Doesn't sound like quite the right thing, since my sorcery is a means to the story, not the story proper.
1,176 2016-11-11 11:58:01
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
1,177 2016-11-11 09:00:59
Re: Unbar's Thread (87 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The curvature in the ground is a side-effect of the clumsy piecewise perspective transforms.
Unbar, is this the same artist you used for the other cover?
One thing you might do is leave Tommy a bit smaller, but keep him close to the viewer (no space under him) and have him looking up to the threat.
1,178 2016-11-11 06:51:42
Re: Unbar's Thread (87 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I've spent a couple of hours fooling around with GIMP. I'm no expert (and it should have a non-linear perspective transform, but does not).
Now, as to why I did this and that. Part of my rationale comes from what I see on covercritics.com.
I've made Tommy bigger. I've put an open-book icon on his back (grabbed off the web-your artist will have to make his own). No, it's not something in the story, but it's an indication to the reader of Tommy's special powers.
I've tried to move Tommy closer to the reader, and to move the danger closer to him. I've done a very clumsy two-stage perspective wrap. I've given him a little more room, and moved him a little off center so that he's looking through the center in his confrontation with the danger. You could move him a bit further to the left.
I would also have Tommy looking straight out at the danger, not down.
The extra arm is a failure of my editing ... but I don't want to spend another two hours on fixing it. You can see the idea.
HopeThisHelps.
1,179 2016-11-10 18:31:24
Re: Unbar's Thread (87 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
We don't see any of tke hero's face, only gis back and a dark far-profile.
There's too much space given over to the background elements, and too much separation between him and them.
I'll amplify later when fully awake.
1,180 2016-11-10 08:22:14
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Slow Joe Biden, Obama's way of insuring that nobody on the political right would consider attempting an assasination.
1,181 2016-11-10 06:16:07
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
By mistake when President Sloe Jobee got the names confused.
1,182 2016-11-09 01:55:24
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Janet, I tried to answer your review comments. The result is about 50% larger and maybe a little better. Maybe also more ... lurid. If you want a repub, I'll do it. Anyone else, care to take up the job after Janet?
1,183 2016-11-08 20:05:00
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Bay or bow? Bow windows certainly are used on upper floors. A bay window requires an extension of the building, at least at that floor but sometimes across multiple floors. Yes, it's done. If you can get a good view of the southern facade of NY Presbyterian Hospital (formerly NY Cornell Medical Center) you should be able to see a pair of multistory bays ending (or shrinking) somewhere around the twentieth floor. The western facade also has a multistory bay. (Hospitals often have corridors ending in bays to provide visitor seating while staff is with a patient.)
1,184 2016-11-08 19:22:46
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Lost it in the first throe?
1,185 2016-11-08 19:20:43
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Got mine last Monday last week. No problems.
Do they use a different formula in Canada?
1,186 2016-11-08 14:37:25
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I should caution you: =ConVent= and the other Vampire Con stories are within the rubric of 'improving one's mind with cheap fiction'. They also show how to violate half the rules we hold dear.
1,187 2016-11-08 06:00:19
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
For AJ especially, from Kate Paulk's ConVent:
"I'm Natalia Bosting, and I'm here under false pretenses because I don't write sex, I write relationships." She tilted her head as though she was thinking about something. "Well, except for the Night Ships space opera series. Oh, and the Crowned Heart series." Another pause. "Actually, I think there was sex in the gay were-creatures books. But not in anything else." Her accent toured Western Europe before settling somewhere Eastern European but not Russian. She handed the microphone to McCloud with a smile.
(Fun read, BTW)
1,188 2016-11-06 22:46:20
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Did you get the manufacturer's updates?
1,189 2016-11-06 21:36:32
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
B2, Ch16: The Rockpile
1,190 2016-11-06 12:22:09
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Okay, 200-odd words out there, a tease in a new chapter.
I shudder to think what the reviews will look like. ((Wry grin with marmalade (NO Vegamite!) ))
1,191 2016-11-06 06:40:39
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Try a vacuum windshield mount. The key is to moisten the suction cup ever so slightly before you press it in place and flip the lock lever. With the surfaces clean and a little moisture, it should hold for three to six months.
1,192 2016-11-06 04:42:35
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The problem with Tomtom and Garmin is that if you want to slide the map around while driving you have to change modes, and the controls change when you do. For all its problems, Magellen doesn't do that.
They all waste half the screen on what's behind you in overhead mode, which is all I ever want.
1,193 2016-11-06 04:38:11
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I'm trying to get the flasher project done. It keeps wanting to spawn side projects, but I'm trying to hold firm.
The changes I worked out in the hospital and just after are in and working. There's one bit of fine tuning to try. I'm getting a brighter flash and probably better battery life. I have a pageful of flash pulse data, to take again after the change. And I want to try it with the lithium iron disulfide batteries Eveready sells. Their discharge curve is high, flat, and sharp. It will be an interesting, if pricey, test.
Then finish the last test article to test the final layout and begin drilling and cutting the case.
1,194 2016-11-06 04:16:47
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I'm tempted to put an early version up without context. Mmmmm ....
1,195 2016-11-05 20:42:16
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Time for me to say where I've been, especially since I owe a lot of reviews.
I'm still getting myself together after the illness. I'm trying to get the flasher project done. It keeps wanting to spawn side projects, but I'm trying to hold firm. I have lots of parts to file now.
Editing of the previous chapter is simmering on the back burner. The missing chapters before are in the fridge. I've been working on parts for the next chapter. Description is slowing me mightily, and this place (various names, but i expect to call the chapter =The Rockpile=) will introduce Merran to some of the sleazier parts of the Academy. (Not nearly the most evil.)
I hope this is as parlously close to pornography as I ever get. I need a way to put the idea of brain bleach in ... but Merran isn't wise enough yet to want it.
Right now I've got fragments and ideas that need to be put in order, with more notes on description than I can use ... and I've only covered a quarter of what's needed.
1,196 2016-11-04 10:05:16
Re: The imperfect use of Past Perfect (19 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
We got a lot of smilage out of dem beans.
1,197 2016-11-03 03:59:53
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The strength of the springy parts seems not to be standardized.
I tried a TomTom once and returned within the hour. Neither TT nor Garmin is safe to use in a moving vehicle unless all you want it for is to tell you where to go. If you want it for a quick-adjustable map, their different modes and different behaviors in the modes make them almost as bad as texting.
And I cringe when I see them in the middle of the windshield blocking a critical part of the driver's view.
1,198 2016-11-02 22:00:54
Re: The imperfect use of Past Perfect (19 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I had baked beans for dinner. ![]()
1,199 2016-11-02 19:49:43
Re: Please post here regarding a completed review (671 replies, posted in Alpha to Omega - Review Group)
Reviewed CJD's Ch 57.
1,200 2016-11-02 15:17:27
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
You have topic changes. Break the paragraph and compose each of the resulting paragraphs well.