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Look at the few differences and decide for yourself which is the more vigorous prose.  Grammarly dropped a comma; tell me which reads better.

My guess is that my vivid, energetic prose defeated or flustered most of its algorithms.  It fell back on a stylebook comma rule and the reduction of more colorful prepositional phrases to adverb and adjective modifiers.  Its first change also turned a precise description (with an elided 'that is') into flavorless, stale mush of the sort favored by academics when pushing agendas

'budgeted as an adjective' reads like someone trying to hide a staff party in the quarterly budget.  Has  Grammarly has been helping with too much academic administrivia?

The Great Crash destroyed the only complete copies of my Comma Heresy Manifesto.  I should reconstitute it.

Perhaps Grammarly's last name is Mediocre?

Welcome!

To follow up on George FLC's comment on grammar, and since I'm mostly lurking these days, here's my minimized lecture on grammar:

Grammar is not just a thing right or wrong.  Grammar is a tool of the writer.  In English's magnificently rich grammar there are usually many ways to present a structure of ideas.  In a complex sentence, we choose which idea deserves the high seat of the main clause, and which ideas should support from subordinate clauses.  We decide which modifiers deserve the weight of a relative clause, which justify a prepositional phrase, and which can be budgeted an adjective or adverb, according to how much of the reader's attention we want to spend on each.  We order our clauses and sentences with care so that the prose flows smoothly through one topic and into the next, with a minimum of jumping back and forth.

Interview with an actual, certified, official exorcist: https://youtu.be/mX7L68p9exk?si=Qex7b5R6VctZKnm9 .

Not Jersey Mike  Bezos ?

Well, heck.  You might enjoy it.  El has a way with characters.

Here, mostly lurking.  I've been helping a formerly active member, Apricots, who published her first book about a year ago.  Most of the work on that book--first of a trilogy--was done here before the mechano-amnesia.  The book is =Starlight Jewel=, published under the name E.L.Lyons, and no, it's not a romance.  It's a character-driven fantasy which includes a romance, but the world and its magic are quite original.

You want tech with materials.

Look up heterojunctions, strained silicon, strained GAs (gallium arsenide), and quantum dots.  Also angled (rotated) graphene layers.

Oh, heck, look up resublimated thiotimoline.  Maybe you can use it .

I'd like to blame Würd, since MicroSlough does deserve most of the blame (eg. Magick Quotation Marks).  But changes in The (One and Many) Right Way to store and display characters have turned various real problems into mud to be tracked everywhere.

Start, if you are of stout heart, with https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Univers … racter_Set .  Chase the links, especially the ones into UniCode, and venture upon the Basic Multilingual  Plane.

I'll try to get to a few reviews tonight.  I'm still looking at Kirsey's backstory, considering how to change B1 and B2, and not getting very far with the overall story arc.  I don't like the start I have on K's life story, and have a direction I like more,  but there are details that have to mesh, and fit with tbe timeframe.  Nor do I have a title.  But the big thing is to get Kirsey's parents together, with their circumstances and baggage, and do it in about 6,000 interesting words.  "Nitwit, blubber, oddment, tweak" just won't do.

And of course, projects and projects.

Passives have other uses, and one just bubbled up in my head:  'They were beset with problems' can set the topic, an introduction before presenting the bill of particulars.  You could force it into the grammatical active: 'They had many problems', but the 'They' are passive victims either way, and the sentence has less force, perhaps due to the less vivid verb, perhaps due to the mismatch between grammar and meaning.