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You really made me laugh, Rachel! A woman trapped in a man's body? Hugh? Not in 1000 years! I put my money on the MI6, I bet he's an undercover agent.

Now, a spoonful of caustic soda would be enough to terminate Hugh almost painlessly. By the time he realises what's going on he would be dead. Well ground, it passes for sugar. Sarah doesn't even need to know. Alicia can fill the sugar bowl with ground caustic soda. Hugh will put it in his coffee, will frown because of so much sudden foam, but in the end will drink the coffee and drop dead before opening the car's door. Alicia can throw the rest of the soda in the toilet and it will also have the advantage of cleaning the sewers.

Kiss,

Gacela.

Yes, I meant the Jack-Alicia-Claire love triangle. Sorry for the confusion.

Kiss,

Gacela

Does anybody in TNBW knows any of these companies that send copies to interested readers?

Kiss

Gacela

Dear Suin:

I was thinking of the background info dump you made in Chapter 16 explaining Sarah has been in love with Jack since long ago, however Platonic. It reminded me of a Bruce Lee film anecdote: In a Bruce Lee film, while his character walked down a Chinatown street at night, a gang sent to kill him appeared. Bruce Lee then produced a nunchaku from behind a large street trash can and beat the whole gang. Later, the director decided the scene was far fetched because there was no reason why a nunchaku should be hidden there -- it's not like you can find hidden nunchaki (is this the right plural form?) hidden behind trashcans everywhere in Chinatown.  Bruce Lee simply couldn't always find the right weapon in the right place at the right moment. Not believable, at all.

So, in a previous scene, it is shown that Bruce Lee hid the nunchaku behind the trashcan for a different purpose. When the gang attacked him, the nunchaku previously hidden became handy.

If Sarah still has feelings for Jack, feelings she's still trying to suppress, such feelings must be mentioned in each and every previous chapter, or at least hinted. It's like planting the nunchaku earlier behind the trashcan. In this way, when the reader reaches chapter 16:

1. First, you wouldn't need to dump so much background info, because it would have been already been dumped, albeit little by little, in previous chapters.

2. Sarah's reaction would be obvious and even expected.

The idea there might be something between Sarah and Jack in future chapters is very interesting. If this story is only about Sarah and Hugh, and how much Sarah will suffer because of Hugh until she decided to end up a damaging, dysfunctional relationship, it wouldn't be very different from any other chic-lit story. However, if Jack -- Sarah's sister boyfriend since forever -- is introduced in the romance triangle and Sarah ends with him -- I have this feeling he was not really kissing Alicia but discussing with her something very secret, like being in love with Sarah -- then the story turns into a roller coaster. It would also explain the first scene when Sarah returns home. If she stole Claire's boyfriend, I can understand why Sarah broke with the rest of the family.

Am right? Is that where the story is heading?

Kiss,

Gacela

Congrats to graymartin. A great book, I've already read it. A well deserved price.

Kiss,

Gacela

Sol, you're missing my novel Amber Eyes workshoped here last year:

https://www.amazon.com/Amber-Eyes-Maria … amber+eyes

Thanks for adding it.

Kiss,

Gacela

Just for everybody's knowledge. As per the votes received, CJ Drifwood was accepted in the group. Please join me welcoming her to the group.

Akhere I., who is into YA/NA as Suin and I, and who briefly left the group because he was not a premium member just came back because he is now.

If we really read each other's works, I think we only have room for one extra member. More than that, and it would be impossible for everybody to read each other stories.

Everybody agrees?

Kiss,

Gacela.

Oh, please! "He" been used as the generic pronoun for ages. It's a kinda common place. He/she, (s)he, and other variations are annoying, as well as the "they" thing. Just keep it simple.

Kiss

Oh, my! 100000 apologies. The email is MarianaReuter@live.com.mx. No wonder why I couldn't find it. Duh!

That Rhiannon is a VERY unreliable narrator is evident since chapter 1!

BTW, I haven't yet created my Flickr account, the last three weeks have been hectic. But I promise I will. I'm curios about that famous map.

Kiss,

Gacela.

I have no clue how to upload images to the site. However, there are people who do so. Maybe we can ask some advice in the general forum

Kiss,

Gacela.

I have an interesting question, would a corpse actually disintegrate in outer space? On Earth, bacteria and stuff like that slowly eat a corpse. Any corpse, a human's, an animal's, and even a fallen tree in a forest. It would slowly decay until it turns into soil and eventually feeds the current living organisms. It's "the circle of life". But, in outer space? In absence of bacteria and air, wouldn't a corpse be preserved?

This image of a floating  space suit with a skeleton inside is common in space horror. But, would it really be a skeleton? Wouldn't the corpse be preserved intact inside the spacesuit?

BTW, I agree with Tom. A slow leak would most likely cause the humans to lost conscious because of lack of oxygen. Exactly what happens when you connect a car's muffler with the car's interior (the exhaust fumes invade the cabin, a suicidal technique in John Grisham's The Client) or when people use faulty heating sources in winter. The carbon monoxide would drive people into unconscious and afterwards into death.

I just recalled there's another novel you may want to check:   Michael Flynn's The Wreck of the River of Stars. There's a leak in a spaceship and the air is slowly leaving the ship (by the very end of the story). Interesting symptoms are explained there when oxygen levels are low, like short-memory loss. The characters even forget they are in danger because of the memory loss.

Kiss,

Gacela