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I go for 3 scenes per chapter... but I don't stick to that. Often one driving desperate scene. Sometimes scene-after-scene like a water fountain. I think my record is 10.

Totally unhelpful response, I know, but hey, we're not bound to TV episode limitations or Shakespearean plot arcs

ew to the ketchup part

The talking aloud bit is a show stopper, I fear

I read supernova as just a moniker, but I can see where the confusion lies. I suppose it's like star destroyers don't actually have the capability of destroying stars.

bzzt!

This statement is quietly powerful

New profile image made me think of Babylon5

mmk. my thoughts on your thoughts on my thoughts

1. Ok, no problem - as long as you're aware you've made the Skills commonplace and ubiquitous enough to be taken for granted, you grasp the fundamental difficulty in making the story more otherworldly.
2. A "not" is simple and powerful expression ("John was the guy who'd never learned to dance"), but pile 3 into one paragraph...

At some point it becomes clear that the writer is visualizing a lot of action and has either overlooked that the reader can't or is being deliberately cagey.

A more realistic/relevant example: "John didn't believe in the war" in a book set in 1980 probably means Vietnam and works because the modern reader knows what to compare against. In a fantasy novel, this becomes a footnote that the reader is expecting will join up later (big war? Small war? Recurring war? Relevant war? What was the cost? Recent?).
Better: "John lost his wife in the war eighteen years ago" (War occurred once, is not still occurring, and is distant past - here's how it affects John now, and we can expect John to react certain ways because of it).

This is really a snippet of a broader discussion related to the old "Bob saw something" structure. I'm not suggesting don't use them - but rather think about what questions each one raises.

5 Myths Hollywood taught us about the middle ages
https://mic.com/articles/64339/5-bigges … .EDx67SGot

Akachi might be compelling. Your unfortunate job is to sift through his soul and find why. Then help us see it.

Also if Bex won't be back, consider stealing his name from him and just make him "under-thug" or "collector". Otherwise people like me will award him entries in our spreadsheets.

Ya know... after that response I went back and name-counted the Battle of Endor. I expected to get about 30. I lost count at 50. And most of those were new. Makes your 16 look puny!

But the battle is great because you can see the zones so clearly. You have a rebel battle zone (Containing Ackbar - I luv that guy). Imperial Zone, then deep Rebel Zone (contains Leia) and Deep Imperial Zone (Contains Sidious)

So in order from friendly to hostile

1. Deep Rebel (White Queen)
2. Rebel (White Bishop)
3. Imperial (Black knight)
4. Deep Imperial (Black Queen)

Think about how few pieces are allowed to move from one zone to the other. It's quite beautiful when you think of it.

Where exactly is un-deployed "XWing#15"? Who cares - it's probably somewhere in zone 2. Lando is shooting down tie fighters? He must be in Zone 3. No need for complex "up / down / port / starboard" - your activity defines your location.*

Now, Lucas (Or the smart people he paid to make him look smart) really have 8 zones, including Death-Star-near and Death-Star-Inner etc... but you could get that effect with just one "point of significance" such that good guys are happy (safer) to approach it and bad guys would rather stay away. I recommend 3 zones for texture.

* picture these snippets:

(No Need to mention she's far from combatants - it's taken care of. Compared to a free-for-all, where any safe harbour must be described carefully)

(Establishing he's not in main fleet puts him in Zone 3, need in enemy territory)

Awesome sauce!

PS: Yes, I need to take my own advice in Lorraine's recent battle, but that's what 1st drafts are for