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Don't underestimate the corrective abilities of a laser pointer.
Anyway, Luke's adoptive parents managed to die somehow, so I imagine even ep4-6 had Stormtrooper who could hit the broad side of a barn

Actually I found not seeing it the most troublesome. Also, I suspect Star Wars didn't show it because of technical limitations. I would hand Lucas the same criticism:
Show me who I'm supposed to care about.

Hmm *thinks about Dune.*
Giant worms with teeth sharp enough to re-purpose into a razor without being honed.
Giant worms eating people (Oh my!)
Gom jabbar (poisons injected into children to test them for psychic ability and a box that makes you think your hand's burnt off)
Shigawire (Handcuffs that snip limbs off)
I think I've covered chapters 1-10. Don't even get me started about the latter books

I suggest minimizing these. To understand, go rewatch Red Wedding, and picture all the places violence could have been implied rather than shown.
Try to grasp the visceral reaction you have to the episode. Note the pacing of the deaths, how they form a swing or a tide.

This sanitizing and bleaching... I don't think I'm getting what you're trying to convey.

I suppose I equally have trouble understanding why they would (bother to) edit the guns out of ET

Marsha-1 dies at the hand of her own invention. I suppose I could have sanitized it by having them simply find her dead the next morning.
Is anything gained by showing it?
Yes, absolutely - in that case, it was the villain's chance to show it means business.

The toppling elevator in RocketBaby might get sanitized... but only because I want the camera pointed more at my mains. In this case the reduction would serve a purpose.
I wouldn't remove Einhart's gun-happy musical band: No self-respecting villain shows up to a fight outnumbered by protags

I guess my question is... are you trying to get into PG to widen the potential market?

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They're suggesting a "Let the story flow" approach where the stor never stops for (seemingly unrelated) other stories. It's a newer approach... a now-approach... an immediate approach. The classic approach is one where the writer may freely dabble in outside factors. Frankenstein, Princess Bride, Fraggle Rock... they all use classic techniques of overlay stories.

What I'm saying by calling the technique classic is pick the technique that works for your story and try to be consistent. Evidently, that requires a giant epigraph. If that means a 15-minute deadzone where the story halts and the narrator winks at the reader... if that means a dancing Bombadill that everyone complains about... you might have to just let that be and let the market catch up with you later.

Why not go ahead and number the chapters backwards?

too distracting

That doesn't work for me, any more than "The thought of President Trump spat"

Thoughts and presences can't spit. It's an affront to spitting.

Anyway,  usually pass on chapter 2's but I'll make an exception

I like njc's approach....

Note the lines in original don't pull my eyes in a consistent direction...

(lines drawn across the eyes of the background shapes)

njc's is a bit more organized, albeit centered on the lower back instead of the upper back

(the curvature he puts in the ground works well againstthe staff)

if you go with njc's approach, might I suggest you rearrange the title text to improve the line work?

I like the color scheme but I think it's missing a"book" element

Written by Sir James Knowles. It's pretty good when he's got a recognizable character on the scene (eg Sir Lancelot)... but that round table has to be seating 40-50 knights and he's not scared to name them all during a 10-page window which makes his scenes more like a revolving door.

I'm in the opening throws on Colourless. I'm also still slogging through the Arthurian Tales but it's been several months on that and I must concede I'm lost and might not finish

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