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Woo hoo! All my outstanding updates are done for chapters 1 - 5. Of course, Amy and Bill K. haven't weighed in on the later chapters yet, so there's sure to be another frenzy of activity soon. I wonder how long I'll be able to keep up with edits as I try to push forward with v3.

As long as you don't write a 20-page prologue. :-)

I like the down under joke a lot, but I'm shooting for PG-13 with v3. How about:

Does anyone have any suggestions for a pen name for Janet (Reid) in the paragraphs below. I think Jangaroo is too silly and takes you out of the story. I'd like something that is relatively obvious that it's Janet (if possible), while still being fun for the reader who has no clue who she is. I can't use the name Janet, since there are two. Janet TP appears as 'Patient Janet' in one of the epigraphs in act two. An Australian expression might work here. Queen Woop Woop? Etc.

Is there a word anyone can think of to replace artificially in the following sentence:

I'm trying to say that the Imperial Classiarii have increased the amount of adrenaline in their systems by injecting some. Akhere suggested I have the wrong word here, which I think is right. Among other things, it can be misread as modified adrenaline. I hunted and pecked through the thesaurus but couldn't find an alternative.

Thanks.
Dirk

No, I decided I don't want to disfigure one of my character names just to throw a nod to the reviewer. I have plenty of room for more nonsense where the names are a better fit. Don currently appears as the planet Dawn, although I need to punt that, since Imperial planets would have Imperial names.

For Seabrass, there's sea bass, C. Bass/Brass, and Cee/See Bass/Brass. Having him be the (offscreen) character who poisons Apollo's father is good fun, provided I can work in the name. Tricky given that anyone associated with Nero would generally have an Imperial name. If I can tie Seabrass to the unseen homicidal robot Aussie, so much the better. Maybe Aussie goes to work at the palace because Nero no longer trusts human cooks. Aussie will definitely appear "in person" in my post-battle chapter where everything is explained.

By the way, Acme, Inc. has now appeared twice in just the first four chapters. It was founded by Prof. Hinkley in the 24th century. The njc cameo occurs late in act one, just before I open a chapter inside the starlanes.

Cool chart. Thanks. Not a lot to work with, is it? I decided I'm too used to Kobayashi to slip in a very rough approximation of someone's name from the site. It's probably easier to Imperialize their names, or make one of them a victim of Aussie in a news epigraph. Seabrass is probably going to have something to do with fish. It just begs for sea bass. Perhaps the meal that kills Nero is sea bass. Better yet, make him the chef.

Angry Bovine Sniffles

Dost fair thee dance?

Okay, minor course correction. Governors will be called Consuls in v3, taken from Ancient Rome. Also caps.

Now then, why should governor be lowercase when Regent is capitalized? It seems to me that it's a vestige of our era when governor is not royalty, nor a ruler of an entire country or empire.