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I'll be damned. I finished another chapter. I combined two of the shogun's run-ins with Apollo to free up some chapter space. I need room for one additional chapter per MC in this act. I deleted the stuff about Apollo being trained by God (headsmacking exercises, etc.).

K, you now have two full-length back-to-back chapters about the MCs. Thanks for your help with the names.

Up next is a Galactipedia article about New Bethlehem, since I ripped that material out of chapter four, followed by Joseph's next full chapter. Then an article about the Julii, followed by Apollo's next full chapter. After that, the articles will fall off for a while.

I'm using the epigraphs for forum duels between Joseph and Apollo to build friction before they ever meet.

Quick go read! Amy, I still owe you a read. K, bzzt!

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I'm looking for a Japanese equivalent to the shogun's martial arts training, originally called Glorious Death. Banzai is silly enough in this context that it's perfect.

Thanks

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Hi, Tom. I have the same issue. I chose to create two books, Into the Mind of God (for v2) and Into the Mind of God v3 (for v3+). I will be deleting some chapters and adding new ones as I proceed with v3, which will throw off the chapter count, creating a discontinuity between old and new chapters, if someone were to read based on chapter numbers alone. Naturally, you could make it work if you hide all of the old chapters and then proceed to publish your new chapters as you write/finish them. Republishing will cause the new chapters to show up in the list of new books available to everyone on their homes pages, so they can see the new content and go read it for points. Simply editing the old chapters to overwrite the existing content will not require points, but then your new material won't show up under new books.

Also, in my case, I want to leave the old version up (for stragglers to finish) and concurrently publish new chapters for new readers, without confusing both groups of readers. Therefore I used two books. Once everyone is done reading v2, I plan to take it down (make them inactive). That way, I can keep the old reviews for reference as I write v3. Two books also means I don't have to deal with a confusing list of new and old chapters intermingled in the same list under the site's publish feature.

Hope that helps.
Dirk

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(5 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Is that Gungan? You missed a "M'sa".

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Vielen Dank, Tom. Ich wünsche Euch allen ein Frohes Neues Jahr!

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K, can you suggest a relatively reliable source to translate Glorious Death to Romaji?

Thanks
Dirk

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Fred Flintstone Saves Christmas

Kdot wrote:

a) If your editor doesn't find any major flaws you either have a best-seller or a bad editor

Or, you've had a variety of experienced reviewers, read a lot of how-to books, and written 2.5 drafts. At those prices, I can't afford the expense for a self-published book.

Amy, what level of editing feedback are you getting from your editor? More than just line edits, I assume. Also, what is the cost of editing a book? By the time I finish v3 + edits, I doubt I'll want to make any more major changes. I simply write too slowly. Just curious what you get for your $$$.

Aldamurisse? I'm intrigued. And after Carrie and her mother, I need a little good news. Do I need to skip to the end, Amy, or will the book still be up a while?

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Quack wins. I could see a Twitter competitor that uses quacking as it's version of tweet.
Cock-a-doodle-doo is crazier, but it's too over-the-top, even for me.

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...when he famously "burped" his resignation on social media...
belched?
Or a bird sound totally unlike tweeting or chirping. I'll look some up tomorrow. Like squawked, but funnier.

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How about:

Bombast was a sitting U.S. president when he famously “chirped” his resignation from the Oval Office, claiming he was called by the Lord to battle the Antichrist mano a mano.

I'm debating using the often-misused mono y mono, which means monkey and monkey.

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It's intentionally tongue-in-cheek, which is something I began doing in act three onward (and on into v3). And don't forget about ancestry.com. That kind of search will be a simple lookup in a few years. Also, the Queen of England is known to be a descendent of King David (now that's cool!).

If I get rid of the tweeting, I would drop US president too. Technically, you would expect that the president's real name be given in such an essay/article anyway, so that was a known weakness to the writeup. I kind of like Bombast, though, so that begs the question who better than Trump for that role? It should have the potential to be based on someone real without coming right out and saying it. It helps if they're dead, so I can't get sued.

I was originally going to use Bishop Bling, but that's already taken. $30M to renovate a church?! Might as well rebuild St. Peter's Basicala.

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Who do you think was driving?

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HOV lane, into reindeer.

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Airplane without peer.

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LSD

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Merry Christmas from the North Pole.
Okay, it's Canada, but damn is it cold!

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njc wrote:

I'm on the mend

Glad to hear it. It doesn't help that many uninsured in the US have to go to the hospital ER to get non-emergency medical care. The long wait time in very uncomfortable chairs in the Jersey City ER was more stressful than anything else. I finally discovered that in the middle of the night there was virtually no waiting.

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Talk about having a big old stick up your butt...

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Here's the ordering if I delay both articles until later:

1. For the Realm! - intro to Admiral Windsor aka Joseph's grandmother in 3994 AD
2. Boys With a Destiny - intro to Joseph, Apollo, and God, fast forward thru childhood to 4017 AD
3. The Shadow of Death - Joseph's first full chapter, his world and its history, action begins
4. A Pax Romana - Apollo's first full chapter, intro to the shogun, Apollo's destiny revealed
5. Galactipedia: The Great Collapse of Civilization - first major galactic event of the future
6. I Will Shake the Universe - Andrew's hanging, Joseph's destiny revealed
7. Galactipedia: The Rise of the Julii - second major future event
8. Title TBD - intro to the imperator and imperatrix, their relationships with Apollo, the Throne Room

It just doesn't work. Joseph writes his essay before the reader knows anything substantive about the Great Collapse. Also, we then seesaw back and forth between story chapter and Galactipedia starting from chapter four. One of the advantages of having the Great Collapse before the main story chapters is that it gives history that affects both MCs. The New Bethlehem essay is relevant to Joseph. And the Rise of the Julii is relevant to Apollo.

Here's what it looks like if I move the essay out as a Galactipedia article:

1. For the Realm! - intro to Admiral Windsor aka Joseph's grandmother in 3994 AD
2. Boys With a Destiny - intro to Joseph, Apollo, and God, fast forward thru childhood to 4017 AD
3. Galactipedia: The Great Collapse of Civilization
4. The Shadow of Death - Joseph's first full chapter, action begins
5. A Pax Romana - Apollo's first full chapter, intro to the shogun, Apollo's destiny revealed
6. Galactipedia: New Bethlehem
7. I Will Shake the Universe - Andrew's hanging, Joseph's destiny revealed
8. Galactipedia: The Rise of the Julii
9. Title TBD - intro to the imperator and imperatrix, their relationships with Apollo, the Throne Room

This one at least is balanced. Two opening chapters, an article before starting the main story, two story chapters (one per MC), followed by one article+chapter for each MC.

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(1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

As K noted somewhere, my early chapter ordering bounces around quite a bit between semi-prologue, MCs, and Galactipedia articles:

1. For the Realm! - intro to Admiral Windsor aka Joseph's grandmother in 3994 AD
2. Boys With a Destiny - intro to Joseph, Apollo, and God, fast forward thru childhood to 4017 AD
3. Galactipedia: The Great Collapse of Civilization - first major galactic event of the future
4. The Shadow of Death - Joseph's first full chapter, his world and its history, action begins
5. Galactipedia: The Rise of the Julii - second major future event
6. A Pax Romana - Apollo's first full chapter, intro to the shogun, Apollo's destiny revealed
7. I Will Shake the Universe - Andrew's hanging, Joseph's destiny revealed
8. Title TBD - intro to the imperator and imperatrix, their relationships with Apollo, the Throne Room

The Great Collapse has to come before The Rise of the Julii (about 2 pages each), and both need to come very early in the story. I could potentially delay Rise of the Julii to just before chapter 8 (Apollo's second full chapter). That would give me three story chapters after the Great Collapse before the next article. I also snuck in a two-page "essay" by Joseph into chapter 4 which would have otherwise been another article. I'm still itching to do it that way. Add to all this the fact that the story chapters alternate between Joseph and Apollo. Any publisher looking at this would probably say WTF? Talk about demolishing a formula.

Thoughts?

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I looked up bigly. It's a word! My theory is that Trump, really a Democrat, is actually brilliant and putting on a reality show while secretly destroying the Republican Party.

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Those aren't nice ways to talk about Kdot.