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Janet Taylor-Perry wrote:

I think I've got it figured out. Publisher sent to B & N before telling me. The other thing is extended distribution in UK AND I just got a nice little deposit to my account.

Now, I need to know how to check sales with these two.

Janet, I thought you were self-published. Who's your publisher?

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dagnee wrote:

I WOULD REALLY APPRECIATE AN ANSWER EVEN IF IT'S JUST THAT YOU DON'T KNOW. IT'S A PAIN IN THE ASS WHEN I AM ON MY KINDLE AND HAVE TO WAIT AS IF I AM USING DAIL UP ONLY TO GET A TIMED OUT MESSAGE. I USE MY KINDLE A LOT.

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Dagnee, when your Kindle hangs and you're about to restart the wifi, have you tried first accessing the wifi from another device?

Dirk

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Janet Taylor-Perry wrote:

Lupus knitted his brow and ground his teeth. Windsor suppressed the urge to smile at causing him to bristle over the use of his first name.

to smile/him/to bristle/his doesn't flow well. I prefer Tom's combined sentence for this one, perhaps with a tweak or two.

Thanks
Dirk

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I went with Tom's version above. It's less show-y than K's, but I want a fast back and forth between the two characters. Causing him to bristle is not something I want to dwell on with added dialogue. It's a verbal dueling of words on the verge of a deadly battle. I want to keep up the pace.

Thanks.
Dirk

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amy s wrote:

Does this help?

Oh, heck. I had my answers after the first few replies to this thread. The rest is just good entertainment. :-)

Thanks to all.
Dirk

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amy s wrote:

This isn't the first time this has been debated by minds bigger than ours. I can't believe no one has mentioned the Myth of Sysiphus by Albert Camus. He poses the question: If there is no god, then how can there be meaning in life? He postulates that suicide is a natural endpoint of the futility of living. I debated this in a morality class and won points on a test because the teacher asked this question: What did Camus debate in the Myth of Syphilus? One answer was 'is there a god' and the other was something like, 'advocating suicide is the only logical endpoint because life is meaningless.'

I won the points because the primary question of the philosopher's posit didn't have anything to do with suicide. It had to do with the question, "Is there a God." Only once that question was answered could the other be debated.

How does this relate, Dirk? It comes down to the person who is in the heads of each MC. If it is God, and he has told the boys that this is their destiny, then he has to be right. This may be because each of them has been chosen, or it may be predestiny, where they are on a clearly defined path visible only to the Maker.  Your debate makes it clear to me once again that you aren't writing about mental illness at all, BTW. 

Personally, the whole concept of free will makes God less omniscient, (IMHO). Man is going to do what he's going to do anyway and God guides rather than plowing the road and shooting anyone who steps astray. I think the second MC is there as backup. If one person doesn't change the world, then the other can pick up the pieces and keep the plan on track.

Does this help?

I'm not sure why you keep thinking God is real in this story. If you hear God tell you it's your destiny to conquer the galaxy, that doesn't mean you're sane and He's real. If he's imaginary, he could be saying the exact same thing. How would you be able to tell? The only way is to follow the characters and see how things unfold. As you've seen, the two boys' experience with God is very different and they are on different timelines until early in the story when events in the galaxy begin to overlap, finally bringing them together.

So far, Apollo is trying to avoid his fate, but is repeatedly forced to do things God has been warning would happen. Joseph, on the other hand, has committed to his quest, even though he is constantly confronted with increasing evidence that he is seriously ill. Consider, he's been asked to create a new religion called the Christian Heresy that will surge across the galaxy like a tidal wave, toppling kings, quees, and emperors in its path. If that's not nuts, I don't know what is.

Check out the new epigraph at the top of chapter two, if you like. It's the only thing I changed about the chapter at present. It summarizes the real vs. imaginary debate in a way that hits the reader over the head that this could go either way.

Following the discussion here, I'm simply going to tweak the wording for Joseph's character that he has free will to walk away at any time. It's his destiny to "lead" the quest, but that doesn't necessarily mean he will succeed. For the time being, Apollo will remain stuck on the course God has warned him will happen.

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I have a dialogue between two characters: Admiral Windsor, the POV character, and Admiral Gaius Lupus, her deadly nemesis.

Windsor says: “Two encounters in three months, Gaius? I don’t recall a formal declaration of war. Surely the emperor doesn’t plan to unleash the Apocalypse over me.”

The next part is what I'm wondering about. Can I say,

     Lupus bristled at the use of his first name.
     Windsor suppressed an urge to smile.

Or should I say,

     Windsor saw Lupus bristle at the use of his first name. She suppressed an urge to smile.

The first option could be viewed as a POV slip. After all, how can she know that's why he bristled? In the second option, it's clear that she took his bristling to be in response to her calling him by his first name.

I prefer the first option because I don't like to remind the reader too frequently that we're in Windsor's POV when the whole chapter is her POV.

Thoughts from the POV police?

Thanks.
Dirk

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njc wrote:

imagine you could eavesdrop on every radio message ever sent

Google

njc wrote:

and you set about making sure that history unfolded the way it was "supposed to."

Apple

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Sol, I'm still not seeing behavior consistent with what you've told me. I read your latest post about the (apple) writing competition. It still shows up on my home page. I don't mean to beat this to death, but I think it would help us to know how it works so we know when/when not to rely on it as part of our workflow.

Thanks.
Dirk

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Is there a timeout? Why/when do posts disappear from the home page? My post to a thread in the Medieval group is the newest one, yet it doesn't appear on my home page.

Thanks.
Dirk

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Sol, can you please tell us the algorithm used to determine whether or not something is a new post? I posted a couple of replies to one of Amy's threads today, the last one timestamped shortly after 17:00 hours, and already the thread has disappeared off my home screen at 19:00 hours. Others seem to stick around longer, although I may be mistaken.

How does it work?

Thanks.
Dirk

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Charles_F_Bell wrote:

Homer's Achilles, we suppose he added to the existing ancient legend, is a turning point in Western civilization in that Achilles is given a destiny but he also has a choice through his own action or inaction between two outcomes, so even in a culture of intervening-meddling gods, Man has effective freewill.

Free will is one of my options. One of my two MCs repeatedly has the ability to walk away, but believes so strongly in his course of action, that he ignores the ever-increasing insanity of his quest. Another option is to say that the MC was destined to lead the quest, though not necessarily succeed in it.

The other one I'm exploring is the case where the MC was never given a choice, but is trying his best to avoid his fate, which he believes would lead to all-out war for the human race. So far, he keeps failing to divert away from that destiny.

Finally, there is a very real possibility that either or both destinies are just imagined.

Eventually, it all collides. Should be a blast. Pun intended.

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Connect with Janet Taylor-Perry here on the site. English teacher, author, and part-time editor. There are others too. If you can post your request to Premium, you should do so.

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max keanu wrote:

I'll be gone for 10 days. Off to Washington state to explore medical marijuana. I'll be staying here part of the time:
http://www.anchorage-inn.com/
Also, Gig Harbor with friends  & the Paradise Inn to get inspiration for a horror novel like, The Shinning.

Is this the right place to post trivia like this? Is this the community forum?

Good luck, Max. FYI, I read a news article recently that says the actual content of pot's active ingredient is very inconsistent. Only about 20% of edible products had the advertised content. 60% had too little. 20% too much.

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Thanks, Karin. The idea of the prophecy being wrong is a good fit. I hadn't considered it since both boys are told about their destinies by God, or at least a voice that claims to be Him. The prophecy is only as real as the deity (as opposed to mental illness). I need to dedicate some time to making that connection more obvious.

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Vern, surely there was never any doubt that I would respond. :-)

I need to adjust the wording I use in the book's next draft. I think it's more correct to say they're destined to lead the quest, without knowing if they'll succeed. Even that isn't quite right, since one of them is given the option to walk away even before he begins.

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I was wondering if anyone has any thoughts about the use of fate/destiny in your writing. I have two characters, both of whom are told it is their destiny to save the human race from the Apocalypse, although they use different, even conflicting, methods in the attempt to do so.

Can someone fail to achieve one's destiny? The very word suggests otherwise. If it's fate, how dumb do you have to be to screw it up? Can you walk away from fate?

Thanks.
Dirk

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Janet, what fraction of a Kindle e-book's price goes to the author? According to Lulu.com's website, it's a very small fraction. I'm curious how Lulu.com competes with CreateSpace....

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It's too bad Google or Apple don't compete head-on with Amazon in the self-publishing space. It would take a Goliath to break Amazon's stranglehold on the book industry. Barnes & Noble should be the obvious competitor, but they can't compete as long as they're weighed down by brick and mortar overhead.

Nope, the best part is Sol and his team of magical elves! :-)

Hah! I said it first.

Dirk

For me, it's inline reviews, especially now that we can see/print all inline feedback at once. Love that!

Dirk

I use Premium for certain posts (e.g., "I need a futurist/biologist/chemist/geneticist for the year 4017") that logically belong in the sci-fi group, but the experts I need aren't necessarily members of that group. I'm not sure there's an ideal solution for that one.

I think I finally have a clue as to what makes posts visible or not on the home page. I'm betting it works by date/timestamp. A new thread or a follow-up post are probably considered new for a certain amount of time, not based on whether I've read it or not. Can anyone confirm/correct that assumption?

I can practically see Sol's eyes rolling back in his head as he tries to figure out how to make this all work. Get well soon, Sol! :-)

Max, are you aware that the group forum posts shown on the home page come and go without regard to whether you've read them or not? I'm all for a forum concept that brings a sense of community back to the site, but I'd at least like to see, at a glance from the home page, what's happening in the groups that I'm already a member of. That ought to be an easy change.

I love your wish list, njc. Hopefully, those ideas can be incorporated into whatever forum solution Sol is considering.

I tried to behave myself for once, limiting the request to something that "seems" like a relatively small change compared to the resurrected forums. This idea is not meant to replace those, just to make it easier to see and navigate quickly to new/updated threads from the home page. It ought to result in a lot more sharing/posting within groups, though probably not across groups.

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I agree with Tom. They're like book covers. They're the first impression you make on readers out of a sea of books on Amazon. The next step is to have a compelling book summary for the back of the book. I usually advise new writers on the site to write their TNBW book summary as if it were the back of an actual book, so they capture the interest of more potential readers.