It's amazing how much misinformation there is on what seem like credible websites. I read on one site that the Sea of Galilee was saltwater. In reality, it's freshwater, fed by natural springs. Stuff like this could lead to big errors in my book.
1,826 2018-09-28 19:47:56
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,472 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
1,827 2018-09-28 07:54:35
Topic: Acknowledgements to websites? - Publishing (4 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I'm wondering if folks can tell me what they do as far as acknowledgements of websites from which they uncovered useful information to include in their stories but didn't lift the text word for word from the source. I've been researching for a year for my new WIP and have visited hundreds of websites, most of which were useless. The number of useful sources is probably in the dozens, some of which provided as little as two or three sentences of new information. I had originally planned to acknowledge the ones.I use all the time, like Wikipedia and Catholic.com, but I haven't been tracking the others. I've also read about two dozens books and made detailed notes, and I watched many videos and photos on Googl,, resulting in more notes. Most of this stuff was educational to me but would be common knowledge to Catholics, so some of it appears on multiple Christian/Catholic websites.
Is there a best practice for how to acknowledge sources for a fictional tale?
1,828 2018-09-27 16:24:39
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,472 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
More of a gherkin, actually.
1,829 2018-09-27 04:54:53
Re: Killing off Characters (spoilers?) (12 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
In my space opera, I blew up a 400-pound male Mob boss named Mama of Mama's Little Shipping, which has a galaxy-wide monopoly on shipping. Mama was poisoned with Daemon-07, a substance that causes your intestines to expand at nearly the speed of sound. It happened at his Le Chick Restaurant, famous for its succulent baby chicken dishes. A favorite hangout of Mob bosses from around the galaxy, as each person in the restaurant inhaled the resulting fumes, they too exploded. Mama's head landed in the lap of the ever-elegant Lady Kay, named for our very own Kdot (see above). The quick-thinking Kay escaped out an air conditioning vent. On the news, she is quoted as saying: "Heads were popping like champagne corks in there. I thought I had cannon fire chasing my [censored]." I kept laughing while writing the full news report. He was one of my favorite characters, but the news report was too good to pass up once it was written.
Some day I'll tell you about a crazed 41st century taxi driver named Leonardo, his ex-wife Donna Pelosa (which Google Translate seems to think means "hairy woman"), and the cab's long-suffering artificial intelligence unit, Stronza, which is Italian for bitch (it was the ex-wife's rusty old cab). You should see what Stronza can do when Leonardo engages Suicidio Mode! He doesn't actually die (yet), but he leaves quite a body count behind as he flies his cab through rush hour traffic.
1,830 2018-09-27 04:35:03
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,472 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
What do you do if the official Israeli government website disagrees repeatedly with multiple Capernaum tour guides/videos and Wikipedia? The Israeli site is incomplete, but it has painfully detailed (albeit useless) archaeological descriptions of the synagogue that I haven't found elsewhere, and it acknowledges the excavations led by specific Franciscan fathers. For example, two of my sources say that the large hall in the synagogue was for scriptural readings and that the smaller east room was for prayer. The Israeli site lists the large hall as the prayer hall. Damned if I do, damned if I don't.
1,831 2018-09-27 02:52:58
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,472 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Good grief. I just spent 10 minutes looking for a note I had made about the First Jewish Revolt. I have handwritten notes that I take while watching videos. I looked through them repeatedly but couldn't find the note. That's when I remembered I have virtually all of my notes in a Word document. I've only been using it non-stop for a year, including earlier today. I need a good daytime weed. Counting down to Oct. 17!
1,832 2018-09-26 14:58:30
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,472 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I agree. There will be a few occasions where Connor sees Christ in a location that's been reconstructed differently from its original design (e.g. no one knows where Jesus lived in Nazareth, but Connor will be able to see it without regard for modern homes that stand in the way). I'll add flora/fauna changes too. Connor can see it all in his mind's eye.
Thanks.
Dirk
1,833 2018-09-26 01:46:20
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,472 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I decided to research Capernaum (Jesus's base) yesterday rather than work on the outline. Allowing time for errands, it may take me until the end of the week to finish with the town (the remains of a synagogue, two churches (one "hovering" atop St. Peter's home), the remains of numerous stone-walled homes, what appear to be restored stone piers, and a modern building whose purpose I'll simply have to guess at). Thank God for tourists with cameras. I also found an online tour/guide for several of the key Christian sites. I hope to finish his video of Capernaum tonight.
Funny thing. Most of the pictures show the surrounding landscape almost completely devoid of green. I figured it was barren like many other desert areas of Israel and didn't consider seasonality. During growing season, the whole landscape is transformed into countless shades of green. I forgot that Galilee is incredibly fertile. Mostly grasses near the town from what I can tell. Virtually no trees until you get to the low hills in the distance. Everything around the town was probably cut down over the 1300 years that the town existed.
1,834 2018-09-25 04:40:34
Re: caps question - Capitalization (15 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
My thanks to everyone. Ponder, I will.
1,835 2018-09-24 22:01:26
Re: caps question - Capitalization (15 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Here's an example from a capitalization article about geographic naming: Everyone should visit the Indiana Dunes. The dunes offer hiking, swimming, and picnicking. If I follow my Guard rule, then dunes should be Dunes.
1,836 2018-09-24 21:51:18
Re: caps question - Capitalization (15 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I was going to go with lowercase sea, but I have a similar example that may complicate things. In my previous book, I had a large military force named the Praetorian Guard that protected the Imperial Family. Based on examples from other writers, when I shortened it, I kept caps: "The Guard stands with you, Imperator." as opposed to "The guard stands with you, Imperator."
Thoughts?
1,837 2018-09-22 18:34:45
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,472 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I just finished populating an events table with cross-references into my best pilgrimage book. Long sigh. There's some missing detail for locations the author didn't include, but I can get that from online resources and the other (alphabetized) travel guides later. I'm sick of research, so I guess this means I'm starting the outline. Woohoo!
1,838 2018-09-21 02:24:03
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,472 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
My watcher refuses to shut up about things I did wrong as a little kid. It's really annoying.
1,839 2018-09-20 22:37:21
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,472 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Is it the multiplicity of selves that you wanted me to take note of (for Joseph and Apollo), the fact that you don't have perfect knowledge but need to make a decision (which route to take in Israel), or having a watcher/judge?
1,840 2018-09-19 06:54:04
Re: caps question - Capitalization (15 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Thank you, Alan and Temple. Temple, the book is beyond my reading level.
1,841 2018-09-19 04:34:22
Topic: caps question - Capitalization (15 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I'm including the Holy Land's "Sea of Galilee" in my WIP. When I refer to it simply as sea (e.g., Low hills lay beyond the sea/Sea.), do I capitalize sea? It's a specific sea, so I'm inclined to capitalize it.
Thanks
Dirk
1,842 2018-09-19 04:29:05
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,472 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Hmm. Not all of Israel's major highways have street view. Highway 92 running down the eastern side of the Sea of Galilee is only available in 2D. The west side's view from highway 90 is terrific. I'll need to identify some of the flora around the sea. Besides palm trees, the rest are just bushes and trees to me.
1,843 2018-09-19 02:16:10
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,472 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Google maps rock! Street view allows me to see the landscape for major routes through Israel. Indispensable given that the travel guides don't cover most of this in a way I can follow on a map. I'm 60% of the way through rereading the best of the travel guides for the sites Connor may visit. The author jumps around, though, both in time and place. The only reason I can follow most of the book is that I have a table of the major events in Jesus's ministry. I'm still pondering whether to follow a chronological path through Israel or a circular one. Since virtually nothing is known about Jesus as a child and young adult in Nazareth, it seems like overkill to drive all the way north after Bethlehem, only to come south again for the baptisms, then north again to Galilee. Unfortunately, there are quite a few sites for which I still don't have enough description. What I'd give for the health to see it all in person with a good tour guide.
1,844 2018-09-15 02:49:47
Re: Hurricane Florence (20 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Seabrass wrote:Are you a good swimmer?
Prime example of why I rescue 4-legged asses instead of 2-legged ones.
Priceless!
1,845 2018-09-14 13:55:12
Re: Which way of traveling the Holy Land is less confusing? - LOTE (11 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
He will indeed demonstrate that he can take care of himself before the tour is over. One of the reasons he's there is that he's being hunted in Rome, even inside the Vatican. They send him to the Holy Land not just to jog his memory, but also to keep him relatively safe while they hunt for a killer of cardinals and bishops in Rome. That killer is believed to be the Antichrist.
1,846 2018-09-13 18:29:48
Re: Which way of traveling the Holy Land is less confusing? - LOTE (11 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
The tours I've read about don't travel chronologically. They take the short route. In thinking about this since yesterday, I've settled on a chronological presentation.
1,847 2018-09-13 17:47:08
Re: Which way of traveling the Holy Land is less confusing? - LOTE (11 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
He's a target of the Antichrist, so he'll be traveling in a motorcade of three armored Mercedes SUVs loaded with heavily armed Swiss Guards. There's a Catholic expert on the Holy Land in the group. How's that for a tour? :-)
1,848 2018-09-13 04:16:38
Re: Which way of traveling the Holy Land is less confusing? - LOTE (11 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Thanks, MJ. The question of whether Connor is Christ is one of two key mysteries in the book, both answered at the climax of the story. He has special (supernatural) gifts, which is why the Church thinks he may be Christ. Unfortunately, if I discuss Jesus's life in chronological order then I have to hop around (Start in Tel Aviv, bypass Jerusalem, head south to Bethlehem, then north to Nazareth in Galilee, then south near Jerusalem on the Jordan River, then back north again to Galilee not far from Nazareth).
If I make the route logical, then the events of His life will be told out of sequence. If I put them in proper sequence, then there has to be some back and forth between Galilee and Judea. I'm leaning toward a chronological route. Christians know he goes back and forth (even more often than I do in the story), so I think they'd be fine with it. I think non-Christians would understand the story better if told chronologically, with brief mention of the fact that they're moving around Israel to follow Christ's movements through the Holy Land. Jerusalem is the major exception. It played a huge role in Jesus's life, so I want to build up to it by only going there once, leading directly to the climax.
1,849 2018-09-13 02:13:36
Topic: Which way of traveling the Holy Land is less confusing? - LOTE (11 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
As some of you know, my current WIP has a teen named Connor whom the Catholic Church has come to believe may be Christ returned in the flesh. Connor has no memory of a past life, so they send him on a tour of the Holy Land to visit many of the sites where Jesus walked the earth. The book is primarily for a Christian/Catholic audience, but it's also a supernatural thriller, so I hope to pick up some non-Christian readers. Regardless of audience, I need to keep the trip simple to avoid confusion.
Here's the complication. Travelling the Holy Land in the order that most closely resembles Jesus's travels would have the motorcade crisscrossing the Holy Land in haphazard fashion:
Connor and his escorts land at Ben Gurian Airport in Tel Aviv, skirt by Jerusalem to get to Bethlehem (where Jesus was born), then to Nazareth up north next to the Sea of Galilee (where Jesus grew up), then south again to Qasr al-Yahud east of Jerusalem at the Jordan River (the tourist site in Israel commemorating Jesus's baptism at around age 30), then an hour's drive to get to the official baptism site in Jordan, then back to Israel and north again to the Sea of Galilee, where most of His ministry became more localized, except for yearly trips to Jerusalem. When Connor goes north the second time, I'm taking him to Capernaum (Jesus's base), even though He preached in Nazareth first.
The Bible says that Jesus's parents went to Jerusalem every year for Passover. He was there at least once as a child at age twelve, and at least three more times as an adult. Since Jerusalem is the climax of Jesus's ministry, I decided not to take Connor there until the end of the journey, where they finish up in the Church of the Holy Sepulcher, the location where Jesus was crucified and entombed.
I'm worried the crisscrossing will be confusing, especially for non-Christian readers, who aren't used to Jesus wandering back and forth as he does in the Gospels. The alternative is to follow this route:
Bethlehem, baptism sites, north to Nazareth, then Capernaum and the surrounding region. This is much easier to picture on a mental map, but requires delaying discussion of His childhood until they actually get to Nazareth. In other words, he'll be visiting the baptism sites (which happened when Jesus was an adult) before His hometown where He spent the first thirty years of his life.
Thoughts?
1,850 2018-09-12 03:25:01
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,472 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Hmm. Complication. Travelling the Holy Land in the order that most closely resemble's Jesus's travels would have the motorcade crisscrossing the Holy Land in haphazard fashion.
They land at Ben Gurian Airport in Tel Aviv, skirt by Jerusalem to get to Bethlehem (where Jesus was born), then to Nazareth up north next to the Sea of Galilee (where Jesus grew up), then south again to Qasr al-Yahud east of Jerusalem at the Jordan River (the tourist site in Israel commemorating Jesus's baptism), then an hour's drive to get to the official baptism site in Jordan, then back to Israel and north again to the Sea of Galilee, where most of his ministry became more localized, except for yearly trips to Jerusalem. When he goes north the second time, I'm taking him to Capernaum, even though he preached in Nazareth first.
The Bible says that Jesus's parents went to Jerusalem every year for Passover. He was there at least once as a child at age 12, and then at least three more times as an adult. Since Jerusalem is the climax of Jesus's ministry, I decided not to take Connor there until the end of the journey, where they finish up in the Church of the Holy Sepulcher, the location where Jesus was crucified and entombed.
I'm worried the crisscrossing will be confusing, especially for non-Christian readers, who aren't used to Jesus wandering back and forth as he does in the Gospels. The alternative is to follow this route: Bethlehem, baptism sites, north to Nazareth, then Capernaum. This is much easier to picture on a mental map, but requires delaying discussion of His childhood until they actually get to Nazareth.
Thoughts?