I use red as well, but that represents pure evil (eg the demonic "corporeals"). I hashed this out with Gemini a few hours ago:

Once Connor's been stabbed by a supposedly demonic dagger, his eyes begin to turn increasingly intense shades of yellow, accompanied by ever-increasing burning pain in his irises, bleeding from his eyes, and he's incrementally losing his sight. That'll require changes to the prologue, but it's a more complete consequence of him trying to use his powers for good: the poison surges back, resulting in the aforementioned consequences. It isn't until he "loses" his battle against the poison that his eyes go red, his sight is restored, the burning and bleeding cease, but he is now lost to evil.

The other alternative I'm considering is to use black as the color of evil. It's less derivative. So, when a corporeal attacks, its eyeballs would go completely black. In Connor's case, his attempts to use his powers for good still nets a glowing blue color for the irises. In extreme cases, like when he fights the locusts, the glowing blue extends to the entire eyeball.

Once he's done using his powers, the poison's effects surge back, enlarging his pupils, and causing the other effects noted above. As the poison gains more and more control over him, his pupils will continue to enlarge, pushing the irises back until the entire whites of his eyes are black too, like the corporeals. Anatomically possible? Of course not, but I had Gemini do a few images of a young adult male with black irises vs black eyeballs. The later was definitely more scary looking.

Funny thing, though. Gemini choked as I got too specific with the details because it was bumping into its safety rules that disallow it from creating anything potentially offensive (eg scary depictions of teenagers). That led me into a  lengthy discussion about the stupidity of its current rules. It admitted for example that it could not even produce a picture of a kid with severe acne for a medical paper or news article, although I don't know if the same applies to a chat session that didn't include my earlier requests to create hideous corporeals vs an angelic-looking teenager with black eyeballs. tongue

i actually got the idea from my cat. When he gets the zoomies, he typically spends a lot of time running around in my basement, where I don't normally have lights on. When he gets back upstairs, he looks downright demonic because his black pupils have grown so big in the dark.

I'll have to include an acknowledgment to Gandalf the Beige for the inspiration.

Three plush cat beds spread over two floors, and this is what he likes best:

https://i.postimg.cc/XrgPkFSt/Nap-Time.jpg

I could have gotten three of those for the price of one cat bed. tongue

J.R. Geiger wrote:
Tamsin Liddell wrote:
J.R. Geiger wrote:

How about Spot?

This is actually a very very traditional name for a pet.
The Greek translation for Spotted One: Cerberus

Cerberus means spotted one? Holy spots, Batman!

I'm going to have to Google pictures of Cerberus to see if there are any depictions of him with spots.

If not, you can always ask Gemini to create a spotted Cerberus. :-)

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The halo glow on the first image is better. I don't know if it's the eyes, but the second image is more zombie-ish.

It just occurred to me that once Connor is in the Holy Land, not only his eyes can glow, but the halo can appear when he uses his powers too. It can start out as something faint and eventually grow to look like the one in my first image. However, he's also supposed to have a demonic poison flowing through his veins, so he can't look too powerful, at least not at the beginning. I'm also wondering if his irises should turn to yellow as the poison slowly takes over his body. But then I'll be bouncing between blue and yellow, which is rather weird.

Zombie-ish is good. Connor is supposed to be, increasingly, in "harmonious communion" with Christ throughout the first book, so when Connor uses his powers, he is in those moments, a conduit for God.

It may not be your account, but the simple test cases I suggested earlier will help narrow down what account bug or feature bug may be doing this. As I noted above, I was unable to reproduce it using my account to review J.R.'s short stories.

If your reviews saved properly, there's a possibility that they're still in the database.

I tried out the latest version of Gemini's image generation, which now includes iterative editing. Although it's still a lot of work to get exactly the right image, the enhanced functionality is amazing. It had a difficult time correctly editing my previous AI image of Connor (the first one, below), so I created the one below that from scratch, which I thought came out perfectly except the cross is too thin and bland. Gemini gave up trying to improve it, but it said if I keep the chat session used to generate the new one, it may be able to make the changes after more functionality is released.

Freelance cover artists may go the way of the dodo in the not too distant future.

Click the images to enlarge them.


Original Version:
https://i.postimg.cc/vgkqsfnq/Connor-21.jpg

I lucked out that it created the original as well as it did many months ago since editing existing images didn't work at the time. I had to tweak the prompts for this and kept rerunning image generation until it surprised me with that one.


New Version:
https://i.postimg.cc/mPBdBbcs/1758443730385.png

I think the halo on the original is better, but the eyes on this one are exactly what I had in mind. Naturally he doesn't look like that all the time. His eyes glow like that mainly when he uses his powers such as in the prologue when he fights the demonic locusts.

I can't reproduce it. I had no trouble leaving a regular review against The Goat, and I started writing another regular review for Hair Club but abandoned it before submitting to see if it would show in my "saved" reviews that hadn't been submitted, but as expected, that only works for inlines.

As a test, please try to leave another regular review for J.R. on The Goat and on one other of his short stories that you haven't yet tried to review. Just throw some random gibberish into the text fields, so there's something to save. Please make a note of the results and then try leaving a test inline review against those same two stories (you'll need to leave at least five comments and closing comments to be able to submit those).

I assume there's no question you scrolled down and hit the button to publish the regular reviews that went missing? If in doubt, blame the user. :-)

If something doesn't work right, please try to do the same tests (regular review and an inline review) against one of my short stories. That's to determine if the issue is with J.R.'s account or yours.

Please post the results of your tests here.

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Dirk

Mitch, check your billing info (click the "whatta" menu on the upper right of your screen, then Billing). See if the renewal took place. The most likely reason is that it didn't auto-renew. In fact, I just had to enable auto-renew in my account. I thought it was, but I can't be sure anymore.

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Bill, does KSP allow you to sell through other booksellers like B&N at the same time? Or are you locked into KSP? If so, for how long?

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Do they have a restriction on how many agencies you can approach simultaneously? Naturally, there are countless agencies and publishers. One way to gauge them is online reviews, although I assume you've done that.

Good luck.
Dirk

I settled on Gandalf the Beige, although he still moves around like a ghost, hence Phantom was a possibility, and he still likes to nibble on me, hence Jaws was a contender.

Welcome to the site. If you have any questions about the site, feel free to post them here or send me a connection request (I do volunteer user support here). Also, if you haven't already come across it, there's an article pinned near the top of this forum with tips on how to maximize the number of reviews you can get here. Hope it helps!

Dirk

FYI, this newest member is impersonating the real Suzanne Redfearn (including the fake picture), a very successful author. I've asked her to remove the impersonating info, otherwise we'll close the account. Oddly enough, we just had another imposter try the same thing a few days ago with another well-known author whose books are being adapted for Netflix. I suspect it's the same person. If the imposter put as much effort into writing as they do impersonating others, they might one day produce something worth reading.

Gandalf playing gently with his toys:
https://photos.app.goo.gl/QzTrgvgZqehazCuZ9

That nasty brown thing your see in parts of these videos is a toy mouse that just refuses to die (it vibrates) despite Gandalf's best efforts.

The game he's trying to destroy normally comes with three balls inside about the size of ping pong balls. He conquered that game in a matter of minutes when I first gave it to him. He knows exactly how to get them out, so I made it a little more challenging by putting an electronic spinning ball inside that's bigger than the holes to get it out.

That's a little mean but it's meant to help him work off excess energy to reduce the frequency and intensity of his almost-nightly zoomies. I eventually pop the ball out for him and let him smack it around the house. A+ for effort.

If you think those are wild, you should see him go after a laser pointer dot on the floor. I haven't filmed it yet because each time I play that with him I can't stop laughing.

It should fall under unpublished since this is a private site behind a paywall. As long as you don't post your writing here with visibility set for the internet (i.e., widest exposure), you should have no trouble. If you want to go the extra step of only posting it to a private group to limit the number of members who can see it, that's even more secure as long as you again exclude internet when posting it.


From Gemini:

In most cases, yes, publishers will still consider a work that has been posted to a private, paywalled workshop site to be unpublished.

The key distinction for publishers is not whether a handful of people have seen it, but whether the work has been made widely available to the general public and thus lost its "first rights" value.

Here is a breakdown of why a private workshop site is generally not an issue:

Limited Audience: A private site with a membership or paywall is not considered a public venue. The audience is small, and the work is not discoverable by search engines like Google. A publisher is primarily concerned with the work having been put into the public domain where it can be widely read, which would hurt its marketability.

Purpose for Feedback: Publishers understand that writers need to refine their work, and they know that workshops are essential to that process. The purpose of these sites is to produce a better manuscript for submission, not to act as a public library.

The Free Trial Period: The short free trial period for new members is unlikely to be a problem. The audience is still limited to a select group of people who have signed up for the service, not the general public.

The most important thing to do is to be honest with a publisher or agent if they ask about the manuscript's history. You can simply state that it was circulated for feedback on a private, members-only workshop site. This is a very common and accepted practice in the industry.

Sol, we're now seeing spammers creating groups on the site. Four very recently, plus an old abandoned one. I renamed all groups to be deleted Obsolete 0 thru Obsolete 4.

Is it possible for you to easily disable the ability of trial members to create new groups? That would likely eliminate most if not all spam groups. I added a new group tonight called "READ ME BEFORE CREATING NEW GROUPS!" specifically to provide guidance for legitimate members thinking of creating one.

Personally, I think trial members should have to wait to create new groups. We haven't had a single successful group created by a trial member since they don't know anyone on the site, don't know if anyone else would be interested in a new group, don't know that they need to advertise new groups, don't know that most current members generally don't use non-Premium groups (especially not the non-Premium forums, with one or two exceptions), etc.

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Dirk

Thanks, Tamsin. I flagged them for deletion and deleted the spammers' accounts.

Forget sharing. Gandalf likes to hog my side of the bed. Whenever there's an opening, he goes for it. Even when I pretend I'm going to lie on top of him, he doesn't buy it and doesn't like my attempts to push him out of the way. He also doesn't like being locked in my office (aka the cat shrine) for any amount of time while I do chores that require me to go in and out of the house. When I return to let him back out, he gives me the stink eye and complains until I apologize, meaning until I give him a treat.

I leave the door to my upstairs bathroom slightly open when I shower in case Gandalf has to use the facilities. Twice now, he's hopped onto the top of the bathtub and walked along the length of it, though outside the shower curtain. Each time, I'm reminded of Norman Bates (insert screetchy music) and laugh my --- off. Both times, he went so far as to come inside the curtain and walk along the back of the tub to where a bottle of body wash stands in the back corner, just so he can sniff it, looking to see if it's food (his favorite pastime). Once he's satisfied I'm not in there eating, he leaves. He had the same interest in my electric toothbrush initially; kept meowing because he wanted whatever it was I was eating. Once I showed him it was an inedible brush head, he was satisfied.

The cutest thing, though, is when he races me up or down the stairs. He waits to give me a head start, then makes the cat equivalent of a racing car noise (a long warbling meow) and zooms past me. The first time he did it, he shot between my legs as I was climbing. He doesn't understand that tripping your meal ticket down the stairs might interfere with his meal schedule.

Beige, actually. Orange cats are just rusty beige ones. :-) Albeit just as cute.

Gandalf does.

He already does sleep next to me. I could stop him from doing that, but I'm happy if he's happy. He has started nibbling a little harder on my skin, though, after I give him some chin and head scratches, which he loves (and requests). He's definitely not biting, but it is somewhat unpleasant.

Yup. I've seen it sometimes too. Rather than helpful chapter names, they're often reduced to naming each chapter n to "chapter n+1" because they haven't used the prologue choice in the pick list to denote an actual prologue.

Thanks, Marilyn.

I've been allergic to most fragrances for decades, so I only use unscented organic products.

I have two highly rated air purifiers in the upstairs bedrooms, but the bathroom is too small, with no outlets (it's an older townhouse) except by the sink, which are fully used. It may have stunk because he accidentally kicked one small "easter egg" out of the litter while trying to cover it, which I didn't see. It didn't smell nearly as much the next day when he covered it properly, although I now clean up the litter as soon as I see him go.

I'm glad to hear that wet food causes less of a smell. One cat-lover at the shelter said she stopped giving her cat dry food because it kept causing urinary issues, perhaps because her cat was dehydrated. And Gandalf doesn't like the dry food anyway. He'll happily ignore it unless he gets too hungry. He's always on the hunt for food (human or otherwise, lol), just not desperate enough to always eat his dry food. And I got him a couple of cat fountains for upstairs and downstairs that he really likes, so he's drinking quite a bit.

The shelter advised me to contact their vet to discuss his itchiness. I have to go there around Sept. 16 anyway for them to follow-up on other open medical issues, so they can look at it then. The weird thing is, he can reach both cheeks with his back paws to scratch with. I've seen him do it, which is what keeps me guessing. Perhaps he just prefers the way I scratch. tongue

I figured mixed food might be a culprit, but until the vet advises otherwise, they want me to keep him on the food approved by that same vet, most of which is mixed sources. I've already started stocking up on single-source wet food (Hills Science Diet). It seemed like common sense to me not to mix different protein sources for the same reason you noted.

The flea and tick medication they use is a prescription brand only available through vets here. The over-the-counter products here are rather pathetic based on the reviews. I've checked his fur for anything visible but saw nothing. He is one super-clean cat. Barely sheds too, except when stressed (the two times I picked him up from the shelter, after that very little).

He just planted his tiny heinie on my mousepad, so I'll end here.

My cat's cheeks seem to itch a lot; ditto his forehead, although less so. He approaches me easily ten times a day and pushes his cheeks against my hand, usually my fingertips/fingernails until I scratch him. I know cats have scent glands on their cheeks and forehead, but this seems like more than marking me with his scent. Is his behavior excessive? I'm wondering if he may have allergies. He's been treated for ticks and fleas.

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Dirk

Tamsin Liddell wrote:
Dirk B wrote:

The cat litter the shelter asked me to use (since he's still their cat for the moment) is environmentally friendly and pet friendly, but it's not very good for masking #2. Yeesh!

I have had decent luck with Arm & Hammer. We're using FelinePine right now, but Naturals was decent as well.
Of course, it may also be that I've had housecats for, godess, 40 years consecutive now? I don't notice it so much anymore, maybe.

Thanks, Tamsin. I have a large supply of Tidy Cats Lightweight Unscented waiting in the wings. I opened a large bucket of a Tidy Cats scented product, and practically choked, the fragrance was so intense. Fortunately, the shelter was able to use it.