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Connor's new prophesied title in the forged Augustine letter: The Holy Emissary.

Although I also liked the Holy One, the latter is one of a million titles for Christ and would cause too much confusion,
whereas an emissary is "a person sent on a special mission..." Sounds like our boy. :-) Also, his title has a double
meaning. Connor pretends to be the Holy Emissary in book 1, but in book 3, he actually becomes
the Holy Emissary but sent by God the Father to rule over all those worlds filled with grave sinners.

I could potentially call the series "The Coming of the Holy Emissary," "The Holy Emissary Cometh," or "He Cometh."
The latter is obviously intended to draw a comparison between Connor and Christ.

Any preferences? Go ahead, blow these titles out of the water. :-)

The Lord's Shepherd vs The Staff of Christ - FWIW, neither of those will be a book title, nor the series title, and there wouldn't be a lot of references to either; one of the ideas, though, was that Connor would refer to himself as the Lord's Shepherd as his "title" after capturing the Vatican, which would happen late in book 1. Somewhere early in book 2, he starts referring to himself as just the Shepherd, which is one of Christ's titles, without actually referring to himself as Christ.

The Lesser King hasn't been used (the closest is The Last of the Lesser Kings, published in 2012). I'm okay with the title bringing LOTR to mind. It's a totally different genre. I had a bunch of other potential names for the series (e.g., The Advent Trilogy or The Advent Chronicles above), but none I liked as much as The Lesser King since the latter title refers to Connor, not Satan nor a concept, and it creates a bit of intrigue (is Connor the Lesser King and why is he a king at all?).

Connor vs the AC - sounds a little too much like a low-budget action movie (e.g. Tarzan vs. the Hunters)
Another title I like is Stalked by the Antichrist and Hunted by the Antichrist.

Slight change of plans. I made the mistake of asking Gemini to critique the idea of Connor as the "Right Hand of God." It totally blew the idea out of the water. Lots of serious potential objections from Christian readers, who would almost certainly think of Christ as the "Right Hand of God." It seems much happier with "The Lord's Shepherd," and gave a whole bunch of reasons why that should be more palatable to my target audience. Connor could then transition from calling himself "The Lord's Shepherd" at the end of book 1 to just "The Shepherd" early in book two, which is most definitely him calling himself Christ.

I could call the series "Chronicles of the Lord's Shepherd." At least that title refers to Connor, even if only indirectly, rather than Satan. Although the "Lord's Shepherd" gets a ridiculous number of false hits on Amazon due to titles like "The Lord is my Shepherd," the Chronicles title is unique and only brings back a few false hits.

Still not a true fan of "The Advent Chronicles" (from my previous post), so I'm leaning toward Chronicles.

I'm my write-up for this (the St. Augustine letter), Christ is doing two "symbolic" things: he wants to save as many people as possible, so he uses his right hand (Connor) to bring them into the Church, but on Judgment Day he'll use his left hand to sweep the wicked into the lake of fire. The right and left hands represent saving grace and punishment, respectively. This is why he is referred to in the Augustine letter as the Right Hand of God.  Technically, this is b.s. because Satan wrote that letter to pave the way for Connor to be accepted in that role.

333 is cute.

Much as it would be nice to name the first book (or the trilogy) the Hand of God or perhaps the Right Hand of God (assuming I refer to Connor that way rather than the Staff of God), both of those names have been used a million times already. It would be great to be able to use one of those names as a title since it's a much more fitting name to use for someone as important as the Hand of God, assuming that's who Connor is. :-)

The Hand of God Cometh has never been used as a title.
Neither has Cometh the Hand of God.

666 in my story is used by God to punish the traitors who invaded holy ground (the Vatican), as opposed to the AC's marking of other humans.

Since Connor is pretending to be Christ until mid book two and then bails on Satan by overcoming his genetic enslavement right after that, he'll never actually implement the mark. However, he will pretend to plan it in the latter half of book two to keep Satan from finding out that Connor is no longer under "parental control." :-)

The traitors were willing followers of the AC, so it seems reasonable that at least they should receive the mark. They then have to worry about someone discovering that they're marked as evil by God.

It's really not that different than if the Allies had tattooed prisoner numbers into the skin of German war criminals after WW2. It would have been a fitting added punishment for those eventually released back into society, especially those who served at Auschwitz and other death camps.

What did you think of my previous post about replacing the alterphasic cannons with something less Star Warsian?

That's if I was writing a novel that tells the Revelation story. My story is based on (derived from?) Revelation but does not attempt to retell the exact same story (it's been done many times). For one thing, which interpretation of Revelation would I follow if I were to retell it? There are probably hundreds of interpretations (I own twelve of them myself, lol, from my original research). The predominant Catholic interpretation is that Revelation is a story about spiritual "warfare" and Christ's ultimate victory over evil. I do know that they generally do not believe in a real, final battle at Armageddon, which is why my final battle of book 3 will be different (Connor's forces vs Satan's forces), though still at Armageddon. Also, I was told, no "actual" war in Heaven when I once asked when in the biblical timeline it occurred. Similarly, I doubt Catholics believe in a real mark of the Beast for everyone on Earth except the martyrs. For one thing, it's simply not practical on a planet with almost 10B people. One interpretation suggested the mark was smartphones (held up to the head) and smartwatches (on the hand/wrist), as if everyone on Earth had those devices. Depending on which interpretation of Revelation you go with, things also don't happen in the order they appear in the book.

So, depending on your beliefs, things can happen out of order or don't happen at all.

Since my story is based on Revelation, I use many important elements of the Book of Revelation, but I adjust them (somewhat) to serve my plot (my interpretation, lol), without going off the deep end, except for the fact that the Antichrist ultimately ends up as the hero of the story, but that's not evident until the end of the trilogy. I end my trilogy roughly the same way as the Bible (the righteous go to Heaven, everyone else goes into the Lake of Fire, which teleports them to other worlds, from which they can never return, so they're in the lake forever). See how I did that, while still following Revelation? :-)

As for 666, since Connor overcomes his genetic enslavement to Satan halfway through book 2, there will be no opportunity for him to implement the mark of the Beast. Nor would he, since he's "Christ" not the Antichrist. So, God uses it while taking back the Vatican to mark the traitors with 666 on their foreheads. Those are the true followers of the beast, so it makes sense that at least they would be marked. You should see what God does with the corporeals (demons) at the Vatican. :-)

On a related note, I can't recall, did you read my Groundhog Day short story? It's a (revised) entry for the do-over contest about Satan's fate more or less how it will happen in the trilogy.

Congratulations, Randy.

I have a tricky problem with the distances between ships in my space battles. Unless they get close enough to the terrorizer to be caught in the blast, the risk is substantially less. And yet 1400 meters is nothing, as K noted in his review of part 1. They should have improved their tech long ago to allow supernovas to fire from greater distances. Not sure how best to make that plot hole go away. Ignore it?

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