Amy, let us know what you think of the editor's advice.
1,151 2016-11-25 22:14:29
Re: I'm still alive but... (27 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
1,152 2016-11-25 19:26:41
Re: I'm still alive but... (27 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I hate driving downtown. It's like my first few trips on the NJ Garden State Parkway in rush hour. Grab your balls...
Wrong remedy. It'll frag both your situational awareness and your reaction time.
The first thing about driving in traffic, any, at speed any, is to realize that everyone ont the road is trying to go or stop someplace, and that they have different strategies and tactics for doing it. If you watch other drivers with that as your base assumption, you'll see some plausible sense in what they are doing.
Some drivers are stupid, some are selfish, some are both, and selfish and stupid both translate into 'negative sum'--they get less from screwing you than you lose.
With that in mind:
Try not to force other drivers to react to you. You give them the chance to make a costly mistake.
When you must violate the previous principle, let your movements leave them one very good choice and one obviously stupid choice, and be ready for the 2.6% who will choose the stupid choice.
Don't trap other drivers unless it's clear they are going to trap you. Then let them escape as soon as it is safe to do so--and they have a better escape than trapping you.
And for heaven's sake, move briskly and soon whenthe light goes green. Each time you make 12 extra people wait 90 seconds for the next light, you have p*ssed away 18 minutes of human life--other people's life, time which is lost to them forever.
And do what else you can to get other people through the light behind you. For the reason given above, and because if you screw them, they are more likely to cut you off, trap them, or ride six inches from your bumper.
More advice later, maybe, when I've got a real keyboard.
1,153 2016-11-25 05:56:20
Re: I'm still alive but... (27 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Had distractions. Was trying to get a demo box with my flasher circuit working for one family confab. I finished Test Article 4, finding an interesting and possibly useful failure mode along the way. Useful, that is, once I fully understand it. I bought some materials for working with Surface Mount devices and got to the point where I could solder the beasties (that's 2.5mm x 2.7mm x 3.2mm) well enough, then started to assemble the final board.
And hit a failure mode that has me flummoxed. I need to spend serious time trying to figure it out. There'll probably be a Blinding Flash of the Obvious at some point. And I haven't begun cutting the openings in the housing for it. That's the sort of careful work I usually muff.
Meanwhile, I learned a new word just when I needed it. Well, a new phrase: "false document". It means a work (eg. a book) that exists only as a name within a work of fiction. Like an Encyclopedia Galactica, or Fleetrow's Guide to the Universe. Or The True and Complete Record of the Instructive Adventures of the Daring and Sagacious Count Hulhausen Lundersot, And of His Life and Times. Only, as you know, I am trying to put a bit of that fictional work, complete with the Count's own recounting, and the sorcero-cinematic-virtual-reality experience thereof, into my own work of fiction. (Maybe in another fragment, I could have the Count peruse a copy of one volume of the supposedly apocryphal Sorcerer's Progress. Only I'm not sure my cheek is large enough for that kind of tongue.)
I spend Wednesday eve reading a trade paper copy of The Secrets of Story. I recommend it HIGHLY to everyone here. It is a rapid-fire discharge of Blinding Flashes of the Obvious, complete with stunning afterimages thereof.
I'll be visiting my brother for a few days starting 12/10.
I'm way behind in reviews as well as in work. Amy and Rebecca, you should expect reviews within about 20 hours. Oh, and Amy, I think you used tomato sauce before. Just remember that the tomato is a New World plant.
Now for some rest.
1,154 2016-11-24 09:02:30
Re: Please post here regarding a completed review (671 replies, posted in Alpha to Omega - Review Group)
I'm a courtesy member and I've fallen behind. While I'm grateful for reviews, I'm in no position to insist.
1,155 2016-11-24 07:08:18
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
http://blogs.sciencemag.org/pipeline/ar … ot-so-good and read the comments.
1,156 2016-11-24 06:38:36
Topic: Book Recommendation (73 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I just spent an evening reading The Secrets of Story by Matt Bird. It was a very well spent evening, and money well spent on the trade paper edition.
It's not about rules but tools, and ... beliefs. I'm reminded of what the Thomist scholar said of Chesterton's biography of the Angelic Doctor: "He has guessed all that which we had tried to demonstrate, and he has said all that which they were more or less clumsily attempting to express in academic formulas."
A few of my regular reviewees are probably past the stage for this book, but if I paint your work blue with comments, you may need this book as much as I do. It explains what and why with specific examples of how to connect with the reader, how to affect and reward the reader for choosing your story.
1,157 2016-11-22 06:47:27
Re: New here and hoping to connect (7 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Basic)
Also, if you are looking for reciprocal review relationships, it helps to post in groups that use points. You might also look for stories similar in style or subject and do a few reviews on them (collecting the points) to see if you can drum up recip relationships.
1,158 2016-11-19 09:33:54
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
4017 - 15 years, 4017 - 12 years ...
1,159 2016-11-18 16:22:37
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
1,160 2016-11-16 11:02:40
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Aargh! Research! How long to cook a whole, adult boar on a spit to some kind of toothsomeness? Answer: twelve to sixteen hours. Good. That's just what Count Lundersot's adventure needs.
1,161 2016-11-16 05:52:21
Re: Unbar's Thread (87 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Use s solid backgound in a color that seems to blend into your cover.
1,162 2016-11-14 18:03:14
Re: The Colorless Dragon Thread (354 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Ch 16 B2
And I am stingy with connections. They can pile other people's clutter on my home page.
1,163 2016-11-14 17:09:48
Re: The Colorless Dragon Thread (354 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I'm always up for a review. There's that fractional near-porn chapter I put up a while ago ...
1,164 2016-11-14 15:29:39
Re: submission to publisher of work on TNBW (21 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
The key is the definition of 'publish'. Submiting a work to a closed community for critique should not fall under the definition.
1,165 2016-11-14 02:37:05
Re: submission to publisher of work on TNBW (21 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Others have investigated this, and found that things are visible. Kdot made a particular study of it.
1,166 2016-11-14 02:02:23
Re: submission to publisher of work on TNBW (21 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Not published. Workshopped.
And when you 'publish' the parts of the work to make it visibe, you must NOT publish 'to the whole web', or you'll be exposing it ro non-members, which would make it available to anyone, without restriction (i.e. freely).
1,167 2016-11-13 16:53:30
Re: submission to publisher of work on TNBW (21 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I don't think money is the issue. This is free-as-in-speech, not free-as-in-beer.
But membership in TNBW includes an agreement to respect copyright. The key is that the work is available to members, but NOT to everyone on the web. If it is available to everyone on the web, then it's been released publicly, not to a private, copyright-respecting group.
1,168 2016-11-13 12:57:41
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Of course there are hard parts too ... ![]()
1,169 2016-11-13 07:07:55
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I'm working now on another of Merran's virtual reality spell experiences, and will put it in the same chapter (and repub) when done. This will be a short episode from Being the Record of the Instructive Adventures of the Daring and Sagacious Count Hulhausen Lundersot, and of His Life and Times (short name The Instructive Adventures of the Daring Count Hulhausen Lundersot).
I'm having far too much fun with this one.
1,170 2016-11-13 02:41:35
Re: Unbar's Thread (87 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
You could also make the ground they're standing on into the page of a book, perhaps overlaid with a translucent background. (Use the text from some non-spoiling part of your book 1, so you don't run into copyright issues.
1,171 2016-11-12 13:56:31
Re: Unbar's Thread (87 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
You could also move the series identity above the author name ....
I'm always open to reviews on my very rough and incomplete work.
1,172 2016-11-12 09:04:13
Re: Unbar's Thread (87 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Here's the last suggestion. (Of course, the thing is becoming more and more a cut-up mess.)
1,173 2016-11-12 02:14:49
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Had some ideas about story threads from B2 through B4 or 5. I'll be mulling these over the next couple of weeks.
1,174 2016-11-12 01:07:12
Re: Unbar's Thread (87 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Use your original open font and put 'Master' over Tommy's lower legs.
1,175 2016-11-11 21:39:48
Re: Unbar's Thread (87 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Split 'of the' and let Tommy's head fit close between them.