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Indeed. Think about the word "Imperial"... it's the name of your league (technically).

The British imperial ship. (It's primarily British (league-assignment), but among the British ships, it's a member of a group known as imperial)

The imperial ship (It's of unknown league-assignment but whatever league that is, it's a member of the imperial group)

The American ship (It's of the American (league). It is not of the imperial group)

The Imperial ship (It's of the Imperium (league). It may or may not also be imperial - or all ships in that league might be considered also members of the imperial group)

I didn't intend to extend this to "regent" or "prince" etc of which there may be many entities... so let me apply it now:

If there was a country called "Regent" I would expect to see:
"The Regent ship"
and not
"The regent ship"

For the Imperial part, you might solve it by changing the name of the league. I mean... if Apollo builds a royal ship, he'd have to name it "the Imperial imperial ship" which is a little awkward

once they trapped the Borg with an infinite loop puzzle, I was done with them being cool

as in "banzai"?

a) If your editor doesn't find any major flaws you either have a best-seller or a bad editor

b) a dollar a double-spaced page is about the min you should pay, I've paid $3 per page for line edits plus comments. Generally the more the better work, provided it's a reputable firm.

I put R*cket G*rl Book I through the normal channels. Editor made an interesting observation that MC cries too much. This was a massive comment because my characters don't cry except in extenuating circumstances. This forced me to consider removing the circumstances (or softening them). I haven't made a final descision yet... the changes required significantly alter the story in unintended directions. I haven't decided yet -- still have 40 days to choose. Currently likely to press forward. Only *likely*.

Hey! Spoilers!

Indeed... however can you change the title of chapter 54 to a non-spoiler?

Anything you can do to bunt the news article out of the important 3rd chapter slot would help (I don't purport to speak for publishers)

I mostly got links to covercritics.com.

He has the advantage that his main character's name overlaps another semi-famous name (I didn't have that - too many made-up names) and he's using a pseudonym as his author name here. Two great combinations for evading the mighty google.

Not sure I follow. He doesn't seem to hate the Whovillians - only their devotion to Christmas. Or am I misreading the original intent?

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HW3Q1FR6Dwc

went back and re-read the chapter. I have no complaints with her waiting... but yes I agree it is tactically unsound.

Understand that 4 fully trained men who've seen combat will very likely overwhelm one person with a gun. There are people today (eg Krav Maga martial artists) who can who can disarm you bare-handed from across a room. Imagine squaring off with four of them. Queen would have no chance. And we haven't considered one of them might be good at eyeshots with a thrown knife. Or have a razor-drone to bounce around the room at the speed of sound (killing everyone including the suicide attackers. Or have a poisonous gas sac implanted in his rectum. Or use ultrasonics to knock everyone out. Or even something as simple as a burning smoke grenade using a frozen cube of hydrochloric acid ancasing a ball of phosphorous.

Basically, "There's no way she could have taken them all down with a blaster before they charged" is the point I should debate. It should probably be "There's no way she could have taken them down once two had fully entered the room". She's unwise to allow them to enter. Given the multitude of ways the killers have at their disposal and that she can't be certain if htey plan to use them, she does indeed risk her son's life in order to enter into discussion with them.

No issue with the current structure IMO. But I can see the other side of the equation the reviewers are trying to convey.

You'll laugh at my suggested fix, but after that, perhaps give it a thought. Jospeh is of military training in this draft... how's about they take him and his mother alone* as they flee down a hall. Joseph turns around and lets them have it, disarming two (the hallway can serve to string out the attackers so they can't all fire) by breaking joints jiu jitsu style. The last two overwhelm him and your scene progresses as normal, only everyone his holding live weaspons and it boils down to two on two.

Basically, I'm suggesting remove the part where the villains are unarmed and let your MCs carry their weight (sink or swim).

*I would have them separate the king and the queen the moment an attack is ascertained with the goal of reducing characters in the scene