From Reddit:
Q: How bad are '-ing' verbs?
A: They're so bad every published novel by popular authors is filled with them.
But it's a funny response and perhaps appropriate.
As a member of that wing of Christendom, let me protest a bit! My group might be more Prosperity Gospel Lite. We are not as far out there as some but y'all might have problems with us. Heck, I have problems with some of our teachings. But you're looking from the outside in and all you see is BAD. You're painting us all in one massive green (as in Mamon) stroke. You might be surprised as to how my church has been very generous and merciful to people who have needed desperate help. I'm thrilled with what we've been doing and are doing. Some of it is almost unbelievable.
I know it's space opera. I know you're trying to slap groups around and exaggerate. But so many people take so many punches at us that it's a little wearisome. How often do you hear the good stuff? Never. So, be careful. Slap everyone around and it'll go down easier. Perhaps say something good about us. You handled Catholicism so well and you still had zombie nuns and corrupt cardinals.
I just made guacamole! It's great stuff!!!! It's also good for you. Avocados helps reduce the risk of Alzheimer's. Go buy some, njc!
Snot green sounds pretty disgusting.
When they dissolve their skin make sure to give the effect color. A gross green or bright red. Can they reconstruct their skin if they're still standing at the end of the fight?
Sorry to see you leave like this. Hopefully, it will only be temporary. You have been one of the best reviewers for my writing. Get better, I'm praying for you.
Be blessed and get healthy.
George FLC
Actually, the wine was infused with the power of God, so it'll keep forever. No refrigeration required.
The compound is Satan's, not God's. Also, clear-cutting for growing grapes would be more visible from the air.
God's grapes can grow anywhere! No need for clear cutting. I guess...
How about if they've become the grapes of wrath? Just a thought.
Wow. Very good. And you have more to write! Keep on writing!!
Welcome back.
K and Dirk, good comments. I try to limit names but sometimes it's hard to be super legalistic about it. However, I like the idea of a glossary with names, perhaps Cheyenne words, history, etc. at the front of each chapter. I found out that women in my book's time period married around 22, men married around 26. This was attributed to the Civil War. Lots of younger men got killed. I put that in the glossary. I plan to keep the glossaries.
Better than Connor defying the laws of physics with no plausible explanation, the wine from the Garden of Eden will be the source of his boosted power.
Connor beheaded another four demons with one stroke, their bodies flying backward and bowling over another seven others. "What was in that wine?" Connor asked St. Michael, wide-eyed.
Michael grinned. "The power of God!"I think the solution to how to handle the stench of so many dissolving demon corpses is that Megiddo is considered holy ground. They won't dissolve within its boundaries, or they don't stink when dissolving. Probably the former. Whichever way I go, it needs to be consistent from book one on, where some demons died in a church.
I'm trying to catch up. I like the wine idea. But saying wine from Garden of Eden seems too much. It would be vinegar. How about the place in South American has original seeds and hence plants or pure uncontaminated plants from Eden? Basically, non-hybrid plants. And the wine was made from them.
I like to tell people to keep on writing. In your case, keep on walking. Be blessed.
>The only issue is that some people will state that God limited man's age to 120 years. That is up to interpretation.
The oldest person ever whose age has been independently verified is Jeanne Calment (1875–1997) of France, who lived to the age of 122 years and 164 days. It definitely needs reinterpreting.Can't use Mengele's son since he really did have a son, who is still alive. That could get me sued.
Even a bastard son? An unknown bastard son?
>> FYI, the geneticist is a former disciple of Joseph Mengele, spirited out of Germany after WW2. One of the things the geneticist does early on is to adjust his own DNA to extend his lifespan since it's yet unknown when the end will come, and the breeding program has to continue until the Antichrist has been successfully created.
Very interesting historical twist. Could you perhaps have the former disciple of Mengele show up as Mengele's son? The Angel of Death's son. Find an appropriate name of course!
The only issue is that some people will state that God limited man's age to 120 years. That is up to interpretation. Apparently, that might have been the time when the flood was to occur 120 years in the future.
I'm a little nervous about breeding in supernatural powers but will comment later.
What's great about the compound is that it's already there. You don't have to make it and then magically hide it. To me it adds to the mystery and the reality. Hope this makes sense.
I had a neat idea for book three. Since Connor needs a human fighting force at the beginning of the final battle, I thought that Connor, being the result of genetic manipulation based on Satan's millennia-old breeding program, would have had predecessors from the breeding program. Turns out, many of them are still alive, even though Satan had ordered them destroyed once Connor was born. The program was run from a compound in the the jungles of South America, run by a trainer who took pity on the last batch of kids created for the program, so he led them to a local priest, who assumed their care.
People have found cities or architectural structures in South Americ. Maybe you could attribute them to the breeding program.
Okaaaaay. I'll withdraw my complaints... sort of. :-)
But my fav is still the Julius Ceasar comment.
My fav is Julius Ceasar.
Don't use conquering France or Denmark. How insulting! You fellow citizens (Quebecers) might not like it.
Stomping on roaches in a roach motel.
Shooting stuffed elites eating stuffed pizza.
Shooting stuffed elites stuffing stuffed pizza down their stuffed throats. (Hmm. Too much?)
I'm having to sign in a lot lately. Is there something you can do? Thanks.
>>In other words, I doubt many gay men were procreating with straight women in the past. To me, that suggests they would be bisexual men, not gay. Few people, if any, would be thinking about the survival of the human race if they didn't procreate. People had kids for personal reasons: kids worked long hours, whether on a farm or elsewhere, to provide cheap labor to support their families; they were also expected to help support their parents in their old age (still true in many countries); and they were a bit of insurance in case disease killed some of them, which was common.
I admit it. I've always just put gay and bisexual in the same boat. You're saying I'm wrong?!?!?! Hmm. Nothing like learning something new. I've heard of hetero men going to prison and doing homo stuff then getting out and returning to hetero. Can't it work with homo men needing to increase the family using women and then doing homo stuff on the side? I was not expecting this conversation!
They may not have been thinking in terms of the human race but like you said in terms of family, tribe, nation. I'd assume family would override almost anything.
>> Teens are horny because teens used to marry for most of human history. Back-checking on google, in 1610 the age of consent was 12. The act of 1653 moved it up to 14 (Women) 16 (Men)
Excellent point K. You had kids early and often. Otherwise, diseases, war, famine, and etc. would have wiped out the human race. I'm of the opinion that even if you were homosexual way back when that generally you were expected to procreate. Everyone needed you to generate children for shear survival. So, my hypothesis is that all homosexuals were bisexual. They would find out who had similar proclivities and spent time with them on the side while generating children. Or the homosexuals just kept quiet and still had some fun generating children.
Christians generally don't mind stories that drift a little from accepted beliefs if the changes make it a more uplifting pro-Christian story. For example, Jacob Marley (Scrooge's business partner) appeared as a ghost. Even if one said it was his soul that appeared, what would a soul be doing outside of heaven or hell? The Catholic interpretation treats Marley as someone in purgatory who can't get to heaven until he convinces Scrooge to change his ways. I don't think anyone would have a serious problem with his presence in the story, as written.
Same with "It's a Wonderful Life". An angel took the main character (I forget his name) to see an alternate vision of the future in which the character was present to watch but not interfere, much as Scrooge had to. How many Christians will object to the idea of angels with wings and the idea that an angel has to earn his wings? The idea of wings has been around since the 4th century but it's not in the Bible.
Very good points. I liked both stories.
And religions get a lot of things wrong even when they tell themselves their Bible is inerrant. If the Christian Bible is the inspired Word of God, how come Catholics and Protestants can't agree on what books belong in the Bible? They're only inerrant as long as you discount the "false" beliefs of all the other major denominations you disagree with. Lots of things for Connor to work with, and there won't be anyone in the books to challenge his corrupting rhetoric.
In a similar vein, the Catholic Church says teens will go to Hell if they masturbate. Why would God give teens the ability to masturbate, only to turn around and expect kids not to do so?
Sorry for such a slow response. My head is finally above water. I'm not a theologian but I'll try to answer at least some of your comments. Jews, Catholics, and Protestants agree on the OT books. Catholics and Prots agree on the NT books. The apocryphal books are accepted only by Catholics. And they were written between the OT and NT. So, the Christian side of the Bible is agreed upon, 100%.
I'm not a fan of all Catholic teaching. Masturbation is one such instance. But your logic is flawed. Why did God give us sex but then say don't have sex outside of marriage, especially with abortion in the future? He is the creator and hence the definer of usage.
I don't know if any of this is important to you, but I at least wanted to comment on some of it.
Congratulations on your successful surgery. Be blessed and take your time.
