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Define "killed off"... If the character accomplishes all they can (think Yoda or Luke Skywalker) and simply move on, does that count?

Not exactly equivalent.

1. Everyone should visit the Rockton Fair this summer. The fair offers unique attractions.
2. The Canadian National Exhibition occurs annually. The Exhibition attracts a worldwide audience

In (2) the Caps is optional. Anyone living in the shadow of this event knows you're proper-naming it the moment you write that. Someone living in England not so much, and may wonder why the caps was used.

works for me. But then so do "Ruby" (for her suit) and "Emerald" for her eyes. Maybe even "Diamond" for her skin

What prompted the name change?

*bzzt!*

ew

WordPerfect kept trying to capitalize Laundromat.
Looked it up.
Surprise, WP was right.

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re your reply to the fight in chapter 40 (Ya, I'm only now getting around to replying. Don't bug me I'm slow)

You asked about a comparison to a Bruce Lee fight, and my answer is "Yes, I would say the same". It's quite like a movie script -it's how I expect a Bruce Lee movie script to be written:

in a Bruce Lee novel, I'd expect to be placed in the scene rather than a list of events.

Alas, I must end this example in that awkward moment before Lee and Ninja4 get into an embrace and start kissing. And you probably see what I meant by now. The question I should like to place is... is this a story or a sequence of events?

Mind you... a sequence of events is perfectly valid. I'd expect it of "Pulp Fiction" were it a novel. Or "Kill Bill". But it sure does steal from the story...

Let me draw your attention to 'white fangs gleamed'. This gives us such a nice sense of place. Breaks up the two actions (draw to mouth vs fangs snapping shut). Also notice mention of furniture (forgive me for counting chasms as furniture). The fallen on his knees part would correspond to the point where R is getting handcuffed which is great, but it comes after a long chain of blurry events. A lot of salt and not a lot of pepper. Right about the Easter L part, there needs to be a nod to either feeling or place or time or even one of the senses - example: B got R into a nelson, longish hair tickling R's shoulder. They wrestled a moment, and R propped her feet on the (bed | sofa | alligator) for leverage ** moves continue **

I apologize if you use any of this and the 2 paragraph fight takes 16. Ask Norm about the grief I've given his nice (short) summaries.

Slightly more expensive, but Aedre could get scuba gear and immerse herself in a sticky substance and wait for it to dry. Eg, she goes in a room with the drone, then seals off the door and triggers the room to fill with amber. Amber dries, she chips her way out, done is stuck.

A costly method is go see an expert drone remover. Of course, you can't tell the guy "Hi, there's a drone following me that will kill me if I talk about it"... but merely sitting in the expert's office and chatting about your day should be enough - if he's an expert he's used to clients doing just that. He'll be like "nice day. Can you lend me 20 biluvian dollars?" Aedre passes over the bills then whisk-whisk no more drone.

A much less involved method (though much more hardcore) is to hop in a ship and travel a few light-hours or light-weeks away. This means whoever's watching has a huge delay in the broadcast.  She can take all the time she wants to get rid of it (I doubt they make hyperspace communicators tiny enough to load in the drone based on tech level presented).

A cheap, hardcore method is to hop in a cryosponge for a 50-year journey, then turn around and come back. 100 years round trip - all your enemies are dead. Problem solved.

A more involved method is to try to wear the thing out. Seeing at it can't have infinite power there must be a charging system (solar? Electromagnetic transduction? hydrocarbons? Antimatter?) Just hang out where it's dark, or no rotating core / magnetic field or in a desert etc. Or spray metal-dissolving acid all over the place. Set the room on fire (be careful with that one - hire a professional pyrotechnics engineer)

Sleep when I'm dead

that it is obvious x.x