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Not so much "elaborate" as give us that slight moment to dread what's about to happen. 10-50 words range. Maybe less for now.

1. Keeps us "live" with the character (instead of the newsreel: "Here's what happened 30 seconds ago"
2. tension (as mentioned above)
3. Pathos

Bonus points if the character has to leave an unstarted breakfast behind

This version is much sharper than the original. Some food for thought (I post it here because I don't want to collect points for only reviewing a paragraph).

Consider:

You've mentally skipped an important scene here. You already visualize the character in the destination room and are hurrying us past the walk to get there.

But that movement is extremely useful because it tells us so much about her.
a. How much does she dread about that meeting?
b. What does her world look like?
c. How does she interact with her environment?
d. Is she guilty of something the meeting will being about?
e. What time of day is it (You have the room shimmer later - is that afternoon sun?)

In the above example, I can use the tension of the approaching meeting to hide the fact that I'm totally info-dumping her age-height-race-clothes-time on the poor reader. In addition, we know this character is in serious trouble and anyone who's been the subject of such a glare is forced into the character's shoes.

Don't use that example - I'm just demonstrating the raw awesome amount of data you skipped.

Take this advice with a grain of salt. In [J e n n a]s story, I got about 3000 words out of her walking from one room to another to see her father (for her execution), and in another story, I got about 7 chapters from a scout taking an overnight jog.

Got one for 403's chapter 1

Cheetahs make a weird snarl sound. If I read "roar of a cheetah", it's exactly this sound I would picture. Same with an elephant... "roar of an elephant" would give me images of an elephant making a loud elephant noise (eg not a lion noise). Third example: Katy Perry saying "hear me roar"... well humans aren't good at that activity but I can still visualize it.

I suppose I'm asking if the quote in OP was presented in a symbolic nature or factual?

http://www.openculture.com/2018/03/beau … names.html

pfft dessert... you've been dating amateurs. I've had my entrée picked clean on me. It's disconcerting

She's reached the mulching point where she can just release anything and it'll do okay sales or even great sales. You can tell a big writer is approaching this point when you start seeing the name in giant point and have to hunt for the title.

Usually that's my cue that they don't need my business anymore. They've made it, and I'm happy for them, but I typically pull them from my roster and add some new faces.

-K

Reminds me of 2001 Space Odyssey. I think book 3 jumps forward to like 10001AD

I don't remember what fora it was mentioned in but Eat the Rich is brilliant and majestic

https://www.worldlifestyle.com/celebs/5 … ans-island

The notes for [J e n n a]'s story were basically 15 rows in a spreadsheet... possibly 200 words. Yet, like Amy, I had dozens of scenes mapped out in my head. One scene (her wedding) never made it in. This makes me sad because because a lot of people find creative ways to get into her cross hairs during the ceremony