There's a lot I'm not comfoetable with in the last three chapters and I want to think for a while before I put it in words. Some of it is continuity. Some of it is letting Alda dominate the story for several chapters. Some of it is falling outside the foreshadow.
So I'm going to mull it for a day or two. You'll see me doing other things. Don't worry; I haven't forgotten you.
Good news. I'll hope for more.
Your chapters, later. But did Jaylene get left behind? There's no mention of her.
I believe those are called "action tags".
I think they are called 'beats'.
If you're good enough, you can get away with anything. But be prepared, like JKR, to get a few rejections.
Is it a cliche that the drill sergeant barks orders? Or just a fault to use the word as a tag?
Not in this one. She's called to fprbearance. Later, though ...
"Little one ((no))! I am coming."
Not at all. Confontation in the street. Subtexts.
Had a BFO while thinking about SSnape, best conceived character I've ever read.
Whilst I srtuggle with the simplest of scenes, I also see that I've got to rethink the ensemble I plan to introduce.
Dan, all problems I've had myself. When I find more I'll be able to write about them!
Welcome! You can get the attention of our sometimes inattentive regulars by reviewing their#####our work. There's a very wide variety of style an subgenre here, and of course you can review anything you can see. It's an invitation to recip(rocate), and if you feel you can't, perhaps because of gemre, it's polite to say so.
In this group we tend to each name a forum thread for our own use and stay with it.
Or go without the contractions but drop the 'for you' in the second case. In the first 'but I am following'.
Yes, and all in between and at the extremes. But here the selection of events to advance milieu, character, plot, theme, and thesis.
Whazzup wit' NJC?
Well, I've reached a point where I see how my work isn't good enough, but I'm groping blindly for better. I need to push on through this.
I also need to renumber chapters ... which suggests I also need to manage structure better, to do more in less, to give each item more roles to play.
I give myself 'til midnight Friday.
If pre-law is 'define ____', does law school begin 're-define _____'?
"You've given me a lot to think about I need to understand why you've suggested these changes and how I can use that within my own style."
I sometimes push hard in reviews, but I try to explain.
Adam and Eve--smash em!
The glitch seems to have disappeared.
Hmm.
I went to look at an old review on my movile and found the review body and tabs on a dark grey background, with the type light. Is this intentional? I find it hard to read and the close-set light-dark border makes it harder
"The Secrets of Story" by Matt Bird. Maybe a bit more foundational than the others, but very good.
Hardly, though the final comment is an eight-lb. striking metaphor.
Read my comments. Nine and sixty ways.
She is a skilled writer. It's not her characters' character that is in question.
Romances somtimes switch PoV mid-sentence. They're like the circus equestrian standing with each foot on a different horse.
You're a dear!
