Seven
Two security guards escorted me to the main entrance—like being let out of prison after time served.
I jettisoned my luggage into the back seat after the valet brought Patsy around. That didn’t do a lot to make my arm feel better, but at the moment, I didn’t give a rat’s ass. Andy Bishop just ascended to number two on my shit list.
I snatched the dangling keys from the valet’s hand. Tires squealing, I peeled out, leaving a blue cloud in my wake.
Several close-by, nice hotels I’d visited after my eviction from The Players Choice were solidly booked by convention attendees, except for two outrageously overpriced luxury suites. I pulled into the 7-11 parking lot on Koval Lane, directly behind Bally’s and called every other major hotel in town. Nothing available at any price. Using a new app I’d recently downloaded, I dialed up numerous not-so-nice hotels. No luck—same song, different band.
Stranded in Vegas at midnight. Not cool! I was angry, humiliated, and alone. I hated Las Vegas more and more every minute.
I guess I was lucky the hotel security people didn’t call the cops. Bishop probably got some real nice comps not to pursue the matter. And I suspected the other folks at the craps table got a little something, too. For the most part, all parties came out as good as possible. But still, I was trapped in Sin City and no place to bunk down for the night.
It surprised me when my cell phone chimed. Oh my God! Maybe Linda was having a major problem at the house!
I pulled the phone from my purse and checked the readout, somewhat relieved. “What’s up, Ron?”
“I assume you’re in Vegas?”
“I am.”
“I called the Players Choice and they said they could also let me have the room tonight in addition to my reservations for tomorrow night and Sunday night. I’m about half an hour out. I’ll be ready for a midnight snack when I get there. I thought you might want to join me, that is, if you’re not already in bed. But it’s Vegas, ya know. Only weenies go to bed at midnight when they’re visiting the Temple of Temptation.”
Ron Matthew’s voice never sounded so good. I’m a pretty tough gal and I can hold my own. But at the moment, I didn’t feel like the world’s baddest bad-ass.
“Sounds good.” Actually, I wasn’t hungry but Ron’s company might comfort me—and I really needed a friend at the moment.
“How about that Mexican restaurant there at the Players Choice? They’re pretty good. And since we’ll be staying there …”
Of all places for him to suggest!
“You still there, Olivia?” Ron asked after a few seconds of silence on my end.
“Sorry. I was trying to stifle a sneeze.” Sometimes a well-placed lie comes in handy. “Actually, I’m really not in the mood for Mexican. Already been there and done that today.”
“No problem. Got somewhere in mind?”
“How about that place up by Bally’s? I can’t think of the name, but it’s the place with the fabulous crepes. I think they’re open twenty-four-seven.”
“I know the place—great suggestion. I’ll meet you there in about thirty minutes.”
“I’ll be waiting.” I disconnected and tossed my phone onto the passenger seat.
There really was a God and even he hung out in Sin City once in a while.
Right on time, as he always is, Ron stepped through the door and our eyes locked. He claimed the chair opposite mine. “Hey. How are ya?”
I burst into tears. Damn! I so hated looking weak in front of others. But with all that was going on, I was in an emotional quagmire. The swamp in the human brain is an ugly bitch.
“This isn’t one of those monthly female things, is it?”
I shot him a stone-cold stare through my tears.
“Just asking.” He shrugged his shoulders. “We guys never know about all that attitude stuff at those times.”
I held the look, never blinking.
“Just forget I said that, okay? Do you want to talk about whatever it is? Or do you need more time?”
I dropped the stare of a horrible death and filled my lungs with strawberry-scented air. “I just want it to go away—every last freaking thing. But I know it won’t and I don’t know how to deal with it.” I choked on the sobs as salty tears assaulted my taste buds.
Ron reached across the table and clasped my hand. “Okay, I get it now. This is about Alice. It takes time, Olivia. You’ve been through a lot, more than you deserve. But it will get better each day. You have to believe that — not because I say so; but because it’s true.”
“It can’t get any worse. It hurts so bad, Ron, so fucking bad!”
“You’re a strong woman. You’re gonna get through this. Trust me. You may not think so right now, but you’re gonna be fine.”
“I miss her so much.”
“I know.”
Several seconds of loud silence filled the space between us.
“Where ya staying tonight?” he asked. “Did you get a room at the Players Choice?”
“Not exactly.”
“What do you mean, not exactly? Either you did or you didn’t. Right?”
I exaggerated a deep breath and spilled the beans about my experience at the hotel.
“Oh my God! That is so damned funny!”
“Well, when it’s midnight in Vegas and you don’t have a place to stay, it isn’t all that freaking funny.” I didn’t bother to wipe the tear meandering down my cheek. I attempted to smile my appreciation when Ron’s finger swiped it away.
His eyes wondered hither and beyond before they repossessed mine. “How about you stay in my room tonight? It has two queen beds. I can’t sleep in both of them at the same time. And I promise I won’t try to coerce you into anything illicit. It’s gotta be better than being scrunched up in the backseat of a car, even a classic Cadillac, in the middle of a Walmart parking lot. Whatcha think?”
I closed my eyes as Ron’s offer deflected off the various confused thoughts in my brain. I lifted my eyelids and stared over his shoulder at the far wall.
I shifted my eyes until my gaze collided head-on with his. My chest deflated as I blew out the air I’d sucked in seconds earlier. “Okay, but no hanky-panky.”
Ron laughed out loud. “Hanky-panky? Oh my God, Olivia! We’re not junior high teens. That’s funny.” He paused momentarily and then raised his hand in a Boy Scout salute. “But I promise, no fooling around.”
“The chances of you having been a Boy Scout are somewhere between zero and minus ten.”
“You can be so cruel. I’m crushed.”
“Then don’t make fun of someone when she’s vulnerable. That’s twice, asshole.” I tried to prevent the corners of my mouth from hinting at a smile. I think I failed.
“Well, maybe I wasn’t a Boy Scout. But it is nice to see a smile on your face.” A few silent seconds passed. “My place tonight?”
“You’re so wicked.”
He raised an eyebrow. “I think I’ve been told that before.”
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A Good Chance For Bad Luck - Main Character List
I will add to the list as the story progresses. Don’t want to
give away too much too early!
Olivia Michelle Grace ------- Rookie PI and millionaire
Alice Milner: -------------- Olivia’s best friend and murder victim
Patsy -------------------- Olivia's fire engine red 1959 Cadillac convertible
Robert Milner: ------------ Alice’s ex and primary suspect in her death
Andy Bishop: -------------- Sabotage suspect at Butler Farms
Ron Matthews: ------------ Olivia’s friend and possible love interest
Linda Sears: -------------- Olivia’s friend and housekeeper
Max Grace: --------------- Olivia’s brother and Kern County Deputy Sheriff
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Hey, Alan. Nice chapter-end hook! Ron Mathews seems like a coolheaded dude. Very self-contained. And I'm very curious reg. what the disguise will be. Seems very logical that it's a concealment of some kind or another. The romance was handled deftly and with class. So it appears Olivia and Ron are now more than friends:-)



CHEERS!!



Mike
Hey Mike,



Yes. there will be a disguise. Next chapter reveals! My philosophy on intimate scene is a little touchy-feely, spit swapping and the like are fine. However, when it gets to the real deal, I lead them to the bedroom door and let the reader's imagination take over. They're probably more tempestuous than what I would have written anyway! Thanks for the feecback!



Alan
I need this sexy scene to be much longer. We need that sexual build-up! I don't like the cop-out of Olivia bursting into tears again. That was too easy for Ron. Does he find her attractive? She's our badass female lead so I expected a scene like this to be something like "I lounged on the sofa, admiring the length of my legs. I noticed Ron looking and crossed them provocatively."
Okay that's not the greatest, but you get what I mean. Build it up, have fun with it. Make Ron blush as he tries not to notice. Add sexual tension to the previous scene in the restaurant. Give us more Olivia inner thoughts to justify why she went from "no hanky-panky" in the previous chapter to "take me, Ron" in this chapter. I want all your humor in this scene but with a lot more steaminess. Even the vulnerability about Alice is okay in the end, but I just want more. You're a talented writer. You can do better.
Also, Ron took too long to give her his answer, aka the box. What was he doing the entire time she was in the shower? Women tend to take longer so I recommend Ron being ready with the box when she gets out.
I know this sounds like a lot of critique but I'm still enjoying your story. I like the way Olivia thinks and I like where the plot is headed. I hope it's a full costume in that box. Wig and everything! Undercover PI, more badassery. Just remember to slow down. We, as your readers, are loyal to the story and want to take our time with the characters.
Aaaaaand on to the next one!
Alice
Hi Alice,
I always find it difficult how detailed/lengthy to make to romantic/sex scenes. Some folks love the big build-up, as you do; other just want to know it happened. But I will go back and add a little more tension, blushing moments and the like. I've come to trust your critiques without question.
I never get graphic in those types of scenes but a little steam and suggestiveness is a good thing. I'll try to do better!
Alan
I'm wondering if the people at Players Choice will let her in the door, even if she's with one of their guests.
Ron did have perfect timing showing up just when she needed him most. Even if she can't get into the Players Choice, at least she won't spend the night alone, on the street.
Charley
Hi Again, Charley,
Your questions about Olivia and the Players Choice is answered in the next chapter. And yes, Ron's arrival was a God-send for her. I had him arrive for two purposes - this is one of them. The second one also plays out in the next couple of chapters.
Sure do appreciate you reading and reviewing! Many thanks!
Alan
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