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Pengrit was older and clearly already independent, for some meaning of that word.  These are a lot younger.

Were  the kids credible?

There really are a lot of moving parts in that chapter.

Yes, and that's the remarkable part--that Merran can fight in counterpoint.  And when I liken it, during a catch-your-breath moment, to her early training with her father, to something she reverted to in B1Ch1,  it's an irrelevant distraction.  Instead, simple levitation should set off fireworks that aren't there and elicit a cosmic rimshot.

That Merran survives a Home Alone battle, and how, with such limited tools isn't astonishing in itself?

Clearly the padawan has much to learn ...

Yes, the writer must be intimate with her irregular verbs ...

Okay, B2Ch7(provisional) is now up: Shogran and the Children.  You may fire when ready!
I've a got two potloads of reviews to catch up on and a good load besides.

*Belly laughing on your review reply.*  Yeah, we can't have inflation, can we?  Besides, your work is so good my compliments might be faint praise.

And the workers should have a nice thank-you dinner ... but who prepares it?

Recondite

I'll give you a flippant one--or is it?  Someone who drags race into a matter where it dooes not belong.

More serious definition after that's chewed and spat out ... ...

Is a doctor a racist for conditioning a possible diagnosis of sickle-cell anemia on black African ancestry?

Is a company racist for making hair-care products particularly suited--or not suited--for the hair of people with black African ancestry?

Is a doctor racist for conditioning a possible diagnosis of Tay-Sach's disease on Ashkenazi (or Cajun, or French-Canadian) ancestry?

Is it racist to note that blacks in the USA are more likely to be murder victims than whites?  Is it racist to note that blacks in the USA are more likely to be murderers?  (Both can be explained by noting that this is principally an inner city issue--and that leads to more questions.)

When someone flees the scene of a crime, is it racist to report that person's skin color to those looking for him/her?

The answers depend on your definition of 'racist'.  And that single definition should give satisfactory answers, and have satisfactory moral implications, for ALL the questions above--or it is no definition at all, but a label of convenience for whatever you care to impute in a given situation.

Okay, everything is in the right place, or nearly.  It needs another big edit pass.  Right now it's around 4,400 words, and it's likely to stay in that ballpark.  Some parts are near ready, but the places I've been splicing and dicing need serious editing.  One more pass, maybe, and you can tell me if it's any good.

Summary: Merran and Jamen go to get the orphans--Shogran's Waifs--just as Shogran's rescue cavalry arrives on the scene.

There's still at least one impacted.  I have a few other suggestions, but in general it's a biiig step away from the weaknesses.  I'll try to get the suggestions up tonight but I really want to get the chapter done.  I've been three weeks on it.