Hi Norm...

I don't believe your stated goal is possible within this context. I'm going to label a state evil if it practices capital punishment (I consider the OT's practice of stoning evil btw*). Mind you, I'm liberal-leaning. It's not relevant to me that there are dissenting views. The fact that 1 in 10 disagree with the evil doesn't make it good.

You're not going to be able to satisfy right-leaning and left-leaning readers on the nature of evil, so why not just let them make the judgement and go acheive other goals? I suppose my question is why is the asignment of evil important? Did a reviewer ask an unresolvable question?

Let us assert that the pharisees were perfect in mosaic law. If we shall equally assert that the mosaic law was used to condemn a perfectly innocent man to death, we can say that the OT law would condemn everyone else. Eg if OT laws were to apply, no one would be saved post JC.

I can't believe there are authors who can crank out entire books in a few months.

Hmm... once you're a few books in, you'll get your world established and you'll just churn them out.

Most of what you're experiencing now is uncertainty about the rules of the world. If X has Y property, will it work within the context? Does this concept work? Does this style and character voice work? Once the rules are fixed, and everything is all but immutable, you'll be able to just sit down and write.

The Quickening
(Highlander)

Dance with destruction

Magic foundation watch

Earthwound Saga
Founders series
Cataclysm reborn

I vote for anything that doesn't contain the word "of" in position 2

Well yeah but with the caveat that it needs more work. Only so much I could do on the bus

I wasn't thinking mystery... more...

http://kwan.skyfire.ca/images/tnbw/DictatesS.jpg

I suppose if you're going traditional, the cover is irrelevant as they'll have a department to handle that

That Dictates cover makes me think of the Tomb of Jesus and Easter and things like that... can you fantasy it up or reconsider the title?

bzzt!

half-tempted to expand my outline and make bare-bones chapters from it

Do it!

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(That's the sound of a cattle prod)

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njc wrote:

K, I'm working on that section.

Bzzt!

Norm d'Plume wrote:

I didn't much care for K I m b e r l y until you killed her and everyone around her in a blast. The book felt too short to get to know her and your story world, so the ending was too abrupt and final. Kind of like the opposite of deux ex machina. Hence my delight when she showed up at J e n n a's hanging chopping heads. I thought you had resurrected her. Sometimes you just need the hero to kick ass and win.

First draft is about 60K words... novella length. I'm generally 75% more wordy on a 2nd draft, so I expect to hit about 90K. I don't like to pass the mid 80's, so at 90, I'll be looking to kill even more characters off.

I agree sometimes the hero needs to win. My original story line called for [K i m] to lose in Book 4, Lorraine to Lose in Book 6, and Books 8 and 10 to be losses as well -- such that even-numbered volumes would be downers followed by comeback volumes. Not all has gone according to plan with characters often refusing to die et al, but I'm working on it.

But Is Anver's distaste for his responsibilities an obstacle or a flaw?  I think it's a flaw.  Or maybe a quirk that helps us empathize with him.

A quirk that helps empathize, agree 100%.

A flaw? I dunno.

People are calling Trump unfit to lead because he doesn't want to brief as much as past presidents. Is his distaste for debriefing a flaw? Or does he want to focus his time/energy elsewhere and trusts the people around him more than past presidents? If he uses the extra time to golf, yes, it's a flaw because he has a job to do and isn't doing it.

So the question becomes is Anver shirking his duties or trying to steer his priorities?

This is why I think letting Anver know about how Alina killed his friend before he commits to the duel is a mistake.  It's too much outer reason and not enough Anver


... Egads! I'm in agreement with njc. Note if Amy will agree the universe could cease to exist

mmm I don't classify those as flaws...

Not wanting a job (but getting stuck with it) = obstacle
Not wanting power but getting stuck with it = obstacle
Staff that won't listen to him = minion
Vulnerability = weakness

eg Superman's weakness to Kryptonite I wouldn't call a flaw. More, his steadfast assumption that all men contain good.

If Jaylene is decaying as per Norm's suggestion, I wouldn't call that a flaw. Rather a flaw would be her ignoring the decay.... or her willingness to gamble her friends lives because she's going to die anyway and just doesn't care.

I make this distinction because adding weaknesses / vulnerabilities doesn't make a character more or less flat by itself. (Flat - assuming the editor called Jaylene flat) - it just makes certain scenes easier to write. eg Putting Anver in a wheelchair is insufficient to increase his interest level.

wo Q's to start: what are Anver's flaws?

Approaching it from this angle, I can't see Anver as having any flaws. I do re-submit: does he need flaws? Yes, Batman is deeply flawed, but if he wasn't, could DC still sell movie tickets? I would say yes - Batman is interesting because of his approach to problem-solving more than his flaws.

what are Anver's flaws?
Anver had no standout flaws that I recall

Meh. Anver doesn't need flaws to keep himself interesting because he's surrounded on all sides by enemies & strife. Basic Rocky / K1mberly formula - Keep the MC's back to the wall. Make sure he's fighting desperately against overwhelming odds with zero chance of success and knows at best he might pick up his own broken pieces from the field. He wins by thinking outside the box - or by daring what little he has left... or by sheer determination. This kind of hero need no extra rendering.

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