I'm going to spend a little more on it. I'm almost done revising the first act, including an upcoming battle at the end of this act that causes Apollo to act. Although later battles don't use the 4D cannons (too dangerous), they use similar tactical maneuvers, which are affected by the first battle. Besides, I have most of it in my head. If I stop now, I'll forget the details (shocking, I know), and have to rediscover everything later.
826 2024-01-02 14:59:22
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
827 2024-01-02 06:39:18
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I punted hyperspace as a term hours ago. I also ignored the fact that the fourth dimension is often considered to be time. I'll just have to be explicit. To simplify the writeup, I've said that all matter in our normal universe has 4 "physical" dimensions, of which we can normally only experience 3. Also, rather than 4D cannons, I've decided to give the Hercules a huge emitter on the hull, which she can use to open a hole into the 4th dimension of space, through which she can then fire a full barrage of supernova blasts at the unshielded portion of the Colonial ships. Where the extraordinary need for power will come into play is in opening the hole.
Just thought of another plot hole, though. If the Hercules wants to dump huge amounts of power into the emitter, all she has to do is install another powertron just for that (admittedly they're huge and they eat atreidite for breakfast). Then there would be no risk of overloading the existing powertron. Crap like this has been happening to me all day. Fix one thing, break another. I'm going to bed. I'll try to figure it out tomorrow.
[Censored!]
828 2024-01-02 01:38:35
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I called it 4D space, short for the fourth dimension (another "physical" dimension, not time). No reference to hyperspace at all. All matter in the universe exists in all four dimensions, including us. You blow something up in one dimension, there's a good chance you'll destroy it across all four dimensions.
I keep running into problems though. Every time I think I've accounted for all obvious plot holes, and I write it up, I find new plot holes.
829 2024-01-01 19:02:55
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
One definition of hyperspace I read usually involves extra dimensions where the laws of physics are different than in our dimensions, allowing ships to go faster than light. It's a concept invented by an SF author in the early 1900s and used by many others, including Asimov in his Foundation novels.
I'm considering calling mine extraspace, but it probably fits the definition of hyperspace too. Specifically, all objects that exist in spacetime also exist in my version of hyperspace, which is merely a fourth "physical" dimension of those objects. If you hit an enemy ship's fourth dimension with an energy beam fired into hyperspace, that foreign energy is expelled from hyperspace at the point of collision between the energy beam and the ship's fourth dimension.
I don't actually mention hyperspace when it comes to the operation of my stardrives. I simply call it teleportation and leave the "how" to the reader's imagination. But I do refer to hyperspace (or extraspace) for how the hypercannons work. The firing ship doesn't itself enter hyperspace, but the cannons are able to fire into it, resulting in an energy beam that bypasses the target ship's shields (which only exist in the first three dimensions) and strikes the hull of the ship.
Dune had a book dedicated to the period/characters who invented their drive mechanism. They went into some details, but I don't recall how much.
830 2023-12-31 22:12:13
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
One thing I don't understand is that hyperspace is usually referred to as a higher dimension. Shouldn't that be dimensions (plural)? You still need three of them. Four if you count time (hypertime?).
831 2023-12-31 17:45:40
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Thanks, njc. Energy kicking back and causing a potential explosion onboard the Hercules (the firing vessel) could be very useful. I had previously used the idea that firing the (mattergy) cannons could overload and damage the Hercules's powertron (power source), but since I now have the ship firing through hyperspace, some kind of unpredictable blowback would serve to render the technology unusable in the long run, regardless of how powerful the powertrons eventually become. That fits well since I don't want this particular tech to remain a part of the story beyond the initial battle.
832 2023-12-31 11:08:57
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I'll take another crack at trimming it. And of course it's been done in Star Wars 7, when Starkiller Base blows up the Republic's capital planet from light years away. They fired through hyperspace. Screw it. I'm doing it anyway. My hyperspace cannons work at a much more granular level (ship to ship rather than planet to planet). After the Death Star, the folks at Lucasfilm kept trying to outdo themselves in the books with ever more dangerous weapons.
833 2023-12-31 04:39:00
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Below is the proposed replacement for those idiotic mattergy weapons in the opening battle.
Aussie said, “She’s charging her new cannons.”
“Analyze!” St. James said.
“Based on their energy signature, I believe those are hyperspace weapons, able to fire at a target through a higher dimension. Whatever energy makes it through hyperspace to its target would effectively bypass our shields, which don’t exist there. Development and use of such weapons is strictly prohibited by the Neuer Mond Treaty.”
“Since when has that ever stopped the Imperium? Weaknesses?”
“The beam such a weapon fires is known to spread out very quickly in higher dimensions, obeying the inverse cube law. By the time it hits the target back in spacetime, it has lost considerable energy to space. As a result, such weapons require enormous energy to fire a blast strong enough so that the energy that hits the target still has sufficient punch to penetrate a ship’s hull.
“The Hercules must be bypassing its powertron’s safety limits to concentrate sufficient energy to fire, risking a breach. Many of her other systems are dropping off to compensate.”
834 2023-12-29 09:41:49
Re: Group Cleanup - Mopping Up - See List of Surviving Groups Inside (38 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Minor tweak: "Dark Tales" will be "A Dark & Stormy Night." I suspect most people who see that group name are likely to check it out, if for no other than reason than curiosity about the title. Naturally, the description for the group will give more detailed info about what the group is for.
835 2023-12-29 06:11:10
Re: Group Cleanup - Mopping Up - See List of Surviving Groups Inside (38 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Following is the list of finalists for groups to keep following the upcoming redo of the group purge/cleanup:
Basic
Premium
Romance
Historical Fiction
Thriller/Mystery/Suspense
Fantasy/Magic/Sci-fi - currently still called medieval fantasy/magic
Young Adult & New Adult
Spirituality & Religion
Memoirs & Self-discovery
Dark Tales - includes Gothic thrillers, horror, vampire/werewolf stories, etc.
New Authors - this will combine the existing groups New Novelists and New Members
Writing Tips & Site Help
Nobody spoke up for the following, so they won't be kept:
This is Us
You Read Mine, I Read Yours
Literary Fiction
Only the Dark Tales group will be truly new. We can add to the above list down the road as needed. However, since we can only each belong to ten groups, no one will be able to join them all, which means we'll need volunteer moderators to keep a collective eye on the groups as a whole.
Please add to this thread if there are any of the above you would be willing to moderate going forward. I know groups can have more than one moderator, although I don't know if there's an upper limit. Based on past experience, being a moderator really only involves keeping an eye out for problems and welcoming/guiding new group members, who are usually new site members as well. However, it assumes you'll be onsite often enough to serve in that role. Ideally, we should have at least 2 moderators per group.
I'll probably be a moderator for most of them initially, at least until I can finish the post-purge cleanup steps. I don't have the cycles yet to kick that off, and I haven't even approached Sol as to when he might have time to redo the mass purge.
In cases where two or more groups are being "combined", that really just means we'll rename one of the existing ones (to give it its new name) and then delete the other ones.
Thanks and Happy Holidays!
Dirk
836 2023-12-28 01:25:09
Re: Hello! (14 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Grammar is not just a thing right or wrong. Grammar is a tool of the writer. In English's magnificently rich grammar there are usually many ways to present a structure of ideas.
Call me Ishmael. ![]()
That is a great summary, njc.
837 2023-12-27 23:48:31
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I'm probably going to end up with either the Sweltering or the Albuma (winds). I lean toward the latter.
838 2023-12-27 23:26:58
Re: Hello! (14 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Welcome, Margo. The site is a little quiet right now as we lost quite a few users with the crash/recovery, but they're slowly coming back. There's a Young Adult/New Adult group that might interest you, but it needs more members before it gets any traction. As George suggested, consider joining the medieval fantasy/magic group. It's actually for fantasy, magic, and sci-fi (anything fantastical, really, which covers a lot genres). That group will be renamed in the near future to something more appropriate. Based on the content summary of your book, I think that group would be a good fit. Some of us use the forum there for brainstorming with other writers in the group. See my forum thread there entitled The Archangel Syndrome to see how I use it.
Also, I suggest joining the Writing Tips & Site Help group. You can ask any writing/site questions you like, and there are a few of us lurking there to try to answer your questions. If you want as many eyes as possible on your question/concern or need information in the hurry, feel free to post directly to the Premium forum. No one there bites.
Many of the groups on the site are stale/abandoned, so if you join a group and there's zero activity, chances are it will be going away sometime next year when we purge abandoned groups. For now, check out the thread "Group Cleanup - Feedback Please" in the Premium forum to see what groups are likely to remain (and what they'll be called once we do the cleanup/purge). Feel free to join any of the groups listed there as being ones that we'll keep.
839 2023-12-26 19:17:32
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I narrowed it down to:
The Egg Poacher
The Sweltering
The Simmering
The Bitch-In-Heat
Any other forms of cooking I missed in the previous post?
840 2023-12-26 19:10:27
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Hmm. The heat of the Glistening. Nah.
Apollo had to protect himself from the Sweltering. That one has promise.
The heat of the Baking. The heat of the Great Baking.
The heat of the Frying.
The heat of the Broiling.
The heat of the Egg Poacher.
The heat of the Boiling.
The Bitch in Heat. ![]()
The Simmerer - I like that one too.
The Flambe.
841 2023-12-26 18:50:23
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Found these online. They're not usable, but they are funny.
Hotter than a Times Square Rolex.
Hotter than a hen laying hard-boiled eggs.
Hotter than a cow giving evaporated milk.
Hotter than Satan's mix tape.
Southern women don't sweat - they glisten.
842 2023-12-26 18:24:17
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Thanks, George. None of those tickle my fancy, though. The weird thing is, my Albuma example was initially a throwaway, but it's starting to grow on me. "The Albuma winds" sounds rather majestic.
843 2023-12-26 12:38:50
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Thank you for the link. I don't recall which pope started the process, but the Vatican apparently wants every diocese to have an exorcist. One of the things they do is bless buildings, which is considered a form of exorcism, so it's not usually as exciting as little girls throwing up pea soup. ![]()
844 2023-12-26 05:16:06
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
No, the idea is they chose something really hot to express/exaggerate what the heat feels like. Although now that you asked the question the way you did, clearly California Reapers is not good choice. If my readers were confused about the Realm being a republic that one day may be led by a king from one of its member systems, just imagine the head scratching when vegetables begin stalking Apollo. LoL
845 2023-12-26 03:54:08
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
New naming contest. Earth in the distant future still suffers from the aftereffects of climate change in the form of stubbornly high temperatures, the result of the planet experiencing the beginnings of a runaway greenhouse effect in the early centuries of the 3rd millenium, which was only halted because Dr. Narky brought civilization to its knees with her faulty vaccine, causing the population to crash from 10B down to 1B. I had been calling this the Warming, but as Jack rightly pointed out, since the planet actually ceased "warming" long ago, it's the wrong term. I had considered calling it the Broiling (with Terrans nicknamed roast beef by other worlds), but that's too in-your-face, hence boring. I want a term (preferably only one or two words, perhaps an acronym) that people coin to describe "hot as hell", say 5-10 degrees hotter than today. Ideally, the term should also have a humorous element to it.
Here's an example: Apollo could feel the heat of the "Albuma" winds blowing, a word derived from the acronym ALBUMA, which means "a lightning bolt up my ass." Censored of course. :-)
Hotter than Satan eating California Repears at the Big Bang! No idea what the acronym/short form would be. Sefcabb? Nah.
Or maybe just: Apollo could feel the heat of California Reapers stalking him in the Amazon.
Apollo wore heat-dissipating clothing to keep the heat of the California Reapers at bay.
Hot enough to fry a camel! Hefac. Could perhaps use it as a curse word. As Apollo stepped outside, he said, "Hefac!"
Hot enough to fry fish in a river! Heffir? Nope.
Whatever the final word is, I plan to use it a few times without explaining what it is until later, and it therefore should be cool/funny enough to be worth the wait for the reader.
Etc.
Thanks
Dirk
846 2023-12-24 19:54:56
Re: The Tribe v4 (5 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
If you're counting votes, I prefer "Satan", although either is perfectly acceptable. In a YouTube documentary I watched some time ago, the narrator pronounced it Se-tahn rather than Say-ten. I really liked it cause it was cool to hear a different pronounciation. Perhaps you can find a way to slip in Lucifer as a way that God addresses him:
Satan stepped before the Lord.
God said, "Well, if it isn't Lucifer, my prince of darkness."
Satan flinched. He hated the name Lucifer.
or
Lucifer stepped before the Lord.
God said, "Well, if it isn't Satan, my prince of darkness."
Lucifer flinched. He hated the name Satan.
With a brief exchange like the above, you would have introduced three of Satan's names (if you count prince of darkness), which would allow you to have God address him by one of those names, while everyone else uses one of the others. I did that with Connor/Constantino/Lord/Adamo. Different characters will use different names for him in book two, although the narration will always use Connor to minimize confusion.
847 2023-12-24 04:33:50
Topic: Diamonds & Rust (0 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IrVD0bP … Baez-Topic
Wow, Joan Baez can sing! I have some of her best songs in my regular playlist, but only just heard this for the first time a few weeks ago. Been listening to it ever since.
Safe for work.
Dirk
848 2023-12-22 21:29:43
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Mmm. No, but thank you.
I'll go with "for the Sovereign Stars" as the mantra and drop the "for" when it's a battle cry. Until I get sick of that too or a reviewer tells me it's crap.
849 2023-12-22 12:45:45
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Ah, crap. What would I use for the military mantra? "For the Sovereign Stars" seems rather long for troops to yell as they charge into battle. "For the Stars" seems weird, but "The Sovereign Stars" could work. I suppose "For the Sovereign Stars!" could be the actual mantra, but troops rushing into battle shorten it.
850 2023-12-22 12:35:31
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
In my neverending quest for a new name for the Realm that doesn't suck, I chose not to use Colonies since it begs the question: Were they once colonies of the Imperium that broke away? (They weren't.) My latest is the Sovereign Stars. The adjective would be Sovereign (e.g.., Sovereign fleet, Sovereign worlds). The only "quirk" is that the prefix for ship names becomes SSS (e.g., SSS Almighty, a Sovereign destroyer).
I think I can die in peace now.
Dirk