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I believe you're targeting the wrong word. My eyes settle on "enhanced" as the problem

effecively what you're attempting to convey is that "an unnatural amount of adrenaline" was in their bodies as opposed to that adrenaline being enhanced.

Yeh... Chambers is impossible for me to render for you. Chi-ye-m (n) - ba ru zu? Nope. You need to find reviewers with Asian names instead.

Sure...

Joseph is sitting around in the neutral zone one day when he sees three ships pass by. All three are from Earth... one is Apollo's personal vacation yacht, one if the battle cruiser defending it, and the third belongs to a civilian scrap metals collector. Note that the yacht and the battle cruiser are imperial (eg belonging to a different group than the junk collectors. Note: all 3 ships come from the same place (The Imperium which makes them Imperial).

Quiz: When Joseph looks up and sees the battle cruiser, the yacht, and the garbage ship, what can he exclaim?

a) I see three Imperial ships

b) I see two imperial ships and one Imperial ship

c) I see three imperial ships

I would suggest that (c) is incorrect. The garbage ship is not imperial - it's a civilian craft. It is however from a place whose adjectival form is Imperial. As a place-name, it should get the capitals. The other two ships are both Imperial (from the place) and imperial (belonging to the empire - eg military property).

It follows that all ships originating from Earth Are Imperial, but only a few are imperial.

Hope this helps!

Governor not unique enough to get caps

The first use is a title -> caps -> no problem

The 2nd use...
Apollo is the 45th Imperial heir?
Apollo is the 45th imperial heir?

I would argue that Imperial is unique just as President is unique. The story must convince me that htere are other heirs who also take the imperial descriptor. I'd suggest "Imperial" is more of a league name than a description of royalty. If the latter, imperial makes sense.

Don't trust your reviewers. Due to the nature of the site, reviewers are on your side and will forgive you a lot of greivances.

This includes me. Don't trust even my reviews. A lot of things that would make me put a book down irl I am willing to tolerate here because its a workshop site. I feel like I can overlook giant flaws because I know the writer isn't done yet. Is this a sports novel and the MC rookie quarterback completes every pass? I'll probably mention it in chapter 10 and forget about it. I trust the writer to figure things out. Said writer might think "Oh... only one reviewer commented and not very much. It's ok for a rookie QB to never fail". But the truth is, I (the reviewer) trusted you (the writer) which means you shouldn't trust me.

At the very minimum, paying for a substantive edit is worth the money (usually $1 per page). The harsher the better. Your readers will not spare your feelings when it comes out, so you might as well get that part over with.

touché.

However #3 died in in book 3 chapter 12 and Book 6 chapter 1. Not my fault she keeps getting better

I find the advice in that column is a little weird.

She says to her friend "Don't write a Twilight knock off because that's writing to trend and by the time you could get published, the trend will be gone"

She forgets 50 Shades of Grey is a Twilight knock-off produced years after Twilight was trendy. She forgets that Star Wars is a Flash Gordon remake.

I don't see 50 Shades or Star Wars struggling for fans or money.

I agree with her idea that "John" was struggling with the story and should move back to his comfort zone - at least until he completes his first manuscript.

You're treating your story like a jigsaw puzzle rather than a story

too current. Breaks the verisimilitude

Rather, I question the assertion "...the Grinch actually does something kind..." which implies he normally does not.

Nothing I can see in the original text suggests the Grinch hates anything else or has any reason to be unkind to Cindy Lou. For all we know, he's quite a friendly guy around Easter and maybe coaches softball on the weekend.

*I acknowledge that in the animated version, he mistreats his dog but the original text makes no mention of a whip. Let us say (in order to treat the OP) that the Grinch did whip his dog in the original text. We still have insufficient evidence to determine he is incapable of kindness to the extent that any kindness should surprise us. (And by kindness, I mean not maximizing each opportunity to be mean).