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Hi Suin...

The answer to your other question is "Yes, an export is possible". Send me your Email and I'll explain

Alternatively, choosing a new password should require me to enter my old password

I think short posts is fine... I was just commenting that I personally had no comment yet. I often read 20 pages worth or so when starting a review of a new-to-me story on here

Now I resume cattleprodding you

Ah, but to what extend does our external stimuli become a part of what we are?

If I told you my grand mother was a hoarder, you might say "ok".
If I told you she lived through the Great Depression, you might say "ah-ha!"

In my current WIP it's "peacetime" so I'm painting the local characters as "trusting". Except Nova. She's plotting and distrusting. Why is she distrusting... because the (local authority) is out to stick it to her. I've allowed this external factor to colour her.

That's kinda what I missed in yours a sort of "X is on path Y because of factor Z"

For instance, what is it about Lortimer that would make him want to invite the other student for dinner, evidently for the sole reason that he's serous? (Maybe he was shown kindness once and now tries to deliver it back? if so, how does this drive his soul?)

You touched on P's family-member's death, but now how that has affected her? If not at all, that's just as telling as if she's developed a tendency to check in on people to their distraction / annoyance).

I wasn't looking for meaning attacked to every character tick, tho. Was just observing that I didn't spot any

There are no plot holes until amy has wandered along and found some plank your mc has overlooked and the story bursts into flame

Ahoy... where ye be? Storing up points after that giant mammoth contest posting?

Or... Fiat (in your story) is making the Lancia Delta again

When my frog died (high heat / humidity), you knew within hours. By 10 hrs it was intolerable

Arguably, the past 5 movies also have not had the magic

In anime when this occurs, there is usually just enough supernatural that regular law enforcement thinks its a prank

Richard Bradburn
It's in there. You have to follow the link from Opening Lines up to the parent site that is his actual editing site and sift through it