I have been contemplating my use of flashbacks in Hunter. While researching the use of flashbacks and mistakes that are often made, I ran across this article that was very helpful to me, and I hope will be the same for you. Mike
102 2015-06-08 16:34:52
Topic: 3 Tips for Writing Successful Flashbacks (3 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I have been contemplating my use of flashbacks in Hunter. While researching the use of flashbacks and mistakes that are often made, I ran across this article that was very helpful to me, and I hope will be the same for you. Mike
103 2015-06-07 14:41:34
Re: Wishlist Cont. (212 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I wish I could make changes to my text while viewing an inline-review. This may be available and I just don't know it. If so please teach me. When I see and nit or a comment that I agree with and want to change in my text, it would be so nice to be able to edit right there in the review. Thanks for any help you can give.
Mike
104 2015-06-05 01:59:07
Re: Notification of death to next of kin. (4 replies, posted in Cop Shop)
I have had this duty in the past. As a detective, this was a tough job but was also essential just in case the next of kin became the suspect. The reaction of this news is something that can be of great value when trying to put together the story of what happened. In my jurisdiction the assigned detective delivered the news. I am sure this is not standard. Mike
105 2015-06-02 21:39:11
Re: Geneticist required for 4017 A.D. (29 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Lets see, you are writing a book about 4017, and you want to be genetically accurate? Duh, what's wrong with this picture Dirk. LOL, Mike
106 2015-06-02 21:35:30
Re: Sorry! (11 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
May God truly bless and comfort you in your loss and taking on this most challenging of life's relationships. Being a full time caregivers has to be the most taxing and rewarding thing any of us does. My prayers are with you . Mike
107 2015-05-30 00:12:06
Re: How much truth do you put into your writing? (8 replies, posted in Cop Shop)
Why invent a character from whole cloth when you know someone who has the basics and just needs tweaking. I have trouble keeping truth to a minimum. Some people just can't handle the truth. Ohhhhh that's a good line. Mike
108 2015-05-29 23:59:33
Re: Keeping things straight (3 replies, posted in Cop Shop)
John and JP, I'm still laughing, not at you but with you. I honestly thought all you "pro's" had this all together, and I was the guy in the tux with brown shoes. Hunter is so confused right now I had to take a break for a week and just get some energy to work it out. I think I have it close but not really sure. I just publish without comma's and hope for the best John. You guys are fuunny. Mike
109 2015-05-28 21:08:01
Re: Grammarly (20 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Well said JP, Mike
110 2015-05-23 00:29:54
Re: Grammarly (20 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Whitesmoke is the program the review recommnded. It is only 79.95. I have the free grammarly but have not tried whitesmoke. Mike
111 2015-05-22 23:17:08
Re: Grammarly (20 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
If I had a nickel for every comma mistake it catches, I could pay for the darn things. Just sayin. I did look at a review site for grammar programs and there is one which is touted to be better with a lower price. Can't remember the name but I will fine it. Mike
112 2015-05-22 23:10:25
Re: Short Story Contest (25 replies, posted in Cop Shop)
JP, You can count on me to help out with anything you need for future group happenings. Thanks for your hard work. Mike
113 2015-05-17 20:13:39
Re: the Bible and capital punishment (7 replies, posted in Spirituality & Religion)
The Romans lighted their streets with the burning bodies of Christians yet the Bible says render unto Caesar what is Caesar's. Evil is part of free will and is allowed by God IMO to be so repugnant that man will draw closer to God as a body of humans, and never allow such heinous crimes to be committed again. Had the German people been following the will of God and not looking for someone to champion their superior race, things would certainly have been different. If Americans today were seeking God in all that they do, our country would probably be in different hands, abortion would no longer be in question, and life would be much better. Unfortunately, that won't happen and the details of the end are foretold. To blame the war on one man is beneath your intelligence as nothing is done by one man. In contrast although I loath what Mr. Obama has done to my country, he had to have many cohorts afraid of losing their sweet deals, on both sides of the aisle. I fear for our country if another old line Republican gets in office almost as much as I fear the career criminal and heinous murderer that is being touted by Dems. We must have change of significant caliber to continue this country as it is or preferably was. God is in charge and will end all this when He see's fit. We all will live forever, it is our choice where that will be. Mike
114 2015-05-17 16:40:58
Re: the Bible and capital punishment (7 replies, posted in Spirituality & Religion)
The word used in Ex. 20:13, refers to iniquitous killing. The practical application of this command is to recognize that Holy God has responsibility, over life and death. All life is because God allows it, and all death the same. God never kills iniquitously, for He is Holy and cannot. Instead of thou shalt not kill, the translation should read thou shalt not murder. The old Testament was written for a people who's only access to God was the sacrifice of animals at great cost to themselves. God in His infinite wisdom and compassion saw that the system worked out of fear only and not out of love, which He sought from His creations. Christ was sent in Grace to bring man into a relationship with His God through God's love. A relationship with Christ living a life following His word and the leading of His indwelt Spirit, presumes the proper interpretation of the commandments and Christ's words. Capital punishment when in statute of the government (which is allowed if not ordained by God) is our duty to consider. Killing in war ordered by statute is not murder in God's eyes, and is therefore, righteous in His eyes. Why is there evil in the world? I can only tell you that man's original sin is responsible and we all are sinner's when born, and have to repent and accept Jesus Christ as Savior to find a relationship with God. There are many things we will not understand until we are with Him in Glory. From your political comments, I am sure you believe that the death of George W. would remove all evil and we would all be drinking Obama's free bubble up and eatin his rainbow stew. Mike
115 2015-05-17 00:14:57
Re: the Bible and capital punishment (7 replies, posted in Spirituality & Religion)
Romans 13: 1-2 J.B. Phillips version.
Every Christian ought to obey the civil authorities, for all legitimate authority is derived from God’s authority, and the existing authority is appointed under God. To oppose authority then is to oppose God, and such opposition is bound to be punished.
116 2015-05-16 23:25:04
Re: (Newbie peeks around the corner into the Room ...) (11 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Skip, You are just like the rest of us, looking for some flattery, a few kind words, our head swells up and we go back to our little room and write something more impressive.
I read your first chapters and you have nothing to worry about. I like your characters so far and I know the story will be interesting because you captured me by letting me know your guy. Keep it up, but don't be so humble. Mike
117 2015-05-16 23:19:40
Re: Be back soon (15 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Tom, I suffered for many years with A-fib. They put in a pacemaker/defibrillator which gave me some insurance against V-fib but I still had the discomfort of the flutter in my chest, which was scary and very uncomfortable. My heart electrician did a ablation to my heart and burned the nerves causing the A-fib, no more trouble. Hope you feel better soon.
Lord Jesus, please come close to Tom right now and help him regain his strength from this A-fib. I know how it can zap your strength. Please watch over him and make him well again soon. In Jesus Name I pray with thanksgiving. Amen.
118 2015-05-13 02:12:24
Re: Essential Elements of Writing Crime (5 replies, posted in Cop Shop)
Characters who evoke emotion. A cop you like, a cop you hate, same for the perpetrator. Character building can overcome a mediocre plot, in my opinion. Mike
119 2015-05-10 19:11:52
Re: MY APOLOGY (7 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
JP, I thought that was your regular work ethic. I have paused on The Hunt, because my flashbacks confuse even me. I for one will be with you whatever you post. You do it right in my book. Mike
120 2015-05-10 03:48:27
Re: Giving and receiving points? (6 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Dirk, I understand what you are trying to do but I'm new and the points I need to post my stuff makes me read and review. I am learning from each review I do. I have posted quite a bit of writing and still have a bank of points built up. I really think the way it is benefits new guys to get them active. Just my two cents.
Sol, If you read this I have a question. Is there a way to edit your post while you are looking at the X line review. When I see something I want to apply, I would like to apply it while in the review. Maybe its there and I don't know how to use it.
121 2015-05-09 20:03:51
Re: taking the Lord's name in vain (9 replies, posted in Spirituality & Religion)
Thank you Dirk. That means a lot to me. Mike
122 2015-05-07 18:38:58
Re: taking the Lord's name in vain (9 replies, posted in Spirituality & Religion)
I find in life that I am influencing people who I would never have guessed would pay any attention to me. It is such a great surprise when someone say, "I have been watching you, and I want what you have." It has happened to me, and I immediately start thinking what example have I shown. I am talking with a friend presently who I rode to work with for several years. He was a functioning alcoholic married numerous times and bragged about his affairs. Two years after I retired, he called me when his son was killed and wants to talk. Why, because he knew from being with me, I didn't talk like him, act like him, or think like him, and he wanted my input on his sorrow and how to handle it. I simply say, it's not me, it's Jesus and we go from there. We must be different to be noticed.
Matt 5:13 You are the salt of the earth; but if the salt has become tasteless, how can it be made salty again? It is no longer good for anything, except to be thrown out and trampled under foot by men. 14"You are the light of the world. A city set on a hill cannot be hidden;
God bless you guys this is a stimulating conversation. Mike
123 2015-05-07 18:25:03
Re: Psalm 109 (6 replies, posted in Spirituality & Religion)
David's prayer is in keeping with God's law that said when a person was falsely accused, the punishment that he would have received had his foes be proven correct in their accusations, would be exacted on the accuser. The excerpt below is from the John MacArther Study Bible.
David reverses roles with his enemies by moving from being the accused in man’s court to being the accuser/ prosecutor before the bar of God.
I. The Plaintiff’s Plea (109: 1– 5)
II. The Punishment Desired (109: 6– 20)
III. The Petition for Justice (109: 21– 29)
IV. The Praise of the Judge (109: 30, 31)
Psalm 18, is David's reaction to God dealing with his accusers. Remember before Christ, righteousness was attributed by ritual sacrifice. Punishment for unrepentant sin was harsh and sure. It needed to be so, to broaden the gulf between law and salvation through faith in Jesus Christ. The Old Testament while provided prophecy of things to come also serves to show the beauty of Grace. David was a infinitely fallible man who struggled with sin. I'm so glad he was and that God showed through David that He will not give up on men's imperfect nature. Mike
(2013-10-01). The MacArthur Study Bible, NIV (Signature) (Kindle Locations 129099-129105). Thomas Nelson. Kindle Edition.
124 2015-05-06 01:08:01
Re: taking the Lord's name in vain (9 replies, posted in Spirituality & Religion)
This is my experience alone and not intended to govern others speech. If I have to ask if it's wrong, it is. Having said that, there are times when such maturity does not come to fruition. Mike
125 2015-04-27 20:08:09
Re: now who would you love to meet in Heaven (3 replies, posted in Spirituality & Religion)
Jesus first, then Mom and Dad.