Woohoo! Chapter 4 is up (the attack on the palace).
Quick, go read!
2,901 2016-12-17 21:13:33
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
2,902 2016-12-17 20:46:27
Re: Createspace is trying to kill me (8 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I don't understand why the expanded distribution increases the price of the book through CreateSpace. Is it because the purchase of your book in the expanded distribution space includes reseller markup?
2,903 2016-12-17 16:54:28
Topic: -ing verbs (4 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
I've received feedback that -ing verbs should be avoided whenever possible. Here's an example:
Alexander raced from behind the desk to come to Joseph’s aid, but Cain elbowed Joseph’s father in the face, driving him to the ground, dazed and bleeding.
In the above, the word 'driving' can be replaced with 'which drove.' One word replaced by two.
Is this a common rule of thumb to follow?
2,904 2016-12-17 06:17:17
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Oh, and crisper wins as the default rifle. Toaster reappears as the handgun. The other names may be versions of those.
Knife tech will be a third class of weapon.
2,905 2016-12-17 06:10:40
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I like Stir-fry a lot.
Microwaver, perhaps?
Meatball Maker.
I'll Google kitchen tech and have a little fun. There are probably a bunch related to knives, too.
This is gonna rock! Thanks
Dirk
2,906 2016-12-16 17:31:50
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Orange Oligarchy
2,907 2016-12-16 05:51:23
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
It's probably a good thing. Maybe crisper for the rifle and toaster for the handgun. I could never warm up to fryer as the main weapon, which led to flesh eater. Actually, all the possible food cooking tech makes for great nonsense. But what would a rice cooker do?
All manufactured by Acme, of course.
2,908 2016-12-15 01:19:16
Re: Who does "he" refer to in this sentence? (7 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
Actually mine should say: Joseph studied Andrew as he was led away. Better yet: As they led Andrew away, Joseph studied him.
2,909 2016-12-15 01:17:01
Re: Who does "he" refer to in this sentence? (7 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
I think there would be more information in the scene to clarify whose watch it is. Or, apply a little deep POV: the thief skulked away with John's gold watch. Gets rid of that pesky 'watched.' Therefore, mine should be: they led Andrew away. I'll see if I can make that fit.
2,910 2016-12-15 00:22:24
Topic: Who is speaking here? (1 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
She returned her attention to the general. “I want answers by morning."
This is similar to the last one, although I'm used to seeing the dialogue associated with the subject of the sentence.
2,911 2016-12-14 23:13:53
Re: Who does "he" refer to in this sentence? (7 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
Thank you.
2,912 2016-12-14 22:32:26
Topic: Who does "he" refer to in this sentence? (7 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
Joseph watched Andrew as he was led away.
In the above sentence, it's Andrew who is being led away. Is it clear that the pronoun is associated with Andrew, or does it refer to the subject of the sentence? I've seen it done both ways.
Thanks
Dirk
2,913 2016-12-14 22:21:24
Re: promoting (28 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Thanks, Jack. I wasn't aware of that.
2,914 2016-12-14 19:45:42
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Thanks
2,915 2016-12-14 19:43:22
Re: promoting (28 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
What's the point of having a publsher if you have to pay your own promotions? Is the author talking about self-publishing through sites like Amazon?
2,916 2016-12-14 07:51:29
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Does anyone have an opinion of the name flesh eater? Since it's my last major draft of book one, I want to revisit a few names. Flesh eater is one word too long in my opinion. If you're going to have a colloquial name for a weapon, I think it would be short, like oozie. I could introduce it as flesh eater, but then refer to it as an eater from then on. Meh. That brought up the idea of heater, which could be a recycled weapon name from Earth's past. Also, light toaster and deep fryer shorten nicely to toaster (you're toast!) and fryer (fry them!). Crisper is also good. For some reason, I like that one a lot.
Thoughts?
2,917 2016-12-14 05:42:49
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Deep POV question: should I be trying eliminate all references to 'his mother' and 'his father' in favor of just 'Mother' and 'Father'? It reads very weird to me. Less so in chapter two, when Joseph is just four and thinks of them as Mommy and Daddy.
2,918 2016-12-14 05:37:48
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I almost wet myself when the redheaded Bilbo popped up.
2,919 2016-12-14 00:19:45
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
max keanu wrote:
constitutional democracy
For now ....
2,920 2016-12-14 00:18:48
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
misterindirect
2,921 2016-12-14 00:17:56
Re: Imperial vs. imperial (5 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
Imperials is an odd duck. I originally capitalized all occurences of Imperial based on your observation that it is like Canadian, which made sense. However, I found that inconsistent with every other resource I looked at for usage of imperial. Since Imperials is short for imperial forces, I went with lowercase for that, too. For now. :-)
2,922 2016-12-14 00:12:15
Re: Imperial vs. imperial (5 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
Thanks, Janet. I lowercased perimeter because there is one per palace on Earth, so there is more than just one. Based on a bit of research, emblem is lowercase even though Coat of Arms is capitalized (at least in Britain). As a result, I went with imperial palace (lowercase) for consistency, but will name the palace as you suggest.
As for imperial family, I went lowercase. Otherwise I would end up with caps on Imperial Family but lowercase on imperator, which is wrong. I don't want to capitalize imperator since that causes a cascade of other inconsistencies. It looks weird to me to put royal family and imperial family lowercase (ditto for imperator), but I'm sure I'll get used to it. If not, I'll be back. :-)
Thanks for your help.
2,923 2016-12-13 23:52:04
Re: How to write OD'd (1 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
Janet Taylor-Perry wrote:
How would you write overdosed if you used OD? would it be OD'd or ODed?
I'd use OD'd.
2,924 2016-12-13 20:50:46
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
If it helps, here's mine: Not even the End of Act 1 of v3 of Book 1 of 5.
Donkey droppings!
2,925 2016-12-13 20:48:29
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The End of Act 1 of Book 1 of 5.
Oh poo!
