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I think hetero prisoners having gay relationships is the rare exception, not the norm, otherwise it would come up all the time. There are a considerable number of Americans who still think homosexuality is a choice, and they would seize on every opportunity to make their case, just as they used to point to men who, following conversion therapy, declared themselves straight. Problem was, some of those shining examples blew up spectacularly, when they went back to being gay. I remember one of them, a very vocal convert, was caught inside a gay bar (or club), and he wasn't there preaching the joys of conversion. :-)  There's a reason why conversion therapy is increasingly banned for minors.

Given how shameful it was to be gay in centuries past, it doesn't surprise me that some married, perhaps had kids, and "dabbled" on the side. I have to wonder, though, how many of them were actually bisexual instead of homosexual. Either way, I'm betting some of their spouses weren't thrilled with the sex life. :)  Another common alternative was to move away from home.

I remember hearing (reading?) a quote from a gay activist who said that if straight people want to know what gay people think of straight sex, those straight people should try to picture themselves having gay sex. I may have Connor say something like that, although the scene with Connor's homosexual views in the book are already likely to be too long and need trimming. As usual, he's also trying to piss Satan off. :)

Connor expresses fairly liberal opinions on homosexuality which isn't surprising since he's bisexual. His willingness to push his lover, whom he's grooming as a young leader to gather other young people as converts, to adopt less conservative views is an attempt to cast a wide, inclusive net to appeal to not just gays, who are a small minority of the population, but to the many young people who strongly support gay rights because they consider the bigoted views of older generations incomprehensible.

Christ (Connor) is woke!

One of the details I'm still working through is Satan's reactions to all this. He's repeatedly having to explain away Connor's reckless behavior toward visiting dignitaries, including many Protestants, who come to the Vatican to see for themselves whether Connor is Christ. They make the mistake of asking Connor to show them a miracle once too often. As a result, he chooses a Protestant minister's two sons as volunteers for the demonstration. He offers the sons a drink, which Connor also consumes, containing a relatively minor, short-acting poison.

The sons become sick (Connor doesn't) at which point Connor explains that he poisoned them, but that he's willing to save one of them, whichever their father picks. Connor quotes from the Bible that you should not put the Lord to the test. Fortunately, one of the sons (his future lover) recognizes the words and is able to name the chapter and verse for each instance where words to that effect appear in the Bible. Connor "cures" both sons in response to that and invites his future lover to stay at the Vatican.

Satan has to sit there throughout all this, on the verge of a stroke. :P  I may have Connor comment to that effect: "Angelo, you don't look well. Are you having a stroke?"

This version of Connor is so much more fun to write than in book one.

Connor's views on straight vs gay sex goes something like:

"Won't having sex with you turn me into a homosexual?" the teen asked.
Connor laughed. "Your innocence and dopiness are adorable. It doesn't work that way. Gay people are just as repulsed by straight sex as straight people are by gay sex. Difference is, gay people won't beat you to death just for being straight."

In  other words, I doubt many gay men were procreating with straight women in the past. To me, that suggests they would be bisexual men, not gay. Few people, if any, would be thinking about the survival of the human race if they didn't procreate. People had kids for personal reasons: kids worked long hours, whether on a farm or elsewhere, to provide cheap labor to support their families; they were also expected to help support their parents in their old age (still true in many countries); and they were a bit of insurance in case disease killed some of them, which was common. My grandfather was one of 16 siblings (yikes!), only 14 of whom lived to adulthood (I have a billion second cousins in Germany, most of whom I don't even know).

Connor's question r.e. whether the kid is a virgin will be forgotten as soon as the reader gets a look at Connor's (aka Christ's) views on homosexuality. Some people's heads will no doubt explode. I do have the kid ask whether Connor is the Antichrist "as some people claim," but Connor bats that away easily. The purpose of the kid's question is to remind the reader that Connor's views are those of the Antichrist, not Christ. There won't be anyone to give an opposing point of view, though, since the seduction happens in secret behind (conquered) Vatican walls.

You should see his views on the inevitable death of Christianity had He (Connor) not returned to save it. He blames Christian leaders for not doing enough to tackle it, which shows that "they've already been seduced by Satan. Christians are so busy guarding the front door that they didn't even notice he snuck in the back door. The Unholy Trinity would have conquered the Catholic Church by now were it not for my early return."

I'm still waffling over whether Connor's seduced teen is 16 (like Connor) or 18. I originally intended him to be 16 since it might help explain how come he's fairly easily seduced even though he's the son of a Protestant minister, whereas it might be less objectionable to some readers if he's an adult (not sure about that). I'm leaning back toward 16. Connor seducing a minor would probably ruffle a lot of feathers even though he's the AC. But from the story's perspective, Connor seducing a minor is exactly what the AC should do. Naturally, sex in the story, whether gay or straight, is implied, never shown.

I sketched out part of Connor's seduction of the gay teen. It's pretty tame (lame?). In fact, Connor tells the kid twice that them having sex is entirely his decision. Although, Connor does add an incentive once he's sure the kid is gay: "If it helps, I know where all 63 erogenous zones are on a young, writhing, naked male body. And you won't find those on Google." Naturally, that worked.

I'll probably take out one of the aforementioned assurances that it's the kid's decision. Although, I would never write a scene where Connor forces himself on someone, he doesn't need to be overly proper about it, either. After all, he is trying to seduce the kid, both for sex and as part of his indoctrination.

One of the advantages of introducing a genetic switch in Connor that gives Satan unnatural influence over him is that I can write Connor as a little s--t, but it's largely the result of that switch, which he learns halfway through book two. Connor has an intense need to please Satan, like a serious addiction, but he doesn't even know he's addicted. Of course, that doesn't mean he can't get pissed off at Satan.

>> If they didn't murder you, you cannot murder back.
Perhaps the only reason they didn't murder you is because you killed them. Perhaps nothing short of death would have stopped them from killing you. In book two, after Satan threatens Connor's family, Connor replies with: Just so we're clear, if you harm my mother or any member of my family, I will destroy everything you've worked for, and then I'll come for you, and I won't stop until one of us is destroyed. Just so we're clear.

With regard to sex acts before marriage, He could have suppressed the male/female sex drive altogether until marriage. The only reason the Bible requires marriage or stoning for people who have sex outside of marriage, is because God allowed them the ability to engage in premarital sex acts in the first place. Still makes no sense to enable it but forbid it. You would think God would have learned from the whole Garden of Eden debacle (puts a tree in Eden, then forbids Adam and Eve to eat from it). Here's an idea: Don't put it in Eden if you don't want them to touch it, especially when you already know they'll disobey, causing millennia of death and suffering.

Connor is still mad at Satan at the beginning of book two, and he looks for ways to piss him off. So, he starts talking about marrying one of the Goth twin girls he's sleeping with, But since he slept with both of them, who does he marry? :-)

Later, he asks the gay kid he's trying to seduce if the kid is a virgin. Yes, Lord. What the hell for? Connor then explains that if We had intended teenagers to abstain from all sex acts, we wouldn't have made you so horny.

I am going to have so much fun with Connor as Antichrist pretending to be Christ and messing with people's heads, especially the gay kid, who clearly believes Connor is Christ, as does much of Christendom by that point (two years after the end of book one).

Regarding teenagers masturbating, since they supposedly have no need for ejaculating before marriage, why would God give them the ability beforehand? It serves no useful purpose. Murdering someone = killing someone, although for unacceptable reasons. And killing someone is sometimes necessary (e.g., in defence of yourself or others).

I don't know about Protestantism, but Catholics believe the Old Testament points forward to the coming of Christ. Verses take on a whole new meaning when read from that perspective. Some scholars think there may be more than 300 prophecies about Jesus, but it goes beyond that. If you know what to look for, much more of the Old Testament is believed to be about the coming of Christ, even when the verses don't seem to be about that. It's been too long since I read that, so I don't remember any examples.

So, the fact that Catholic Bibles include more books than Protestant ones means some of those prophecies and verses that point forward to Christ are disagreed upon by the two major denominations. They can't both be right, can they? If either one of them is incorrect, then billions of Bibles are in error. Given the many denominations in Christianity, especially in Protestantism, and given that many of those denominations arose as a result of differences in the interpretation of the Bible, that supposedly inerrant book has led to billions of people being led astray. Granted, the Bible could still be inerrant, even though most or all denominations (save for one) are interpreting it incorrectly, but what's the point of declaring the Bible inerrant when billions of Bibles may be wrong, and there is no consensus as to which denomination actually has the correct Bible and no way to find out so as to reach a consensus.

Just to be clear, I'm putting forth Connor's arguments, not my own. I may even have him declare the Bible to be full of errors at some point. He'll definitely espouse beliefs that conflict with the Bible, but he won't push the envelope so far that most people would conclude he's not Christ. He's merely using his arguments as a means to an end: follow him, not some ancient book.

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That's great news, Bill. I'm guessing they don't serve thick, juicy burgers with cheese in rehab. Nuts and twigs on the menu, I presume? :-)

Seriously, though, I'm glad it went well

>>A few verses in the Bible?
>I found a website claiming 25 verses on the AC. And they are all bad.

Do any of them say he didn't love his mother? :-) Keep in mind, for the second draft, all this will occur on an alternate timeline, so I can mess with things without invalidating the Bible.

>I try to do that BUT I at the core of my Tribe story is something which will possibly piss off large swaths of Christendom.
Interesting. I don't really consider your story to have deviated much from Christian beliefs, although you would know better than I would. Certainly, all of the non-Christian gods in your first draft would have raised eyebrows, although they are mostly demons, so I think you'd get a pass on those, as long as you don't overpopulate the story.

Christians generally don't mind stories that drift a little from accepted beliefs if the changes make it a more uplifting pro-Christian story. For example, Jacob Marley (Scrooge's business partner) appeared as a ghost. Even if one said it was his soul that appeared, what would a soul be doing outside of heaven or hell? The Catholic interpretation treats Marley as someone in purgatory who can't get to heaven until he convinces Scrooge to change his ways. I don't think anyone would have a serious problem with his presence in the story, as written.

Same with "It's a Wonderful Life". An angel took the main character (I forget his name) to see an alternate vision of the future in which the character was present to watch but not interfere, much as Scrooge had to. How many Christians will object to the idea of angels with wings and the idea that an angel has to earn his wings? The idea of wings has been around since the 4th century but it's not in the Bible.

Not liking your own story would turn it into a real chore to write, and you would probably never finish. I had a very hard time finishing Connor v1 because I was burned out and sick of the story as far back as 2022. That's why I was considering making the three books into one, consisting of three novellas. But when I thought about it, book one alone clearly needs to be a separate, full novel. Based on my planning of books 2 and 3, I believe the same will be true for them as well. I was laughing last night as I reread my notes for books 2 and 3 on my cell phone. The notes just scrolled on endlessly. There are some duplicate notes, especially because I would write up notes for certain scenes more than once as I thought of better ways to write them.

To avoid further burnout, I intend to write key scenes of books two and three as short stories whenever I need a break from the 2nd draft of "Rise of Connor".

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LOL. I'll bet you had an AI write that. :-)

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Because no good idea goes unpunished, having the superweapon fire beams powerful enough to tear fissures into the fabric of space doesn't work since the superweapon fires EM energy, and the biggest objects in our universe give off way more EM energy than a superweapon ever could, without causing tears in space. I'll add that idea to the "kill me now" pile.

However, if the superweapon fires alterphasic energy (i.e., energy out of phase with our universe), that could have as little or as much destructive power as I want, and since alterphasic energy comes from outside our universe, it has a strong tendency to return to its own universe, starting from right after the energy is fired until a second or two later, when it has all disappeared. That's enough time for enough of the fired energy to disappear that what remains is sufficient to severely damage St. James's destroyers but not obliterate them in one shot.

Although energy cannot be created or destroyed, it can be "borrowed" from elsewhere in the multiverse, at least temporarily. However, in order to be able to get energy from another universe, one has to simultaneously inject some of our universe's energy into it. The multiverse dictates how much energy of type X you have to pump into another universe in order to be able to extract energy of type Y from the other universe. As a result, the Hercules has to pump a ton of EM energy into another universe, so it can extract the type of energy from there that it intends to fire. Attempting to generate all that EM energy eventually overloads the Hercules's annihilator, crippling the ship.

I have most of the alterphasic solution written up, and it holds together. Hopefully, I won't think of anything that blows it out of the water.

Good night, Seattle, we love you!

Book one will be pretty much what you read. So I think that will be fine. Book two's first half is mostly about the beginning of Revelation disasters, the Unholy Trinity's ongoing attempts to consolidate religion behind Connor, and Connor's issues, ranging from his anger at his father to his growing mental health issues as Adam grows increasingly awake inside him.

Since the books will almost certainly attract the curiosity of Christians who come across it, there will be a foreword from me that explains that this is not a story that faithfully follows Revelation, but rather a different story loosely based on Revelation.

Regarding God creating homosexuality, it's something I intend to explore through the lens of the Antichrist, who is trying to corrupt his followers. So, he will say all kinds of things that would cause serious Christians' heads to explode, but he's the Antichrist, so you can't expect him to sound like a good Christian in these books.

Although the Bible opposes homosexuality, there are all kinds of ways Connor can spin that. In answer to the question why God would create something he opposes, He opposes much of what humans do to each other and the planet, He knew it would come about, yet he created angels and humans anyway, resulting in beings like Satan and Hitler and staggering suffering for much of humanity.

And religions get a lot of things wrong even when they tell themselves their Bible is inerrant. If the Christian Bible is the inspired Word of God, how come Catholics and Protestants can't agree on what books belong in the Bible? They're only inerrant as long as you discount the "false" beliefs of all the other major denominations you disagree with. Lots of things for Connor to work with, and there won't be anyone in the books to challenge his corrupting rhetoric.

In a similar vein, the Catholic Church says teens will go to Hell if they masturbate. Why would God give teens the ability to masturbate, only to turn around and expect kids not to do so?

There'll be at least one chapter where Connor gives a lot of false views to the teenage boy he seduced, which is easy to do since the kid believes Connor is Christ. If Christ starts telling you things that disagree with your original beliefs, who are you going to believe, Christ or some ancient book written and assembled by fallible human beings? It'll be interesting to write some of that dialogue and put forth his corrupting views. And for what it's worth, they're not Connor's views either. He simply says the things he needs to to corrupt his followers.

As for your expectations of what the Antichrist is like as a human being, what are you basing it on? A few verses in the Bible? Who's to say he doesn't care about his family? Even Hitler had a family. And as I noted above, my story is only loosely based on Revelation, especially as you go from book to book. That's what the foreword is for. If you want to read a Christian-themed story based loosely on Revelation, great. If you want a faithful telling of Revelation, these aren't the books you want to read.

For the scenes to work, Connor would need to be bisexual. He starts with a pair of twin, Goth girlfriends, with whom he regularly has threesomes, which worries Satan because Connor is supposed to be acting Christ-like. This is part of Connor acting outrageously to get even with Satan for creating Connor simply to settle the wager with God. He's also pissed off that Satan raped his mother for sport so Connor could be conceived, which is what ultimately seals Satan's fate.

After Satan send the twins away, Connor ups the ante by seducing a slightly older teenage male and bringing him into the Vatican as a lover.

> This opens up a world of discussions. It's that what you want?
Heck yes!!! Who wouldn't want their story to generate a lot of discussion?

There are two possible ways that a homosexual could come into existence. 1) God creates the soul and makes it gay. That in turn drives the resulting male to be gay. Or 2) God creates the soul, which has no orientation, but random DNA + nurture results in the male becoming gay. I'm ignoring a third possibility, which is that the soul has a "normal" orientation (say heterosexual for a male), but the individual's DNA+nurture somehow overrides the orientation intended by God when he creates the soul.

I extend that argument/question to gender. Do the souls created by God have a gender, or are souls genderless, meaning the gender is determined solely by ones more or less random mixing of DNA? If it's God who determines the gender when He creates the soul, that would mean somewhere in the process, He intervened to determine which sperm cell reaches the ovum. However, if the soul is genderless, then God need merely create the soul and rely on nature (more or less random mixing of DNA) to determine the gender.

>Three of the big religions (Jewish, Christian, Islam), do not support the thesis.
Which thesis?

I decided Connor will be bisexual, although it won't come up until book two, where it will make a few eyebrow raising scenes possible. This raises the question of whether it is our soul or our DNA+nurture that determines sexual orientation. Since homosexuality is widespread among animals (who don't have a soul), it has to be the latter. I could extend that to ask whether it is God, our soul, or our DNA that determines our gender.

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They do get blown up, but I don't want them pulverized in one shot. The sister ships have roles to fill in the battle. I'm trying to keep the chapter mostly unchanged (since I like it as is), except for the details of the superweapon from hell. It's my own fault for trying to create something more interesting (e.g., firing through hyperspace, firing through time, firing something that shoots right through the shields as if they don't exist, etc.). The mattergy weapon was nothing more than a big version of supernovas using a ridiculous concept for the tech.

I'm going to try revising my latest version such that the energy in the fired shot is so great that it tears fissures into the fabric of space (to God knows where, it doesn't matter), and much of the energy is lost through those fissures, yet enough makes it to the target such that it's still a very powerful weapon, just not insanely so.

Once more unto the breach!
[censored!]

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Remember, George, I'm looking for a very powerful weapon that
- has the ability to create the kind of extreme damage to St. James's destroyers caused by the mattergy guns (e.g., a single shot can plow all the way through a ship, in spite of the target's reinforced shields and hull plating)
- requires the Hercules to expend a huge quantity of energy to charge the superweapon, so much so that after a few shots/reloads, the ship's overloaded neutrino annihilator is damaged sufficiently that the Hercules can no longer fire weapons nor escape using her stardrive (i.e., the superweapon is a failure)
- since that much energy from the fired weapon could easily wipe out the destroyers without breaking a sweat, I need a way for most of that energy to not make it to the targets; ideally 2/3 to 3/4 of the energy expended by the Hercules each time she fires should somehow be lost to space, another dimension, converting the annihilator's EM energy to some hokey form the weapon can fire, etc.
- due to scaling limits on nova technology, it isn't possible to fire that much EM energy through a supernova (that would break other parts of the story), hence the need for a new weapon technology using a different form of energy, which is still roughly as destructive as EM energy (e.g., same order of magnitude)
- the solution cannot simply be a mega version of a supernova with a different name; it has to be a different weapon in certain key ways, which is proven unusable in chapter 1's combat so that it's never deployed by either side; also, it has to be possible for the Colonies to shore up ship defenses (presumably shields and more hull plating) against this weapon in the future, just in case the Imperium tries again
- I've tried all kinds of weird variations, none of which hold up as a workable solution for the battle that satisfies the above requirements and doesn't make me retch with how stupid it is; I even considered though never fully wrote up a variant in which the fired new form of energy loses much of its energy as it travels from the Hercules to the target (this last one is similar to your suggestion to open a rip in spacetime, which could then suck out much of the fired energy into another dimension); it may be time to try writing that one up

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Some variant of mattergy is beginning to sound better all the time. Grrr.

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I was hoping not to outright contradict too many pesky laws of physics other than the ones that most space operas usually rely on as well. If something clearly violates physics, then I would have preferred to conjure up a bit of technobabble to explain why.

>After all, if you can "see" a laser being fired, it's probably not a laser but rather something much slower.

I've seen lasers with a continuous beam, mostly in lab photos, but also at concerts. So those must be in the visible spectrum, making the light beam itself visible within visible light, or is none of that the actual laser but rather what the beam passes through, as someone on Quora suggests below as well? Obviously, you can fire something that's not visible to humans at all, but I'm assuming they're firing something visible. So, would all those lasers under Google images be invisible in space? If so, that's cool, but annoying for me.

>from Quora:
>If you fire a laser through perfectly clear, clean air, it's invisible. What you're seeing when you see a beam of light (any beam of light, not just a laser) is >the beam illuminating something in its path - it could be dust, smoke, steam

I had no idea.

I might be able to salvage my current write-up by having the "loss" of energy occur when the incoming EM energy from the annihilator is converted to hokey energy, which is what the new weapon fires, rather than after the weapon is fired and somehow diverges faster than EM energy.

Cacas!

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Kill me now. If I convert electromagnetic energy to some other form (call it hokey energy) that can be fired "like" EM radiation (e.g. a beam out of a superweapon), am I not still stuck with the inverse square law? I had hoped that a hokey beam would diverge much more quickly than EM radiation, but now I wonder if that even makes sense given the laws of physics...

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I went with imXes for now. Other forms include imXed and imXing. :-)
Thanks for your help.

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Thanks, njc.

"Erupts" is another one, referring to the annihilator. I suppose if the annihilator erupts, one could also say the ship erupted. By this I mean, erupts = implode/explode, although how the concept of an eruption is similar to implode/explode is beyond me.

litbang?
imexes? imxes? (the last one is good, better yet imXes)
imbang?

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I need a short name for implode-explode (the official name), which is what my ships do when their annihilators (formerly reactors) are breached, usually by enemy fire. Humans would quickly find something shorter to call it by. I have yet to think of anything cool, although I vaguely recall I may have brought this up long ago. Things I'm considering or have already rejected:

i-explode
imp-explode (or imp/explode) - I think I used this in my last draft
splode - to splode, a verb; it sploded; this is obviously slightly ludicrous, which makes it a candidate; it has an existing definition (explosion), but that's easily modified

implode - everyone knows what that is, and an implosion of a ship caused by a breached annihilator is always followed by an explosion (a little bang)
explode - no good; although the use of this word could generally be understood to mean implode, followed by a little bang, there are other reasons/ways a ship might explode
little bang (or bang) - the ship little-banged; did the ship bang yet? - bang is nice and short, and is a good example of the kind of thing they'd use; it is rather weird though but then so is the story
boom - similar to bang

So far, bang and splode are my favorites. Splode has an existing definition (slang for explode), but that definition is easy to modify. The reason I like those two is because they are both slightly ludicrous and one syllable long.

Any others?

Thanks
Dirk

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I think my atreidite is close to shipstones. It started out life as something simply intended to store energy inside a stardrive prior to a jump. I plan to change that so atreidite will be the energy store that serves to store a ship's reserve power, which can then be used for any purpose requiring augmented power (the stardrive, supernova weapons in active combat, augmented shields, etc.).

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Colonel Mustard did it to the juicer with a ketchup bottle.

>>"The Spice Must Flow"
The Connor trilogy uses "Great deeds await you." My version of "May the Force be with you."
I'm reasonably sure I have something like it in Archangel Syndrome to.

As of this evening, I'm leaning toward neutrino annihilator to replace reactor, although the name doesn't spell out that the output is energy, though it obviously is if you annihilate matter. I can always mention that it converts neutrinos to energy when I first introduce the term. And annihilator screams, "Danger, Will Robinson," which is even better than reactor, IMO. Sexier too.

Not sure if I still need an informal name for the annihilator (eg juicer, boiler) since I really like the new name as is. If I come up with something cute that suggests total annihilation, I'll consider it.

Cool idea: Satan used a rather unethical geneticist to make the gene changes that were needed to give Connor supernatural powers at conception. Satan somehow (details TBD) helped the geneticist home in on the correct genes, but those had to be tested on other humans to ensure Connor would not be harmed by messing with something as complicated as the human genome, which is a mess of genes that often perform more than one function each, and which are not necessarily related. Those tests went on for decades.

In doing those tests, the geneticist discovered that you could modify the genes that cause baby ducks to follow their mothers, except in Connor's case, Satan took Campagna's place, giving Connor a powerful, unnatural instinct to follow his father, which translates to him doing what Satan tells him, at least until the end of book one, when Satan pisses Connor off by telling him that deciding the outcome of the wager with God is why Connor was born (not love, as Connor had been led to believe).

Well, it turns out that the gene for controlling the aforementioned instinct also plays a powerful role in the human lifespan. You can enable the gene for the required instinct, but if you later try to disable it again, the human carrier of that gene will experience an irreversible decline in health (exact symptoms TBD), culminating in total death in at most two years.

The geneticist documented key parts of his work in a journal because he came to suspect that Satan would eventually kill him. That journal makes its way into Bishop Romano's hands, who shows it to Connor as part of their ongoing effort to turn him away from Satan. Connor decides to have the gene disabled at the end of book two, when he's sixteen, to break free, even though he'll die as a result. Coincidentally, Connor is eighteen in book three. Isn't it cool the way the timing of that worked out? tongue

Naturally, his long-suffering mother is devastated by all this but understands the need for it, and supports Connor's decision. Not sure yet if she falls off the wagon at that point.

So, now, Connor is in danger of being purged by Adam from the soul they share, and even if he somehow avoids that, his body will die anyway. So, he's screwed no matter what.

Gotta keep your main characters suffering. :-)

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Following is my last! writeup for a superweapon (needs a little cleanup). It's a bit long (1.5 pages) given that the Hercules is sitting right there charging the superweapon, but I no longer care. It includes a short message by St. James to her taskforce, which I think is worth the space. The unknown form of energy fired by the weapon dissipates much more quickly than EM energy, so only about 1/4 of the initial blast hits the ship.

“She’s charging her new cannons,” Aussie said, simultaneously displaying another close-up visual of the weapons on a secondary screen.
“Analyze!” St. James said.
“The readings are quite unusual. I detect enormous flows of electromagnetic energy from other areas of the ship to the new weapons, especially from her neutrino juicer, which is being driven to 17% beyond its safety limit, placing our vessels at risk if she implodes-explodes. She’s also diverting energy from the shields around her supernovas.”
St. James pursed her lips. “Is it possible they’ve found a way to exceed the maximum output of a supernova weapon?”
“Unlikely. Although much EM energy is flowing toward these new guns, the readings are not indicative of a massive buildup of an EM charge at that location. However, I do detect an unknown form of energy intensifying inside the cannons. It is virtually certain she is converting all that EM energy to the unknown form, which is what she fires.”
Captain Spirits asked, “How much energy have they routed to those weapons so far?”
“About XXX joules, the equivalent of seventy supernova weapon blasts and still charging.”
Spirits’s eyebrows shot skyward, and his mouth fell open. He glanced at St. James and silently mouthed, “Wow!”
She nodded and cursed.
Aussie added, “And her ship reserves hold YYY additional joules — roughly fifty more supernova blasts.”
St. James glared at a camera feeding images to Aussie. “Well, you’re just a barrel of good news, aren’t you?”
“I am virtually certain the cannons will not fire all that energy in one shot, Admiral, even if they can.   If she had to fully recharge for the equivalent of seventy supernova blasts after every shot, the weapons would be too slow for combat.”
“Still, we may be in over our heads, Admiral,” Spirits said. “Should we withdraw?”
She hesitated briefly, wishing she could do so. “No. Open a channel. All three destroyers. Shipwide.”
“Channel open.”
“Attention. This is Admiral St. James. The Imperium has created a new weapon of dangerous power, which could be used decimate our fleet and planetary infrastructure if more of them come online. If the Sovereign Stars are to counter this, we need to gather as much data from it as possible and get that into the hands of our military.” She paused for a moment, thinking about the lives of her crew. “It is my intention to ride out two to three shots from that weapon. I do not relish leading any of you to your deaths, but we do not fight here for just ourselves but for our way of life, our freedoms, and most of all, our families. Please remember that in the hours to come. St. James out.”
Spirits closed the channel.