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I like it. Thanks.
Dirk

Getting close to the end of R2. As I mentioned in my latest review, I really have no idea where the story is going. It's been mostly action-oriented chapters in various settings that don't connect well for me. I'm not sure how much of this is part of the genre and involves stuff I should already know as background.

To me it's a lot like a new TV show so far, with many apparently unrelated episodes, generally set in the same universe and involving some of the same characters, but you don't really know where anything is going for a season or two because the writers/showrunners often themselves don't know. The importance of non-main characters is also not knowable for a time until they reappear, if ever.

I read the content summaries of all four R books so far and reread the one for L. Nowhere is there a real summary of what the story (as a whole) is about. The third post in this thread is as close as you've come to a description, which is most noteworthy for saying your not following a formula. Since you're going to have to write a real blurb eventually, why not take a crack at it and drop it into the content summary of book one?

Naturally, I'll keep reading, but it would be nice to have a better idea of what to expect so that I can see a progression in the plot and characters, and not wonder if the latest series of events have any lasting impact on the story as a whole.

Hope this helps.
Dirk

Posted a short story for the mythical creature contest. It's Animal Farm "off its meds".

I've been watching short clips from Frasier on YouTube. Apparently, Niles (Frasier's brother) is allergic to parchment mites. He had been to a library and was scratching his right ear the way a dog would. Reminded me of my Professor Hinkley and his addiction to bookworm spoor. :-)

Heck with it. There really is no better way to fight demons than with holy water. It's a staple of the genre. Since that would make it too easy to find all demons in the Church, the AC is forced to use humans. He does, however, use an occasional demon when he needs to replace someone in a hurry, like the chief exorcist. The demon bodies will only last a few months, which is another reason they're not practical as human replacements.

Now I just need a reason why some of the clergy that the detectives hunt are short-lived demons. As currently written, Father Fischer is human and jumps to his death because he's afraid of the Antichrist. If he's going to jump, I'd rather make him a demon. Demons are obedient and expendable, so Father Armani would have no problem ordering one to jump to his death. In fact, he might have attempted to kill Campagna and De Rosa by landing on top of them, but simply missed by a meter.

The other option re Father Fischer is that he's human and found dead when the detectives get there, killed by a demon summoned by Father Armani.

A possible solution. Demon bodies only last a few years before they begin to disintegrate. Can't use them for long term assignments. The chief exorcist was killed and replaced with a demon clone of himself, grown from his own cells. He was replaced because the AC wanted to prevent the reverend mother from finding Connor and giving him the message from God.

I'd still prefer to make all followers demons, but then I need to think of a less obvious way to detect them than merely sprinkling them with holy water. That would eliminate the added complexity of the AC having both human followers and demons. Admittedly, in Revelation, the AC leads many humans astray, although they're not actual coconspirators.

UF?

Happily, the location of Pontius Pilate's residence while in Jerusalem remains unresolved. That's important because it determines the route that Jesus walked on the way to be crucified. Christians commemorate an east-to-west route, starting at the Antonia Fortress (next to the Temple Mount) and ending at what is now the Church of the Holy Sepulcher. However, many scholars believe it was a west-to-east route, starting at Herod's palace (the opposite side of town) and ending at the church. My money is on the scholars. I don't think Pilate would have stayed in a small barracks when there was a palace nearby. Nevertheless, Connor will set them straight. :-)

Thanks, Max.

Welcome, kl. There are a lot of very competent writers on the site who will gladly help you improve your writing. The site works largely based on reciprocal reviews. If you want to have your work reviewed, you simply do the same for others and most will respond in kind if your story matches their interests. Also, reviewing earns you points with which to post more of your writing. The site's regular reviews are great for high-level feedback, and the inline reviews are excellent for detailed feedback about individual paragraphs, sentences, words, and punctuation. Although I don't write about werewolves and vampires, my story is a Catholic tale of the end times, so there are a few demonic beings lurking about. Check out my book's content summary to see if it might interest you.

See you around the site.
Dirk

I tried searching against received inline reviews and posted inline reviews. The search against received inlines works; the search against posted inlines does not. Haven't tried searching against regular reviews.