Noah survived :-)
2,801 2017-01-28 22:32:31
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
2,802 2017-01-28 04:57:21
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Grand Teetering Ark
2,803 2017-01-28 02:13:17
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Thanks.
2,804 2017-01-28 01:17:17
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Dr. Georges Gilles de la Tourette
2,805 2017-01-28 01:15:24
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I'm looking to keep it within the realm of physically possible, albeit improbable. I'll punt cold fusion in favor of generic power cores if I have to. I used the latter in my second draft. Cold fusion is a little sexier, without requiring an explanation. Assuming cold fusion is ever made to work, it is expected to emit heat, which is converted to power. Instead of the leaked coolant in v2 causing the pilot to be cooked from within, I assume I can vent excess heat into space. So I would need to destroy the ability of the fusion core to vent heat to get the same roast pilot. Yes?
2,806 2017-01-27 22:08:01
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The subways are definitely very loud when they go shooting past.
2,807 2017-01-27 22:05:43
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Sparkanium it is.
Next item. Does anyone think it's particularly bad to have both cold fusion and dark energizers in the book? I don't dwell on it, but cold fusion is used for low power applications (e.g. flying cars, starfighters, etc.) while the energizers are used for all the big capital ships. I'm not sure where to draw the line, though. Should a garbage scow have an energizer?
On a related note, my understanding of cold fusion is that it produces excess heat, so I have a damaged fusion core overheating in a starfighter to the point of killing the occupant. I introduced coolant in the starfighters to prevent this from happening normally. Reasonable?
2,808 2017-01-27 13:45:30
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I was considering a mineral called sparkle, which would explain why one of the names for a dark energizer is Old Sparkie. I like the name, but dark energizers only appear in my battle scenes, so I'm not sure a nickname for a dark energizer would be used by people in a life-and-death battle, especially in the military.
2,809 2017-01-27 12:49:05
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Can someone suggest a real mineral on Earth that might be used in energizers to draw dark energy from the void as a means of very high power generation. I was considering radioactive tritium, but it's normally a gas. I'm hoping for a relatively rare mineral that might exist on other worlds in greater quantities. Think of it as Arrakis's spice, but for power instead of navigation. Should I just make one up?
2,810 2017-01-27 04:53:36
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Carrot Top.
2,811 2017-01-27 04:38:04
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Amy, if you look down, you'll see concrete. If you look to the front, back, left, or right, you'll see buildings. If you look up, you'll see sky. And crowds everywhere. (I'm 6'3", so they're like bloody hobbits underfoot.) And the occasional smell of pee. Look for signs that say 'Dirk was here,' especially near the pee. Re-watch Blade Runner before you go.
Seriously, there are two very nice cemeteries downtown, one with tombstones dating back to the 1600s. The World Trade Center, of course (I never saw the rebuilt version, unfortunately). The NYSE on Wall Street with lots of security. Statue of Liberty & Ellis Island boat tours leaving from the very south tip, Battery Park City downtown (lived there once), and the walkway up the whole West Side of Manhattan (especially nice downtown in spring), with views of NJ. Tour boats around the island (a must, IMO, right under the bridges). If you like the stink of fish, go to the Lower East Side. 42nd Street (unbelievable crowds, hold onto your kids). Central Park. Broadway shows. A zoo in Queens, I believe. There's a botanical garden somewhere, too. I don't recall anything in Brooklyn, but I never went very far there.
And on day two, .... :-)
2,812 2017-01-27 03:49:01
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
blatant oppression
2,813 2017-01-26 23:30:41
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Hoof in butt.
2,814 2017-01-26 04:25:44
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Depends on whether you ask Paul or Moses.
2,815 2017-01-26 03:07:21
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I decided to give Trump a break after I read that a well-known televangelist (guess his name), after being caught in his third sex scandal, told his congregation, "The Lord told me it's flat none of your business." Talk about balls, pun intended. It was too funny to leave out, so I just threw in a few extras. I was listening to Elvis Presley sing An American Trilogy on repeat as I wrote this. Damn he could sing! My brother is selling a VW cheap, if you're interested.
New Bethlehem was founded by religious conservatives descended from the followers of the Reverend “Bombast,” as he was affectionately known by his flock. He was a Bible-thumping “prosperity gospel” televangelist with fiery rhetoric who grew his megachurch to over ten million members, before it was discovered that he embezzled church funds to buy a palatial mansion on a secluded estate, a private jet, two-hundred-year-old paintings by W., jewelry once worn by an Elvis Presley impersonator, and luxury cars, including a fully restored 2015 Volkswagen Golf (diesel). Bombast refused to resign, telling his followers, “The Lord told me it’s flat none of your business.” His eight-hundred-year-old church eventually fled Earth in the late third millennium to escape that planet’s ever-worsening Warming and strong religious bias in the face of renewed interest in the Roman pantheon under the Imperium.
2,816 2017-01-25 18:24:36
Re: Unbar's Thread (87 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I think Robert Stockington's review was the one that caused me to abort my first draft halfway through, not because he was blunt, but because he was right.
2,817 2017-01-24 19:10:18
Re: Unbar's Thread (87 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
One way to avoid the overuse of dialogue tags is to have the speakers say the other person's name from time to time in the dialogue. Also, you don't need them if the context makes it obvious (e.g. One person is mad, the other is trying to mollify them. In that case the dialogue should make it obvious.)
As for fancy tags, when they contribute value to the dialogue, I use them. Mostly I stick with said, asked, and replied, and even those can usually be eliminated. For example: "That hurts," John said, wincing. becomes: John winced. "That hurts."
2,818 2017-01-24 18:00:56
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Orio face Kleenex.
2,819 2017-01-24 04:06:36
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
If the masses have watched Apollo grow up, they have seen his tantrums as well as his triumphs. Since he is destined to be their leader, the regular people have a lot of opinions about him. If the Emperor hates Apollo, the father would have manipulated the feed to show an unflattering/ petulant version of Apollo. To prevent an overthrow or limit Apollo's support.
And the Emperor would use the press to present himself as a benevolent but fierce ruler, so few realize that he is cray-cray.
This is a logical extension of the press and a novel way of using real-time TV. It would make sense that a crew or a bot is following Apollo everywhere. Dunno, but this is a lot more futuristic to me than the smart-eyes. Our reality TV doesn't follow Trump during his life at the White House, though I'll bet he's thought of this wrinkle. It would get great ratings and might tone down the resistance from intellectuals who think they are keeping tabs on him.
I think Apollo and even his father would oppose constant monitoring, since it would allow the enemy to figure out how to play him once he's in power. The Julii are nothing if not orchestrators of their public image. I'm pushing the limits just by considering a public match with Caligula and the Shogun. Even in Dune, the Baron's nephew, Feyd, a remoreless killer, only ever went up against drugged opponents. If the emperor wants to put out false videos, you need little more than an Amiga 1200. After all, Apollo faked his death the same way. Consider the resurrection of Grand Moff Tarkin in the latest Star Wars film. In ten years, give or take, the tech will make fake videos indistinguishable from the real thing.
2,820 2017-01-24 01:23:26
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
What fiasco? You elected an intelligent, compassionate, thoughtful, world leader who is an example to all. Of course, that was eight years ago....
2,821 2017-01-23 21:05:41
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I didn't understand the second half of your post, Amy.
2,822 2017-01-23 08:13:03
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
In addition to the best friend (William, same age as Apollo in v3), I need to amp this up. I'd bring the emperor in to watch, but I don't want to introduce him until the throne room. However, any heir is going to draw a crowd. So there should be lots of spectators, including Aphrodite aka Gaia (he sees her but doesn't know her yet). Her watching is why he pushes back against the Shogun rather than just letting the beating happen. Also, gym mats are so passe. This needs to be messy. Mud? Something new, clingy? I also need to design the gym for spectators, so it needs a bit of description. A livestream to Galaxinet? A tournament, perhaps?
2,823 2017-01-23 06:37:23
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
For those who've read the new A Pax Romana, the chapter strikes me as bland. Apollo learns his destiny, which interferes with his workout, he gets the sh*t kicked out of him by the Shogun, and then gets even with God's help. All in only ten double-spaced pages. Granted, I could do with shorter chapters, but it seems like there isn't enough meat on these bones. I plan to add other kids to the gym, so I can introduce a best friend for Apollo, but that's just more kids in a gym working out. Same old same old.
Any suggestions?
2,824 2017-01-20 17:59:04
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Native Americans wronged
2,825 2017-01-17 12:52:25
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
No worries. I've whittled it down to one of the two writeups in my previous post above.
Any preference, anyone?
Dirk