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In the case of Connor and the biblical figure (bf), I think both have agency, although there are clashes. Connor dominates in book one, begins to lose a little control of decisions at the end of book one (failed to smother the pope), continues to lose control as bf awakens throughout book two, a crisis point is reached that probably requires both to settle their differences and work together (details TBD), after which a blended whole can move forward. I had been thinking that each would continue to exist, though, with one or the other yielding control as dictated by the scene/plot, especially when certain unique strengths are called for that only one of them has. Naturally, if there is a switch in the personality in control, I would need to make that obvious to the reader.

In order for them to reach a compromise, I should probably have a scene where they talk to each other directly (via thoughts), although it seems kind of weird at the moment. The other option is to not show it at all and merely have one of the personalities report the agreed upon compromise. I lean toward the former since I think the conversation would be interesting to both read and write. I'll have to write it to see what works best.

Regardless of the exact details, I definitely need to have some form of clash play out since there are two personalities in one soul, where one dominates at the beginning while the other awakens and fights for some level of control.

I don't think readers will side with bf since Connor is the only personality present in book one, and is the only apparent personality throughout most of book two (who looks to be having growing mental health issues, presumed by other characters to be the result of Satan's manipulations of an otherwise decent kid). I probably won't reveal the presence (and identity) of bf until the end of book two. Not sure yet.

Good grief, there is a lot to think through.

Another fun idea: In book two, Connor should behave increasingly as if he has multiple personality disorder, but doesn't yet know why. He, of course, unknowingly shares the soul within him with the ancient biblical figure, who continues to slowly awaken throughout book two and increasingly attempts to assert control over Connor's body, thoughts, and actions, but Connor's part of that soul strongly resists those attempts, which causes the apparent personality disorder. Connor doesn't know that he is fighting another, awakening part of his own soul. This will come to a head near the end of book two, when both personalities are fully awake and aware of each other. The only way they can keep going is to figure out how to live with each other. They definitely influence each other, though, since they are not really two beings: they share a body, a brain, a soul, and various elements of a personality that is not truly two separate entities. That's the reason the awakening biblical figure was able to prevent Connor from smothering the pope. That figure will be revealed at the end of the book.

If I'm not mistaken, Christians believe that humans are driven by their souls, which remains when the body dies. But what about multiple personalities, especially ones who don't even know other personalities exist within them? Does the soul have multiple personalities as well, like Connor? My answer as far as the story is concerned is: yes.

Cool. My first ranking against other competing fan fiction stories (on Wattpad). My Dune - Into the Worm is currently sitting at 89 out of 501 Dune fan stories. Naturally, it's because of the release of Dune 2. I know I had posted this piece elsewhere, where I could see the number of readers per day and what countries they're from.

I have no problem with Satan having spiritual powers. After all, he is a spirit. But I needed an explanation for how Connor came to be and where he got his power from. If Connor could have "inherited" powers from Satan (much like I inherited my hair color from my parents), how would that have happened? Is there an ability to transfer power from a spirit into a human? And how does one get it from spirit to human? Is it sufficient for Satan to simply think it, and therefore it happens (not believable IMO)? Or is there such a thing as "spiritual" DNA? If so, how do you get it from Satan into Campagna and down to Connor?

If not spiritual DNA, how else might Connor get his powers? Some form of transfer of part of Satan's corrupted spirit into Connor's spirit after birth? If I were to use the latter, then there would actually be true evil in Connor's spirit. That would break the story since the premise is that Connor is not evil. He has free will and the ability to turn away from Satan. Connor just needs to have his eyes opened by people who care about him (his family) that Satan is a manipulative SOB who never actually loved Connor, despite what he told Connor throughout his childhood.

I decided for my story, there is no direct transfer of part of Satan's spirit into Connor's since that makes the kid inherently evil. There is also no spiritual DNA. If you prefer some "form" of DNA for the transfer, you might as well accomplish it through human DNA, modified by Satan in De Rosa's sperm. It's much easier to explain without trying to reinvent the wheel to create spiritual DNA. Also, regular DNA enables an additional element about the relationship between Satan and Connor, namely that some of the DNA manipulation Satan made was intended to create a powerful but fake bond through natural imprinting between Connor and Satan. That bond is something Connor will struggle with until the very end of book three, when he has to decide who to kill: Satan or Jesus.

Ultimately, this is all made-up cacas anyway, so I might as well use a simple solution that doesn't break the story.

Several thoughts:
- Connor has received the sacrament many times without having ever confessed he was part of a huge conspiracy; if I could make him sick every time he took the sacrament, I would, but that would give away the surprise at the end of book one, so I have to explain it (two options noted below)
- by the time Connor fights his father at the basilica, he will have already confessed everything to a priest, although he hasn't celebrated Mass yet, but that might not be a bad idea; I might then have Connor take the sacrament away from St. Peter's for safekeeping since his father is sure to want it destroyed
- just as Satan was not inherently evil from the moment of his creation, neither is Connor; he has his mother's DNA, De Rosa-the-zombie's DNA, with changes to the zombie's sperm to give Connor his supernatural powers; the only thing Connor got from Satan was his powers, no predisposition to evil and certainly no demonic spirit; Satan has been trying to corrupt Connor since he was born, and for book 1 and half of book 2, it appears Satan may yet succeed; however, given that Satan manipulated the zombie sperm, I generally refer to Connor as part demon, albeit with almost 100% human DNA and a human soul
- it's Connor's maternal grandfather who reminds him that, as long as he hasn't blasphemed the Holy Spirit, all else can be forgiven, but he has to make a real confession and atone for his sins; he'll receive instructions from the Holy Spirit on how to do the latter; he's told to proceed with the rescue mission for which he returned to Earth, but he's increasingly terrified of the cost to him personally
- I suppose somewhere in the last chapter of book one, the characters could discuss how it is that Connor could take the sacrament for all those years and not become noticeably ill; they conclude what I summarized above; and since he's not inherently evil, the host is as harmless/useless to Connor as it is for any non-believer and those who haven't gone to confession; the other alternative is that the host, having been transubstantiated, ought to make him sick, but it never does; perhaps he's protected by the fact that he bears the soul of a major biblical figure; either explanation would work
- one caveat about his soul: by the time Connor receives the Holy Spirit, his ancient soul will have been changed by Connor's life up to age 16 (his age in book two); so, when his soul does finally fully awaken to who it is and was, his soul is no longer simply that of the biblical figure; it is also by then part Connor, the screwed up, manipulated-since-birth kid who still loves his father; I'll have to figure out how to keep alive the possibility that Connor might yet kill Christ so as to save his father; perhaps he can have recurring nightmares that alternate between him killing Christ and him killing his father

LOL. Just remember, the last time you "got into it", I pulled the rug out from under you.

The reason I want multiple demons inside De Rosa is that he displays too much power. Although one could say Satan's the most powerful demon, there would have to be others who are nearly as powerful. If that were the case, I would expect them to bring down churches right, left, and center. By requiring multiple demons to accomplish what De Rosa does, it brings Satan's individual powers down to a more reasonable level. Interestingly, though, Connor, as a hybrid, is more powerful than De Rosa, something Satan doesn't realize. Father and son will have a violent confrontation in book two, yet somehow, Connor loses. Can't imagine why. :-)  Neither intends to kill the other, but it will be fun to have them tear St. Peter's Basilica apart as they fight it out.

Correct me if I'm wrong, but a Catholic Charismatic movement is not the same as the majority of the Catholic Church, or is it? It's the mainstream Church that Connor/Satan are after first.
I think you mean locusts, not dragonflies. The locusts came straight out of Revelation, including their scorpion-like stingers.

I have no problem contradicting the Bible anymore since the alternate, story timeline perfectly explains why the Bible differs from actual events in the story timeline (both timelines inherited the same Bible). There will be a scene dedicated to puzzling out how it could be that the inerrant Bible differs from current events in the story timeline. The Bible was written before the timeline split in two (real-world vs story-world timelines). And God had his reason for allowing the Bible to be written the way it was, not least of which is the fact that the story timeline didn't exist at the time the Bible was written. That Bible correctly predicted what would happen if the timeline continued as is. That scared Satan (who has free will) into issuing his final challenge; when God accepted, the new, story timeline branched off, resulting in both timelines having the same history and the same Bible, yet the Bible only describes events in the old timeline. The theologians will eventually conclude that 1) their Bible is inerrant, but 2) it was written for a different timeline.

I happened to notice that this thread has been viewed over 145,000 times. I was a bit freaked by the number until I looked at the whole forum. My old Galaxy Tales thread has been viewed 280K times. Sorcerer's Progress, 360K. And Amy still holds the record at 465K for her Acts+ thread! Yay, Amy.

My references to timelines here has nothing to do with the content of Revelation,  although the latter is obviously the biggest discrepancy between the two timelines. To be clear a timeline is everything that happens in the universe along one time-ordered sequence of events, such as a universe with Connor and one without him. Naturally, my story is only concerned with Earth, but a timeline generally spans the cosmos and all past and future events in that "version" of the cosmos.

By the way, I googled Revelation vs Revelations since you spell it with an s. Wikipedia claims it's the Book of Revelation, sometimes erroneously referred to as the Book of Revelations.

Now that you mention it, I do give clues about De Rosa.
- when they're reviewing the security footage from the first church, they see the dark figure next to his Mercedes. Based on the car's known height, he estimates: 185 cm, same as me.
- De Rosa suffers stigmata every time a cardinal is killed. Now, stigmata is a rather confusing clue, but it is there. And he suffers stigmata supposedly from watching The Passion of the Christ the night before they find the last cardinal dead. It's such a weird detail that regular mystery readers ought to be wondering about it.
- De Rosa and the dark one both have a medium build
- De Rosa has blue eyes and blond hair, same as Campagna's rapist. So, if you guess he's the rapist, and you tie that to the fact that Campagna's missing son is probably Connor AND is De Rosa's godson, then it's not too big a stretch to think maybe he's in it up to his eyeballs.
- there is speculation that the Unholy Trinity is in the story, which requires three characters, and there's quite a limit on potential recurring characters in the story.
- I know I have other clues too

I remember thinking it was okay, even preferable, for the reader to guess that De Rosa is the dark figure/Antichrist since, then, they'll never see the real twist (Connor is the AC) coming. Marilyn was sure Connor was the Antichrist, but then I revealed de Rosa as the dark figure first, and she was very surprised, thinking the dark figure was the Antichrist. Then I reveal Connor is the AC.

In the second draft, I'll have Connor beat up by Alessandro as one of the first scenes, and the latter subsequently suffers a seizure and is healed by Connor. Again, barely a clue, but it's all noticeable on a second read. I think it would be too obvious if Alessandro has the seizure right while pummeling Connor, but maybe...