776

(309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Looks like a complete description of hypercannons is still way too complicated to explain in the middle of a battle:

“Each gun actually consists of two barrels, Admiral, one mounted inside the other. The mouth of the inner barrel is equivalent in size to a supernova cannon. The outer barrel is three times that width. It appears each gun involves firing two different beams at the same target, although there is no way to ascertain yet if the two beams fire simultaneously.
“Assuming the inner barrel is indeed a supernova, then the outer barrel is unlike any weapon previously deployed by either the Colonies or Imperium. Given the fundamental scaling limits on nova technology, the outer barrel must be something entirely different. The guns are not yet energized but are heavily shielded.”
...
“Based on their fluctuating energy signatures, other characteristics, and my knowledge of relevant research, I believe those are hypercannons — weapons able to fire through hyperspace, specifically the fourth spatial dimension. If I’m correct, then the outer barrel of each gun will be used to create an opening into hyperspace, while the inner barrel would fire a supernova blast into that dimension.”
“Fire at what?”
Us, Admiral! Although our ship is not technically present in the fourth dimension, we do intersect with it. Just as a point bisects a line, and a line bisects a square, our ship bisects a hypershape surrounding us in 4D space. It is theorized by military researchers that if a powerful enough energy beam, a supernova blast in this case, were fired at that hypershape and crossed our intersection with it, the energy would immediately return to spacetime and strike our hull, having completely bypassed our shields by coming at us from the fourth dimension. We have no defense against that except the hull itself.”
St. James looked at the captain and the colonel, eyes wide. “If they can bypass our shields, the Colonial Fleet would be in grave danger!”

By the process of elimination, I'm going with my original idea of some kind of energy beams that can "push" through a target's shields as if the shields don't exist (like neutrinos through matter), resulting in the beam hitting the hull directly. Seems rather like magic, but I no longer care.

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778

(309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Following is for chapter 1, quickly explaining the term boiler as part of a destroyer's description. All other details can wait until the end of act one, where I show a ship imploding-exploding in battle for the first time.

The hull of each destroyer, which resembled an elegant broad-bladed dagger, consisted of many layers of blast-resistant steel, or blasteel. The bridge was centered atop the “blade,” while at the vessel’s rear, located side-by-side, lay engineering and the huge neutrino-to-energy reactor, often referred to as a boiler for its ability to cook almost anything in the universe when ruptured.

I think it works.

Dirk B. wrote:

Sol, I think Raymond Hopkins can be deleted at this point. He never responded to my quickee and, as Bill pointed out, his author's bio reads more like a resume.

Don't forget Raymond

As part of the cleanup of dead and dying groups, this one is marked for deletion. For those interested in mysteries and thrillers, please join the Thriller/Mystery/Suspense group, which is the more active of the two groups.

Thanks
Dirk

I forgot that you often read my posted chapters before anyone else. Minor changes first: Campagna is no longer demoted. She's awaiting trial and says she will fight the charges. However, she knows she'll lose, but they can't fire her yet, so normally she would be on desk duty. However, she's a chief inspector in the next draft in charge of a critical investigation, and the director general doesn't want to replace her. That's because he's a demon under orders from Satan to keep her on the case.

I'm not sure if you knew, but I changed the ending so that Romano doesn't die when Satan throws him out a high window.

I don't know if Campagna has a turning point in book one, at least as currently written. Obviously, all the protagonists are defeated in that first round. She has some incredible scenes at the end of book two, but even though she kicks demon butt there, that's not really a turning point either, at least not for her as a character. Obviously, Connor matters more to her than anything. And she matters more to him than anything in spite of De Rosa's attempts to break their bond.

In book two, she's part of the resistance, led by Cardinal Nnamani, but I don't see her taking a lead role in that. She'll be involved, but her focus is Connor. Nnamani will be the major decision maker for retaking the Vatican, and he says he received a vision that God would cleanse the Vatican with no need for any violence on the resistance's part. So the resistance forces march on the Vatican, armed with crosses and holy water and whatever else. At some point in book two, she will receive a vision of her own, either right before the climax or perhaps earlier if I see a need for it. Her visions tell her what to do when the time comes, which takes place at the climax of book two. FYI, those visions are from the Holy Spirit.

Another scene I have in mind is when Campagna brings Connor home to meet her family, which is also his family. It'll be an emotional scene for Connor, but again I don't see her changing as part of that. Perhaps I can figure out a way for her to prepare to sacrifice herself to save Connor.

Her role at the climax does change her, but it's not driven internally. I'm thinking of leaving her with some supernatural powers.

By the way, in the scene above and many like it in book two, he's decided to push Satan's buttons by doing/saying outrageous things. If you remember, he's pissed off at his father and God for bringing him into the world solely to settle the bet between them. Love never had anything to do with it, in spite of what his father told him repeatedly while he was growing up in the orphanage. In the last chapter of the first draft, Conner thinks the price for his services will be high indeed. Angering his father is part of that. At one point, in front of the aforementioned Protestant ministers, his father (still in the form of De Rosa) keeps interrupting, trying to prevent Connor from doing and saying stupid things that would give away that he's not really Christ, so Connor tells a Swiss Guard that if De Rosa interrupts the "Lord" again, then the guard should throw De Rosa out of the building. Should be lots of fun. tongue

I'm only referring to the lack of a build of the tension/urgency related to the hunt for the AC in Rome. It's too episodic in my mind. They investigate, they think of a plan to take out the AC, their plan fails. Lather, rinse, repeat until the end.

Thanks, George. I'll probably go with Connor/Satan destroying holy sites in book two as part of turning everyone toward Connor as God. I came up with a scene for book two, where Connor is pissed off at a delegation of Protestant ministers who had come to the Vatican asking to see him perform miracles in person. They want to be sure that what they saw on TV at the end of book one was real (eg Connor's halo, the holes in his wrists, his otherworldly voice, his able to rebuke the storm and make it go away, etc.). Connor teaches them a frightening lesson (don't test the Lord!) and tells them they need to convert to Catholicism. He then tells them to go back to their parishes and preach to as many people who will listen that the Lord is a goddamn Catholic!  :-)

As I noted above, though, I think the hunt for the Antichrist in Rome is too much like distinct episodes that don't build tension/urgency. I was curious if you noticed that while reading it and if you see it now that I've pointed it out.

EDIT: I wrote this post in response to your original reply to me, not in reply to your most recent post.

K and George, I'm wondering what you think of the hunt for the Antichrist. I personally think it reads like just a bunch of "episodes" that don't build on each other sufficiently. I think it's missing ever-increasing tension and "thrill" as the detectives get ever closer to identifying the AC. There is continuity between those chapters, but nothing particularly important ties them together.

That's going to be a bitch to fix.

Hi Sol. Just a quick reminder to please get rid of the group Mysteries & Thrillers.
Everyone should move over to Thriller/Mystery/Suspense instead.

787

(2 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Check my response to your review of ACME. I included some details for you earlier. Also, please join the Writing Tips & Site Help group. Feel free to ask any questions there you like. If you want to reach more members more quickly, then this is the best forum to post into. Premium and Tips & Help are the fastest ways to get answers to questions you may have (usually answered by other members). Also, connect with member SolN. He's our admin, although he can be hard to reach quickly, unless the place is on fire.

It looks like I missed one to be deleted: Mysteries & Thrillers. We're keeping Jack's group (Thriller/Mystery/Suspense) since the latter is more active.
Everything else looks good.

Thanks
Dirk

Hi Sol. Your group purge missed a number of groups:

This is US - I asked everyone if anyone wanted this kept, and no one spoke up.

Fantasy/Magical Realism/Folklore - now part of Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi
Fantasy World Builders - now part of Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi
SCI-FI WRITERS - now part of Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi

Suspense / Romantic Suspense - new group, but the creator already left the site and closed her account. No other members or activity.
Experienced Writers of Literary Fiction - new group, but the creator already left the site and closed her account. No other members or activity.

Thanks
Dirk

790

(309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

True. I currently explain the term boilers late in act one, which may not be soon enough. I don't want to stop to explain the term mid-battle in act one, so a different name may be appropriate, although I like boiler. I currently use neutrino-to-energy reactor when I first introduce the concept, neutrino reactor for most of the narration and for Brain's dialogue, whereas most humans refer to it as boiler. I even considered calling engineering the boiler room. :-)

791

(309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

There would have to be some way to "refuel" the batteries from an external source, otherwise a call for help wouldn't be able to rescue a ship, just the people. I suppose towing is also a possibility to get a ship back to the local star, assuming there is one. Not things I'm likely to go into detail on, though.

792

(309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

I decided to treat the article that speculated about neutrinos powering cell phones and EVs as a not-so-crazy idea, rather than waste another day trying to calculate if it's actually possible. As a result, my powertrons have become neutrino-to-energy reactors, usually referred to as neutrino boilers, or just boilers. The origin of "boilers" comes from the fact that when a neutrino reactor is breached, it implodes into a singularity and then explodes like a mini-bang, with plasma temperatures reaching 250M degrees (now that'll heat your water!). I don't intend to explain how a neutrino-to-energy reactor works, though. The name should make it pretty obvious what it does, which is all I need for a Lucas-ian space opera (the s--t just works; don't bore people by trying to invent hokey explanations for impossible tech).

I may, however, mention in the Galactipedia article on FTL travel that if a ship's atreidite-based reserves (batteries) are drained (e.g., in battle) and the ship is too far from a major source of neutrinos, then the vessel can become marooned in space, unable to power the boiler and recharge the atreidite. That adds a nice element of risk to space travel, although primarily for vessels forced to move away from a major neutrino source (e.g., a star). That could be military vessels engaged in combat, civilian ships fleeing pirates, etc. In those situations you better hope your atreidite-powered interstellar drones are fully charged to go for help. And since drones can't carry huge reactors, they can only make a limited number of jumps before they run out of power.

Hi Sol. We've cleaned up the group names, so here is the final list of what to keep:

TheNextBigWriter Basic
TheNextBigWriter Premium
New Authors
Romance Inc.
Historical Fiction
Thriller/Mystery/Suspense
Fantasy/Magic & Sci-fi
Young Adult & New Adult
Spirituality & Religion
Memoirs & Self-Discovery
A Dark & Stormy Night
Writing Tips & Site Help

There's also a hidden group we'd like to keep, which I think was called Science Fiction, Steam Punk, and Space Opera. I'm no longer sure of the name because I can't see it. It's Kdot's old sci-fi group.

I hope I remembered them all. :-)

All other groups can now be deleted. Please verify my spelling of the above group names before you blow everything else away. I did check the above list tonight, but it can't hurt to have someone else double-check.

Anyone with any final objections had better speak up now. Last chance!

Thanks, Sol.

794

(309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Thanks, njc. I started reading it but had to spend the rest of the day dealing with other people's f-ups. I'll finish the rest of the article later this week. If other people only did their jobs the way they're supposed to, we'd all have a lot more free time, and companies could shrink their call centers.

For example, a few months ago, I tried logging into the Alberta government's portal, which allows us mortals to perform functions without having to deal with chronically understaffed call centers. Well, for some reason, my new computer (HP Win11 Chrome) kept getting an error 429 when I tried to log in, reset my password, recover my username, etc. Useful error message if ever I saw one. So, I called the call center (non-IT folks) who asked a few questions, including whether or not I have another computer. Turns out I do - a Chromebook. So I trundled downstairs to try it, and it worked. At that point, the tech guru at the call center concluded the problem lay with my PC and I'd have to call the manufacturer. When I pointed out that my HP works perfectly with thousands of websites I'd visited since buying it, he insisted there was nothing that could be done at their end. When I asked to speak with someone in IT to do more troubleshooting, he said there was no one he could transfer me to, and repeated that I'd have to speak to the manufacturer. Can you imagine the call with HP Support: My HP doesn't work with Alberta.ca's login page, although it works everywhere else, but the highly technical call center folks insisted it must be a hardware problem. tongue

Fortunately, there is another way to contact support, which is through email. So, I sent them an email and made my case, including the fact that just because their software works with some PCs, doesn't mean the problem isn't on their side. I eventually got an email back (an electronic form letter), which explained some possible causes of error 429, and things to try, up to and including reinstalling Windows. Can you imagine? I went so far as the step to reinstall my browser but then stopped. I emailed back that I had tried everything (a fib, I know) and asked what else they suggest. That was the last I heard from them. About two weeks later, I tried logging in again, and lo and behold, it worked. I guess whatever hardware problem was causing the error must have self-corrected. :-)

This is the kind of crap I was dealing with all day. :-(
Dirk

Sol, I think Raymond Hopkins can be deleted at this point. He never responded to my quickee and, as Bill pointed out, his author's bio reads more like a resume.

796

(309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Well, if the sun only puts out enough neutrinos every 176 years to equal the energy of a gallon of gasoline, then those cell phones and EVs better sip that gas very sparingly. :-) I think my problem is in the underlying numbers. I got some of them from Alexa, which didn't always quote sources I would necessarily trust if I was googling for the same info. This could be an example of the Alexa AI relying on crappy sources, which Open AI admits is a general problem. And of course, as companies all scramble to integrate AI and use it to answer questions based on shitty sources, googling will increasingly return crappy search results, which is already a known problem even without AI.

797

(309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Hmm. I think neutrinos are a bust. Spent way too much time on this already, but if each neutrino has one millionth the mass of an electron (an approximate upper limit on its mass) and we could catch neutrinos and convert their mass to energy using E=mc^2, we would need 1.33 x 10^27 neutrinos to equal the energy we get out of one gallon of gas (enough to light one 60W lightbulb for about 23 days). But, if a neutrino has only one billionth the mass of an electron (could be since the lower bound is unknown), we'd need 10^30 of them to match a gallon of gas.

The sun only puts out 2 x 10^26 neutrinos per second. Which means, if a neutrino weighs one millionth that of an electron, it would take 176 years (5.55 billion seconds) for the sun to emit enough neutrinos to equal a gallon of gas. I'm pretty sure my math is right, but 176 years is so long, I no longer trust some of the underlying numbers I got off the web. There's no way you could use neutrinos to power cell phones and EVs, as suggested in an article I read, if those numbers are right. One possibility is that the cell phones/EVs can convert some of the neutrinos' energy (they move at almost the speed of light) into a form our electronics can use. Not sure how much energy that is, though.

I'd still rather not use fusion for the big military ships since fusion doesn't cause the reactor to implode to a singularity and then explode like a mini bang when there is a containment breach, which is something I need for the battles. I do use fusion for small ships and flying cars, which don't blow up that way, even when Leonardo is driving.

The other alternative is simply to leave the big ship's powertrons totally unexplained. I would have saved myself a day if I'd gone that way. I'm going to leave it like that and wait to see if I come up with a better idea.

798

(309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Correction: there are 100 trillion neutrinos passing through us every second.

Interesting quirk: Even a banana emits neutrinos—they come from the natural radioactivity of the potassium in the fruit. If only I could come up with some way to efficiently concentrate potassium to the point where the result produces enough neutrinos to be a useful source of energy.

799

(309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Thanks, George. I'll check out the article. Whichever power source will get me closest to a little crunch/bang when things go wrong is the one I should probably go with. I figured I'd try to use something different for the big ships, rather than just good old fusion for all my power needs.

By the way, since the are billions of neutrinos passing through us every second, I figured that would make a good alternative power source.

800

(309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

I finally came up with a theoretically possible future power source to serve as the core of powertrons: neutrinos. Fusion will still be used for smaller power sources. The only down side of both neutrinos and fusion is that neither will come close to doing that implode-explode thing when the powertron is breached. Perhaps something about the way energy is "gathered" from neutrinos makes imp-exp explosions possible. Hard to imagine though since researchers are talking about neutrino-powered smartphones and electric cars in the coming decade(s). Apparently it's not a particularly dangerous tech.

Perhaps if I use neutrons (from an artificial baby neutron star in engineering) rather than neutrinos....