I think short posts is fine... I was just commenting that I personally had no comment yet. I often read 20 pages worth or so when starting a review of a new-to-me story on here
551 2018-11-07 21:38:44
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
552 2018-11-07 09:56:23
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Read scene 1 but, unfortunately, I have insufficient material in there to leave a review. It looked to me like the true beginning was further in at the anointing scene, but I need to see more material to get a feel for the pace before I can say that with confidence.
553 2018-11-06 23:26:03
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Now I resume cattleprodding you
554 2018-11-06 13:05:39
Re: Welcome (262 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Helena Seryma wrote:
Thanks, I've posted one of my stories that has a problem in the intro and really need fixing.
You'll need to post it to premium for maximum viewership
555 2018-11-01 23:40:55
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Nor are they part of what the characters are.
Ah, but to what extend does our external stimuli become a part of what we are?
If I told you my grand mother was a hoarder, you might say "ok".
If I told you she lived through the Great Depression, you might say "ah-ha!"
In my current WIP it's "peacetime" so I'm painting the local characters as "trusting". Except Nova. She's plotting and distrusting. Why is she distrusting... because the (local authority) is out to stick it to her. I've allowed this external factor to colour her.
That's kinda what I missed in yours a sort of "X is on path Y because of factor Z"
For instance, what is it about Lortimer that would make him want to invite the other student for dinner, evidently for the sole reason that he's serous? (Maybe he was shown kindness once and now tries to deliver it back? if so, how does this drive his soul?)
You touched on P's family-member's death, but now how that has affected her? If not at all, that's just as telling as if she's developed a tendency to check in on people to their distraction / annoyance).
I wasn't looking for meaning attacked to every character tick, tho. Was just observing that I didn't spot any
556 2018-10-30 06:44:13
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Program his VCR
557 2018-10-30 06:43:26
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
There are no plot holes until amy has wandered along and found some plank your mc has overlooked and the story bursts into flame
558 2018-10-30 06:41:59
Re: WIP: Exile in Time (29 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
cattle prod time soon
559 2018-10-21 13:32:01
Re: Maiden and other stuff (52 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Ahoy... where ye be? Storing up points after that giant mammoth contest posting?
560 2018-10-19 07:54:51
Re: How to hide my forum threads from Google? - Site Usage (16 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Dirk B. wrote:
MJ, I checked my settings and it's already set as you suggested, yet my forum threads still show up on Google. You don't even need to be logged into the site to read them.
Hey Sol, here's an interesting note: If you log off the site and browse the forum threads, it exposes the poster's IP address. This is hidden from logged in users.
Should Dirk become an NYT bestseller and move to some remote 200-person town, any further posts will reveal his approximate coordinates. All those lovely fans will geo-track him there and hunt him down.
561 2018-10-17 02:31:10
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Or... Fiat (in your story) is making the Lancia Delta again
562 2018-10-16 22:50:23
Re: WIP Where Heaven and Hell Meet by Mariana (63 replies, posted in Close friends)
I had a really great substantive editor back in the mid 90's. Actually, I didn't like him at first, but he was assigned to me. My attempts to escape him were met with resistance. After the first round (of three) of him eviscerating my work, I kinda got used to him. Alas, when I parted ways with the publisher, I lost track of him too (In these days we used PINE for email everyone used BBS's).
I have a new one but she's not as good, sometimes with one comment per chapter. Not really a good investment, and per price is too low (about 0.1 - 0.2 cents per word). The on Suin posted looks like he knows his stuff. I'm considering him for one of my projects (Maybe the Venus stories).
563 2018-10-16 01:19:36
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
When my frog died (high heat / humidity), you knew within hours. By 10 hrs it was intolerable
564 2018-10-11 12:52:59
Re: What is your favorite murder mystery/thriller? (18 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
@Norm: Google says I'm allowed to buy it from their store, but I can't be sure there's not a country restriction somewhere later down the checkout process
565 2018-10-07 22:41:20
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Arguably, the past 5 movies also have not had the magic
566 2018-10-05 20:03:50
Re: Author Websites (4 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Great resource. I use mainly point #6 which is slightly easier having penned 12+ adventures in that world
567 2018-10-04 02:24:41
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
In anime when this occurs, there is usually just enough supernatural that regular law enforcement thinks its a prank
568 2018-10-04 01:29:01
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
You're going to need a lot of cardinals to kill off in order to cover 19 events
569 2018-09-29 12:28:29
Re: The Opening Lines... (78 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Charles_F_Bell wrote:
dagny wrote:Thanks, Suin!
Perhaps you can answer the question on how an editor who claims to have a bunch of global clients is qualified to do what he claims to do. He provides no name - only a reference to having a connection to the Irish and Canadian publishing markets, a fact irrelevant to an American author looking to write for Americans and perhaps publish in the U.S.A. Presumably he can expect aspiring authors submitting to the free site for busine$$ through clearly referenced Irish website editorial.ie, and no editor's job is to make a work publishable for any reason other than the mechanics of good writing such as the right and proper spelling the word, "colour" as "color."
Richard Bradburn
It's in there. You have to follow the link from Opening Lines up to the parent site that is his actual editing site and sift through it
570 2018-09-28 22:44:22
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Dirk B. wrote:
It's amazing how much misinformation there is on what seem like credible websites. I read on one site that the Sea of Galilee was saltwater. In reality, it's freshwater, fed by natural springs. Stuff like this could lead to big errors in my book.
Learned something new. I thought saltwater was part of the definition of "sea" until today
571 2018-09-27 09:43:09
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Ah, what a pickle
572 2018-09-26 18:21:14
Re: Killing off Characters (spoilers?) (12 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Define "killed off"... If the character accomplishes all they can (think Yoda or Luke Skywalker) and simply move on, does that count?
573 2018-09-26 10:58:58
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
it may be "mostly grassy" now, but a lot can change regarding flora/fauna in 2000 years. Could even have been vineyards or woody back then
574 2018-09-24 22:23:05
Re: caps question - Capitalization (15 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Not exactly equivalent.
1. Everyone should visit the Rockton Fair this summer. The fair offers unique attractions.
2. The Canadian National Exhibition occurs annually. The Exhibition attracts a worldwide audience
In (2) the Caps is optional. Anyone living in the shadow of this event knows you're proper-naming it the moment you write that. Someone living in England not so much, and may wonder why the caps was used.
575 2018-09-21 22:26:29
Re: Opinions desired on "Wanderlust" (8 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
10 days... Romeo took minutes to forget Rosalind and decide he wanted to marry Juliette.
