Oh, for those who argue for more dialogue and less summary, I point you to Poe's Hop-Frog. See how much of the dialogue is summarized, and to what effect.
3,051 2015-05-25 00:57:53
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
3,052 2015-05-25 00:34:23
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Actually, the things I'm mourning are large-format, well-illustrated glossy books, the sort of things that e-readers cannot represent. Five of them, laying flat, took nearly two feet of shelf space, but still ... .
I've got lots of other cleaning. I've also got books that I may have to chuck, including about twelve shelf-feet of Star Trek novel. There are twenty or so I might like to keep; the rest have little commercial value and I probably can't find anyone to take them.
I'm willing to get my possibly-complete set of Ngaio Marsh go, keeping only three duplicates so I can study her technique. Likewise mysteries by a number of lesser authors. Marsh's are good technically but I don't really enjoy them.
One book I thought I'd have to give away got me a dollar from a mid-range but selective store (a boutique store, if you like). It was an odd-format (maybe ten by maybe 4+1/2) hardcover with a title something like "(Images of) Asia", four or five hundred pages of well-executed pen-and-ink drawings of art and architecture from central, east, and south (east-west-central) Asia, with text. Not quite scholarly, not eye-catching and pretty, but maybe of interest to architects and scholars.
I have that near-mint turntable, but I'm not going to find a buyer who'll pay what it's really worth. (The cartridge has less than five hours of playing on it, and a replacement for that cartridge starts at $300.) BUT it's a moving-magnet cartridge, so I need a head amp ... anyway, I've got the original type transistors and they work a little better than the ones I have. The thing is quite sensitive to the battery voltage, not in the main circuit but in the bias network, and I want to put pilot LEDs in series with the circuit. This may mean a tiny bit more noise, but it means that the ratio of fresh-battery voltage to worn-battery voltage will be greater. (I have some nice red LED's that light adequately on 140 microamps--These, I think.) This means that I'll need to stabilize the bias voltages, requiring another transistor and two resistors, and splitting the outer bias resistors (1MOhm in the original design.) And, in the hope of reducing any shot noise I introduce, another 47 trillionths of a Farad of capacitance in just the right place.
I've got a layout that is, like all the others, too damn tight. I'll try it when I get home.
I suppose the right test for the noise introduced is The Dark Side of the Moon: "I've been mad for ++++ing years, absolutlely ... .", which is audible in vinyl with a good-enough turntable.
Now to reviewing. Amy's story first.
3,053 2015-05-23 15:19:34
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
My housing crisis is turning into a chronic clean-up, which means things will be a mess for a long time. I've gotten a few dollars for about forty pounds of books, and I'll always second-guess myself on what I let go. I probably need to clear out another four to ten shelf-feet of papaerbacks (besides those I'm shopping around now), but I may not be able to find buyers for them.
Okay, so now I'm trying to get back to business. In the next two or three days I want to start to catch up on reviewing, and to start writing again. It may take me some time to pick up where I left off.
Meanwhile, I'm having my electronic design skills challenged. See users.ece.gatech.edu/mleach/headamp , first design (dual-ended common-base amp, no current mirrors). A very nice design, but a long start-up (settling) time because of the extraordinarily low-frequency limit on its input side. The output side's low-frequency limit appears to be a decade higher (but still below the stock 20 Hz). And the floating battery means that powering two of them off a common supply requires some trickery. (The article tells of a manufacturer who did it with an incandescent lamp and photovoltaic cells--the sort of exotic excess that Truly Impresses audiophiles.)
3,054 2015-05-21 02:46:34
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
1300 words left and I just got Katerina to the vault. Oi!
Waiting for it.
3,055 2015-05-20 06:31:27
Re: Northern Skies - Janet! (520 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Adrenaline tends to overcome both pain and injury, with a high price to be paid later. But if Catherine is worried and doubting the injury will overcome her sooner.
Can she be lashed to her horse?
3,056 2015-05-19 07:26:23
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Six is okay. You can tile a plane with hexagons. But not any more-sided convex polygon, so we're at the limit.
3,057 2015-05-18 02:16:44
Re: Northern Skies - Janet! (520 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Just stay a safe distance from K ...
3,058 2015-05-17 23:21:25
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
As Morticia Addams said of the furniture in the family mansion, most of it's not even electrified.
3,059 2015-05-17 23:19:23
Re: Northern Skies - Janet! (520 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
10 kV, but how much current or charge is behind it? Your typical static-electric spark can break the 10 kV limit, but with little harm unless you have an explosive atmosphere.
3,060 2015-05-15 16:54:51
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I'll fit it in in the next 30 hours.
3,061 2015-05-14 14:28:13
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Does that mean that Alina's death has ramifications beyond just opening the Crypt?
Too dumb or too self-centered?
3,062 2015-05-14 01:06:49
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
No. A wand recognizes its master, but 'brother' wands only react if you try to use them against each other. And it's not the wand but the magical core: unicorn hair-tail, dragon heartstring, pheonix feather, etc.
3,063 2015-05-13 03:41:02
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
It's a volcano with swirly smoke on top

3,064 2015-05-13 00:03:43
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
amy s wrote:I needed that smile. Thanks:-)
Even I got that one!
X is the first of two X's in Foxx
Who was right behind Ruth with his powerful Soxx
------Ogden Nash, Lineup for Yesteryear
3,065 2015-05-12 08:36:58
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Yes, I think I remember you said you're a super socks sorter. I'm sure you mentioned it at some point.
Time came, after Luis Aparicio was established in the AL, he was involved in a trade between Chicago and Boston. The next day's headlines? "After 12 Years, Aparicio changes Sox"
3,066 2015-05-11 15:12:25
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Or maybe from 'how do I see the socks in the pile?' to 'how do I make the pile so the reader finds these sock pairs?'
3,067 2015-05-11 14:32:24
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Amy, you have created a situation of great depth and complexity. The payoff, if you can get everything just right, is huge. But if you're having trouble, you should dial back carefully on what you are imputing to the characters and circumstances. I suspect that you'll want to do that in one or two places, leaving those parts of the story untold. But most of it I am expecting you'll tweak and fill in.
This is actually a question of detail and gestalt. You need to go from the socks back to the pile.
3,068 2015-05-10 21:13:34
Re: The comma is your friend not mine. (12 replies, posted in Fantasy World Builders)
When the semicolon is well used it should not be noticed.
3,069 2015-05-10 21:12:12
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I need to crash for an hour or two and then do a couple hours of noisy cleaning. I'll look after that.
3,070 2015-05-10 02:40:41
Re: The comma is your friend not mine. (12 replies, posted in Fantasy World Builders)
Actually, if it weren't for A. Manuttsio, we would all write like Gertude Stein. He saved us all from a truly wlatsome fate, for not only would we have to write like the decomma'd wonder-woman, we would have to read the results if we wanted to read at all.
And if we didn't want to read, think of the stories that would never have been written, from The Moonstone and Wuthering Heights to A Christmas Carol and LotR. We would never have met Prof. A.S.F.X van Duzen or Alan Quartermain. Don Quixote would be a mere poet's nightmare, and Dr. Zhivago would never have seen the light of day (and what of Maurice Jarre?). No Albus Dumbledore, no Gideon Fell or Henry Merrivale, no Foundation or Hezekiah Bailey, no Valentine Michael Smith or Lazerus Long, no Miss Marple or Peter Wimsey. No Montegue Egg of Plummet and Rose, no Cowardly Lion or Mr. Tock.
3,071 2015-05-09 09:32:23
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
A modest rewrite, with some shading I want for later.
Don't get too excited. I'm trying to figure out what to do next in the apartment, and I've got to get on with my life.
3,072 2015-05-09 00:14:21
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I took time to do a very little of my work, revising Chapter 54 of Book 1. There's a new version out there with some different shadings. I'd be grateful for any thoughts you have on it.
3,073 2015-05-08 15:30:16
Re: The comma is your friend not mine. (12 replies, posted in Fantasy World Builders)
'Additional information' is exactly what is meant by a non-restrictive clause. A restrictive clause specifies further which individuals/instances/occurences are meant; a non-restrictive clause (or other modifier) does not limit the instances, but only provides additional information.
3,074 2015-05-07 21:56:22
Re: Print added to content pages (13 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
The formatting is nice and the font is good to read. There are tweaks I could wish for, but I'll wait until someone else asks for them.
3,075 2015-05-07 07:12:23
Re: The comma is your friend not mine. (12 replies, posted in Fantasy World Builders)
I tripped over a 1997 copy of the AP stylebook. They use 'essential' to mean 'restrictive' and 'non-essential' to mean 'non-restrictive'.
I would say the relative clause 'who is ...' is non-restrictive, precisely because 'favorite uncle' refers to one individual and further restriction is not possible. This non-restrictive clause is parenthetical in effect (try it with Real Parentheses) and so should be set off by commas.