Maiden and other stuff (Page 2 of 3)

Hello.

Still writing. Trying to finish Maiden's first draft. Not gonna post, though. Making changes, having later chapters reflect changes I will incorporate into next revision. Easier for me that way but way too confusing for the reader. So... yeah. No activity from me for a while.

Yes

Yes.  Although if the melancholy is bad enough, it will turn brown eyes blue.

Good one, sister

LOL. I would never use melancholy eyes; got it from a book. I appealed your rules to the Premium court. See Temple's answer there. It's quite good. I usually use expressive eyes in tense situations when showing is too slow. Admittedly, I also like eyes twinkling with mirth. :-)

Edit: Master needs a 2nd Ed. too, but only syntax/editing clean up. Just glanced through the first few pages. So many repeat words and what not. Wouldn't change a thing about the plot/structure

Made it an entirely new posting to ensure it got into the contest. The first time I posted chapters for In Possession, they didn't reach the contest because the original was posted way back before the beginning deadline. This, as a new 'book', ensures it gets in. Which it has. So no waste of credits. I did the same for my contest entries on In Possession of N-ergy. Iffins you want credits, give them a look. I added chapter prefaces to sneak in information I otherwise couldn't work into the prose.

Oh! Ha ha ha! Well, later it's revealed Creator used crystals to create her organic chord. I thought her name should reflect that, but I didn't want to use 'Crystal'. Hence, Crystel. I think it works. What say you?

Yeah, but all the other maidens have rubies and emeralds and diamonds. Only Crystel has crystals!

Recovering from surgery. Had something of a little crisis. Finding it hard to sit and focus on writing. But every day moves me closer to putting butt in chair. I'll get back into a groove at some point.

Give yourself the time to heal

Saw your reply to my review. For what it's worth, your story did not strike as a panster. Just a little rough around the edges, which I'm sure you know how to clean up. The detective half of my story is mostly a pantser, which is why it fell apart. I saw the big looming problem (too much violence at a personal level for a Catholic novel) early on, but figured I would figure it out when I got there. Clearly that didn't work. So be it. I'm currently planning non-violent but mysterious deaths while adding Catholic elements to each body, including a Bible open to specific verses for each murder.