structure of the writing indicates that the spoken language is very close to 'modern' Coptic. If Boko Harem, ISIS, and company succeed in murdering all the Copts, we will lose that living link to both the New and Old Kingdoms.
2,048 2016-02-12 05:53:28
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I've added a few more notes. The last one is about large families and tenant farming.
2,049 2016-02-12 03:05:34
Re: Plot Mapping (7 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
These days it seems that if you can't garnish it with crudities, it's not worth saying.
2,050 2016-02-11 20:35:02
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Salmon. They come in mixed packages.
