That's a longer topic... I'll try to offer something on it later tonight
776 2018-02-12 17:00:49
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
777 2018-02-12 12:12:20
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I think you finally have one I can't pick apart. I mentally toyed with dropping the word unholy, but "Trinity Unleashed" is a book I'd expect to see on a bishop's desk. Thus, I believe you have it best in its current form.
The Spartan example doesn't quite match. Imagine that "The Battle of Thermopylae" was actually "The last battle of Leonitas". Not a big deal - I'd still watch a movie with a title like that. But I'd watch it with certain expectations that might rob the ending of some of its impact.
I concede lots of titles predict their endings (Death of a Salesman? Knight Fall? Empire Strikes Back?). Even Last Unicorn helps guide me to the ending where we find out she's anything but the last.
778 2018-02-11 17:24:13
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I recommend migrating away from a title containing "Satan". You might best use a temp title. I have stories I haven't chosen a title for in like 3 decades (403's title for example, for the past 4 years was "Lizzie" and before that it was 10y as "Ultimate Soldier" until I realized she was anything but.).
There is no shame in waiting until after you've written the novel to give it a title. Even then, the publisher may scrap your title, so don't marry it.
779 2018-02-11 08:28:31
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
This title is better than the previous, but suggests the ending. How's about "Satan's Last"?
780 2018-02-09 23:58:27
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
A trunk of cash fits in well with his character. You have this guy with a large amount of worthless valuables. And he's trying to extend it in ways that only work in a cash-based society. Clearly, someone with that kind of thinking pattern will always carry a trunk full of money.
Ginger not so easy. Why bring so much clothing on a 3-hr trip? Maybe the trip was part of a longer stay-over and she had nowhere else to store her luggage? I don't recall Maryanne dressing with much variety, but I haven't seen it since it was on the air, and back then they were probably still making Scooby Doo's, so what would I know.
Now, how exactly you get batteries to recharge using little more than coconut water and aloe leaves, that seems more absurd than a trunk of money. Or magic.
781 2018-02-09 23:04:42
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Come and knock on our door. We've been waiting for you.
Where the kisses are hers and hers and his,
**** 3's company toooooo! ****
Thank me later
782 2018-02-09 10:20:49
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Requiem was better - this one sounds like the title of a gospel book from the eyes of a Harlem school teacher
783 2018-02-08 03:34:04
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The word "trinity" sounds too pretty. No matter what you stick to it, it still sounds nice.
Dark Trinity? Must be about a witches coven
Hell's Trinity? I think I saw that on a porno
instead, how's about...
"For Whom the Scripture tolls"
784 2018-02-08 00:20:22
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I put eye, because I bet blood is taken
785 2018-02-07 23:56:47
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Eye of the Antichrist
Caligo Deus
Caster of Souls / Soul Caster
Rapiemur
786 2018-02-07 12:08:39
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I'm far from an expert in Catholicism, but I do believe they teach in rapture like we do (we all have different names for it) which implies "...Christ in the flesh..." is technically implausible.
Question: How have believers reacted to the ideas for the new series so far?
Question: What is the planned release order between this and [G a l a x y T a l e s]?
787 2018-02-06 00:27:51
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
How's the protagonist/s shaping up?
788 2018-02-03 01:12:50
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
'twas battery-drive... 9V if I recall correctly (Because D-Cells would slip off my rigging and the 9V was squarer)... may have been one of those giant 6V. I had built a lab supply but I recall I wasn't using it for some reason - probably because the cheap potentiometer would adjust/spike wildly from just a little hand motion.
Couldn't tell you the year or the generation of transistor to save the life of me. I did own vacuum tubes but not the slightest idea how to wire them up.
The noise was a hiss. I remember you had to crank the volume in source just to hear music over the hiss. I did start soldering in there figuring there was play in the contacts of the breadboard. Then I remember switching to that other board (sorry, I don't know the name but it's really thin and the holes go all the way through and there's copper ringlets around them so you can just join things up with a dollop of solder. It was on this second board I was able to get anything more than static.
789 2018-02-02 23:44:29
Topic: UK to allow 3-person babies (1 replies, posted in Science Fiction, Steampunk, and Space Opera)
790 2018-02-02 23:37:32
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
When I was in HS I set out to build a transistor stereo amplifier for the final project in Shop class. I found some circuit patterns from who knows where, got the pats (We used to have RadioShack in this country back then) and set to work. 3 weeks and much frustration later I had built what I think is the world's first "noise-adding stereo deamplifierr". Teacher gave me an A which sorta tells you the extent of the bell curve and the calibre of the competing projects
791 2018-02-02 23:03:17
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I once lost a parsnip on a bus. I've wondered all these years what the finder of said tuber thought. Like Holy Cow, it's a parsnip! Or was it more like wtf is that??
Nope you're on rule #11 and about to finish that so you can get back to writing
792 2018-01-26 20:49:32
Topic: Exterminate (6 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
That chapter I spent the last 12 weeks working on? I've just deleted it. Better idea now. That old sh*t is dead, never coming back.
Do any of you do that?
793 2018-01-26 01:50:33
Topic: Falcon 9 Heavy (1 replies, posted in Science Fiction, Steampunk, and Space Opera)
https://www.express.co.uk/news/science/ … ars-SpaceX
He's sending his car to Mars. Can you get more epic?
794 2018-01-24 08:42:51
Re: The Colorless Dragon Thread (354 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
You don't need to restrict yourself to making humans genderless if you don't want and/or it makes the story more difficult to write. I mean we can tell animal genders - the presence of mammary glands being the at-a-glance giveaway. Even without that, many species give away their genders readily (chickens, peacocks, swordtails, tarantulas etc).
795 2018-01-23 03:14:22
Re: etc (68 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
That's literally and figuratively the name. "The Shred Group". A place where reviews can be meaner than anything I've ever come up with
796 2018-01-22 19:11:04
Re: etc (68 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The new shred group... Whose function is clearly to punish one particular member would appear to be quite debilitating. No one to see your posts... Can't see others... It'd be hard to survive long in there. Hard not to fade away...
797 2018-01-22 10:32:10
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
*Bzzt!*
798 2018-01-18 00:02:29
Re: Best Captain contest (3 replies, posted in Science Fiction, Steampunk, and Space Opera)
That's actually do-able if you can find the images and stat them
799 2018-01-17 19:28:38
Re: Best Captain contest (3 replies, posted in Science Fiction, Steampunk, and Space Opera)
There will be other crews to pick from when I'm done
I'm trying to figure out a point-buy system to allow people to build their own crew (I mean tng had two doctors) so that people can customize their entries.
Unfortunately, Star Trek Enterprise and Discovery didn't make the cut, as I've never seen them and wouldn't be able to judge. If there are volunteer judges, I will add them. I plan to include non-ST series on a "would-like" basis such as a Luke-Leia-Han_Chewie team, And a Sinclair-Delenn-G-Kar-Garibaldi team. Sadly, I was disinterested in Firefly but a team of that is feasible - just don't expect fair judging.
This contest should be ready early to mid spring
800 2018-01-17 19:13:47
Topic: Best Captain contest (3 replies, posted in Science Fiction, Steampunk, and Space Opera)
I thought I'd drop a teaser about this. It will be crew-vs-crew.