If you're indicating shouts, especially shouted imperatives, from a mob or during a confrontation, I have no problem with the exclamation points. The limit is how long the shouters will amd can continue to blast their voices.
If it's a single voice driven to unnatural volume while declaiming a manifesto, then the fact of the volume can be carried in narrative. But here it's demand, response, demand, response.
Followup thought on that third example: The speakers are not identified; they are anonymous voices in a crowd. I have no problem with the original way. The reader doesn't need to attach any identity to either.
You see published writers go both ways. The important thing is that it's clear. I would draw the line at two character's speech in the same paragraph, or mixing one character's speech with another's IM.
This was posted in a place I often read. It's off-topic there, so there's no point in looking for more
You went to all that effort? I didn't think it worth the effort to chase down all the plot gaps. Or gasps
A national plan will only help if it's a good plan AND it's universally applicable. Oh, and it must be adjusted as we learn. We've learned that asymptomatic transmission doesn't occur. We've learned that full lockdowns don't work, but targeted quarantines might. We've learned early on that Medicare reimbursement rules required hospitals to send sick, infectious people back into nursing homes UNLESS the state acted to forbid it, as Florida did. We've got evidence of treatments working or not working, but the national planners (FDA) threaten to pull the licenses of doctors who use the drugs off-label.
No plan survives contact with the enemy, because if the plan survives, the army locked into the plan doesn't. What's needed is to distill our experience into a policies that are flexible enough to work in a wide variety of circumstances, and comprehensive enough to cover all the territories on the battlefield. The US Army has a Center for Lessons Learned. It hasn't always lived up to its name, but it has helped a lot. We need this for pandemics.
And we need elected officials more concerned with fighting the disease, using the ever-growing body of knowledge, than with enforcing their own authority by threatening religious communities and threatening ever-harder lockdowns for harmless 'violations'.
The problem is that it's not been a two week lockdown, and the governments have been strangely inconsistent. Andrew Coumo's treatment of Orthodox Jews living in closed communities crosses the line into persecution even as he sends sick people back into nursing homes, resulting in thousands of COVID deaths. Other governors threaten to arrest people sharing Thanksgiving dinner with their families, while holding large parties with friends and lobbyists. And the evidence on the effectiveness of the lockdowns is very mixed.
This may be saving lives, it may be costing them. But it is shredding American's faith in the good judgement and good intentions of their governments
My approach: Start dialogue, drop into flashback. Return from flashback, use closing dialogue. I've got limited practice, but if it's needed for the story it can work.
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Not for a while, I'm afraid. I'm in reactive mode.
To those waiting on reviews: I'm tied up into and maybe through Tuesday. I'll get back to you then.
To those waiting on reviews: I'm tied up into and maybe through Tuesday. I'll get back to you then.
Note to Randall K.: I'm planning on reviewing your next two chapters. I stopped to think about the first of the two and other events overtook things I may do both non inline and inline.
Thank you for the kind words. I hope and expect to put four to six hours into reviews in the next, let's see, 13 hours. I'm making progress on long, drawn-out circuit project, and also want to do another prototype of a seemingly simple circuit (about the ninth, each with one or two refinements) and most of what's left are physical design problems. At the moment, I've got no off-website review commitment.
In Alma Boykin's =Familiar= series, the mages Familiar animals love to utter smart-alek remarks, though obscenities are usually limited to languages like Arabic and Pashtun.
At one point a group of mages at a conference are discussiing what sort of demonstrations would suit their specialty. They are interrupted by an owl Familiar screeching "No Nukes! No nukes! Save the whales!" Did I mention his mage is an academic?
Nobody -asks- for a Familiar.
Wow! Many congratulations, and we've been privileged to see you develop your work here.
Look at Alma T.C. Boykin's Merchant series, Merchant and Magic, etc. They're Kindle-only for now, not high adventure but exploring a magical world in a different Medieval setting modeled loosely on the Hanseatic League. She's got her own pantheon and in some of the later books the gods have had enough and step in. Nobody wants to see that again.
The series is stalled right now because one of her other series has become popular, and needs far less research. But it shows a different approach.
I haven't been getting many reviews done, but I've got one started and another on the list. However, right now, I've been asked to work on something else. That will have me tied up through mid-week, or maybe all of it.
That's the Unix/Linux quote convention. Inside HTML, the code is literal-ampersandamp . But the problem is quoting snd interpretation at different levels of the system. Will copy-paste mishandle it?
If the disease hasn't progressed to the point where you're thinking of going to the hospital, find a doctor who'll put you on hydroxychloroquine plus either azothromycin or doxycycline, plus zinc. It won't work if you're too far along, but (in spite of the bad press) there's good evidence it works in the early stages.
Ampersands can be a problem. They are a special character in HTML, indicating the start of a sequence spelling out a special character. To display one, you need to turn it into the character name for an ampersand (which begins with an amperssnd). When you get one in the input, you need to convert it to that character sequence so it will display properly. But what happens if it gets interpreted a second time? This is a 'level of quoting' problem, and solving it means knowing, at each point in the HTML code, what level of quoting is expected, then ensuring that you have that level and no other. HTML is not a good programming language--it's a markup language--and it's easy to make a mistake
Congratulations!
One more piece of advice: get enough vitamin D and consider a supplement of at least 250 IU (6.25 mcg), preferably in the form of D-3. It looks like it makes a huge difference in severity of symptoms.
I take a lot more than that for my bones, 4000 IU daily, but that's maxing it out, hard.
Classics, of a sort: https://youtu.be/Fg4PdR_ZtEs (Linked long ago off Instapundit.)
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