Six
I waited close to half an hour with a guard who sat directly across the desk from me, arms crossed over his chest. He never uttered a word and his eyes remained fixated on mine. I was pretty sure he never blinked even once.
I’d really overdone it this time. Maybe I wouldn’t be here, wondering what the hell is gonna happen next, if I’d kept my cool. Attitude check gaining momentum on my to do list.
You really screwed this one up, dumbass!
Finally, another security guard and a man in an expensive business suit entered and dismissed the human gargoyle.
The man in the suit spoke first. “Ma’am, would you please empty the contents of your purse on the table?” The nameplate on his breast pocket identified him as H. Dooley, Chief of Security. I immediately determined he possessed the personality of used toilet tissue after #2.
“Why should I do that? What does that have to do with anything? Isn’t that an illegal search?”
“We just want to make sure you’re not carrying anything illegal. People who act as aggressive as you have are often influenced by drugs, legal and otherwise. Also, after that mass shooting here last year, The Department of Homeland Security has given us permission to check guests’ bags if we feel a legitimate need to do so. Your conduct gives us adequate cause to suspect you pose a danger to other guests. I assure you; it is not an illegal search.”
“You’re not just making all that up? Sounds fishy to me.” I knew better. But I was desperate.
“If you prefer, I can call the police right now. We also have legal authority to hold you until they arrive. You can state your case to them. Your choice, ma’am.”
The last thing I need is police involvement. If the licensing board becomes aware of my actions toward Bishop, my PI license risked suspension. I’ll take my chances with Mr. Wonderful.
I unzipped the clutch purse and turned it upside-down. Two hundred dollars in folded bills were the first escapees, followed by my driver’s license, lipstick, and room key. My PI license and concealed carry license dropped out next. I was too angry to be embarrassed when the tampons escaped.
But it was kind of funny when one of them rolled onto Dooley’s lap. He tried to hide a grimace as he grasped the tampon with the tips of two fingers and his thumb. He dropped it onto the table as though playing a game of hot potato. He wiped his hand on his pant leg.
What the hell? Was he Superman and my tampon kryptonite? All that and it was still inside its paper wrapper. Doofus!
When the Remington, last item in my clutch, tumbled onto the table top, his eyes dilated as his brows twitched
Not a good sign.
He picked up my driver’s license and gave it a quick scan.
“Ms. Grace, do you want to tell us what this is all about? An hour ago, you started a disturbance in the Mexican restaurant with Mr. Bishop and then you assaulted him at the craps table. I hope you have a good explanation.”
“Look, I’m a licensed private investigator. The gentleman to whom you refer is the subject of my investigation. His hostile attitude and lack of cooperation required me to use extraordinary means.”
“Mr. Bishop has been a valued guest at our facility for the past several days. If you have a legal issue with him, you need to talk to the police about it.” There was a moment of silence as H. Dooley kept cold, unblinking eyes locked onto mine.
He adjusted his tie. “We have you on cam in both altercations. Stalking is illegal. So is assault. We persuaded Mr. Bishop not to press charges. Otherwise, you’d be talking to the police right now, instead of me. But we still have the authority to turn you over to them. It’s a tempting option.” He crossed his arms over his chest.
“Also, your actions were not extraordinary, Ms. Grace. I repeat, they were illegal. And I’m sure you know your California concealed carry license is invalid in Nevada. That puts you in direct violation of Nevada state law.” He spoke as though he were reading the nutrition label on the back of a frozen meatloaf dinner after a double dose of Ambien.
“I guess I forgot to check it when I arrived.”
“Given Mr. Bishop’s approval, we’ve come up with an expedient solution to the problem. One that satisfies Mr. Bishop and keeps the police out of the picture. Also, any issues regarding your professional license remain free of jeopardy, and The Players Choice receives no uncomplimentary publicity. Everybody wins.”
“I’m not Einstein material, Mr. Dooley; likewise, I’m no idiot. What’s the catch?”
He almost smiled. “You can go straight to the reception desk and get a full refund of your money. Then you have half an hour to vacate your room.” He checked his watch. “It’s ten-thirty. We’ll meet you at eleven o’clock in the lobby. And if you step foot on any Players Choice property again, we’ll have you arrested for trespassing.”
He picked up my Remington. “We’ll return this to you at that time.” He wrote out a receipt for the weapon and handed me a copy. “Don’t be late. We expect your prompt and full cooperation.”
A new achievement—my first time to be kicked out of a Las Vegas Casino. But, what now?
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A Good Chance For Bad Luck - Main Character List
I will add to the list as the story progresses. Don’t want to
give away too much too early!
Olivia Michelle Grace ------- Rookie PI and millionaire
Alice Milner: -------------- Olivia’s best friend and murder victim
Patsy -------------------- Olivia's fire engine red 1959 Cadillac convertible
Robert Milner: ------------ Alice’s ex and primary suspect in her death
Andy Bishop: -------------- Sabotage suspect at Butler Farms
Ron Matthews: ------------ Olivia’s friend and possible love interest
Linda Sears: -------------- Olivia’s friend and housekeeper
Max Grace: --------------- Olivia’s brother and Kern County Deputy Sheriff
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Hello, Sideman.



Dropping another regular review on you tonight. Getting all catched up. What the hell, right?



You use something like 'Not Cool' somewhere in there. 'Cool' should be lowercase.



And she's surprised she was kicked out of the hotel-slash-casino? This harkens back to my previous review (also a regular job, iffins you remember). I'd play up her regret at behaving so rash. Even though you did say her temper got the best of her, walking around shoudl have given her enough time to calm down. Certainly she would have waited until Bishop was in a more isolated place, where she could have used her gun to coerce him into speaking. Just a thought. I still think she'da behaved a lot more professionally. What would have happened if the hotel did not sweep this under the carpet (I think that part is realistic enough) and her employers found out?



Also, in the previous chapter, I forgot to mention she might think that the other people knocked over when she brawled with Bishop got comped out the ass, too.



Anyway, no major issues with anything as we keep moving along.
Charles,



Thanks again for your input. I think I need d to go back to Chapter Two and embellish that she has a short fuse and that's something she knows she needs to work on. Also, I can add more irritation to her stay in Vegas - that's not a difficult thing to do. She's also a rookie PI and learning the fine points of the craft.



I'll l go back and relook everything you mentioned. I don't simply gloss over reviews -- I take them with the same importance with which I think they are written. Thanks again!



Don't worry whether or not they're in-line or regular. It's the input that matters, not the method!



Best to you,



Alan
Hey, Alan. The restaurant scene seems very genuine to me. I didn't sense anything out of place, awkward. Olivia is getting a rough go of things, no doubt.



I'd say you're rolling this out nicely, Alan. The pace is good, the characters believable and interesting. Lots of action and there are no 'draggy' parts. This reads smoothly!



CHEERS!!



Mike
I enjoy Ron. He seems good-hearted. BUT what is he in Vegas for? Was that ever clarified? Probably a good idea to repeat here, AND I wouldn't mind lengthening the scene just to have a slower moment and take a breath.
I do have a question. When Ron called, he tells her "I called the Players Choice and they said they could let me have the room tonight through Sunday." But I thought she already knew that. In a previous chapter where he sits with her at the bar, he tells her "I have a room booked at the Players Choice tomorrow night and Saturday night.” Shouldn't he just say "Hey I'll be there soon, wanna hang?"
Later, Ron asks, "Where ya staying tonight? Did you get a room at the Player’s Choice?" But in the previous chapter at the bar, she told him that's where she's staying. So I think a better question would be "So how's the Player's Choice treating you?" or something similar.
And one more thing: the sentence "His eyes WONDered hither and beyond before they repossessed mine." Should it be "his eyes WANDered...?" to imply movement?
Okay I think those are all the discrepancies I found. I'm still enjoying this story. A lot. One thing you do well is pacing. It's never boring. However, like I mentioned earlier in this review, I would've liked this scene to go on a bit longer. Why do they get along so well? Why do they have a connection? What's Ron's character like? If he's a love interest (as you say in your legend), why is Olivia drawn to him?
I ask those questions because romance (and magic, but that's beside the point) is my genre. Dive into it!
Cheers!
Alice
Hi Alice,
I'll try to address your questions individually:
1. I called the Players Choice and they said they could let me have the room tonight through Sunday." But I thought she already knew that. In a previous chapter where he sits with her at the bar, he tells her "I have a room booked at the Players Choice tomorrow night and Saturday night.” Shouldn't he just say "Hey I'll be there soon, wanna hang?"
--- She knew he had the room for Saturday and Sunday nights but Friday night (Friday - the night in question) wasn't booked in advance to him. He simply called they told him the room would be available Friday night if he wanted it, in addition to Saturday and Sunday nights.
2. Later, Ron asks, "Where ya staying tonight? Did you get a room at the Player’s Choice?" But in the previous chapter at the bar, she told him that's where she's staying. So I think a better question would be "So how's the Player's Choice treating you?" or something similar.
--- In the previous chapter sahe told him she was "hoping" to get a room at the Players Choice, or a nearby hotel. But she didn't have reservations. Thus, he wouldn't have known for sure she was at The Players Choice.
3. And one more thing: the sentence "His eyes WONDered hither and beyond before they repossessed mine." Should it be "his eyes WANDered...?" to imply movement?
--- You're right. My bad! Duh!!! Will correct. Thanks.
Also you asked about Ron's past relationship/reasons for getting along so well, with Olivia. That was covered, although briefly, at the bar scene. She'd mentioned they'd dated a few times in the past but no sparks. She noted she liked him a lot but there just wasn't a connection, on her end, beyond friendship. As far as why he was in Vegas, just a weekend
trip of fun, pleasure and money donation! I didn't fully delve into Ron's personality as that evolves as the novel progresses. I wanted to leave some unanswered questions that didn't hinder the story development at the time, but do have an influence later. Just a little mystery so the reader can wonder the same things you did and maybe would want to read on to find the answers to those questions.
I hope all that helps. And thanks again!
Alan
Mr. H. Dooley. Makes me think of Tom Dooley. But this Mr. Dooley certainly knows his job. He's defused this situation quite well, at least for Bishop's sake.
Now Olivia's back to square one. And Bishop knows she's on to him. She'll have to be very clever to get the goods on him.
I look forward to chapter 7.
Charley
Hi Charley,
H. Dooley's name comes from a bass player in a band I played in for many years - Hal Dooley. he played bass and I played lead guitar. That was back in my hometown of St. Charles, Missouri.
I did a lot of research for this chapter. I went to multiple sites to determine what legal privileges hotel security has in Las Vegas. After that terrible shooting, DHS has given them some additional authority relating to security issues.
And yes, Olivia is back to Square One and not too happy about it. But she's a resourceful lady!
Thank you for the review and kind words. I appreciate that very much.
Alan
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