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I put Abraham Lincoln's Gettysburg address into Grammarly. Sorry, Abe. You only get a score of 85. Two -ly adverbs and 5 -ing verbs! And comma issues.

Granted there were different versions, but this one was the only one with his signature.

Opening sentence:
Four score and seven years ago our fathers brought forth on this continent, a new nation, conceived in Liberty, and dedicated to the proposition that all men are created equal.

Corrected by Grammarly:
Four hundred and seven years ago, our fathers brought forth on this continent a new nation conceived in Liberty and dedicated to the proposition that all men are created equal.

I prefer the original line. Go Abe!

As a member of that wing of Christendom, let me protest a bit! My group might be more Prosperity Gospel Lite. We are not as far out there as some but y'all might have problems with us. Heck, I have problems with some of our teachings. But you're looking from the outside in and all you see is BAD. You're painting us all in one massive green (as in Mamon) stroke. You might be surprised as to how my church has been very generous and merciful to people who have needed desperate help. I'm thrilled with what we've been doing and are doing. Some of it is almost unbelievable.

I know it's space opera. I know you're trying to slap groups around and exaggerate. But so many people take so many punches at us that it's a little wearisome. How often do you hear the good stuff? Never. So, be careful. Slap everyone around and it'll go down easier. Perhaps say something good about us. You handled Catholicism so well and you still had zombie nuns and corrupt cardinals.

Snot green sounds pretty disgusting.

Sorry to see you leave like this. Hopefully, it will only be temporary. You have been one of the best reviewers for my writing. Get better, I'm praying for you.

Be blessed and get healthy.

George FLC

Wow. Very good. And you have more to write! Keep on writing!!

K and Dirk, good comments. I try to limit names but sometimes it's hard to be super legalistic about it. However, I like the idea of a glossary with names, perhaps Cheyenne words, history, etc. at the front of each chapter. I found out that women in my book's time period married around 22, men married around 26. This was attributed to the Civil War. Lots of younger men got killed. I put that in the glossary. I plan to keep the glossaries.

I like to tell people to keep on writing. In your case, keep on walking. Be blessed.

>> FYI, the geneticist is a former disciple of Joseph Mengele, spirited out of Germany after WW2. One of the things the geneticist does early on is to adjust his own DNA to extend his lifespan since it's yet unknown when the end will come, and the breeding program has to continue until the Antichrist has been successfully created.

Very interesting historical twist. Could you perhaps have the former disciple of Mengele show up as Mengele's son? The Angel of Death's son. Find an appropriate name of course!

The only issue is that some people will state that God limited man's age to 120 years. That is up to interpretation. Apparently, that might have been the time when the flood was to occur 120 years in the future.

I'm a little nervous about breeding in supernatural powers but will comment later.

People have found cities or architectural structures in South Americ. Maybe you could attribute them to the breeding program.

My fav is Julius Ceasar.
Don't use conquering France or Denmark. How insulting! You fellow citizens (Quebecers) might not like it.

I'm having to sign in a lot lately. Is there something you can do? Thanks.