926

(309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

I was trying to remember if Star Wars used rebel fleet or Rebel fleet. Turns out it's the latter, which makes sense since references to Rebel in Star Wars are short for Rebel Alliance. Based in that I took another look at whether they capitalize Imperial and ... they do, all over Wookieepedia and starwars.com, including the starwars.com database. So now I'm wondering how the hell I got that wrong because I remember researching that quite a bit, and only then did I switch to lowercase imperial. The CMOS style guide still says to use lowercase. Dictionary examples do too.

But, screw it, I might as well follow the Star Wars style since it's closer to what I'm doing. At least that eliminates the inconsistancy between Enduring and imperial.

I'm sure Jack will approve. smile

927

(309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Then there's things like:

Imperial Fleet - the whole Imperial Fleet
imperial fleet - a subset of the Imperial Fleet
Imperial fleet - too similar to each of the other two?

This example drives me nuts, though: the Enduring fleet battled the imperial fleet. And by the way, Enduring Fleet refers to the Republic's whole fleet, whereas Enduring fleet is a subset of the Enduring Fleet, and enduring fleet doesn't make sense here since Enduring is derived from Enduring Republic, a proper noun.

928

(58 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Sol, I'm seeing a few new bugs in the forums, some of which are serious because if the system times us out (it very often does), anything you were trying to post is lost, which sometimes take a long time to write up (e.g., for brainstorming with other members).

1.)
- prior to the crash, when I spent a little too much time in the forums writing a single post, the post would be accepted, but the site would log me out anyway
- now, if I take too long writing the post, I get an error message to the effect that I don't have permission to access that page (something like that) and my intended post is lost; if I log back in, I can post without the above error, although I then sometimes get error #2, below

2.)
- I'm getting a message when I post to the effect that the site couldn't access email. I'm guessing the site is trying to notify everyone who is following the thread to which I posted that there's a new post in the thread, although I'm just guessing about that

3.) I also sometimes get an error upon posting that "the link is incorrect" (words to that effect).

Thanks
Dirk

Chrome browser
Windows 11 PC

test

930

(309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Kill me now. Once upon a time, I used to always capitalize the adjective imperial, such as (the imperial admiral became the Imperial admiral). At the end of the 2nd draft of Galaxy Tales and after a bunch research from many sources, including CMOS and Star Wars novels, I decided capitalizing it was wrong. My book was pretty much the only place I could find it capitalized (outside of proper nouns, of course). So, in the third draft, I switched them all to lowercase, and I thought the matter was settled.

However, Jack, who is currently reading Archangel, felt fairly strongly Imperial should be capitalized. And another online writer once wrote that if a term like imperial galleys refers to galley ships of a specific empire, then Imperial should be capitalized, whereas a reference to the galleys of many empires would be lowercase (imperial galleys), although I don't know if that rule is correct.

Then along came the Enduring Republic of Stars. If I wanted to write a "Republic fleet", Republic should clearly be capitalized since Republic is a proper noun in this case. But, in order to minimize the similarities to Star Wars Republic(s), I decided to use Enduring as the adjective (e.g., Enduring fleet, Enduring worlds, Enduring troops, etc.). Since Enduring is also a proper noun, it should be capitalized as well. That leads to things like this: the Enduring fleet battled the (lowercase) imperial fleet. The latter case comes up a lot.

Thoughts?
Dirk

931

(8 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

For he's a jolly good fellow, for he's a jolly good fellow... smile

Let me add my thanks as well. I'm very happy that the site is going to continue.

Dirk

Alan, I'm so sorry for what you and Di are going through. I can't imagine the stress you both must be under.

All my best wishes for you and Di.
Dirk

933

(58 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Sol, this post is on behalf of k.dot. He can't get past that first screen about his membership having expired. When he chooses to renew as a Premium member and enters his credit card info, he gets Unspecified Error. He tried to contact you (presumably at either support@thenextbigwriter.com or at your snasisi email address, but I know you want the problems recorded here too.

He can probably get in as a Basic member, but either way, he has to wait to hear from you before he's back to Premium membership.

Thanks
Dirk

Welcome back, Alan. The points math is definitely off in your case. Try deleting your browser's cookies. That cleared up weird behavior for me in Chrome. I'm not sure if your browser uses cookies, though. If you don't want to delete them all (it'll kick you out of many websites, so save your work), see if you can find where in settings you can pick which cookies to delete, and get rid of those related to this website, then restart your browser. It's a long shot, but it surprised me a few times that it worked.

935

(7 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

MJ, try changing browsers when you post a chapter to this site (simply as a test). As you know, I was unable to post since the site came back up. I normally run Chrome but tried MS Edge, and it worked! So I went back to Chrome and deleted all my browsing data except passwords, and that worked too. You probably only need to clear your cookies, assuming they're the problem. Elysse, who was on this site before the crash had all kinds of formatting issues until she switched browsers.

936

(58 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Hi Sol.

The following items relate to my account:

- I need 500 more points to be able to repost both of my in-progress books (70 chapters) and short stories; I lost 300 points because of the crash, and you gave me 500 so far, which brings me to 1600 (200 more than I had); reposting everything requires about 700 points, so I need an additional 500 points to get everything posted and end with my original points total (1400)
- The web page you linked to at the top of home page says you won't charge for the next six months; did you intend to extend everyone's renewal date by a full six months, or merely not to charge anyone for the next six months? My renewal date was March 9, so my original subscription would have renewed in five months, netting me only one month free; I'm fine with whichever way you intended to go; if you're extending all subscriptions by a full six months, then my new renewal should be March 9 + 6 months = Sept. 9

FYI, the bug that was keeping me from posting to the forums was specific to Chrome and went away when I cleared all my browsing data

Thanks!
Dirk

937

(6 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

The funny part about that, Elspeth, is that you haven't added your profile information yet.
Apparently my new business buddy, Steve, isn't the sharpest knife in the drawer.

938

(6 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Sol, a writer named steve.jeff sent me a connection request because he wants to have business-oriented communications with me. Naturally, I declined.

Must be something in the water today.

939

(9 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

I've received quite a few of these as well. I think Sol is aware of it as my bogus reviews have already disappeared.

Okay. Much better dialogue between Romano and Beneventi below. I decided Beneventi is a ghost, not merely a figment of Romano's guilty conscience. As before, no one else can see or hear Beneventi, unless Beneventi wants them to. Also, I decided he doesn't read minds. It's more fun if Romano keeps getting caught talking to him. For added enjoyment, Beneventi can manipulate his environment. Also, it turns out his eternal punishment is to spend forever with Romano. There is a way out, but he's not allowed to tell Romano what it is. Should be fun.
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Romano was about to get up, when the man turned his head and faced him. Antonio Beneventi. Romano closed his eyes and muttered, “Go away.”
Beneventi rose, approached Romano, and said, “I’m not going anywhere. My place is with you — until the end of time, if necessary. I’ll follow you to the darkest ratholes on the planet.” He shrugged. “I don’t have a choice really. You see, you’re my punishment.”
Romano arched an eyebrow.
“That’s right. It’s not enough that I’m in Hell. Turns out Hell consists of spending an eternity with you. Ironical, isn’t it? But, believe me, if I have to suffer, then you will, too.”
Romano began second-guessing his decision to accompany Connor on this trip, as requested by Nnamani. Although Romano didn’t consider himself a threat to the boy, Romano knew he wasn’t a well man. He glanced at Connor. The boy needed someone along he could trust.
Beneventi followed Romano’s gaze. “His wellbeing isn’t the real reason you’re here, is it?”
Romano’s eyebrows shot up. Beneventi was reading his thoughts.
“No, Gregorio, I’m not reading your mind. I’d need a microscope to find it. But you’re predictable. You always were. The real reason you’re here with all your baggage in tow is that you think he might really be Christ.” Beneventi laughed. “And you’re going to follow him around like a puppy, carrying his water, hoping at the end he’ll feel so grateful to you he’ll grant you three magic wishes.”
Romano glared at Beneventi.
“Don’t give me that look. I’m right. And we both know what your first wish will be, don’t we?”
Romano said nothing.
“You want him to rescue me from an eternity of suffering.”
“Yes,” Romano whispered.
Beneventi covered his heart with both hands. “How noble of you. Or is it? Fess up. What you really want is for him to save you from an eternity of guilt.”
Romano stared straight ahead.
“Hah! I’m right.”
Romano looked him in the eyes. “Leave!”
“Who are you talking to, Father?” Connor asked.
“Oh, uh, just thinking out loud.”
Beneventi whispered menacingly, “Together forever, Gregorio. That’s us.”
“You’re not real!” Romano hissed.
“Oh?” Beneventi smacked Romano’s tray from underneath, spilling his water bottle.
Romano jumped, then watched, mouth open, as Beneventi returned to his seat.

941

(2 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Go to your portfolio, click on the original story, then click the white Edit button. That will take you to the wizard for the existing story and you can overwrite the content by copying the updated story from your word processor (select all, type ctrl-c) and pasting it into the Content view's text box (click in the text box, type ctrl-a, then ctrl-v to paste over it). Click Next, and you're good to go.

Dirk

My bad. The button name is +Chapter (in the posting view).

Hi Martin. You can edit over existing chapters using the Edit button, but that won't notify everyone that there's a new chapter. Instead, use the Add Chapter button. Then, instead of given a new chapter number, use the previous chapter number and change the version number to two. Once you hit the publish tab in the Add Chapter wizard, go ahead and publish the new chapter AND make the old chapter inactive. Making it inactive ensures that only you can see it, and it retains all of the old reviews on that chapter, which also only you can see. If you're totally done with the old chapter, then you can delete it, which also deletes the reviews associated with that chapter. If you don't make the old chapter inactive, nor delete it, then both chapters will appear once you publish

Clear as mud? I hope I got it right.

Dirk

Unless the submission guidelines note that an attachment is okay, keep in mind that many people don't open Word files from unknown senders.

945

(23 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

It's probably too much to change at this point, but inverting the introduction to start with home, followed by adventure, would probably help make it a more traditional story. Currently, things definitely seem to come out of order. You could set up her fallen status, her mother's death, her family, and the losses she's suffered up front, then fill in missing details as the story unfolds. It avoids a lengthy break for character development once the action gets going. That doesn't stop you from having a short action scene at the start. I use that in Galaxy Tales and Saving Connor to hook the reader long enough to get through the slower MC introductions.

946

(23 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Kdot wrote:
a blurb might wrote:

They took everything. My friends, my memories, my wings-- even my mother. But I have come to fight back. From the raw streets of one of Earth's toughest cities, I shall rise to vanquish evil. The only question is: once the dust settles will I have a home to return to?

I like it. Thanks.
Dirk

Well, it finally happened. I have so little interest in movies and shows that I cancelled Netflix. Haven't had cable in years. I have Prime for the fast/free shipping, which gives me Prime Video, which I also don't watch. I bought the DVDs for The Big Bang Theory to watch while rowing, but that's it. There are other series that I'm willing to pay for, especially Frasier, but that can wait until I'm done with BBT. I'm going to end up as one of those old people who only ever watches 20-year-old shows.

948

(23 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Getting close to the end of R2. As I mentioned in my latest review, I really have no idea where the story is going. It's been mostly action-oriented chapters in various settings that don't connect well for me. I'm not sure how much of this is part of the genre and involves stuff I should already know as background.

To me it's a lot like a new TV show so far, with many apparently unrelated episodes, generally set in the same universe and involving some of the same characters, but you don't really know where anything is going for a season or two because the writers/showrunners often themselves don't know. The importance of non-main characters is also not knowable for a time until they reappear, if ever.

I read the content summaries of all four R books so far and reread the one for L. Nowhere is there a real summary of what the story (as a whole) is about. The third post in this thread is as close as you've come to a description, which is most noteworthy for saying your not following a formula. Since you're going to have to write a real blurb eventually, why not take a crack at it and drop it into the content summary of book one?

Naturally, I'll keep reading, but it would be nice to have a better idea of what to expect so that I can see a progression in the plot and characters, and not wonder if the latest series of events have any lasting impact on the story as a whole.

Hope this helps.
Dirk

949

(23 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Even Dune took time to gather a following. Do you do any book signings?

Posted a short story for the mythical creature contest. It's Animal Farm "off its meds".