Dorothy Sayers knew her tools very well indeed. Aspiring to her skill is good. Assuming you have it is not.
626 2017-10-18 23:18:26
Re: Dialogue tags to be avoided (53 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
627 2017-10-18 19:07:12
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
There's a lot I'm not comfoetable with in the last three chapters and I want to think for a while before I put it in words. Some of it is continuity. Some of it is letting Alda dominate the story for several chapters. Some of it is falling outside the foreshadow.
So I'm going to mull it for a day or two. You'll see me doing other things. Don't worry; I haven't forgotten you.
628 2017-10-18 07:33:04
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Good news. I'll hope for more.
Your chapters, later. But did Jaylene get left behind? There's no mention of her.
629 2017-10-17 23:43:05
Re: Dialogue tags to be avoided (53 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I believe those are called "action tags".
I think they are called 'beats'.
630 2017-10-17 10:10:18
Re: Dialogue tags to be avoided (53 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
If you're good enough, you can get away with anything. But be prepared, like JKR, to get a few rejections.
631 2017-10-17 03:53:39
Re: Dialogue tags to be avoided (53 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Is it a cliche that the drill sergeant barks orders? Or just a fault to use the word as a tag?
632 2017-10-12 19:06:45
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Not in this one. She's called to fprbearance. Later, though ...
633 2017-10-11 19:21:13
Re: The Colorless Dragon Thread (354 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
"Little one ((no))! I am coming."
634 2017-10-11 13:14:22
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Not at all. Confontation in the street. Subtexts.
Had a BFO while thinking about SSnape, best conceived character I've ever read.
635 2017-10-11 12:25:37
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Whilst I srtuggle with the simplest of scenes, I also see that I've got to rethink the ensemble I plan to introduce.
636 2017-10-09 01:45:46
Re: Greetings! (3 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Dan, all problems I've had myself. When I find more I'll be able to write about them!
637 2017-10-08 04:37:18
Re: Greetings! (3 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Welcome! You can get the attention of our sometimes inattentive regulars by reviewing their#####our work. There's a very wide variety of style an subgenre here, and of course you can review anything you can see. It's an invitation to recip(rocate), and if you feel you can't, perhaps because of gemre, it's polite to say so.
In this group we tend to each name a forum thread for our own use and stay with it.
638 2017-10-04 16:52:57
Re: The Colorless Dragon Thread (354 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Or go without the contractions but drop the 'for you' in the second case. In the first 'but I am following'.
639 2017-10-04 08:51:42
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Yes, and all in between and at the extremes. But here the selection of events to advance milieu, character, plot, theme, and thesis.
640 2017-10-04 06:16:58
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Whazzup wit' NJC?
Well, I've reached a point where I see how my work isn't good enough, but I'm groping blindly for better. I need to push on through this.
I also need to renumber chapters ... which suggests I also need to manage structure better, to do more in less, to give each item more roles to play.
I give myself 'til midnight Friday.
641 2017-10-03 03:55:39
Re: Book blurbs (4 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
If pre-law is 'define ____', does law school begin 're-define _____'?
642 2017-10-03 03:51:32
Re: Can you receive too much support? (10 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
"You've given me a lot to think about I need to understand why you've suggested these changes and how I can use that within my own style."
I sometimes push hard in reviews, but I try to explain.
643 2017-10-02 07:28:35
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Adam and Eve--smash em!
644 2017-09-30 12:20:22
Re: Display format change? (5 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
The glitch seems to have disappeared.
Hmm.
645 2017-09-29 16:04:50
Topic: Display format change? (5 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I went to look at an old review on my movile and found the review body and tabs on a dark grey background, with the type light. Is this intentional? I find it hard to read and the close-set light-dark border makes it harder
646 2017-09-28 03:58:03
Re: Great Books on Writing (7 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
"The Secrets of Story" by Matt Bird. Maybe a bit more foundational than the others, but very good.
647 2017-09-26 12:48:31
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Hardly, though the final comment is an eight-lb. striking metaphor.
648 2017-09-25 22:53:17
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Read my comments. Nine and sixty ways.
649 2017-09-25 17:04:17
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
She is a skilled writer. It's not her characters' character that is in question.
650 2017-09-24 22:42:34
Re: Books with just one POV? (8 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Romances somtimes switch PoV mid-sentence. They're like the circus equestrian standing with each foot on a different horse.