Galilee is probably your favourite word by now

Slightly more expensive, but Aedre could get scuba gear and immerse herself in a sticky substance and wait for it to dry. Eg, she goes in a room with the drone, then seals off the door and triggers the room to fill with amber. Amber dries, she chips her way out, done is stuck.

A costly method is go see an expert drone remover. Of course, you can't tell the guy "Hi, there's a drone following me that will kill me if I talk about it"... but merely sitting in the expert's office and chatting about your day should be enough - if he's an expert he's used to clients doing just that. He'll be like "nice day. Can you lend me 20 biluvian dollars?" Aedre passes over the bills then whisk-whisk no more drone.

A much less involved method (though much more hardcore) is to hop in a ship and travel a few light-hours or light-weeks away. This means whoever's watching has a huge delay in the broadcast.  She can take all the time she wants to get rid of it (I doubt they make hyperspace communicators tiny enough to load in the drone based on tech level presented).

A cheap, hardcore method is to hop in a cryosponge for a 50-year journey, then turn around and come back. 100 years round trip - all your enemies are dead. Problem solved.

A more involved method is to try to wear the thing out. Seeing at it can't have infinite power there must be a charging system (solar? Electromagnetic transduction? hydrocarbons? Antimatter?) Just hang out where it's dark, or no rotating core / magnetic field or in a desert etc. Or spray metal-dissolving acid all over the place. Set the room on fire (be careful with that one - hire a professional pyrotechnics engineer)

WW is pretty epic

Sleep when I'm dead

I also use v.v and @.@

that it is obvious x.x

Our opinion is suspect because we've seen both

Because Apollo loosely ties to he other series.

I sneak these in all the time - some more glaring than others

The Apollo

Edit: Master needs a 2nd Ed. too, but only syntax/editing clean up. Just glanced through the first few pages. So many repeat words and what not. Wouldn't change a thing about the plot/structure

on the fence with this one too... I can throw compelling arguments at each choice yikes

also, re: "a few Nerthus months" just to clarify...

Imagine that a "Camite hour is 55 minutes" compared to Earth.
"a few Camite hours" / "a few Earthling hours" -> in the end, it's a still a few. Putting the name says exactly 55 minutes or exactly 60 then it's blended with "approximately" (a few).

Hope I managed to convey all this in that tiny box

I didn't find it too much information really, just lack of impetus / progression

Next on my hitlist... make it through any one Transformers movie. Maybe Austin Powers if I can find it

Actually, you inspired me to finish watching it... I'd been stuck in the first 30 minutes and would probably not have remembered to watch the rest. Then you were discussing it and I was thinking oh ya, Disney might yank it soon. Guess I better finish

You've really taken a dislike to Last Jedi huh

*** SPOILERS ***

I still think if they were gonna kill off Luke they might as well have him die in the final battle. My friend observes that the way they did it means Luke goes out on his own terms - no one gets to kill him or rush him.

Ok, good and proper - go ahead.
a) Look at me! I sit on rocks and turn into pixie-dust!
b) Or I could go poof after single-handedly owning the bad guys.

One of these options looks better on paper.

This is going to be tricky. Normally compelling characters had flaws. How do you write a compelling flawless character?

First thing that comes to mind is he could be flawed at close relationships despite (or because of) being sinless. For example, maybe there's a prominent woman in his life that he can't bring himself to marry because he sees himself falling the way of lust of the flesh. Or he's just cool to her because he can't think on those levels and we see her increasing frustration with this until she gives up and leaves and he is left with regrets.

Could go the self-doubt route that seems baked into the central story

from your description, sounds delineated to me

oh ho, look who showed up

This is a great idea. borrowing

One vision per chapter is a huge commitment... you'll find yourself amidst a good event streak and have to interrupt it with a vision.

It's also a lot of real estate in terms of name scroll

recommend you simply sprinkle the visions as you see fit rather than stick to a one-per-chapter rule

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@Amy I've only read one of those (plus this one) because I'm slow... but I can mostly follow ok

...and cut way back on exclamation marks

I use way too many exclamation marks. My old editor once said "A dozen per book is about right". I'm probably north of three times this limit. But my characters tend to shout and scream a lot, and it feels awkward to write:

Bob screamed, "Fire."
or
"I hate you." Bob punched the wall

That particular scene has Paul in it, so I'm tempted to say "yes"

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It's an interesting view... I can't even visualize how it would look without the humour - would be an entirely different story. Not sure the reader approached it in the right mindset