The Bombastic Boss of Bling
means: Run! Run like the wind!
2,876 2016-12-21 21:28:09
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
2,877 2016-12-21 04:35:05
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
How about:
New Bethlehem is a God-fearing world, founded by religious conservatives descended from the Reverend ‘Bombast,’ as he was affectionately known among his flock. The Reverend Bombast was a sitting U.S. president when he famously ‘tweeted’ his resignation from the Oval Office after being sovereignly chosen and called by God to a higher purpose. His heirs eventually fled Earth in the late third millennium to escape the planet’s ever-worsening Warming, and the Imperium’s cowardly tyrannical oppression.
2,878 2016-12-21 03:06:35
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I think tweet is probably safe since future candidates are going to have to have a Twitter presence, at least until the fad runs its course. You're right, though, I have to find a name that "could" be Trump, without naming him. Pastor Bling? Reverend Bombast?
2,879 2016-12-21 00:19:39
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Knowing as my regulars do the extent of nonsense in my book, I was wondering if the following is too over-the-top. I'm leaning toward punting it. (Joseph is dictating this to his AI as an essay.)
“Let’s keep going. … New Bethlehem is a God-fearing world, founded by a conservative religious dynasty descended from Shepherd Donald Trump, who famously “tweeted” his resignation as U.S. President to take up a “higher calling.” Followers of his faith eventually fled Earth in the late third millennium to escape the planet’s ever-worsening Warming, and the Imperium’s cowardly tyrannical oppression.”
Thanks
Dirk
2,880 2016-12-20 07:45:46
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
If you have or are going to read chapter 4, I suggest listening to this first. It's a hoot, and relevant.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9CnPv_1SVh0
Aussie will just die.
2,881 2016-12-19 13:27:26
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Jokesaurus
big guide means a lot of joshing
2,882 2016-12-18 08:10:13
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Gallistony
2,883 2016-12-17 21:13:33
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Woohoo! Chapter 4 is up (the attack on the palace).
Quick, go read!
2,884 2016-12-17 20:46:27
Re: Createspace is trying to kill me (8 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I don't understand why the expanded distribution increases the price of the book through CreateSpace. Is it because the purchase of your book in the expanded distribution space includes reseller markup?
2,885 2016-12-17 16:54:28
Topic: -ing verbs (4 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
I've received feedback that -ing verbs should be avoided whenever possible. Here's an example:
Alexander raced from behind the desk to come to Joseph’s aid, but Cain elbowed Joseph’s father in the face, driving him to the ground, dazed and bleeding.
In the above, the word 'driving' can be replaced with 'which drove.' One word replaced by two.
Is this a common rule of thumb to follow?
2,886 2016-12-17 06:17:17
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Oh, and crisper wins as the default rifle. Toaster reappears as the handgun. The other names may be versions of those.
Knife tech will be a third class of weapon.
2,887 2016-12-17 06:10:40
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I like Stir-fry a lot.
Microwaver, perhaps?
Meatball Maker.
I'll Google kitchen tech and have a little fun. There are probably a bunch related to knives, too.
This is gonna rock! Thanks
Dirk
2,888 2016-12-16 17:31:50
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Orange Oligarchy
2,889 2016-12-16 05:51:23
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
It's probably a good thing. Maybe crisper for the rifle and toaster for the handgun. I could never warm up to fryer as the main weapon, which led to flesh eater. Actually, all the possible food cooking tech makes for great nonsense. But what would a rice cooker do?
All manufactured by Acme, of course.
2,890 2016-12-15 01:19:16
Re: Who does "he" refer to in this sentence? (7 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
Actually mine should say: Joseph studied Andrew as he was led away. Better yet: As they led Andrew away, Joseph studied him.
2,891 2016-12-15 01:17:01
Re: Who does "he" refer to in this sentence? (7 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
I think there would be more information in the scene to clarify whose watch it is. Or, apply a little deep POV: the thief skulked away with John's gold watch. Gets rid of that pesky 'watched.' Therefore, mine should be: they led Andrew away. I'll see if I can make that fit.
2,892 2016-12-15 00:22:24
Topic: Who is speaking here? (1 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
She returned her attention to the general. “I want answers by morning."
This is similar to the last one, although I'm used to seeing the dialogue associated with the subject of the sentence.
2,893 2016-12-14 23:13:53
Re: Who does "he" refer to in this sentence? (7 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
Thank you.
2,894 2016-12-14 22:32:26
Topic: Who does "he" refer to in this sentence? (7 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
Joseph watched Andrew as he was led away.
In the above sentence, it's Andrew who is being led away. Is it clear that the pronoun is associated with Andrew, or does it refer to the subject of the sentence? I've seen it done both ways.
Thanks
Dirk
2,895 2016-12-14 22:21:24
Re: promoting (28 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Thanks, Jack. I wasn't aware of that.
2,896 2016-12-14 19:45:42
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Thanks
2,897 2016-12-14 19:43:22
Re: promoting (28 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
What's the point of having a publsher if you have to pay your own promotions? Is the author talking about self-publishing through sites like Amazon?
2,898 2016-12-14 07:51:29
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Does anyone have an opinion of the name flesh eater? Since it's my last major draft of book one, I want to revisit a few names. Flesh eater is one word too long in my opinion. If you're going to have a colloquial name for a weapon, I think it would be short, like oozie. I could introduce it as flesh eater, but then refer to it as an eater from then on. Meh. That brought up the idea of heater, which could be a recycled weapon name from Earth's past. Also, light toaster and deep fryer shorten nicely to toaster (you're toast!) and fryer (fry them!). Crisper is also good. For some reason, I like that one a lot.
Thoughts?
2,899 2016-12-14 05:42:49
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Deep POV question: should I be trying eliminate all references to 'his mother' and 'his father' in favor of just 'Mother' and 'Father'? It reads very weird to me. Less so in chapter two, when Joseph is just four and thinks of them as Mommy and Daddy.
2,900 2016-12-14 05:37:48
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I almost wet myself when the redheaded Bilbo popped up.
