Harder.
3,451 2016-03-09 06:43:17
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
3,452 2016-03-02 05:50:27
Re: Unbar's World of Books Thread (39 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Elisheva Free wrote:
njc wrote:amy s wrote:Elisheva, go to bed :-)
This is our time of day!
I don't even get off work until 10pm.
As far as the summary goes, I've decided to deal with it once I'm done with the first draft. Until that point, most of the plot is subject to change anyhow.
-Elisheva
I routinely tell TNBW members to make the book summary here on the site as if it were the back cover of the book. It's your primary chance to nab would-be readers, whether here or when published. You can always update it anytime you want as the plot and characters evolve.
3,453 2016-03-01 16:02:08
Re: Unbar's World of Books Thread (39 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
amy s wrote:
Here is another attempt for Dictates.
In Dictates of Faith, Jaylene comes back from the dead, a sure sign that the goddess needs her. But for what? The same day, someone tries to kill her. But who? As the plot is revealed, she will need the help of a friend to unravel the answers. They journey into a series of underground caves…where magic is real and even the gods are in danger.
Still boring?
This I like. Who is Jaylene, btw? Your summary is worded as if we should already know her.
Here's a variant:
In Dictates of Faith, one in a series of four books, a character named Jaylene is brought back to life by her goddess to unravel a mystery where magic is real and even the gods are in danger.
3,454 2016-03-01 05:35:10
Re: Unbar's World of Books Thread (39 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
K. wrote:
-.-
Too funny.
3,455 2016-03-01 05:31:41
Re: Unbar's World of Books Thread (39 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I like the first four. Based on the last one, though, that book must really suck. Also, it's "nova" fire, but I quibble.
3,456 2016-03-01 03:56:33
Re: Unbar's World of Books Thread (39 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Elisheva Free wrote:
Ack! I suck at summaries, but here goes...
Twin girls Maya and Vierra and young Dragons Noi and Dea find themselves at the center of a war where all may not be as it seems and their very existence could mean the difference between victory and genocide.
As for yours, Unbar, I really like K's version. Either way, it makes me want to read the book.
-Elisheva
I like it.
3,457 2016-03-01 03:41:27
Re: Unbar's World of Books Thread (39 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Apparently, I need two sentences as well:
Into the Mind of God is the story of two teenagers who are visited by a being who calls himself God and who leads them on a galaxy-spanning quest to save mankind. But is God a real deity or the imagination of two mentally boys?
3,458 2016-03-01 03:18:39
Re: Unbar's World of Books Thread (39 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
amy s wrote:
I need two sentences. Dictates: "Jaylene is a priestess who saves her best friend from jail: together they combine forces and uncovers a threat to her goddess and everyone she holds dear. They journey into a series of underground caves…where magic is real and even the gods are in danger."
Yawn. This doesn't draw me in. I haven't read it, so I can't suggest anything better. At a minimum, drop the bit about jail unless it's a major part of the story and character arcs.
Acts: "Anver is a mage forced to run a a school of magic, surrounded by other teachers who want nothing more than to see him fail. He finds a secret room, and this leads him to discover an ancient evil within the walls of a place he calls home."
I would have loved to know this up front. It clearly defines the scope of the book. I would have stopped asking you what the quest was. Was this in the book summary? If so, smack me.
Mandates: "Kha is a mage who is dying after a cave-in that kills his apprentice and scatters his friends to the wind. In the process of healing, he finds the love of his life, a woman named Sil. Now, he just has to save her from herself…and everyone else who wants to kill her."
Kha's apprentice is killed at Earthwound? He had another apprentice besides Anver? As far as Acts vs Mandates, I don't recall a lot of backstory in Acts that summarizes Mandates. Again, if it's there, smack me.
What about your fourth book?
I assume I'm about to get smacked.
3,459 2016-02-28 23:45:41
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I occasionally kill my main characters only to show later why they're still alive. K prefers actually killing his characters only to resurrect them later, no matter how mangled they were. K i m b e r l y R o s e got nuked and was still able to give birth to a live baby.
3,460 2016-02-27 00:40:40
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I only just discovered apricot brandy. Beats wine hands down in my book. Too bad it interacts with my medication, otherwise I could develop a serious addiction.
3,461 2016-02-27 00:33:06
Re: Question... (10 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
As others have said, versioning is the way to "republish" work on the new site. I use it quite a bit. You can have many versions of the same chapter, usually as a way to hang onto old reviews associated with prior versions of the same chapter. For the most part, the workflow is similar to adding a new chapter, beginning with the Add Chapter step. When you reach the page where you specify the chapter number and chapter notes, choose the same chapter number as the one you want to replace, but increase the version number. As you follow the wizard, you'll have a chance to publish the new version, make it active, and make the older version inactive. If you want, you can keep older versions active as well, assuming you want feedback comparing the versions.
3,462 2016-02-26 05:32:19
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
njc wrote:
Actually, the question was for Amy. Would HH Norton I, a generally peacable fellow, be CCFCCP or something else?
When someone issues currency in your name, it begs the question who was CCFCCP, him or those around him.
3,463 2016-02-26 05:18:12
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Rindfleischetikettierungsueberwachungsaufgabenuebertragungsgesetz - meaning "law delegating beef label monitoring" - was introduced in 1999 in the state of Mecklenburg-Western Pomerania.
Brings Google Translate to its knees.
I now return this thread to its rightful owner, Professor Hinkley.
3,464 2016-02-26 05:17:18
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
If CTD is cumulative trauma disorder, then Google's "kumulative Traumastörung" looks right. If it's connective tissue disease, then Google has a really cool translation that also looks correct: Bindegewebserkrankungen. Don't you love the way we Krauts can keep making longer and longer words just by stringing them together? I'm sure there's a contest for that sort of thing.
I learned a cool new acronym today: CCFCCP. Given it's tie to the English commercial, it would almost certainly be used in it's English form, assuming they don't have their own independently developed equivalent.
3,465 2016-02-26 05:02:14
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Not sure about CTD and CCFCCP, but I'm 95% sure Google Translate got this one right:
Seine Hoheit , Kaiser Norton I. von den Vereinigten Staaten und Mexiko
or (slightly tweaked):
Seine Hoheit , Kaiser Norton der Erste von den Vereinigten Staaten und Mexiko.
Common sense suggests that I, II, III, etc. are used after names in German as in English, although I never came across an instance in my Donald Duck comics. That said, I think "der Erste" sounds more cool, especially for a highborn.
3,466 2016-02-26 01:33:28
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Upon reflection (I.e. I gave it thirty seconds of thought), ver does occur frequently in German words, but I can't think of any rule that would apply to all ver words.
3,467 2016-02-26 01:26:46
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Since you insist, veruekt is roughly crazy or nuts. Scheisse is poop. In the sentence above, possible translations for scheissveruekten would be bloody or damn (i.e. every bloody Saturday). I'm not aware of any special function for "ver", but my German is limited to basic conversations.
Dieser Scheisse schreibt sich einfach selbst is: this sh*t just writes itself.
3,468 2016-02-26 01:01:28
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Google Translate is your friend. :-)
3,469 2016-02-25 06:22:16
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I was just thinking today that I should make Joseph of German stock, so I can use German curse words for his ever-increasing potty mouth. I know a lot of the bad ones thanks to years of German school every scheissveruekten Saturday morning when kids should be home watching Bugs Bunny. Who wouldn't love to see Joseph's mother (speaking through Joseph) unload "Leck meine Eier!" at the guards outside the Imperial Palace after he's hit with the first stun blast? One wonders how they would react... 
Dieser Scheisse schreibt sich einfach selbst.
3,470 2016-02-25 06:10:40
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Amy, if you like French, I can unload a bunch of words I learned in summer camp in Quebec. :-)
Je parle francais seulement pour vous, ma chere dame.
Pepe Le Pew
3,471 2016-02-25 04:11:54
Re: Risen - The Movie (2 replies, posted in Spirituality & Religion)
It looks epic. I couldn't get your link to work, but found the trailer here: http://www.risen-movie.com/
Thanks for bringing it to our attention.
3,472 2016-02-22 04:52:05
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
AJ Reid wrote:
I'll shut up now and go and review someone else
Go check your reviews. Tag.
3,473 2016-02-12 06:06:59
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
AJ Reid wrote:
I don't read hieroglyphics either especially not in my spare time
Ooh! Hieroglyphics! New language. I wonder if it's possible to curse in hieroglyphics...
3,474 2016-02-11 03:47:35
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
K. wrote:
Norm d'Plume wrote:I just bought Lord of the Rings for Kindle. It's probably been two decades since I last read it. A chance to read it from the perspective of a writer.
Are you near the end of chapter 3 yet?
I haven't even finished your book yet. Nevertheless, I managed to begin rereading LOTR. The film version of The Fellowship of the Ring was better than the book. One of my initial complaints about the book has always been that Gandalf goes off for years (nine?), taking his sweet time when he must have at least considered the true nature of the Ring.
To be honest I've read almost nothing for weeks. Two weeks in Canada and I still don't have a driver's license or supplemental health insurance for meds. My car insurance is probably going to cost a fortune because I haven't driven in years, and in Calgary it's a must.
My boxes have separated in UPS transit. One was incorrectly marked as a gift and was hit with a customs/brokerage charge of over $100, which I refuse to pay. The rest were marked correctly but have been stuck in Winnipeg for Lord knows why. The UPS store where everything was shipped from is trying to sort it out.
The weather is great, though. I'm walking outside without even a coat on.
However, worst of all, they speak with a weird accent up here. The only thing worse would be Australian. :-)
Relatively safe for work, unless you have an old stick up your butt:
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=BRI-A3vakVg
3,475 2016-02-06 04:37:02
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Oh dear. I wrote my prologue as a roller coaster ride modeled after Raiders of the Lost Ark as a way to hook the reader.
