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Still working, slowly, on scene outlines for part two.  But some big-issue answers for part 3 came to me as I was sleeping off a bug of some sort, and I've got parts of a top-level outline for part 3.  I don't know yet just how much is going in part 4, and whether there will be a part five, or it will all go into part four.

Scarlet herring

"I'll waggle you  proper."

"Don't praggle me, boy; I' ll quang you proper."

Temple Wang wrote:

ass wipe

Donkey Wash

Gremlins in a black hole

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I made two, before the Winpocalypse.

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Oh, I owe reviews.  My computer is getting the Dreaded Windoze Upgrade.  I'm not sure how long it will take me to get everything else working again.  ((insert three lines of imaginative imprecation and blistering, intemperate invective, garnish liberally with fuming anhydrous frustration))

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Still working on the backstory.  I've got a rough but workable outline for part 2, and a rougher one for part 1.  Part 1: Kirsey's young childhood and his heritage.  Part 2: Kirsey taken away to be trained at the Academy.  Part 3: the problems of a young man too good for some Masters and too young (and inventive) for others.  Part 4: Finding a place in the Academy, and losing it.

Part 2 looks like it might run 3,000 words, and Part 1 a bit shorter.  Parts 3 and 4 will probably be similar, so we're talking about a novelette.  But my numbers may be off.

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You can subscribe month-by-month if you like.

I took a look at your chapter and have some thoughts.  I'll try to do a review today or tomorrow, maybe one of each kind, for different issues.  I'm not hurting for points but if I were I'd look for stories that would earn them on reviews.

Is that F or C?  -27 C is 'only' -22 F.

What demon?  Does a demon come into existence at conception, or does a demon already in existence take up residence?  In Larry Corriea's Monster Hunter universe, demons take over when someone succeeds in animating dead human flesh.  Risk of a spoiler:

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While I wrangle with the bigger questions, I'm working on a backstory bio for Kirsey.  Part one isn't too hard.  Part two will be a bit harder.  Part three might be a substantial challenge

Estimate 20,000 to 40,000 words.

If it works out I may do more of them.  Shogran will be a challenge.

The sentence doesn't reinforce the PoV, but it doesn't contradict it.
As to holding info back: mystery writers do it all the time.

ray ashton wrote:
njc wrote:

Mahler, Symphony of a Thousand.  The von Neuman recording, if you can find it.

Yes, good stuff, although I prefer the first movement of his unfinished 10th. It's all too complex to write by, though.

Dvorak's Symphony from the New World, almost any Sibelius Symphony, either Book of The Well-Tempered Clavier, or a good organ recording of The Art of the Fugue.
The symphonic presentation of the LotR score.

Mahler, Symphony of a Thousand.  The von Neuman recording, if you can find it.

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I may have to pick up one of those epics that everybody wants to have read and nobody wants to read, and see how the author does it.  Suggestions?

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How do you show the passage of time--days, months, even years--between scenes and chapters?  I've got a very few tools, but I know they aren't enough.

I don't recall this question being handled in any books or blogs I've read, so suggestions on them would be most welcome.  Suggestions on books that do this very well are also welcome, but that's probably 20 percent or more of what's in print, and I haven't picked up enough from reading.  What can I say, I'm dense.

You could keep them together, or you could look for memorable breaking points, cliffhangers being the extreme case.

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Little there is, that is not better with Bach: https://youtu.be/LJts7bpW2VE .  Merry Christmas all!

Maybe sometimes they smoulder?  If you substitute, do it with effect, or do it during description.  In action or dialogue, keep to the regular, non-distracting form.

But what kind of pause?  Shouldn't it be the necessary pause that occurs when a nested structure is complete and the speaker naturally pauses as he restarts above, and that signals the listener that this is happening?

She'll need better advice than that.  The one Jane Austen story I tried bored me almost to catatonia before the second chapter.  It might have been the inspiration for the definition of a classic as a book everybody wants to have read, but nobody wants to read?

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Rachel Parsons wrote:

The antagonist and the protagonist could be good guys, both working for the good, but at odds in how to achieve it. The antagonist might think the protagonist is the villain, only to find out (usually, almost too late) that he or she isn't.

What you've just described is a major part of the Girl Genius  story.

My need is for a early 'side trip' obstacle for my protagonist(s), a sort of pons asinorem.  I think I've got it now, by reworking and cutting what I've got now, and filling the matter in while a clock ticks somewhere else.

At this point, I need to rework my volume and a half of The Sorcerer's Progress, but you're welcome to earn points and I will read what you wrote, and maybe reply.