Decided to go with three SUVs instead of two. Given that he may be Christ, one SUV full of guards seems insufficient. Gives me more SUVs to blow up too.
1,851 2018-09-01 01:00:33
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
1,852 2018-09-01 00:59:15
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Good grief. The little things you have to think of when writing. The SUVs carrying Connor will have Vatican City State plates while traveling in Israel, Palestine, and Jordan. I can't find documentation if this is what they actually do, but it avoids having Israeli plates in Palestinian Territory and vice versa.
1,853 2018-09-01 00:02:41
Re: WIP: Exile in Time (29 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Unrelated note: Tolkien sure would get a lot of nits if he posted on this site. So many unnecessary words, including the "suddenly" that Norm's been taking fire for.
Delete(reason) wrote:[Sam saw a strange and terrible thing. (OBV)]
Gollum on the edge of the abyss was fighting [like a mad thing with](cliché) an unseen foe. [To and fro](implied) he swayed[, now so near the brink that almost he tumbled in,](smaller sentences) now dragging back, falling [to the ground](where else would he fall?), [rising, and falling again](too many -ing's). [And all the while](not needed) he hissed [but spoke no words](implied by hiss). The fires below [awoke](fires don't sleep) [in anger](over explaining), the red light blazed, [and all the cavern was filled with a great glare and heat](Not important - smaller sentences).
[Suddenly](no suddenly) Sam saw Gollum’s long hands draw [upwards](too much direction) to his mouth; his [white](can any other colour gleam?) fangs gleamed, and [then] snapped as they bit. Frodo [gave a cry](cried), and there he was, [fallen upon](on) his knees at the [chasm’s] edge. But Gollum, dancing [like a mad thing], held [aloft] the ring, a finger still [thrust] within [its circle].
One of my reviewers hit me with a review like this.
1,854 2018-08-31 02:06:44
Topic: Another reason Amazon needs competition (1 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
https://writersweekly.com/angela-desk/a … -companies
As Ann pointed out last week, this is a small publisher's newsletter, so beating up on Amazon is what they do.
I've seen these third-party buy buttons many times on Amazon. I bought my latest computer on Amazon from a third-party seller. The next day another vendor was selling for $50 less. One bookseller put CA at the end of its name, suggesting to me they were in Canada (I was shopping on Amazon.ca). Turns out they were in the UK and the book took a month to arrive.
1,855 2018-08-30 23:36:12
Re: WIP: Exile in Time (29 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Who's Norm?
1,856 2018-08-30 04:52:52
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Okay, Bethlehem is done, but I still need to do the Church of the Nativity, which is part of it. Errands tomorrow. Revised estimate: three days. :-(
1,857 2018-08-29 18:57:45
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Up first, Bethlehem! Currently in Palestinian territory. Fortunately, since the Church is behind this mission, they're using their diplomatic contacts to bypass normal travel restrictions and delays. I plan a "convoy" of two SUVs, one filled with Connor, Father Romero, their Catholic guide, and a Swiss Guard as driver. SUV number two is more Swiss Guards. The Swiss Guards are expendable. Normally, the elite Swiss Guards only protect the Pope and his residence, but given who Connor may be, they're not taking any chances.
1,858 2018-08-29 05:37:41
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Nuts. I have to do a modern-day summary of each major location in the Gospels from the half dozen or so pilgrimage and travel guides I bought. Fortunately, the combined books seem to have what I need, right down to travel routes. That incorporates the effort mentioned above, so I don't think my estimate will change. If I can do one location per day, it'll be under two months.
1,859 2018-08-26 04:14:31
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Just finished the longest book about Jesus short of the Bible: Jesus: A Pilgrimage. Highly recommend it if you have the time to read the whole thing. I had to fast-track my way through it or spend another month reading. It didn't have as much location information as I would have hoped for, but it fills in a few blanks that were left open by my other books. Fortunately, the last 20% was footnotes and bibliography. I'm now done my formal research! Next comes integrating two books worth of Kindle notes into my Word notes/tables. That's going to take much longer than I would have hoped. Two months, give or take.
1,860 2018-08-26 01:17:26
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The old site where Jesus was baptized has been designated a World Heritage Site by the UN. In English the site is called Bethany Beyond the Jordan (no relation to Bethany where Lazarus was raised). In Arabic it's called Al-Maghtas, which means baptism or immersion. The tourist alternative in Israel is called Qasr el Yahud and lies directly on the Jordan River.
1,861 2018-08-25 03:17:59
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
You didn't spoil anything for me, Rachel. I don't have HBO, so the details will be long forgotten before I ever see it. HBO is only available through an expensive cable package in Canada. I don't watch TV, just the occasional Netflix show or movie. I spend most of my free time trying to finish the research for the trilogy. My latest research book has some useful elements, but it's incredibly long. I've been reading for two weeks off and on and am only 60% done. I've begun skipping passages looking for modern descriptions of New Testament sites in the Holy Land, which is why I bought it in the first place. For example, I learned tonight that the short route from Old Jerusalem to Bethany (where Lazarus was raised) is blocked by a wall built to separate Israelis from Palestinians, requiring a major detour. There's no mention of the wall in Google Maps. It looks like a short hop. Bethany and Bethlehem are in Palestinian-controlled territory, although they remain open for tourists. And the site where Jesus was baptized by John the Baptist is in Jordan. The Jordan River no longer runs by there, so someone built a modern baptism site on the Israeli side of the Jordan. For a few shekels, they'll rent you a bath robe and duck your head underwater. :-)
1,862 2018-08-24 02:08:31
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I haven't seen WW. I'll try Netflix. In my case, it's tricky, because he "may" be Jesus, hence the pilgrimage to jog his memory. He also goes to the Holy Land to get away from the Antichrist in Rome, who has begun to hunt him while simultaneously killing off cardinals and bishops at the Vatican. There is a possibility that he is not Jesus at all, but someone else entirely. His true identity is revealed at the end of book one. If he's not Jesus, I wonder how much of the original Christ he should see and hear. I'm leaning toward letting him experience all of it, aura and sound. Sound would include not just words, but also moments like the storms on the Sea of Galilee.
1,863 2018-08-23 18:26:56
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
It's actually an "imprint" that Jesus left in the places he visited during his ministry. Connor can see them and (possibly) experience what Jesus did 2000 years ago. I haven't decided yet if Connor can hear Jesus from back then (e.g. The Sermon on the Mount). It becomes somewhat unwieldy when you think about Nazareth since he grew up there and his aura should be all over that place at different ages. Still thinking about how this will work.
1,864 2018-08-22 20:22:16
Re: Can poverty take a life? (14 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
My parents lived in poverty. Poor diet and disease eventually claimed them.
1,865 2018-08-22 18:29:08
Re: strongest start (4 replies, posted in This is US!!)
Jeanne, if you look at the upper right of your home page, there's an area dedicated to the contest. Click on 'learn more' to go to the contest page. There you can click on 'Entries' to see everything that's been entered so far.
1,866 2018-08-21 19:35:49
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Following is from the dictionary: An invisible emanation or field of energy believed to radiate from a person or object. On second thought, that seems right. Yes?
1,867 2018-08-21 19:30:59
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
My main character, Connor, reports seeing the "aura" of Christ as they travel to places He visited in the Holy Land. After looking up the word, I'm not sure it's the correct term. What Connor sees is the residual energy of Christ's passing. Is that His aura or is there a better term? I suppose I could go with residual energy, although that's a long term.
Thanks
Dirk
1,868 2018-08-20 05:18:39
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Hmm. More books, although they're for reference. Pocket guides for Christians touring the Holy Land. Got the paper (non-Kindle) versions. I'm starting to pull together good descriptions of Christian sites. I'm halfway through my second of two Kindle pilgrimage books. I then have to convert both of those into table notes. Then...the first outline. Yay! I realized I don't need to outline books two and three to write book one, although I'm making lots of notes for all of them. Besides, it's highly unlikely I'll publish the first book without being close to finished with the third. There'll still be time for changes to book one.
Now if I could just get my sleeping pill regimen sorted out, I might have some energy during the day. Kdot, aren't you wiped out on three hours a night?
1,869 2018-08-17 03:30:33
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The first one looks like you falling asleep (or being pious) and the second one looks like you after too much coffee. It also looks like me with my Harry Potter glasses on (gold frame/black was too geeky). I look like a country doctor with old-fashioned spectacles. My mother can't stop laughing when she sees them. I guess that was the reason there was only pair of those frames among the entire store selection.
1,870 2018-08-17 03:03:20
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I finally looked up what x.x means. You use it so much I figured I should learn what it means. My favorite, though, is -.- Couldn't find it online.
1,871 2018-08-17 02:49:32
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Nuts. I just changed Lo Bidda to Low Bidder in my Strongest Start entry. Back to the edit screen.
1,872 2018-08-17 00:11:13
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
And your suspect opinion is?
1,873 2018-08-17 00:08:20
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Is Lo Bidda Corporation an obvious variant of Low Bidder Corporation, or should I make it more obvious for the spoof-impaired?
1,874 2018-08-16 23:36:18
Topic: Hail the Almighty Amazon! (0 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
1,875 2018-08-16 10:47:38
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I plan to have a cab driver named Leonardo.